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Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on July 16, 2016, 07:14:22 PMQuestion; why are the staff margins so wonky on the template?

Quote from: Latios212 on July 16, 2016, 07:22:43 PM@PDS: Shoot sorry, fixed it. Lemme know if there's anything else wrong with it.

• Pokemon Center (Night)
• Battle Tower
• Azure Flute

Quote from: AwesomeYears on July 17, 2016, 02:50:21 AMClaiming Underground Passage

Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on July 17, 2016, 11:56:29 AM*cries*

Quote from: Jompa on July 17, 2016, 04:53:43 PMPokémon Gym:
.musx (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/75726060/DPP%20-%20Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano/Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano.musx)
.mus (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/75726060/DPP%20-%20Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano/Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano.mus)
.pdf (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/75726060/DPP%20-%20Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano/Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano.pdf)
.mid (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/75726060/DPP%20-%20Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano/Pok%C3%A9mon%20Gym%20-%20piano.mid)

I'll help more, but my two-week job starts tomorrow ;)

Quote from: Maelstrom on July 17, 2016, 05:50:21 PMWHERE DID THIS COME FROM.
WHERE DID YOU COME FROM.
WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN.

Quote from: dajwxp on July 18, 2016, 05:30:21 PM- Amity Square (not too tough, really cute)
- Poffins (a hilarious track, not too tough)

Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on July 18, 2016, 12:09:31 PMClaiming:
- Twinleaf town (Day)
- Floaroma Town (Day)

Quote from: FireArrow on July 18, 2016, 07:52:53 PM^^^Wow, huge thanks. This'll be really helpfully (especially if it's regularly updated... wink wink nudge nudge.)

Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on July 20, 2016, 01:53:10 PMWow man aren't you the one who suggested dppt

Quote from: Sebastian on July 20, 2016, 07:12:23 AMSFX:
I'm willing to do all the sound effects into a fanfare sheet. Is this all of them?

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 05:48:40 PMIs what all of them? I can provide a list for you later if you need I guess.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 05:48:40 PMPlatinum is a separate game, similar to Diamond and Pearl, but with a slightly altered storyline and some new features and music tracks.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 05:48:40 PMKeep in mind 14 - The Pokémon Lab will be an edit replacement. Only minor adjustments are needed.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 05:48:40 PMOh, and Snowpoint City (Night) is extremely similar to the day version (not even a key change like many of the others), just fyi. Not sure if we need another arrangement for it.

Quote from: Sebastian on July 20, 2016, 07:15:16 PMOh, I didn't know that. Maybe the arranger of the Day version would like to do it?

Quote from: Zeila on July 20, 2016, 07:22:47 PMI don't think we need a Night version since the only difference is added auxiliary percussion (forgot what instrument it was exactly). If there absolutely had to be one, then it'd probably be better for someone else to arrange it for variety

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 08:00:30 PMI don't think a Night version is necessary unless we're going for 100% OST completion (and we're not quite there yet...)

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 21, 2016, 02:00:06 PMI'll claim all 3 battle themes pertaining to Team Galactic (Grunt, Commander, and Boss). Also, even though it's unlisted, I'll try my hand at Giratina Battle.

Quote from: Dekkadeci on July 21, 2016, 06:59:36 PMWondering how you'll treat the polytonality (B major on top of probably C minor/G Phrygian) in Giratina's theme--you'll probably stick to one key signature for both staves throughout (i.e. not B major on top and C minor on the bottom), right?

(The song is predominantly in C minor/Phrygian, so at least key signatures will be fairly sane...)

Quote from: Dekkadeci on July 21, 2016, 06:59:36 PMWondering how you'll treat the polytonality (B major on top of probably C minor/G Phrygian) in Giratina's theme--you'll probably stick to one key signature for both staves throughout (i.e. not B major on top and C minor on the bottom), right?

(The song is predominantly in C minor/Phrygian, so at least key signatures will be fairly sane...)

Quote from: Sebastian on July 20, 2016, 07:12:23 AMReplacements:
 ??) Old Chateu
14) The Pokémon Lab*

SFX:
I'm willing to do all the sound effects into a fanfare sheet. Is this all of them?

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 22, 2016, 12:29:31 AMBattle! (Team Galactic Boss) - [MUS] (https://db.tt/zBNTS2ax)

Quote from: Latios212 on July 23, 2016, 08:03:24 PMHaha because I'm a little behind on things and have yet to actually place things in the dropbox folder (so someone doesn't go look at blue status and go "huh" when it isn't in the folder)

Quote from: Latios212 on July 23, 2016, 08:03:24 PMIs there anything in particular you wanted to change before fixing those overlapping noteheads?

Quote from: Latios212 on July 22, 2016, 03:34:34 PMAbout SFX:
Here (https://youtu.be/dCBOB9uLUsI)'s a (not official) compilation to check against. Haven't checked it myself to see if it's comprehensive yet. Keep in mind a couple of these fanfares have already been arranged, as they are listed as separate tracks in this OST.

Quote from: Sebastian on July 24, 2016, 07:41:21 PMLat and I did some goofing with this one on skype. It will definitely need an accidental/key check. It is a very tough song concerning accidentals.
- Old Chateau (https://www.dropbox.com/s/giawbxpp6vqu7cw/Pokemon%20DiamondPearlPlatinum%20-%20Old%20Chateau.mus?dl=1)

Quote from: Sebastian on July 24, 2016, 07:41:21 PMLat and I did some goofing with this one on skype. It will definitely need an accidental/key check. It is a very tough song concerning accidentals.
- Old Chateau (https://www.dropbox.com/s/giawbxpp6vqu7cw/Pokemon%20DiamondPearlPlatinum%20-%20Old%20Chateau.mus?dl=1)
Sweet!
Put me down for a fanfare sheet.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 25, 2016, 07:56:07 AMWhelp I guess that's me. I'll scan it over tonight.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AMSorry, I was a little later than I had said I'd be but here are my suggested edits:

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 6: All notes should be altered in order to spell an F# major chord, rather than a Gb major chord. This will also eliminate the need for the courtesy accidentals in measure 7.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 12: Maybe courtesy on the high B naturals in the second voice?

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 13: Here's where I would use a Db rather than a C#.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 20, RH: Either make the Bb an A# or the F# a Gb. If it were up to me, I would do the former.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 21, RH: Bbs should be A#s to match the spelling of the LH. If you're doing that though, I would strongly suggest some kind of courtesy accidental on the D natural in the same chord there.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 23, LH: I'm thinking that this A# would be better off as a Bb.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 24, RH: This Gb should be an F# which would also result in the following note (F natural) needing a natural sign.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 25, RH: I would rewrite the little triplet there using A#s and Gx. It may seem a little weird but I mean, it sounds a little weird.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 26-29: All #s should be rewritten as bs. Also because of this maybe a courtesy natural on the high B in the RH at 30.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on July 26, 2016, 10:05:48 AM-Measure 32, RH: B natural on the off beat should have a courtesy accidental on it to distinguish between the high Bb.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 08:00:30 PM- Articulations on the intro. Staccatos would probably be good.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 08:00:30 PM- Try out power chords in the left hand to really tap into some of that bass drive from the original, and see if you like it.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 08:00:30 PM- 38-41 - Those dyads sound inverted.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 08:00:30 PM- 62+: The RH should definitely be lower. On a quick pass those minor thirds really sound out of place - I think power chords are the right way to go, putting the RH in bass clef. Also re-check the bass rhythm in these places - sometimes beat 1 is shortened.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 20, 2016, 08:00:30 PMThere's more I would like to say about this arrangement, but that's all I've got time for right now.

Quote from: Sebastian on August 01, 2016, 09:59:56 AMMaybe flip the stems like in the picture.

