Gather around folks. Today, I will tell you the story of my visit to the galaxies. It was amazing as I met Rosalina, fought Bowser, heard epic music, and many more. Let me tell you this tale about my visit to the galaxies!
Prologue: Introduction
"Sweet dreams everyone," I murmured to no one in particular as sleep overcame me.
My eyelids drooped as I had beaten Super Mario Galaxy 1 for the umpteenth time.
"I wish I was in Mario's shoes for once," I sighed as my head touched my soft pillow as I instantly fell asleep.
"Maya," a voice whispered, "Maya."
My eyelids slowly opened as the soft voice rushed over me. I soon came face to face with a beautiful girl. She had pale blond hair that cascaded down to her back. She wore a teal dress that matched her eyes and she had on a crown.
"Who are you?" I asked as I backed away.
"Relax Maya," she whispered, "My name is Rosalina. I have come to grant you your wish. You wished to experience the galaxies and now you shall experience it."
I looked around wildly to find a huge dome like structure that was floating in space. I soon realized that I was in space and that I was breathing...normally.
"How can I breathe so normally?" I asked, "Aren't I supposed to be choking because of the lack of air?"
She smiled softly.
"In this place, you can do the extraordinary," she spoke, "It will be completely different from Earth. Feel free to explore this area. Some places are dark as you can see because the grand stars have been stolen by Bowser."
"Bowser," I repeated, "That horny turtle dragon dude?"
She giggled.
"You have a way with words young one," she told me as I laughed with her.
"I get that a lot," I replied, "Anyways, I'm guessing I will have to go to galaxies to retrieve stars and restore power to this place?"
She nodded, "Exactly like that. I have to tell you, you won't be able to leave here until you collect all the stars and defeat Bowser and you can die. If you die, you will end up here. Although you can never cease to exist, you can feel the pain of dying so try not to die, ok?"
I nodded as I took in the view of this whole place.
"This place is really really beautiful," I muttered as I saw Luma's flying around.
One small Luma flew over to Rosalina and rested on her shoulders.
"Ooh, is that a Luma?" I asked, "They are so cute!"
It twirled in response and gave me a quick nick as it flew away. All Rosalina did was smile.
"I think I'll get started with these missions," I told her as she nodded.
"You should do that Maya," Rosalina replied, "You know where to go, right?"
"Yep!" I exclaimed, "Hardcore Mario fangirl here! First stop, Good Egg Galaxy in the Terrace! See you Rosalina!"
"Stay safe young hero," she said as she waved at me.
I returned it as I entered the Terrace.
"Well, here goes nothing," I murmured as my official Galaxy adventure began.
Here was the Introduction. How was it? Chapter 1 tomorrow! Stay tuned!
2 words.
Keep. Going.
Wow, this is absolutely amazing! Great job! ;D
Thanks guys. It means so much. Next chapter will be up in a couple of hours. Thank you guys! ;)
And will it be ok if I add you guys in the story? If you have any suggestions, feel free to post them. I don't bite....or do I? :)
Sure, you can add me in the story :p
Sure, if you want to add me go ahead.
Guys, I'm pretty sure she bites..
OMG Rosalina is like my favorite Mario character. EVER. She's my main in Mario Kart and Smash! Also I love her amiibo ugh
Anyway I love SMG keep going
Would you add me?
Make me and Zorro those lumas that always hang around with each other
Gladly :)
MAKE ME A HUNGRY LUMA SO I CAN GET FAT AND TURN INTO A PLANET
Quote from: Latios212 on July 21, 2015, 06:01:28 PMMAKE ME A HUNGRY LUMA SO I CAN GET FAT AND TURN INTO A PLANET
Haha, sure thing! 8)
You can make me your dashingly handsome rescuer ;) jk lol
Honestly, you could be a novel writer or even an Editor when you grow up! Nice writing! :)
I'm really interested to see where this goes! Very engaging prospect so far. Excellently written, too.
also you can stick me in the story if you want i'm not picky as to how
and you may have inspired me to bump/reboot my creative writing thread so thank you
Thanks MLF. That's really sweet of you to say and of course I will post you Dudeman. The thing is, hope you guys don't get disappointed if I don't describe you correctly and...yeah. And your welcome.
Don't forget I'm nsms sexiest
I'd love to be part of this! But you're more creative than me, so I'll let you pick my role. It'll be kind of a surprise to me that way! :D
Everybody remembers, Nocturne. It's your personal text, after all! ;)
Here it is! Chapter 1! Let the official adventure begin!! Woohoo! And just for extra effect, I will be posting links to the songs here. In this chapter, I visit Good Egg Galaxy, so if you want, you can play the music while reading about Good Egg! It might help.
Music you will be hearing:
1)Good Egg Galaxy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f8PDJAJcAL8
2)Space Fantasy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D5E1ep0qHQ8
3)Interlude: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H5vVL5R45DQ
4)Dino Pirahna: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tn0-YmkyRGg
I will be saying things such as cue Good Egg Galaxy, then you should click on the link and hear the music while I am writing about there! I will also say, end Good Egg Galaxy and then you can turn it off. If you just want to read and not listen to the music, just ignore this. KK? Let's start!Chapter 1: The Good Egg Galaxy's 1st Mission, Dino Piranha
I entered the Terrace and was greeted by the black star that was next to Rosalina as well as a small blue star, possibly a pull star.
