Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Yoshi's Cookie
Console: Nintendo Entertainment System
Title: 1P Music Type C
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Jacopo Tore (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4805)
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Hey, Jacob, this is looking pretty good! Love to see some obscure Nintendo games get some love on this site. ;)
What I would suggest is that you look over your counting. You can use this chart to help you:
The Chart
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi.imgur.com%2F5XpuibP.png&hash=288ccf50db7731f7daeebb8d5831dff861e36a8b)
Also, I'm not an expert on copyright, but you should include Nintendo with "Blue Planet Software", and don't forget capitals!
One last thing: you don't have to start a new line for each composer. If you want, you can extend them over about 2-3 lines instead. Just make sure they don't reach too close to the middle!
Feel free to ask questions!
Jacob??
this is cultural erasure and i wont stand for it
Bump
Jacob, for now, don't worry about bumping. Everyone just submitted their arrangements, and it will take the updaters a long time to get through all of them. You're lucky you got any feedback at all this early.
- move the copyright info down a little, and include a comma between Nintendo and Blue Planet Software
- make sure to include an "and" before the last composer
- in the last measure, change the two eighth rests to a quarter rest
Give it a rest. They'll get to you eventually, but to me, it looks pretty good right now. If a month has passed without feedback here, and plenty of other submissions have been accepted, and it looks like an update may be nigh, I'd say it's ok to bump.
Ok thank you for your explanation, I just replace the score.
For fucks sake stop with "jacob"
Quote from: Altissimo on July 22, 2017, 11:52:49 AMFor fucks sake stop with "jacob"
What's wrong with it? No one calls Maelstrom, "Jacob", anyway. You seem a little tense today, Alti.
Also; Jacob; the treble can come down an octave. And check your copyright info; it's still wrong. Let me know if you prefer the title "Jacopo".
It's because it's not "Jacob" it's "Jacopo" and it's really not hard to just say "Jacopo" so there really isn't a reason to be calling him "Jacob".
Quote from: WaluigiTime64 on July 29, 2017, 08:07:29 PMIt's because it's not "Jacob" it's "Jacopo" and it's really not hard to just say "Jacopo" so there really isn't a reason to be calling him "Jacob".
this, thanks bro
Alright, if I'm the only one willing to give feedback here, and not argue about a simple nickname that wasn't meant to be offensive in any way...
If you want, some slurs and staccatos would make it look even more appealing. Also, if you could find a different title for the sheet, that'd be great; no offense, but it isn't really proper-looking or attractive.
Quote from: LeviR.star on July 29, 2017, 07:55:49 PMWhat's wrong with it? No one calls Maelstrom, "Jacob", anyway. You seem a little tense today, Alti.
Also; Jacob; the treble can come down an octave. And check your copyright info; it's still wrong. Let me know if you prefer the title "Jacopo".
What is Treble? If you can translate in Italian I thank you, you did with my name I think it isn't a problem for you, also in the Italian Wikipedia page https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie (https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie) I see Blue Planet Software, are you sure that it isn't correct?
Quote from: JacopoTore on July 31, 2017, 04:26:59 AMWhat is Treble? If you can translate in Italian I thank you, you did with my name I think it isn't a problem for you, also in the Italian Wikipedia page https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie (https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie) I see Blue Planet Software, are you sure that it isn't correct?
Treble is the clef that is generally used in the right hand. More accurately, it places G above middle C on the second-lowest line of the staff.
I will be able to help you with this submission if you wish, especially if you are using Finale Notepad or something that isn't Finale. Submitting on NSM can make it difficult without Finale. :P
If you do have Finale, however, I can walk you through the steps of getting your sheet fixed. Whichever works better for you.
Quote from: JacopoTore on July 31, 2017, 04:26:59 AMWhat is Treble? If you can translate in Italian I thank you, you did with my name I think it isn't a problem for you
Looking around the Italian Wikipedia page (https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chiave_(musica)), the treble clef is the
violino clef, being used with the
chiave di sol (English - G clef) on the second line. Either way, it's the top staff on the piano.
Quotealso in the Italian Wikipedia page https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie (https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie) I see Blue Planet Software, are you sure that it isn't correct?
Blue Planet Software was apparently founded as Bullet-Proof Software, so they're the same company. The English Wikipedia page for Yoshi's Cookie (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie) has Bullet-Proof as the developer. I'm not sure what the NSM policy is about companies that change names, so you should wait until an updater comes by to clear things up. Other than that, the publication information looks pretty good.
I also have a couple miscellaneous suggestions -
- I also agree with Levi about removing the 8va marking. It sounds a bit too high with it.