Quote from: Onionleaf on August 09, 2016, 04:33:30 AMI've pretty much done as much as I can do with "Oreburgh Gate", not really sure how else I can improve it. I would be very grateful if someone could have a look and check through it, especially that fast middle section (I believe some bars sound a little "off") as well as making sure that I have chosen the correct accidentals. Tyvm!!

[MUS] (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/108749630/Arrangements/Oreburgh%20Gate.mus)

Quote from: Sebastian on July 27, 2016, 08:17:17 PM- Evolution (https://www.dropbox.com/s/094gl29f8pk226m/Pokemon%20DiamondPearlPlatinum%20-%20Evolution.mus?dl=1)

Quote from: dajwxp on August 10, 2016, 08:28:51 PMI think b. 17 - end should be in D major for the sake of theory. The Pokemon series loves some side-stepping modulations (i.e. modulate to a key a tone/semitone away by repeating almost the same melodic phrase), and I think the change of key better shows that~

Quote from: dajwxp on August 10, 2016, 08:28:51 PMThe "go to measure 2" at b. 24 is...okay, I guess, but kinda weird. Why not use a dal segno? :p

Quote from: dajwxp on August 10, 2016, 08:28:51 PMI think b. 17 - end should be in D major for the sake of theory. The Pokemon series loves some side-stepping modulations (i.e. modulate to a key a tone/semitone away by repeating almost the same melodic phrase), and I think the change of key better shows that~

Quote from: Latios212 on August 11, 2016, 05:52:33 AMThis is the way I see it. Like you, Seb, I try to avoid key changes for short sections, but one thing that immediately makes me want to use a key change is when a whole section is exactly the same, just transposed. See this sheet (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/2580), for example.

Quote from: Latios212 on August 11, 2016, 05:52:33 AMUnrelated, but missing slur from 20-21 to mirror what you have in other places.

Quote from: Latios212 on August 11, 2016, 05:52:33 AMAnd what do you think about flipping layers 1 and 2?

Quote from: Latios212 on August 11, 2016, 10:38:26 AMOh yeah lol that's okay I was just saying how I think it should be

Quote from: Latios212 on August 11, 2016, 10:38:26 AMAnd by flip I meant stems not swapping colors.

Quote from: Latios212 on August 11, 2016, 05:52:33 AMThis is the way I see it. Like you, Seb, I try to avoid key changes for short sections, but one thing that immediately makes me want to use a key change is when a whole section is exactly the same, just transposed. See this sheet (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/2580), for example.

Quote from: Sebastian on August 11, 2016, 09:36:16 AMI don't mean to sound offensive here haha, but do you mind if we get another Updater opinion? It's not that I don't trust you! It's that I have had at least two sheets in my past that had a short key change and I was later told to change it.

Quote from: FireArrow on August 12, 2016, 04:29:30 PMPokemart: [MIDI] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/q5lrqfa8byshkmr/pokemart.mid?dl=1) [MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/17tq2dbke9ulhuw/pokemart.mus?dl=1) [PDF] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/bjr3ouqlhw8a7sv/pokemart.pdf?dl=0)

I couldn't bring myself to simplify it anymore.

Quote from: Zeila on August 11, 2016, 09:23:52 PMDecisive Battle! (Pokémon League) (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/kgxm4ggrj1uxgyl/AACa9-PW3tGRg_ALVCJsZO7oa?dl=0) is finished

Quote from: dajwxp on August 12, 2016, 05:22:47 PMFA - Pokemart

I started dancing on my seat to this, haha! ^^ Great job :)

There's no way I'll ever be able to play this, which is kinda sad, but oh well. Dang, I want to play this so bad.

Anyway, I'll be doing a quick read-through and cross-check, but for this cool little arrangement, if you don't mind, I'll be throwing in some musical suggestions:

We have wonky beams at b. 9 and 10 where a second layer once existed. Erm...yeah, it's kinda weird. Maybe you simplified out the second layer and left that there? ^^

Same for the first three beats of bar 11.

Mmmm...I'm a bit against the A-double-flat in b. 24 bt 3, LH. I think you can omit it because, yes, while you'll have to put accidentals on two notes now, this is a chromatic scale and chromatic scales follow different rules. The D-flat major chromatic scale doesn't have an A-double-flat, so yeah ^^. Plus, makes it a little easier to read. Your call though, I'll leave this one open :)

I think the last two bars before repeat could use that tension-building accompaniment we've got in the two bars before them. Even if it doesn't exist in the actual, I'm quite certain you could add it in just for the effect. I think here's a pretty good place to score the drum rhythm, if you know what i mean~

Quote from: dajwxp on August 12, 2016, 05:22:47 PMZeila - Decisive Batlle

Another arrangement that I bobbed my head to, haha. Ahh, memories...

Crisp, accurate, effective arrangement. Love it when you pull those off. It's simple and good <3

Quote from: dajwxp on August 12, 2016, 05:22:47 PMMmm...I'm in favour of bringing the left hand down an octave. But then I saw b. 8 and thought "hmm this is cool". If b. 8 did not exist I would have definitely suggested bringing the whole part an octave down for two reasons - it's what it is in the original, and it better re-creates the drum part, which conveniently doubles that ostinato. I'd like to believe that you thought about this already while in your arranging process, so I won't beat on the point, but just putting that out there ^^

The last point I'll be making is on weird hand-crosses; b. 17 - 18 is a really awkward one, and b. 35 - 36 is clashy and muddy, as well as awkward. Hmm. Bringing the left hand down an octave (once again, as with the original) would solve the problem but then it brings back the whole debate on stuff. Your call again, but I think you may want to take a look at these crosses :p

Quote from: dajwxp on August 12, 2016, 05:22:47 PMThe E major chord at b. 6 - 7 and the one a little further down...should be in F-flat major xD. By following conventions, and to better match up with your ostinato. Erm, yeah. So you have perfect pitch. Anyway, the reason why this needs to be is because you have a C-flat in the bass line, and it's not consistent. And from what I've heard and learnt, erm, if you don't play by ear it's easier to see things done the way they usually are done. Yeah :p

Same thing applies for b. 10, 15, 19!

Quote from: dajwxp on August 12, 2016, 05:22:47 PMb. 21 bt 3 though...hng. It's definitely a E-natural because it's an auxilliary note, but should you change the left hand part to avoid a false relation? My hunch tells me that you've done it right - the left hand is an ostinato and the right hand is following the rules - and that's good, but hmm, it seems to go against what I've said about your E major chords. Long chords don't follow the same rules as auxilliary notes, but eh. Maybe someone else's opinion on this would be good ^^

Quote from: dajwxp on August 12, 2016, 05:22:47 PMOtherwise, much cheers to a great arrangement! May try this out one day, hehe. Good stuff~

Quote from: nutella511 on August 27, 2016, 09:23:44 PMI'd like to claim Battle! (Rival). I don't have much time since school started, so a formatting fix will be doable.



EDIT: Due to Notepad Limitations, I can't fix it. I'll leave this to someone else.

Quote from: dajwxp on August 10, 2016, 08:13:32 PMOnionleaf - Oreburgh Gate

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Quote from: JDMEK5 on October 29, 2016, 12:58:03 AMGot the chance to pull a solid all-nighter. Started and finished another: Battle! (Giratina) - [MUS] (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/93589150/Pok%C3%A9mon%20Pt%20-%20Battle!%20(Giratina).mus)

Quote from: MaelstromI can only imagine the screams of piano teachers when 1 13 year old kid brings in the sheet and says "I want to play this"

Quote from: Dekkadeci on October 29, 2016, 10:03:13 PMI've always thought that those bars are in C minor and not null-key-signature (I also believe that Bars 71-74 are in C minor overall, but the notation there looks bad in C minor for Bars 72 and 74).