"Do I need to lecture you about pull stars and the domes or are you good?" the black star asked.
"I'm fine, thank you," I replied as it nodded.
"Go for it! Good Egg awaits you!" he said as I saluted him and got into the launch star.
I saw 5 undiscovered galaxies rotating around us. 2 of them were blue cubes as the other 3 had numbers. One had a Bowser head which was numbered 8. Another galaxy was numbered 3 as the currently opened one was numbered 1. I clicked on it as it exploded into the Good Egg Galaxy.
"Take me to Good Egg!" I shouted as I was flung to the galaxy.
I was launched so quickly that it felt like my face was peeling off. I did only one thing that came to my mind.
"YAHOO!" I shouted as the galaxy approached me.
After what seemed like minutes, I finally landed on the galaxy.
Cue the Music for the Good Egg Galaxy"WELCOME TO THE GALAXY!" a voice shouted in my hand, "In today's mission, you will be fighting Dino Piranha to get the first and foremost power star! Good luck!"
The voice faded away as I finally got the chance to look at the galaxy. It was very very beautiful. I saw clusters of bushes and grasses. I saw a few butterflies lollygagging
(A/N: Did I use that word correctly? Dictionaries are really handy XD). around. There were 2 Octoombas jumping around. I approached them as one spit rocks at me. It got me in the face and I recoiled.
"Really dude?" I asked it, "Why would you do that?"
I heard laughter and I whirled around to find another beautiful girl.
"Hi! I'm Trains!" Trains exclaimed.
"Trains!" I shrieked, overjoyed and ran to her, giving her a big hug.
She laughed as she returned it.
"It's so good to see you!" I told her.
"It's so good to see, you!" she replied as we laughed.
The other Octogoomba spat his rock, getting Train in the arm. (Sorry Train!)
She whirled around and gave the Octogoombas the death glare. It looked scared and I took the opportunity to kick it hard as it flew away to...nowhere.
"Nice one!" she congratulated, giving me a high five.
"I couldn't have done it without you Train," I replied as she smiled.
"Now, let's go!" Train said as we ran, laughing, while collecting star bits.
"I always wondered, can we eat starbits?" I asked Train.
"Yeah, I've been wondering about too! Care to try it?" she said.
"Heck yeah!" I replied as I took a bite on the purple starbit, Trains taking a bite on the green one.
My mouth was immediately filled with the flavor of grapes. It was like a hard, chewy candy. It tasted really good. No wonder those Luma's could eat. I could live on this and only this. Train also had this dreamy look on her face.
"Wow, it tastes so good!" Trains squealed as we laughed once more, "Enough dilly dallying! Let's go!"
"And I thought I was crazy," I muttered to myself, smiling.
She gave me a mock glare.
"I heard that!" she replied.
We walked to the underside of the planet and was met with the complete opposite of the other end. There was only one octogoomba this time as it was doing its usual stuff.
"Train, care to do the honors?" I asked as she joyfully nodded.
I tried my best to give the Octogoomba the death glare, but I failed. Instead, it began laughing like crazy. I became offended and before I could do anything stupid, Train ran and kicked the Octogoomba all the way to oblivion. We gave each other fives before we climbed up the stairs. I saw 2 pipes, one orange and one green, but didn't bother with them. We went up to the top and saw a yellow Luma waiting for us.
"Hi!" It squeaked which was very cute, since its squeak was a high pitched one.
"So cuuuute!" Train squealed as I smiled. I had the same reaction at the Observatory.
"My friends are waiting up there! Please do hurry!" the Luma said as it transformed into a mini launch star, as a path to the large launch star..
"Shall we?" Trains asked.
"We shall," I replied as we got on the launch star.
"3!" I counted.
"2!" Trains added.
"1, Blastoff!" we yelled as we were flung out into space.
"WHEEEE!" was our only response as I felt waves of air slapping my face.
After about 2 seconds, we landed on the boulder planet. We saw 2 large spherical landmasses bound together as boulders rotated around it. I counted around 5 boulders. The boulders were huge as they had a brown coat over them and a patch of red on one side.
"Ohh, this does not look good," Train whispered.
I nodded in agreement.
"Hey you!" a tiny voice shouted as we saw another Luma standing there.
Train's face turned really excited as she raced over to the Luma, me following behind.
"Find 5 star chips to make a launch star! If you are injured, get coins and it will help you. Don't question it. And do you have any starbits? I am very hungry!" he told us.
I turned over my pockets, but found none.
"Train? Do you have any? I'm all out," I said as the Luma looked disappointed.
I looked at Train and saw that she was smiling and I felt relieved.
"Here you go!" Train told the Luma as she fed the Luma 5 starbits. Green, red, purple, blue, and white.
"MMM so delicious! Thank you!" the Luma thanked as Trains gave it a pat, "And hey! Be sure to stock up on starbits because my friend Latios eats them like no tomorrow! Just a warning!"
"Latios?" Trains asked smiling.
"Latios," I answered, smiling back.
Trains squealed as she ran off, possibly to collect Star Chips.
"What are you waiting for Maya? Let's go!" Trains called out as I raced over to her.