- It may just be me, but I hear the harmony in m2, 4 as two separate voices. I'd suggest splitting these measures into two voices.
Here's measure 2 -
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi.imgur.com%2FKD4MvJb.png&hash=c676bfb83e3949c665a791d837d9607dc6d706e8) (http://imgur.com/KD4MvJb)
Note: I was ninja'd by Sebastian; this was relevant when JacopoTore last posted.
Quote from: Lkjhgfdsa_77 on July 31, 2017, 06:43:08 AMLooking around the Italian Wikipedia page (https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chiave_(musica)), the treble clef is the violino clef, being used with the chiave di sol (English - G clef) on the second line. Either way, it's the top staff on the piano.
Blue Planet Software was apparently founded as Bullet-Proof Software, so they're the same company. The English Wikipedia page for Yoshi's Cookie (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoshi%27s_Cookie) has Bullet-Proof as the developer. I'm not sure what the NSM policy is about companies that change names, so you should wait until an updater comes by to clear things up. Other than that, the publication information looks pretty good.
I also have a couple miscellaneous suggestions -
- I also agree with Levi about removing the 8va marking. It sounds a bit too high with it.
- It may just be me, but I hear the harmony in m2, 4 as two separate voices. I'd suggest splitting these measures into two voices.
Here's measure 2 -
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi.imgur.com%2FKD4MvJb.png&hash=c676bfb83e3949c665a791d837d9607dc6d706e8) (http://imgur.com/KD4MvJb)
Note: I was ninja'd by Sebastian; this was relevant when JacopoTore last posted.
Ok I did it
Quote from: Lkjhgfdsa_77 on July 31, 2017, 06:43:08 AMI'm not sure what the NSM policy is about companies that change names, so you should wait until an updater comes by to clear things up.
Prolly the name that was used when the game came out.
Quote from: Altissimo on July 31, 2017, 12:33:03 PMProlly the name that was used when the game came out.
yes - whatever the game credits.
Bump
Quote from: LeviR.star on July 21, 2017, 04:13:45 PMJacob, for now, don't worry about bumping. Everyone just submitted their arrangements, and it will take the updaters a long time to get through all of them. You're lucky you got any feedback at all this early.
Give it a rest. They'll get to you eventually, but to me, it looks pretty good right now. If a month has passed without feedback here, and plenty of other submissions have been accepted, and it looks like an update may be nigh, I'd say it's ok to bump.
Look, Jacob, the updaters haven't even gotten to most of the arrangers in submissions yet. Trust me; you'll get your chance.
Let's solve the copyright problem:
https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/264591162315112448/345708575395676177/image.png
Make it look like this; it'll look much better.
Fix that, and I think you'll be good, unless you want those slurs and staccatos I suggested.
STOP CALLING HIM JACOB
It's called a nickname, Mael. I figured that if anyone should be here in this topic, they'd actually be trying to help. If none of you are going to give this guy some actual feedback, then there's no point in being here.
Quote from: WaluigiTime64 on July 29, 2017, 08:07:29 PMIt's because it's not "Jacob" it's "Jacopo" and it's really not hard to just say "Jacopo" so there really isn't a reason to be calling him "Jacob".
Have a cookie.
[MID] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/ght3ze5x10umj5n/1P%20Music%20Type%20C.mid?dl=1) [MUS] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/s754qfjo2ffg8jk/1P%20Music%20Type%20C.mus?dl=1) [PDF] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/fldpbtuf0cqoces/1P%20Music%20Type%20C.pdf?dl=1) [MUSX] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/de5d2fbckewlzts/1P%20Music%20Type%20C.musx?dl=1)
(https://www.dropbox.com/s/l6z4ysp8b0smrbs/Cookie.PNG?dl=1)
Whooooaaaa, BEN. WE'VE MISSED YOU.
In all seriousness, Jacob Jacopo, if Ben's revision is chill with you, consider this sheet accepted.
Wow, that's awesome, Ben! I think this revision should be the last one needed.
@Jacopo: Ben wasn't expecting you to put his name in there. You can just leave yours there alone. Our job as Updaters is to help with sheets and we don't expect our names to be edited in.
Ok I understand it, thanks for your explanation!
Is a problem for you, Ben, if I put your name to?
Quote from: Sebastian on August 12, 2017, 09:11:40 AM@Jacopo: Ben wasn't expecting you to put his name in there. You can just leave yours there alone. Our job as Updaters is to help with sheets and we don't expect our names to be edited in.
Submission fixed (without Ben's name). We ready to go now.
This submission has been accepted by Latios212 (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4344).
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