Quote from: Dekkadeci on October 29, 2016, 10:03:13 PMWith that being said, humans will probably play back the repeated Bars 75-77 as intended but the MIDI playback will not... If you want the MIDI to match the sheet music, I recommend expanding Bars 75-77 so it takes up 6 bars instead of using repeat signs.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on October 29, 2016, 10:25:44 PMTo put it most bluntly, this is not going to happen. If I'm understanding you correctly, this reasoning would go to suggest that we should never use repeat signs within a piece because it will mess up the MIDI. I think that Finale correctly exports repeats into MIDI files anyways, but even if that wasn't the case, sheet quality/efficiency/accuracy/clarity should never never ever be sacrificed for playback or MIDI. It's like a golden rule, lol.

Quote from: Latios212 on October 29, 2016, 10:25:11 PMPlus with enough fiddling with repeats and invisible jumps in Finale software you can make anything play back the way you want to. (Check out Pokémon Black/White Route 2.)

Quote from: Latios212 on July 16, 2016, 06:44:06 PM- Game/copyright info (D/P):

Pokémon Diamond Version & Pokémon Pearl Version
~
Nintendo, The Pokémon Company, GameFreak © 2006
http://www.NinSheetMusic.org/

- Game/copyright info (Pt):

Pokémon Platinum Version
~
Nintendo, The Pokémon Company, GameFreak © 2008
http://www.NinSheetMusic.org/

Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on July 18, 2016, 07:55:39 PMThank you to the person who posted the remaining tracks.
Claiming Dialga/Palkia battle.

Quote from: AmpharosAndy on March 28, 2017, 02:27:15 AMCurrently working on Route 203 (Day) with help from Latios. I also had a go at Victory! Trainer last week but I see Lux is eyeing it up too. Idk what the best solution is but we could workshop it at some point.

Quote from: Zeila on July 06, 2017, 06:54:23 PM- m1 make the Bb an eighth note

Quote from: Jubilife Pianist on September 23, 2017, 09:15:25 AMI can't wait for this whole project to be finished, please tell me it's not dead!

Quote from: Jubilife Pianist on September 23, 2017, 09:15:25 AMAlright lads, my first ever post, and it's gonna be me claiming 020 - "Wifi Communication"
I can't wait for this whole project to be finished, please tell me it's not dead!

(I will be doing others too hopefully)

Quote from: Jubilife Pianist on September 24, 2017, 12:55:33 AMWhen will this update be?

Quote from: AmpharosAndy on July 04, 2017, 04:28:31 AMRoute 203 needs a lot of help so I'll drop these here so that anyone can give some tips. Updated according to Zeila's feedback.

Victory! Trainer: [MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/e8oinwb164sy7m4/Victory%21%20Trainer.mus?dl=0)

Route 203 (Day): [MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/smm0hnekvp45h6s/Route%20203%20%28Day%29.mus?dl=0)

Quote from: Jubilife Pianist on October 01, 2017, 03:04:36 AMI can't get finale notepad because it can't be downloaded on a Mac

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PMBattle Castle by Sebastian
- The very start of the song! I would suggest a high F# for that chime to kick off the song.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PMIn due time :3

Battle Castle by Sebastian
- Middle voice - in some places like m. 18 you've omitted the note on beat 3. However, it'd be easily playable by the right hand and you do have beat 3 present in other measures, so I'd throw it in for consistency. Check to see if it's viable in other similar places too.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PMIn due time :3

Battle Castle by Sebastian
- Not sure how easy those rolled chords in m. 38-39 would be to play. Maybe try slimming them down a bit?

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PMIn due time :3

Battle Castle by Sebastian
Some comments on the cross-staving in general - it could use a bit of work here and there. A few things I noticed are:
- Beam angling. Sometimes you have the voice ascending but the beam angles downward, and that's no good.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PM- Staccatos - sometimes they look oddly placed, like in m. 35. Sometimes above, sometimes below.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PM- Stem direction - m. 50 into 51 looks awkward.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PM- Cut-off points for what goes in the top/bottom staff - I'd take another pass here to determine what looks the best as well as makes sense from a playability standpoint - at least, try to keep it consistent; in m. 29 F# goes in the top staff, while in m. 30 it's in the bottom.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 20, 2018, 05:15:24 PM- Space between staves - pretty self-explanatory, but make sure everything has a good amount of room. Things on the last page start to get really squished vertically.

Quote from: Sebastian on March 21, 2018, 08:35:44 PMI actually disagree. The reason I omitted those notes is that there is a left hand/bass note played on that beat. I don't want the right hand playing those notes. It would be inconsistent to add them in since I purposefully arranged it this way.

Quote from: Sebastian on March 21, 2018, 08:35:44 PMSorry. I'm not exactly sure what you mean.

Quote from: AmpharosAndy on May 09, 2018, 05:39:25 AMTeam Galactic Eterna Building: [MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/37qlwscpa5byrfl/Team%20Galactic%20Eterna%20Building.mus?dl=0)

• Why is piano 2 sitting idly while piano 1 plays both parts of the complex intro? Would it not be easier to let one person play the sextuplets using both hands?
• In measure 3+ there are a lot of clashing parts in the bass clef register for both hands of piano 1, while piano 2 isn't doing anything in that range and can easily take one of the voices.
• The measure distribution leaves a lot to be desired. Measure 18 cramps the whole system. Page 4 has tons of unused space you can use to loosen up the B section and make the complex rhythms easier to read.
• Why write piano 1's B section entirely on the top staff? There's a lot of ledger lines and it would be certainly help things if the left hand took some of the lower parts of the chords or tuplets.

• Things seem a bit pushed towards the top of page 2. I'd recommend lowering everything a bit since you've got ample space at the bottom. Also think about perhaps decreasing space between LH/RH staves here since it's not being used.
• Could we resolve the melody to a high A flat in measure 35 instead of including the lower E flat in the right hand? That voice really wants to finish ascending from the G natural. Similarly, I think it would be best to include the lead-in to the next section at the end of m. 41 (repeated C flats leading into the D flat).
• How about just extending the 8va over m. 43-44?
• Just a stylistic point here, but what would you think about filling in the chords a bit more in the climax at m. 47 and 49 for a more powerful effect?

Quote129a - Contest: Results Announcement (Duet) - FireArrow

QuoteHearthome City (Day) - FireArrow

Quote24 - Poké Mart - FireArrow

Quote from: FireArrow on May 09, 2018, 07:34:43 PMThis is finished already.

Quote from: FireArrow on May 09, 2018, 07:34:43 PMI plan on fixing it up if that's what you mean?

• Pokemon Center (Day)
• PokeMart
• Gts

Quote from: Latios212 on June 01, 2018, 11:12:54 AMI'll update the OP tonight. FireArrow has a WIP for Pokémart, it hasn't been added yet.

Quote from: FireArrow on May 09, 2018, 07:34:43 PMThis is finished already.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 04, 2018, 04:44:04 PMI don't remember him having anything for "Battle! (Team Galactic Commander)"

Quote from: Latios212 on May 03, 2018, 04:59:30 PMNeat, looking much better! Some further things, though:

Quote from: Latios212 on April 30, 2018, 07:10:54 PM- Accompaniment in the section beginning with measure 27. It's too light (too high up); the song has been building up to this section which finally lets loose with all the energy that's been building up. Try moving the left hand part lower and experiment with what creates a more balanced sound.

Quote from: Latios212 on April 30, 2018, 07:10:54 PM- Is there a reason for the staccato mark in m. 33? It doesn't sound like that note particularly needs it.