"Got 3 already," she smiled cheekily.
"Dang, you are really fast," I panted, the run having exhausted me.
Trains had a grin, but it turned to horror.
"Maya, watch out!" she yelled as I saw a boulder right behind me.
I immediately rolled left as the boulder narrowly missed me, but another boulder came from my left and ran over me. Pain seared all over my body as I groggily got up. Trains rushed over to me.
"Are you ok Maya?" she shrieked, worry flooding her face.
"I-I'm fine," I groaned, "Thank God for Mario mechanics or else I would have been dead."
"Will you be fine? Are you ok? Speak to me Maya! Speak to me!" Train shook me.
I got up.
"I'm fine Train, really," I told her as relief washed over her face.
She embraced me.
"You had me worried there," she sighed.
"I'm sorry," I apologized.
"Don't apologize, it's not your fault. I will keep telling you that until you accept that into your heart," Trains told me in all seriousness.
"Then I have no choice," I replied as she grinned.
"That's what I thought, now let's go!" she said as we collected the rest of the chips easily.
Immediately, a launch star formed as Train and I rode on it again. This time, it launched us onto this bean shaped planet. It was filled with Slurples, an octogoomba, and a piranha plant.
"Don't get near those Slurples, they will drain your life really quickly," Trains warned as we rushed over them to the piranha plant.
I stomped the Octogoomba as Trains stomped on the piranha plant. We gave each other high fives as a bean stalk grew out of the piranha plant's "home". We slid on othe beanstalk as we landed on the Bitten Apple planet where there were more boulders, Slurples, and spiky plants. We carefully avoided the plants, raced passed the boulders, and avoided the Slurples. There was a piranha plant in a pipe and we destroyed it. We entered the pipe.
End of Music for Good Egg Galaxy
Cue the Music for Space FantasyWe emerged from the pipe to see 4 blue question mark panels and a black hole sucking in everything in sight....
"Black holes," Trains muttered, "If you get sucked in by them, they will rip you piece by piece until your very soul gets destroyed."
I stared at her as she shrugged.
"Just don't fall in! Simple!" she replied as I laughed.
We stepped on the panels, switching them from a blue question mark to a yellow exclamation point.
Ding! Ding! Ding! Ding! DIING! The 4 panels changed to green squares as they sparkled momentarily. 3 more panels appeared to the right of us, curving upwards.
"Really, how is this possible?" I asked, "How can more panels pop out when we just stepped on four panels?"
Trains nudged me, smiling.
"Mario physics," she told me, "And if four panels didn't appear, we would be stuck here forever."
"Good point," I told her as we stepped on the three panels. We found 4 more panels curved upwards with a one up mushroom and a red rotating platform with spikes jutting out in the edge.
"Yummy green mushroom!" Trains exclaimed as she took it.
"Nooo!" I yelled, "It's poisonous!"
She looked at me questioningly.
"It's not poison! It's good! And I thought you were a hard core Mario fan!" she exclaimed.
"I was just kidding with you Trains! Haha," I replied.
"Yeah right. You really thought it was poisonous," she giggled, "You are bad at lying!"
My face flushed.
"I'm not lying!" I told her as she tried her best to stifle her giggles.
"Whatever, let's go!" she said as we finished stepping on the rest of the panels and a Sling Star appeared.
"BLASTOFF!" we shrieked as the star launched us to the Block-Climb Planet.
End the Music of Space Fantasy
Cue the Good Egg Galaxy Music"I swear that launch never gets old," Trains smiled.
"Oh man, that is so true," I replied as we saw a tower of blocks with Octogoombas, a luma, and an encased Launch Star.
"Watch out!" The Luma said, "If you spin once, you will have to wait until your Luma goes back to you!"
"Wait what?" Trains asked.
"What Luma?" I asked.
He looked at us weirdly. He was silent for a while, squeaked, then disappeared in a flash of light.
"Oook," Trains said, breaking the awkward silence, "Let's get up there!"
We climbed up the tower destroying Octogoombas as we freed the Launch Star encased in a crystal.
"Are you ready for this?" I asked Trains as she nodded excitedly.
"Let's go kick some Piranha butts!" she replied as we were launched once again.
This trek took awhile as we soared past rocks and as starbits came to us. We landed hard on an egg as it cracked. A tail flicked out as the Dino Piranha began its lazy trek.
End of Good Egg Galaxy Music
Cue the Interlude MusicThe song stopped immediately as it was replaced by a simple, yet relaxing tune.
"Should we free him yet?" I asked as Trains looked at it wandering lazily around.
"Let's get it over with, shall we?" Trains replied as she approached the tail, "You wanna do it?"
"You do it," I told her," Kick its butt...err tail."
"Thanks," she replied as she gave it a hard kick.
The tail flew back a good 50 feet as it raced back and hit the Dino Piranha in its egg. It immediately cracked and the piranha appeared. It had a purple head with yellow petals. It shrieked as it looked at us. It was weird since it didn't have any eyes.
"Watch out!" Trains yelled as it charged us and the battle officially began.
End the Interlude
Cue the Dino Piranha MusicI dived to the left as Train dived to the right.
"Aim for its tail! Give it a nice hard kick! Once it charges, it can't change direction well! Use that to your advantage!" Train instructed.
"Sure thing!" I yelled back.
The Dino Piranha was focused on Train so as Train started running forward. I swerved to my right and gave its tail a hard kick. It flew back and hit the piranha in the head. Around 4 petals fell off as it glared at me. It turned very red as it shrieked really loudly. This time, it focused on me as I began running away. Although it was faster, he wasn't that much of a threat. Using the same tactic, Trains kicked the piranha's tail as it hit the piranha in the head. He charged towards Train, but she seemed a bit exhausted.
"Hang in there Train! You could do it!" I encouraged as she wearily smiled.
The dino piranha was gaining ground. I couldn't let it hurt my friend. I would rather die.
"Stupid little dinosaur!" I yelled as I charged at it, pure adrenaline coursing through my body.
I gave it a hard kick, but I kicked to early. That was when everything went wrong. I tripped and landed flat on my face, multiple bruises and scars plaguing my body. Trains faltered momentarily from exhaustion and the piranha used it to his advantage. He descended upon Train as he gave a weird laugh. It raised its tail to crush Train.
"Noo!" I yelled as it brought down its tail.
It hit Train right in her gut as it knocked air out of her. She gasped, clutching her stomach in pain, retching. My eyes flashed murderously, but I was powerless to do anything. It raised its tail again and gave Trains a smack. She groaned as she was flung right next to me. She lay down gasping for air.
"Train, speak to me, are you ok?!" I yelled, crying shameless tears, "Please Train! Speak to me! I don't want to lose you! Speak to me!"
"M-Maya," she gasped, "Not much time. Even if we die. We will return to the Observatory healthy. Don't worry Maya."
"I won't let you die when I can help it," I declared, "And I can help it. Don't go Train. Not now."
She nodded as she closed her eyes. I shook with anger as the Dino Piranha approached us. That guy was going to die.
"You injured my best friend," I growled, "You hurt her and I will hurt you!"
I raced towards the piranha and launched at him. I got on his back and began whaling blows. My knuckles got bloody red and I'm sure I broke some bones, but I wasn't going to let this monster get away with hurting my best friend. It began swaying wildly as I held on for dear life. It threw me as I rolled safely on my knees. It charged me in rage, but a simple sidestep and a kick to the tail ended its life. All of its petals fell off as it shrieked loudly and fell on the floor, biting its tongue. Ouch. It disappeared in a flash of light and was replaced by a star.
End Dino Piranha MusicI ignored the star and rushed over to Train.
"Train?" I asked, "Are you ok? Answer me, please."
No answer. I checked her pulse and it was still beating. She was also breathing softly.
'Get the star you idiot!' a voice in me whispered as I raced to star and got it.
We immediately teleported out. I looked around wildly for Trains and I saw her next to me, smiling.
"Trains!" I yelled as I hugged her fiercely.
"Ouch! Maya! It's nice to see you too, but your crushing me!" she gasped as I released her.
"I'm so sorry! Are you ok?" I asked as she nodded, "God, you scared me. I'm so sorry Trains."
"It's perfectly fine Maya. After all, we're alive and well, aren't we?" she asked, "Why don't we head on to our next mission."
I smiled.
"Let's go do that," I said as we focused our eyes on Good Egg.
And end of Chapter 1! Hope you guys enjoyed it! And sorry Train if I offended you in any way by the way I portrayed your character. Hope that music also helped! More of Good Egg Galaxy tomorrow! Oh and those who want to be in the story, will you please describe your character and how you want to enter here? For example, you can say: I am _______ and I enter the story in (this part of the mission) while riding on a horse who shoots lasers and whatever. Well, you get the point. Good night.
Sounds like trains to me
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Looks GREAT!
I guess the foot is mightier than the..."power of the cosmos" or whatever the luma gives Mario. You make a better plumber than he ever was.
Have to say, it was interesting reading about how painful everything ends up being. You don't really realize how crazily unrealistic this is until you imagine yourself in this situation. In your own words, "Thank God for Mario physics." XD
What a fantastic first chapter! It looks like you're having a ton of fun writing this, and I can really feel it as I read. also you and trains together is the most adorable thing ive ever read omg
Oh, and I might as well write my introduction: I am Damian and I enter the story whenever the Library becomes available, reading a book. I'm a bit reserved and take some time warming up to new people, but I'm very smart and can throw information around when it's needed. I also can't resist the occasional terrible pun or corny joke. I may also have a bit of a protective, caring side. ; )
Awwww! Thank you! ;D I'm grinning so much right now! And you flatter me! I don't think I could retrieve that much Mario Galaxy knowledge off of the top of my head! (Mostly the names, I'm horrible at remembering those :P)
This is just so sweet, I can't believe it! Also, you nailed my dialogue! ;D
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Looks GREAT!
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:)
I've heard of it, but I'd rather only write it here. It's more comfortable and I feel like I could express myself more. And thank you very much for the compliment. :)
Quote from: Dudeman on July 21, 2015, 11:07:09 PMI guess the foot is mightier than the..."power of the cosmos" or whatever the luma gives Mario. You make a better plumber than he ever was.