Quote from: Latios212 on April 30, 2018, 07:10:54 PM- Measures 37-38 also lack punch because the left hand is trapped too high. Again, see if you can come up with an accompaniment pattern that utilizes lower notes, perhaps for the first beat of those two measures.
- I feel like m. 39-40 should focus on the quick flute ascents, as opposed to the descending eighth note line in the right hand you currently have written it. See if you can work it a bit to prioritize that.

Quote from: Latios212 on April 30, 2018, 07:10:54 PM- Fix the layer work in m. 43-44 and 47-48. The first eighth rest is misplaced in m. 44 is misplaced, and the ties facing up/down get a bit confusing here. Actually, one thing to consider is it you want to write the repeating G's on the top staff, either to play with the right hand or to reduce collisions on the bottom staff.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 04, 2018, 04:44:04 PMI don't remember him having anything for "Battle! (Team Galactic Commander)", just the other two Team Galactic battle themes (grunt and boss), but I could be wrong. It can't hurt to check, I suppose, but I haven't seen him around lately much...

Quote from: Libera on August 27, 2018, 11:09:37 AMAlso I'm going to go through a bunch of the sheets on here and offer some feedback shortly (read: over the next few days) so look out for that.

• This is a very small comment, but you should probably use 'Magically' rather than 'Magical' since because 'Magical' is just a noun adjective rather than an adverb it doesn't really read like a direction at the moment.  Edit: I've decided on reflection that adjectives are fine.  Choose whichever one you prefer.
• The graces in bar 22: these aren't very pianistic and don't sound great in my opinion.  I'd suggest you just roll those two notes instead.
• In bar 3 and 37 the left note on beat 1 uses up an awful lot of ink for a note that isn't even being played.  I'd just remove that left hand note.
• This is a general comment about the sheet.  I think the whole thing needs some room to be breathe (it's very dense at the moment).  I'd decrease the number of bars per system from 4 to to 3 which should get it onto to three pages (which I think it needs).  There are some particularly problematic points, but I think if you spread it more and have another look through it these will probably go away.  If not I can say later anyway.
• In bar 8 I'd hide the layer 1 accidental on the B.  At the moment it looks pretty ... not pretty.
• In the second half of bar 9 I don't think those notes are doubled.  i.e. I think it should just read quavers B C B.
• In bar 22 those A#s should be rewritten as Bbs; it's a Bb major chord after all.
• In bar 19, for the beat 2 chord I hear F A Bn E.
• Finally you have a metric modulation going from bar 19 to 20 and this should be written out explicitly.  (I believe it's crotchet = quaver but I have a tendency to get it the wrong way round, so do double check.)

• The left hand from bar 9 onwards is partially incorrect.  I would send pictures but I'd have to send a lot so I'm just going to put the file here: https://www.dropbox.com/s/omy6390m3th5eg3/Evolution_LiberaEdit.musx?dl=1 (https://www.dropbox.com/s/omy6390m3th5eg3/Evolution_LiberaEdit.musx?dl=1)
• I'm not sure about the loop you have going at the moment.  I have a feeling it might just loop those last 8 bars once it gets there, but you should probably boot up your copy of the game to check.  (this isn't really important I know).

• Combine layers wherever possible.  There are lots of places where you could do this so I won't list them all but for example bar 2 RH and bar 27 RH.
• The cross-staffing in bar 14 isn't a good idea in my opinion since those chords are not playable with one hand and so the left hand is getting those bottom notes.  I think at the moment it's communicating that poorly.
• In bars 25-26 the left hand is not playable for those of us who are not octopuses.  I'd move the octaves around to have it fit better.
• You are missing a D in the chord on beat 1 of bar 20 underneath the A.
• Have a go through all of those roll markings and try to make them a little more uniform; they don't look particularly neat at the moment.

• Once again let's try to spread this music out a bit.  There's lots of ink going on and I feel like decreasing bars per system will really help to make everything clearer.  Especially system 5 on page 1.
• While you're at it, bar 22 needs to be respaced.  Just have finale do it for you by clicking on it with a note.
• Some of the bass notes in 15-16 are a little hard to play and you could remove those and it wouldn't really hurt the arrangement in my opinion.  Keep the triplets though and combine the layers.
• The first half of this arrangement is looking pretty good, but I have some issues with bars 19-24.  I'm not entirely sure what you're transcribing here, but I don't think it's the most interesting thing going on.  Your right hand is doubling the rhythm of the bass which isn't exactly an issue by itself but there's this cool piano thing going on that I feel would work much better.  I'd have a go at those bars again and see if you can come up with something. 25 onwards is fine though.  If you need any help with that section just send me a message on discord; I try to respond very quickly.
• I'd put a slur on that run in bar 18.

Quote from: Libera on September 26, 2018, 04:36:53 AMEvolution
This looks good to me at the moment.  I've only got a few things to say

• The left hand from bar 9 onwards is partially incorrect.  I would send pictures but I'd have to send a lot so I'm just going to put the file here: https://www.dropbox.com/s/omy6390m3th5eg3/Evolution_LiberaEdit.musx?dl=1 (https://www.dropbox.com/s/omy6390m3th5eg3/Evolution_LiberaEdit.musx?dl=1)
• I'm not sure about the loop you have going at the moment.  I have a feeling it might just loop those last 8 bars once it gets there, but you should probably boot up your copy of the game to check.  (this isn't really important I know).

Quote from: Latios212 on September 27, 2018, 07:11:20 PMSpin Trade
- Would suggest making the first three notes staccatissimo or something to make them even more marked!
- You could move the dynamic in m. 2 down a bit.
- The figure in m. 7 beat 3 is actually a bend up from F. But what you wrote in seems like a fine substitute for that.
- Only wrong notes - m. 9 beat 1.5 should be the dyad chromatically neighboring below, that is to say Eb-Ab, and beat 3.5 should also be a fourth (F instead of Gb).

• We should get rid of these alternating 8vas and 15vas.  The best way to do that would be to just put a note at the start to play the right an octave above.  (And then another note of course at bar 34.
• In bars 51-54 I don't hear the alternating C# D# in the bass.  It just sounds like C#s to me.
• This is a comment for the whole piece: the spellings look funny in places to me.  For example in bar 14-17 we have Gns that should probably be written as F##s.  I'd have another look at the accidentals (maybe consider doing the piece in flats instead?) but if you're not sure we can probably sort something out.
• Speaking of bar 14-17, the left hand sounds a little inaccurate to me.  I'm hearing:
  
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  (that's how I chose to do the accidentals here since the chord in bar 14 is just a D# major chord.)
• In bar 19 and 23 the right hand As sound like A#s to me.

• Final note in the left hand sounds like a Db rather than an Eb as you have written it.
• Think about the playability of bars 64-67.  There are some fast jumps for the right hand there.  I'd move the last two quavers of the right hand's part before the jump to the left hand.  (Which from a brief mess around on the keyboard seems pretty easy to play.)
• Throughout the whole piece is the bassline that first appears in bar 3.  Sometimes you notate the pitch bend on the Ab, sometimes you don't.  It might be worth going through and checking to make sure you're being consistent.
• The Dn in the right hand of bar 38 sounds like a D# to me.
• I'd write the semiquaver F at the end of bar 13 as a quaver.

Quote from: Libera on September 29, 2018, 09:36:39 AM

• Final note in the left hand sounds like a Db rather than an Eb as you have written it.

Quote from: Libera on September 29, 2018, 09:36:39 AM

• Throughout the whole piece is the bassline that first appears in bar 3.  Sometimes you notate the pitch bend on the Ab, sometimes you don't.  It might be worth going through and checking to make sure you're being consistent.

Quote from: Libera on September 29, 2018, 09:36:39 AM

• Think about the playability of bars 64-67.  There are some fast jumps for the right hand there.  I'd move the last two quavers of the right hand's part before the jump to the left hand.  (Which from a brief mess around on the keyboard seems pretty easy to play.)
• The Dn in the right hand of bar 38 sounds like a D# to me.
• I'd write the semiquaver F at the end of bar 13 as a quaver.