Have to say, it was interesting reading about how painful everything ends up being. You don't really realize how crazily unrealistic this is until you imagine yourself in this situation. In your own words, "Thank God for Mario physics." XD
What a fantastic first chapter! It looks like you're having a ton of fun writing this, and I can really feel it as I read. also you and trains together is the most adorable thing ive ever read omg
Oh, and I might as well write my introduction: I am Damian and I enter the story whenever the Library becomes available, reading a book. I'm a bit reserved and take some time warming up to new people, but I'm very smart and can throw information around when it's needed. I also can't resist the occasional terrible pun or corny joke. I may also have a bit of a protective, caring side. ; )
Oh sweet thanks! ;)
And train and I together ARE indeed adorable. :P
And I can't wait to see you soon Damian, one way or another!!
Quote from: Hero of Trains on July 21, 2015, 11:42:43 PMAwwww! Thank you! ;D I'm grinning so much right now! And you flatter me! I don't think I could retrieve that much Mario Galaxy knowledge off of the top of my head! (Mostly the names, I'm horrible at remembering those :P)
This is just so sweet, I can't believe it! Also, you nailed my dialogue! ;D
Your welcome Train :D :D
You are smart and you could remember all that. I'm telling the truth. It's sweet because you are sweet and did I actually portray you correctly?
Yeah, you did wonderfully! Thank you! ;D
Like I said before, I'd like you to surprise me with my place in this story! I think it would be cool to be surprised by my own cameo! Besides, I think you'd be able to come up with a much better scenario than I could. You're the writer, remember? I'm a halfway decent writer, but I am not that good at storytelling. And you've obviously shown that you are. Can't wait to see where this leads! I'm getting more excited reading this than I did when playing the game itself! The music is definitely an added touch! It's making me want to play this game all over again! Impressive stuff; can't wait for the next chapter! :D
Quote from: cqk328 on July 22, 2015, 10:11:33 AMLike I said before, I'd like you to surprise me with my place in this story! I think it would be cool to be surprised by my own cameo! Besides, I think you'd be able to come up with a much better scenario than I could. You're the writer, remember? I'm a halfway decent writer, but I am not that good at storytelling. And you've obviously shown that you are. Can't wait to see where this leads! I'm getting more excited reading this than I did when playing the game itself! The music is definitely an added touch! It's making me want to play this game all over again! Impressive stuff; can't wait for the next chapter! :D
Same here. My character being a surprise
Haha ok guys. Your characters won't come on for a few more chapters so hang in there! I have something big for all of you! And introducing Latios to this chapter! Hope you guys enjoy! One of you guys will be Bowser's apprentice, there will be Lumas that portray you, and etc. Just wait. ;)
The real question is whether you go for all 241 stars or you just beat bowser as fast as you can
Hey guys! Just in time for Chapter 2! Hope you guys enjoy!
Music used for this chapter:
1)Good Egg Galaxy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f8PDJAJcAL8
2)Space Fantasy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D5E1ep0qHQ8
Chapter 2: A Snack of Cosmic Proportions
"Onward!" Trains yelled as we were launched to the Good Egg Galaxy.
After a few seconds, we landed on Good Egg Galaxy.
Cue the Music for Good Egg Galaxy
"Your mission is to feed Latios tons of Starbits, allowing you to get to the star! Good luck!" the voice shouted in our heads.
Trains winced.
"Turn the noise down will you?" she asked.
I agreed.
"Follow me!" Trains said as she grabbed my wrist and immediately dragged me down to the underside of the planet.
We were met by 3 Slurples. We avoided them as we jumped into the pipe to the right of us. We immediately were spewed out to the light side of the planet.
"Just a quick detour," Trains giggled as we immediately rushed to the dark side again.
While picking up starbits, we hit a question mark block. Trains hit it once as a starbit came out.
"Doesn't it hurt your head?" I asked.
"Nope! You see Mario hit many blocks, but he doesn't have a concussion!" Trains exclaimed as she hit the block 8 more times.
"How many times do you have to hit the block?" I asked, "You hit it 9 times already!"
Trains pondered momentarily.
"I'm guessing one more time!" she said as she hit the block. The block exploded into starbits as we raced over to get them.
"Nice one," I complimented.
"Thanks!" she replied.
We went up to where the stairs escalated.
"Hey!" A Luma said, "Shoot star bits at an enemy to stun them. Then you can run into them to finish them! Zap! Kapow!"
We saw an Octogoomba.
"Honors Train?" I asked.
"Gladly," she replied.
I shot a starbit at the Octogoomba as he became dazed.
"Finish him!" I yelled as Train did multiple backflips and landed right on its head, crushing it,"NICE ONE! Give me five!"
We high fived.
"That's very impressive," I told her as she blushed.
"It was nothing," she said, "Just took gymnastics for a while. Let's go!"
We climbed up the stairs and was met by a blue Luma.
"I've got a hungry friend up ahead. Hope you don't mind sharing snacks, do you?" it asked as it transformed into a pull star that made way to a launch star.
"Let's go!" I told Train as we focused on the stars. Immediately, we began drawing closer to it and we came closer until we were met by the launch star. We were launched to a pear looking planet. There were goombas, spiky plants, a patch of flowers, a launch star encased in crystal, starbits encased in crystals, and a green ballish thing.
"These galaxies and planets flawless designs never cease to amaze me," Trains said breathlessly, "Wow."
"Yeah, wow," I repeated.
I honestly couldn't wait to visit the Space Junk Galaxy. We collected starbits, destroyed Goombas, and destroyed the launch star encased in ice. We got on the launch star and we blasted off to the boulder planet where there were boulders rolling around this big rock. There were also starbits encased in crystals and a mini launch star. A bigger launch star lay to its left, encased in crystal. We stumbled upon another exclamation point box.
"You do it now Maya," Trains told me as I approached the block.
Bonk! No pain...well what do you know?
"Wow, it actually feels good!" I told Trains as she grinned.
I hit it 9 more times as the box exploded into another frenzy shower of starbits.
"We are stocking up on a lot of them," Trains said, "I expected it to be heavy on me, but hey, who came blame Mario physics?"
I laughed as Trains ran off to the mini launch star. She was flung upwards as she got a coin.
"Only a coin?" she asked lame as she fell back to Earth.
I raced over to her and said, "I got you Train!"
I "accidentally" dropped her as she landed on her butt.
"Ow!" she hissed, "What was that for?"
"Oops?" I smirked as she gave me a playful glare.
"You'll pay for that," she said as she began chasing me around.
"Crap," I whispered as I began running around, Trains on my tail.
I didn't see a boulder heading my way and for the second time, I was crushed by a boulder.
"Dang it! I hate boulders!" I whined as Trains tried stifling a giggle, but failed as she began laughing like crazy, rolling around.
"Real funny Train," I smiled as I helped her up.
We went over to the huge launch star, cracked the crystal, and we blasted off into an Egg shaped planet. There was a hungry Luma, patches of grass, and many goombas wandering. We approached the Luma.
"Hey Latios!" Trains greeted as Latios turned our way.
"Hey guys!" he greeted as he held up 2 starbits, "Feed me, I'm hungry!"
"All right piggy, hold up," Trains giggled.
"Piggy," I snorted then laughed.
"Give me food and STOP LAUGHING!" Latios pouted cutely.
"How could we resist?" Trains asked as we began feeding him starbits.
10 starbits went by, 20,30,50,70,90, then 100. Latios had turned into a fat Luma.
"Ohh man!" he complained, "I'm stuffed! But I want more!"
"Ah, ah, ah fatty," I told him, "That's enough! Now transform!"
"Fine," he huffed, "I'll be back! TRANSFORM!"
"By Latios!" Trains called out as Latios turned into a shiny white glowing ball that launched itself next to the pear planet.
The ball turned into a huge planet shaped like a tower. Immediately, a launch star was formed as we got on it. This time, the launch star was pink. We were launched all the way to the planet. We were met by a goomba doing absolutely nothing in a patch of grass. As we walked towards it, it was us and began charging at us, but we took care of it in no time. There was a yellow patch of flowers on the next incline and we raced all the way up to the top where we boarded the launch star. It launched us upwards and we saw the pill planet approaching.
"Please don't tell me we will land on the pill planet!" I shouted to Trains.
"We will!" she said, "Brace yourself!"
We landed on the planet with a hard boom. Thankfully, we weren't hurt, but the pressure had rattled us.
End Good Egg Galaxy Music
Cue Space Fantasy
Immediately, the orchestrated song stopped as a more peaceful song made its way.
"Heck, even the music makes this much more better," I told Trains as she nodded dreamily.
We made our way across the pill planet, battling goombas and destroying crystals. We came upon a crystal with nothing inside and as we destroyed it, an entrance was formed. We jumped in. It was filled with blue and orange arrows either pointing up or down.
"Gravity," Trains told me, "The arrows represent the direction we will be in. If it points down, gravity will push us down and vice versa."
We made our way across the interior as we found a down arrow and up arrow side by side. We jumped to the arrow pointing upwards as we shifted upwards. I expected to feel blood rushing up my head, but instead it felt normal. I decided not to question the physics behind all this. We were met by another arrow pointing downwards as we shifted directions once again. The rest of the way was like this, shifting directions and just making our way upwards. We approached the final up arrow as we were flung to the top where there were 2 goombas and a launch star.
"Will we have to be launched outta here and crack our heads open by hitting that glass wall?" I asked nervously.
She thought for a moment.
"Do you trust me?" she asked.
"Yeah, why..." I began, but she carried me and flung us to the launch star as we launched out of the planet.
There was a Bang as glass shattered, but none of us were hurt. In fact, we didn't feel anything at all. We were launched all the way to this yellow star like planet with blue chips scattered everywhere.
"Thanks Train," I sighed, "I might've been stuck there forever.
"We're friends," she told me, "And friends stick together. Am I not right?"
"You are right Train. Thank you." I smiled as she grinned at me.
We began collecting the starchips as a pull star was made to the star that was right in the middle of the planet. As we explored the underside of the star planet, we saw a single coin twirling around. Questioning that would get us nowhere, so I just kept my mouth shut.
"I swear," I told Trains, "This music reminds me of another song..."
"Battlerock?" she asked.
"Yeah!" I told her, "Battlerock! In my top 10 of the greatest Galaxy music!"
"Not top 5 or 3?" she asked.
"Nah," I told her, "This song is overrated, but hey, who knows? What's your favorite song?"
"Oh, I'll tell you when we get there, but you have to tell me yours too," she told me as I nodded.