Quote from: Libera on September 29, 2018, 07:32:37 AMOnionleaf:

Oreburgh Gate
This looks pretty good so far.  Some comments from me:

• We should get rid of these alternating 8vas and 15vas.  The best way to do that would be to just put a note at the start to play the right an octave above.  (And then another note of course at bar 34.
• In bars 51-54 I don't hear the alternating C# D# in the bass.  It just sounds like C#s to me.
• This is a comment for the whole piece: the spellings look funny in places to me.  For example in bar 14-17 we have Gns that should probably be written as F##s.  I'd have another look at the accidentals (maybe consider doing the piece in flats instead?) but if you're not sure we can probably sort something out.
• Speaking of bar 14-17, the left hand sounds a little inaccurate to me.  I'm hearing:
  
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  (that's how I chose to do the accidentals here since the chord in bar 14 is just a D# major chord.)
• In bar 19 and 23 the right hand As sound like A#s to me.

Hope that helps and if you have any questions ask.

Quote from: Latios212 on May 09, 2018, 04:03:04 PM41 - Battle! (Team Galactic) - JDMEK5

Great work! I do have some relatively minor comments, though.

• Things seem a bit pushed towards the top of page 2. I'd recommend lowering everything a bit since you've got ample space at the bottom. Also think about perhaps decreasing space between LH/RH staves here since it's not being used.
• Could we resolve the melody to a high A flat in measure 35 instead of including the lower E flat in the right hand? That voice really wants to finish ascending from the G natural. Similarly, I think it would be best to include the lead-in to the next section at the end of m. 41 (repeated C flats leading into the D flat).
• How about just extending the 8va over m. 43-44?

Quote from: Latios212 on May 09, 2018, 04:03:04 PMJust a stylistic point here, but what would you think about filling in the chords a bit more in the climax at m. 47 and 49 for a more powerful effect?

Quote from: JDMEK5 on December 27, 2018, 10:52:57 PMI see only reason with all your suggestions. I have updated the file in the dropbox folder with the edits.

Quote from: Onionleaf on October 06, 2018, 10:51:44 PMHi there, thanks for reviewing my sheet. I agree with the points that you've made and have made these corrections. I recall receiving some helpful suggestions a while back to correct the accidentals, so it may be that I simply missed updating m 14-17. I'm not very experienced with the theory behind accidentals and whether or not F# minor would be an appropriate key to use, so feel free to adjust my sheet if you feel it needs improvement. :)

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 11:12:03 AM80 - Route 201 (Night) - Latios212

Only got two comments:

-In bar 7 and 9 in the second half of the bar you've got an open chord rather than the original which is a full C chord.  My suggestion would be to add the part in that's playing those Es like this:
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/492809359961882625/543871429079203840/unknown.png
but something else might work as well.
-Once again, my favourite, http to https.

Quote from: Latios212 on February 10, 2019, 04:41:00 PMSounds good! Updated that.

Quote from: Zeila on May 04, 2019, 01:40:21 PMI worked on Stark Mountain recently, so here's an edited version of the one on site:

Quote from: Latios212 on May 04, 2019, 01:48:00 PMHey, nice to see you around still! This looks like a really good overhaul. Will check it over soon~

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM136 - Stark Mountain - Zeila

Am I Latios now???  Checking...

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-Hearing this instead for the left hand of bar 25:

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Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-The harmonies for bar 46 don't sound right to me, and either way I think I'd cut some of those extra right hand notes because it seems pretty awkward to perform those four chords in a row at that speed.

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-For the left hand in bar 59 (and similarly in bar 63) I'm hearing:

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but I can see why you might have removed that high offbeat Bn to stay away from the RH so I'm happy either way on this one really.

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-I'm not hearing the last low C in the left hand of bar 4.  Also  There's a similar high C in bar 3 on beat 3.5 like I was talking about in bar 59 and 63 (same for bar 7 as well.)

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-I think I wouldn't swap the hands round on the last beat of bar 14.  I think I'd keep the Bn in the left hand at the original pitch (so below the C and Eb that the RH is playing) and then just have an octave Cn on beat 1 of bar 15 rather than three.  That would probably mean that you wouldn't want to cross staff so it might end up looking like:

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Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-Instead of G# G# at the start of the RH in bar 62 I'm hearing Dn C#.

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-I think the placement of dynamics across the sheet could probably be made a little neater: just centre things in between the two staves more and give them a little more room to breath after the barline.

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PM-Wouldn't 'slap leg' be more appropriate than 'pat leg'?  I'm not sure patting one's leg makes much of noise, but maybe that's just me?

Quote from: Libera on May 05, 2019, 04:08:33 PMPretty weird piece, but I think on the whole you've done a nice job!  All the above stuff is really quite minor.

Quote from: Libera on May 08, 2019, 05:40:18 PM140 - Decisive Battle! (Pokémon League) - Zeila

This looks pretty good!  A few things:
-The An in the RH of bar 30 sounds like it should be an Ab like the previous note to me.

Quote from: Libera on May 08, 2019, 05:40:18 PM-Something funny is going on with the accidentals in the lower layer in bar 15.  I think the Eb was intended as an En, but with the rest of the accidentals in that bar I think the Ebs should be Fbs (rather than Ens) and the D# should be an Eb.

Quote from: Libera on May 08, 2019, 05:40:18 PM-Might just be me missing it but I'm not hearing the Gn in the RH of bar 4.

Quote from: Latios212 on February 02, 2019, 01:35:24 PM- Any reason why the main part isn't written in F minor (like the vs. Commander sheet)?
- Header info on pages 2-3 is outside the margin (as well as the footer on page 1)
- https in URL
- m. 37: typo? Fbb --> Fb
- I think we should spell m. 52/54/56/58 the same way with either En or Fb in the RH of all of them.
- I'd suggest extending the slur from m. 24 to the note it's tied to in m. 25.
Not really finding anything else, looks great :P

Quote from: Dekkadeci on February 08, 2019, 09:29:48 PM41 - Battle! (Team Galactic) - JDMEK5
Actually, I'm wondering why you opted for a 6-flat key signature (for E flat minor) instead of A flat minor's 7-flat key signature. I hear this theme as being in A flat minor/G sharp minor, regardless of the bassline's tendency to play F minor-like stuff. If anything, this piece has Phrygian tendencies (so it has a better excuse to have a 4-sharp key signature).

(The only bars that initially stuck out to me wrong, it turns out, are actually probably correct according to the original theme.)

Quote from: Latios212 on March 24, 2019, 03:48:28 PMContinuing down the list:

46 - Battle! (Team Galactic Commander) - JDMEK5 [Approved by Latios]

Hope you don't mind, I did a bit of rebalancing of the layout - margins etc. to space everything a bit more evenly. I also removed the overlapping D# in m. 50 (so it now looks like 48) and verified and removed the text about the potentially confusing note (unless that was intended for the performer and not the person checking it?). I personally prefer the descending chromatic line at the beginning over the repetitive one you wrote. It's fine though, up to you what you wanna keep.

Quote from: Zeila on May 09, 2019, 02:36:52 PMjust don't turn into him animorphs style...

Quote from: Zeila on May 09, 2019, 02:36:52 PMAfter inspecting it again I'm hearing this

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Quote from: Zeila on May 09, 2019, 02:36:52 PMI'm not hearing that at all ;-;

Quote from: Zeila on May 09, 2019, 02:36:52 PMIf you mean the penultimate note, I don't hear it. I think the An in the beginning is the odd one out because the Rh and Lh both play an Ab after that

Quote from: Zeila on May 09, 2019, 02:36:52 PMI still hear it

Quote from: Libera on June 15, 2019, 04:10:47 PMI'm still hearing Ab-An rather than An-Bb but it is kind of hard to hear.  Also I'm not sure that the En-Fn bend is worth putting in, but I'll leave that to your discretion.

Quote from: Libera on June 15, 2019, 04:10:47 PMI had another listen and this is definitely what I can hear.  I'm pretty certain I've got the right part since it's playing all of the other notes you've written in.  Maybe someone else can give someone else can give an opinion if we can't agree between us.

Quote from: Libera on June 15, 2019, 04:10:47 PMI think there's only one An in bar 30, but either way I mean the one on beat 1 in the right hand.  An An there sounds really strange to me and I do still think it should be an Ab, but once again maybe someone else can clear it up if we can't decide.

Quote from: Libera on June 15, 2019, 04:10:47 PMNot sure if this change happened on your edit or I just missed it before, but the beams on the first group of quavers in bar 15 are quite high and should probably be brought lower.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on June 08, 2019, 06:54:56 PM(...)

46 - Battle! (Team Galactic)
[MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/g9cto1f0eik1hpb/41%20-%20Battle%21%20%28Team%20Galactic%29%20-%20JDMEK5.mus?dl=0) [MIDI] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/81a1fp0rr3cqg2k/41%20-%20Battle%21%20%28Team%20Galactic%29%20-%20JDMEK5.mid?dl=0) [PDF] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/ekgimvty9pjo5c3/41%20-%20Battle%21%20%28Team%20Galactic%29%20-%20JDMEK5.pdf?dl=0)

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Chromatic descending line works for me. I don't think I was able to find your new file but I made the same changes you described in this file here. I also added a few small things like extra articulations and such. Call it the glossy wax finish.

41 - Battle! (Team Galactic Commander)
[MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/njktukdki0jojv6/Pok%C3%A9mon%20DP%20-%20Battle%21%20%28Team%20Galactic%20Commander%29.mus?dl=0) [MIDI] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/9y2afe3fn3hxaxx/Pok%C3%A9mon%20DP%20-%20Battle%21%20%28Team%20Galactic%20Commander%29.mid?dl=0) [PDF] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/om78cfpoz62cgdx/Pok%C3%A9mon%20DP%20-%20Battle%21%20%28Team%20Galactic%20Commander%29.pdf?dl=0)

Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Eterna Forest - Zeila

• One of the ties on beat 4 of m3, 41, and 45 (RH) seems just a bit too close to the chord. Other than that, I got nothing.

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Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Solaceon Town (Day) - Latios212

• The F naturals in m6 should be E#s (C#7 chord like in m5).
• m18 RH: The grace note looks like it's too close to the flat sign next to it.

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Quote from: Libera on June 29, 2019, 03:06:16 PMSorry for the back on forth on these ones, but hopefully we should be done soon!

Quote from: Static on July 30, 2019, 01:41:36 PM

Contest Hall - AmpharosAndy

• I'm usually not a fan of using staccatos on dotted notes, but I think due to the very dense/layered nature of this piece, using staccatos makes things a lot less cluttered.
• There are some misplaced staccatos and rests and off-center dynamics
• Since you have Notepad, I took care of all this for you and am now approving this sheet.

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Contest: Results Announcement - FireArrow

• Some 8th rests are clashing in m5 and 7, but other than that this looks good.

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Contest: Results Announcement (Duet) - FireArrow

• The title should be changed to (Four Hands) instead of (Duet), and instead of Piano 1 and 2 in the sheet, it should be Primo and Secondo.
• The C# in m6 of Primo LH should be a Db (descending chromatic scale).

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Wi-Fi Plaza - Sebastian

• m9 beat 3: The RH and LH notes should be aligned vertically.
• m14 RH: Slur on the grace note should be flipped.
• m23 RH: I would make the Db a C# in this instance because it acts as a chromatic approach to the D natural.
• m25 LH: The slur on beat 3.5 seems a bit too close to the note.
• m35 LH: The Db should be a C# (F7#5 or F augmented 7th chord).

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Battle Castle - Sebastian

• The style description should go before the tempo marking.
• The page numbers aren't positioned correctly; they should be lined up horizontally.
• m41 LH: This note should be tied to m42
• m64-65 RH: Since nothing is in the first layer, you should flip some of the 2nd layer notes.
• Change http to https.

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Quote from: Zeila on August 08, 2019, 10:51:35 PMNo worries! I fixed the stuff you mentioned. I also made a few other changes to Decisive Battle, which were just formatting stuff like changing the subtitle/page number positions or removing/changing courtesy accidentals in m16 and wherever there where parenthesis

I would add courtesy accidentals to the lake trio battle but I don't have the updated file. Anyways, here are the two updated MUS files:

Stark Mountain (https://www.dropbox.com/s/do6j69ooiu1lbia/Stark%20Mountain%20edit.mus?dl=0) | Decisive Battle (https://www.dropbox.com/s/hiv6auja5l3n0ah/Decisive%20Battle%21%20%28Pokemon%20League%29.mus?dl=1)

Quote from: Static on July 30, 2019, 01:41:36 PM

Battle Castle - Sebastian

• The style description should go before the tempo marking.
• The page numbers aren't positioned correctly; they should be lined up horizontally.
• m41 LH: This note should be tied to m42
• m64-65 RH: Since nothing is in the first layer, you should flip some of the 2nd layer notes.
• Change http to https.

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Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PMOreburgh Gate - Onionleaf
This is an interesting piece...

• The 6/4 bar at the beginning should be only around 4 beats long. Yep, the note is 4 beats long, with the other 2 beats being in the very last measure of the piece. I hope that's appropriate?
• m17 LH: There is a pickup to m18 in the melody line here on beat 3 (E naturals); also, the Dxs in this measure should be E naturals.
• m26-33: The G naturals should all be Fxs. In m33 LH, the D natural in the melody should be a Cx, and like in m17, there is an E natural quarter note on beat 3.
• m45, 49 RH: Some of the accidentals in these measures are bit too close to notes and other markings.

Quote from: Static on July 30, 2019, 01:41:36 PM

Wi-Fi Plaza - Sebastian

• m9 beat 3: The RH and LH notes should be aligned vertically.
• m14 RH: Slur on the grace note should be flipped.
• m23 RH: I would make the Db a C# in this instance because it acts as a chromatic approach to the D natural.
• m25 LH: The slur on beat 3.5 seems a bit too close to the note.
• m35 LH: The Db should be a C# (F7#5 or F augmented 7th chord).

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Quote from: Static on July 30, 2019, 01:41:36 PM

Contest: Results Announcement - FireArrow

• Some 8th rests are clashing in m5 and 7, but other than that this looks good.

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Quote from: VGMOP on November 16, 2019, 08:22:03 AMOk. I will try to understand your system.
I have almost finish the sheet music for "Route 205 (night)". I will post very soon.
I have also a theme which is called "Encounter Collector" (it's not the real name) but he isn't perfect and I think you did a sheet music for this.
I don't think I will do a sheet music for 4 hands because it's not easy to hear all instruments.

Best regards,
Christophe.

Quote from: Zeila on November 16, 2019, 02:35:52 PMThanks! I updated Stark Mountain (https://www.dropbox.com/s/do6j69ooiu1lbia/Stark%20Mountain%20edit.mus?dl=1)

Quote from: Static on July 30, 2019, 01:41:36 PM

Contest Hall - AmpharosAndy

• I'm usually not a fan of using staccatos on dotted notes, but I think due to the very dense/layered nature of this piece, using staccatos makes things a lot less cluttered.
• There are some misplaced staccatos and rests and off-center dynamics
• Since you have Notepad, I took care of all this for you and am now approving this sheet.

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Quote from: Libera on May 04, 2019, 11:49:50 AM137 - Battle! (Legendary Pokémon) - Sebastian

-I think the first two bars would be better kept in the same time signature as the rest of the sheet (i.e. 4/4) but with a tempo change when the bass comes in.  It seems weird having these 9/4 bars sitting around to me.  (That would make the tempo at the start roughly 156 if my arithmetic is correct.)
-I would go with Ens rather than Fbs and Ans rather than Bbbs throughout the bass line.  Not only would it be easier to read, but I think the implied chord movement makes more sense this way (C flat 5, Db aug etc.)  (I've just noticed that you do actually sometimes spell the Fb as an En.  They should definitely all be the same and I would strongly recommend the En over the Fb.)
-Regarding courtesy accidentals, there's some inconsistency going on.  Eg.g bar 4 doesn't have a courtesy on the Bb but does in all subsequent times that figure comes in.  Also,  if you want to put a courtesy on the Bb why not also put one on the Gn?
-I don't see the purpose of the leading line in bars 15-16.  It doesn't seem like the same voice playing those two parts and I don't think it helps distinguish where the hands should go either.  I'd just remove it, personally.
-The right hand of bar 19 doesn't seem playable to me.  I'd shift the G up the octave so you can fit it under the hand more easily.
-The layer one rests in bars 19, 23, 27, 31 and 35 could just be at normal height I think.
-The age-old http to https.
-Bring the copyright up to v=0 vertical alignment.

The notes look solid to me, these are all just small presentation things really.

Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Victory Road - Latios212

• I would probably make all the C#s Dbs, and all the Gbs F#s just so everything is consistent. The entire piece seems built on the G-Db tritone and various chromatic things going to or from G. Just do what makes sense to you, right now it seems pretty inconsistent in terms of accidental spelling.
• You have the flute part in m5, 6 and 10 marked as staccato, but the string triplets in m11 without articulation. In the original, it sounds like it should be the opposite. The flute notes seem held longer and the triplets are pretty short.
• m11 LH beat 4: I hear these 2 8th notes as another A natural and Bb, and ending on an A on beat 1 of m12. The upper notes may be there, but I think these are more prominent.

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Quote from: Latios212 on December 09, 2019, 04:40:10 PM140 - Decisive Battle! (Pokémon League) - Zeila
This looks great, just a few small things:
- Playback is 8vb for both hands. Go to the Score Manager and set the two staves to different sound channels

Quote from: Latios212 on December 09, 2019, 04:40:10 PM- In some places it may be nice to use a slur leading into the staccato note where the original implies that kind of sound. Specifically, between m. 27-28, 29-30, 31-32, 33-34, and in 39 and 41.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 09, 2019, 04:40:10 PM- Louder dynamic for the last measure? There's a long buildup leading to that climax.

Quote from: Libera on May 08, 2019, 05:40:18 PMRH looks good, just a few comments about the bass.  There are some bars where you miss out the bass movement at the end of bar and I feel like those almost cliche movements would be good to include over the generic root chord pattern.  I'm looking at bar 5, bar 8 and bar 17.  Also the bass note you've written in at the end of bar 9 isn't actually there.

Other than that:
-Maybe it'd be better to simplify the rhythm in the left hand of bar 11 so that it looks like the one in bar 13.  At 180bpm I'm not sure it makes much of a difference and might just be easier to read, your choice though.
-http -> https  (Can I get a custom emote for this or something haha.)

Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Battle! (Team Galactic Boss) - JDMEK5

Not sure how much you've tested or fixed the parts that you marked on the sheet, but I'll provide some feedback anyway:

• Some of the dynamics and accidentals are too close to other notes and markings, like in m29-30 for example.
• That "hit the lowest note on the piano" section I think sounds better if you play it in key as a low C instead of a low A. Also, for this direction marked (a), and the other marked (b), I would move the directions directly near the music so the reader doesn't have to look down for them since there's enough space to do this.
• Your system spacing on different pages is inconsistent and uneven.

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Quote from: Latios212 on December 10, 2019, 04:24:18 PMPt7 - Wi-Fi Plaza: Mini-Games - SebastianI agree with these comments and have implemented them in Sebastian's absence. Other than that, I moved the rests in the last measure back onto the staff. This one also looks good.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 09, 2019, 04:40:10 PMGood points. I fixed these up in Sebastian's absence. Details about a few of the comments above in particular:
- Re-spelled the left hand accordingly and removed the courtesy B flat in the even numbered measures that is no longer necessary. Added courtesy G naturals since every measure alternates Gb/Gn.
- Moved the right hand part in m. 19-20 to the top staff
Also added a dynamic contrast between the intro and the rest. Signing off on this one. Libera let me know if I messed up anything while editing or if it's good to go.

Quote from: Static on July 30, 2019, 01:41:36 PM

Contest: Results Announcement (Duet) - FireArrow

• The title should be changed to (Four Hands) instead of (Duet), and instead of Piano 1 and 2 in the sheet, it should be Primo and Secondo.
• The C# in m6 of Primo LH should be a Db (descending chromatic scale).

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Quote from: Libera on December 15, 2019, 09:55:13 AMYeah that's what you get for a 16 month old sheet.  I'd only been arranging for a month... Everything should be fixed now.

Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Battle! (Team Galactic) - JDMEK5

• My only concern is with the accidentals; I feel like a lot of these would technically be flats or double flats instead of naturals. However, what you have is, at least in my opinion, a lot clearer and easier to read, so I'm fine with keeping it as is. If you're fine with that too, I'll accept.

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Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Battle! (Rival) - JDMEK5

• m13: The size of those 8th rests in layer 1 is inconsistent with the rest of the section.
• m20: The 8va marking goes above the top margin. There's enough room on the page to move all the systems down and/or closer together to keep everything within the margins (I'd probably do this for page 3 too so it looks consistent).
• m49: I think the layer 2 G would be better written as an 8th note instead of a whole note. It sounds short in the original. and holding the G while trying to play the bass clef stuff at the same time is a really big stretch for one hand.

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Quote from: Latios212 on December 15, 2019, 10:07:25 AM26 - Battle! (Rival) - JDMEK5
Looks good, just a few things in addition to Static's feedback (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=8641.msg413847#msg413847):
- Flip top tie in m. 18
- Normal position eighth rests in m. 49
- Could bump a system down on each page
- Text within page margins
Once this is updated, I approve!

Quote from: JDMEK5 on December 15, 2019, 10:24:11 AM26 - Battle! (Rival) - JDMEK5
Done and done.

73 - Victory Road - Latios212
Worked with Latios over discord for the following edits:
- Added Cs in measures 2 and 4 RH for more tension and accuracy.
- Fixed some wrong notes in measure 7-8 RH.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 15, 2019, 07:37:06 AM129a - Contest: Results Announcement (Duet) - FireArrow
Fixed the duet stuff. I think the C# is fine there since it makes sense above the F# bass and it avoids making a diminished third interval with the following B. Anyway, I don't have any more to say on this one so approving.

Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM

Hearthome City (Day) - FireArrow

Lots of weird chords in this one:

• m2 LH: The Bns should be Cbs (Db7 chord).
• m3 LH: Maybe make the middle Cs in the LH Ds instead (it's kind of a stretch for the LH but its definitely doable), or somewhere in the RH. There's definitely a D in this chord though.
• m4 RH: The Eb should be a D# (G7#5, or augmented 7th chord).
• m8 RH: The Eb should be a D# (same reason as m4), and the D natural below it sounds more like its played on beat 4 instead of beat 3.5.
• m10 & m26: The Abs should be G#s (E7#5 chord), but keep the Cs instead of making them B#s since those are a pain.
• m34 RH: The Ebs should be D#s (another G7#5 chord).

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Quote from: Latios212 on December 15, 2019, 04:49:44 PM129a - Contest: Results Announcement (Duet) - FireArrow
I went and updated this since FireArrow is busy. Changes sound good; in addition to the above in m. 8 I took out the D since it's pretty faint, in m. 11 I added a courtesy natural on the G, and in the last measure I changed Eb to D#.

Quote from: Onionleaf on September 22, 2019, 02:21:50 AMHi Static, sorry for the delay, I've made all the changes with just one query added in blue above.

I can have another look at this sheet sometime next week if that will help? It's been a while since I've edited it, so may be worth for me to do an extra self-review.

Link to file (https://www.dropbox.com/s/lalguvi6h0e7frn/Oreburgh%20Gate%20x.musx?dl=0)

Quote from: Libera on December 15, 2019, 05:25:57 PMHey Onionleaf.  Sorry for not getting back to you sooner but I think this sheet probably has some ways to go before it can be accepted (longer than the project deadline) so I hope it's alright if you put this into regular submissions (if you want to that is).  If you have any concerns do let us know, and sorry again for taking a while to respond on this one.

Quote from: Onionleaf on September 22, 2019, 02:21:50 AMYep, the note is 4 beats long, with the other 2 beats being in the very last measure of the piece. I hope that's appropriate?
Link to file (https://www.dropbox.com/s/lalguvi6h0e7frn/Oreburgh%20Gate%20x.musx?dl=0)

Quote from: Libera on December 16, 2019, 11:11:57 AMI managed to finally get one of the replacements we still needed for this finished up (#69).  I've put in in the dropbox.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The A in bar 20 (right hand) should be an A#.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The bracketed left hand notes in 31 onwards aren't present in the orignal, which is, I assume, why you have bracketed them.  But I'm not sure why they're there at all?

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The Eb and Gb in bar 2 make more sense as D# and F# (E9 chord) and also helps to avoid concurrent Ebs and Ens.  This goes for bar 6 as well.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The chord in bar 12 sounds like an extension of F# t  o me, so the Bb should be written as an A# and I think the Dn is actually a C#.  There's a similar thing going on at bar 28, so change those spellings accordingly (and also change the Bb -> A# and Fn -> E# in the right hand to match).

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The Fn in bar 11 in the left hand should be an E# as it's going into F#.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-Some of the lower ties in bars 1-8 look a little funny.  Maybe flip them or adjust them a little?

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-I think the swing in 'Relaxed Swing' shouldn't be capitalised?

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The B in the left hand of bar 4 sounds like an A# to me.  Seems like it's just a regular F#7 chord rather than any sus stuff going on.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-The chord in bar 16 is A7 rather than Amaj7 although there is a G# in the melody at that point.  So the G# in the chord in the right hand should really be a Gn.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-I think there's also an A# in the left hand chord in bar 20, but if you think that's too many fingers I guess it's alright to leave out.

Quote from: Libera on February 09, 2019, 08:39:40 AM-My favourite thing: http to https.

Quote from: Th3Gavst3r on December 17, 2019, 04:33:36 PM~~~

Quote from: Libera on December 17, 2019, 05:00:23 PMThe only thing I have to add is that the url and subtitle/page number on page 2 aren't aligned to the margins.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 17, 2019, 05:36:40 PM- I'd just suggest aligning the swung eighths with the triplets in m. 4 and 35+ (lmk if I missed anywhere else)

Quote from: Latios212 on December 17, 2019, 05:36:40 PM- The 16th rests appear a bit odd in m. 10/14, since we're in swing here. I get that you want to denote a slight lift between the two notes, but it appears a bit strange in this piece (especially with the lower layer in 14). Feel free to change it or not, though.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 17, 2019, 05:36:40 PM- Some of the slurs are pretty close to the triplet 3s, would recommend nudging them up a bit.

Quote from: Static on July 29, 2019, 12:43:57 PM2nd Check

Battle! (Team Galactic) - JDMEK5

• My only concern is with the accidentals; I feel like a lot of these would technically be flats or double flats instead of naturals. However, what you have is, at least in my opinion, a lot clearer and easier to read, so I'm fine with keeping it as is. If you're fine with that too, I'll accept.

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Quote from: Static on December 15, 2019, 04:46:00 PM46 - Battle! (Team Galactic Commander)
- m3-10: F#s and Ans should be Gbs and Bbbs.
- m35-46 LH: All Ans should be Bbbs.
- m43-46 RH: All sharps/naturals should be flats (Ab minor-ish section).

Quote from: Static on December 15, 2019, 05:24:28 PM65 - Battle! (Team Galactic Boss) - JDMEK5
- I don't know if this is possible to do in Finale, but if you can make those beams over the rests double instead of single, I think that would be good. An 8th note beam over a 16th rest just looks strange to me.
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Quote from: Latios212 on December 19, 2019, 05:36:09 PM69 -The Legendary Pokémon Appears! - Libera

This looks pretty solid, though I feel like some of the chord inversions/octaves don't really fit the original. Specifically:
- Pickup aside, I think the RH chords more resemble this:
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/401094846107877377/657395511183278090/unknown.png
- RH of 12-end would sound heavier down an octave

Quote from: Th3Gavst3r on December 17, 2019, 06:10:23 PMAh yes, more formatting from the dark ages

Quote from: Libera on December 20, 2019, 03:40:02 PMSure I can make those changes.  Files updated.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 09, 2019, 04:40:10 PM119 - Trainers' Eyes Meet (Artist) - Th3Gavst3r
- I think this should be in D major. Compare with how the duet on site looks, though let me know if you think there are any mistakes there.
- I'd recommend getting rid of the 8vb in the left hand, as this makes the chords sound muddy as well as make the cross-staffed part near the end impossible to reach

Quote from: Latios212 on December 09, 2019, 04:40:10 PM- I'd recommend getting rid of the 8vb in the left hand, as this makes the chords sound muddy as well as make the cross-staffed part near the end impossible to reach

Quote from: Th3Gavst3r on December 17, 2019, 04:33:36 PMNew files:
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/nyu2k94udrgvbvr/AAD95qxm0XMJ_5aVSUebfe-sa?dl=0

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 04, 2020, 11:53:36 AM69 - The Legendary Pokémon Appears!
Only one thing. There should be an m12 in between what is currently m11 and m12 which is essentially a duplicate of m11. That is, the bassline is the same and the whole notes in each are tied together.

Quote from: Latios212 on December 20, 2019, 03:07:52 PMFor JDMEK5:
*Quotes from Static*

Quote from: JDMEK5 on January 04, 2020, 04:07:40 PMBattle! Team Galactic Commander
- Implemented Static's thought in measures 3-10 up to where it was reasoned to be helpful in reading (as in, not completely but partly).
- Implemented the rest of Static's comments.
- Optimized measure 50 for playability
- Cleaned double accidentals between voices in RH in measures 30, 48, and 50
- Removed courtesy accidental in measure 44 RH
- Cleaned spacing on last page
- Rewrote 32nd notes in measure 34 as grace notes for simplicity
- Slurred grace notes throughout
- Fixed near collisions in measures 18 and 41
- Fixed lower page margin

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 04, 2020, 08:02:26 PMteam galactic boss is approved

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 04, 2020, 12:11:49 PMm2 b4 RH - I'd recommend putting in the C# into that chord as the current one doesn't capture the Adim feel of the original.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 04, 2020, 12:11:49 PMm11/13 RH b1-b2 - I'm pretty sure these single 16th notes are played as octaves. If you are strongly against for playability, that's fine. Still, I'd like to have them in there

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 04, 2020, 12:11:49 PMm12 b4.25 RH - There's a C# grace note leading up to this chord here.