"Absolutely," I agreed as we made our way back to the surface.
"Trains, can you get the star?" I asked.
"Gladly," she replied as she was pulled to the leftmost star. Immediately, she shifted towards the right pull star and she came into contact with the star.
"Nice!" I said as we were whisked back to the observatory.
End Music of Space Fantasy
We were back in the space observatory with 2 stars. We met each other's eyes and we smiled.
"Ready for more?" she asked.
"More ready than I'll ever be," I told her as we resumed our gaze upon the Good Egg Galaxy.
And done! Here you go guys! Hope you enjoyed and don't worry, I have all the characters planned out so...BYE!
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on July 22, 2015, 02:05:37 PMThe real question is whether you go for all 241 stars or you just beat bowser as fast as you can
Oh, it's going to be all the stars, but not the "Luigi" one's. Also, there is going to be a Galaxy 2 sequel then possibly we will move to the Paper Mario series!
Great job, again! ;D
Quote from: mayastarr041 on July 22, 2015, 02:40:32 PMpossibly we will move to the Paper Mario series!
I support this^ :)
Tbh, the Paper Mario series might work better since it's more of a story than Galaxy which is more gameplay.....but Galaxy has worked amazingly so far. Great Work! :)
I might have to make a companion with some of my favorite games too! Hmm... how would that work... I know! You'll be Luke and I get to be Layton! ;)
This makes me want a 2 player SMG
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on July 22, 2015, 03:40:32 PMThis makes me want a 2 player SMG
Yea, with 2 player meaning ACTUAL 2 player rather than the stupid 2nd player luma thing.
Oh yeah^
This year's e3 was probably the worst yet :/
Heya guys! New story will be up in about 30 mins. Will try to post another one at night. I really want to move on to the Paper Mario series because man, it will be very fun! Who doesn't want to meet Count Bleck? Grodus? The Shadow Queen? The Almighty Dimentio????! Can't wait!
Music you will be hearing:
1)Good Egg Galaxy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f8PDJAJcAL8
5)Pipe Interior: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5c6OMkntbMM
6)A Tense Moment: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YTzjEZmzKPI
7)King Kaliente phase 1: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dkYlNiPhzZk
9)King Kaliente phase 2: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SeKBOPJwWKQ
Chapter 3: King Kaliente's Battle Fleet
Trains and I were whisked back to Good Egg Galaxy.
Cue the Good Egg Galaxy Music
'Welcome to the Galaxy!' the voice in our heads shouted, "Today, you will defeat King Kaliente to retrieve the power star! Good luck!'
We winced. That voice was getting really annoying.
"Look, the launch star is up the house!" Train told me as I gazed upon the launch star, "Wanna do some acrobatics up there?"
"I can't do those," I blushed, "I suck."
"Nonsense!" Trains replied, "Let me show you!"
"Wait!" I told her, "Before we do, follow me for a second."
I led her to the underside of the planet and we saw an orange pipe waiting.
"After you Trains," I said as she sweetly smiled and jumped in, me following her.
End Good Egg Galaxy Music
Cue Pipe Interior Music
We were standing on a gray ground. There was a red wall to our left, green wall to our right, and a blue wall to the front of us. The walls were chipped as we saw paint peeling off and masses of black liquid oozing on the edges. There were arrow signs portraying directions and a large question mark coin surrounded by 4 yellow solid stuff. Trains touched the large coin and a Ding was heard. It morphed into rainbow colored musical notes as it began spreading out in a line. As we can began touching and following it, a familiar tune was played.
"It's the Mario Underground Music!" Trains squealed, "Nostalgia strikes again!"
We fan girled and began hugging each other.
"Let's go!" I told her as the notes led us to the red wall, then to the ceiling. It circled an orange pipe as we collected the last note. It morphed into a one up mushroom as ticking noises were heard.
"Crud!" Trains yelped as she raced to the one up mushroom.
She got it just in time as the timer expired.
"You are really fast," I said in awe.
"Why thank you!" she replied as we exited the pipe.
End Pipe Interior Music
Cue Good Egg Galaxy Music
It spat us out at the top of the house.
"Crud!" Trains said as she playfully glared at me, "Next time, we are going to do acrobatics up there. You were lucky."
Realization hit me as I had avoided embarrassment.
"Oh man, I guess I am," I smirked as she rolled her eyes playfully as she laughed.
We got in the launch star and it blasted us to the Tropic Planet. There were palm trees, coconuts, goombas, patches of waters, and spiky plants.
"Ooh, coconuts!" Trains said as she picked one up, "They are so heavy!"
She flung the coconut towards an extremely large spiky plant as it was destroyed, forming a mini launch star.
"Huh," she said, "Let's go!"
The mini launch star flung us to another tropical planet. As we went to the center, a large pokey sprang up.
"Holy cow!" I exclaimed as it knocked me off my feet.
Trains helped me up as I smiled gratefully.
"Let's play some soccer shall we?" Trains asked as she lined up a coconut in front of the Pokey.
"Let's go!" I said, "I'll commentate, you score the goal, "Trains brings the ball up to the defender as she gives it a hard kick! Score! The Pokey is down and the crowd goes WILD!"
I started cheering like crazy and began congratulating Trains like crazy.
"We won!" I yelled.
"Yeah!" she played along as we started going crazy, unknown that it had formed a launch star.
After a couple more minutes of cheering, we realized that there was a launch star there.
"Oops," Trains said as she blushed a crimson red.
Without speaking, we got on the launch star and we were launched towards the Asteroid planet. There were 2 chomps rolling around and we saw another pipe.
"Hmm, replacing boulders with Chomps?" I thought loudly.
"Do you pay attention to every single detail?" she asked.
"Y-yeah," I said, not meeting her gaze.
She cracked a grin.
"Same here!" she said as I laughed.
"Oh, you had me scared, I thought you were about to call me weird!"
"Weird? Why? Personally, we are really cool. And who cares if people call us weird? That's the side of us we should embrace! Let those haters hate!" Train told me and I sighed in relief, "Now come on! The warp pipe is waiting!"
We went in the warp pipe.
End Good Egg Galaxy Music
Cue Pipe Interior
This place was spherical and it contained many Goombas and another question mark coin. We finished off the Goomba and ran into the coin. We found ourselves glowing a rainbow color.
"We're invincible! Let's go!" Trains told me as we exited.
End Pipe Interior
Cue Good Egg Galaxy Music
We emerged outside to the planet and began running into the Chomps. They woofed as we destroyed them. We got onto a launch star and it flung us to the Chomp Saucer Planet. We literally destroyed anything in our path. More Chomps came our ways as they were wrecked. Bullet Bills couldn't touch us, Goomba's ran away from us, and even those spiky plants seemed to retreat. We made our way up the staircase and freed the trapped launch star. We got onto the Launch Star and it launched us to 2 airships.
End Good Egg Galaxy Music
Cue A Tense Moment
The music immediately shifted to something more dark. I felt like something big was out there. We were met by two Octopuses who fired coconuts at us. Trains had this glint in her.
"Batter up!" she said excitedly as she picked up a piece of wood.
She swung a coconut as it hit an Octopus right in the face, immobilizing it. I stared at her in awe. She just smiled.
"Your turn!" she replied cheerfully as she handed me the bat.
"But, I suck," I told her.
"Ah, ah, ah," she said, "Try."
I nervously got into position as a coconut came my way. I swung to early as it got me in the face. I held my nose in pain.
"Ahh dang it!" I growled, "That hurt!"
He threw another coconut as it got me right in the guts.
"Oof!" I gasped, "Your up."
I gave it to Trains who eyed the Octopus angrily. She hit it with all her might as it sped 90 mph's to the Octopus as he fell of his station.
"Thanks," I told Trains who smiled apologetically in return, "It's fine. It was great practice."
A bridge came down as we ran to the next airship. There were more Octogoomba's, but we ignored them and raced over to the top right of the ship. There was a launch star as we got into it. It fired us upwards as we were met by a large spherical dome.
"Danger up ahead!" a Luma warned us as it disappeared into view.
We looked at each nervously as we went to the upperside of the dome. Immediately when we went up, the whole place shook. A huge octopus appeared in the middle of the lava. He had blue eyes and a crown with multicolored jewels.
"King Kaliente!" Trains said.
End A Tense Moment
Cue Music for King Kaliente Phase 1
The King fired 3 fiery rocks at us as I went left and Trains went right.
"Get those coconuts!" Trains said as Kaliente fired a coconut at Trains.
Trains gave it a nice hard kick as it returned to King Kaliente and hit him. He recoiled as he glared at us. He fired another 3 set of rocks as we dodged them once again. He spat another coconut and Trains kicked it again. Instead of hitting Kaliente, he blocked it with his tentacles as it came racing towards me.
"Punch it!" Trains said, "Trust me!"
I rubbed my fists and gave it a hard punch. I expected my hand to be broken or me to be filled with pain, but instead, I felt perfectly fine. I stared in awe as it hit Kaliente again, knocking his crown off into the lava. He turned red with anger as we saw steam literally come out of him.
End King Kaliente Phase 1
Cue King Kaliente Phase 2
Kaliente roared in anger as he summoned Blue Lava Bubbles.
"What are those?" I asked.
"Don't touch them! They will give you 3rd degree burns!" she warned as Kaliente shot out a coconut.
I punched it, he deflected it, I punched it, he deflected.
"Go Trains!" I told her as I dived out of the way.
Trains raced up and gave the coconut a hard roundhouse kick as it hit Kaliente, finishing him off. He fell back into the lava as the star popped out.
End King Kaliente Phase 2
We sat there momentarily breathing hard as we watched the star. Trains clapped me on the shoulder.
"Nice job," she panted.
"You too," I smiled, "Let's go."
We went to the star and touched it as it whisked us back to the Comet Observatory. Not bad for a days' work.
And done. All right guys, if I don't post Chapter 4 tonight, I'll post it tomorrow and I am thinking of writing a separate story right now, the Paper Mario series. What do you think?
Definitely! A story on the Paper Mario series would be awesome! I know MLF would love it, and I don't know that storyline as well as SMG, so it would be great! A win-win scenario, if you will. And this latest chapter was amazing as well! I can't wait to see what comes off your keyboard next!
I wish I could follow this, but I've never played Super Mario Galaxy before. D: