Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Splatoon
Console: Wii U
Title: DJ Octavio Phase 4 (Squid Sisters)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Yug Guy (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4424)
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zhI-PEIoqoE
This version appears to be ripped from the Squid Beatz minigame from in the game. It's also where I got the name from.
This is ink-redible! Awesome job, man!
wut bout dem sick lyrix boi
Spoiler
Lyrics
Intro portion
You. With me. The moon, the rock around, give it. To me.
You need to hear our song.
Need to, have it,
You need to hallelujah
when I rule when I rule And I fuel the melody
you better kid
Main portion x3
Too many foes,
shouldve shouldve better been with me,
to keep this melody.
Two fellow deeds, your body that cha know i'm a kid,
you're the hero and a squid
bang bang
You. And me. The world.
reach out and give it. To me.
You need to hear our song.
Give it/in. To me.
You need to hallelujah when I rule when I rule
And I fuel the melody you better
Not, give in, to them,
reach out and heed out the air,
you need to hear our song.
Give it/in. To me.
You need to hallelujah when I rule when I rule
And I fuel the melody
you better kid.
*Your current measure distribution needs work. A general guide for this song would be to 4 measure per systems where there are primarily 8th notes, and 2 measures per system where there are those 16th note scale runs. I would suggest 4-4-2-2-2-2-4-4-4-4-4-4.
*Fill in the RH with chords and harmonies when they occur. Measures 1-8 have some other background synths you could incorporate into the RH, and measures 25 to the end have some interesting "2-voice unison" effects that I think you could pianistically adapt as octaves on the melody.
*You spelled the bass of m. 37 as B natural. This should be a Cb. This tone actually occurs diatonically in the key signature of Eb minor, so you don't have to overthink it.
*Might you consider a more.... convincing tempo qualifier than "Driving"? It doesn't have to be Italian, especially a song like this, but maybe something more like "with driving force" or "driving motion" or "driving rhythm".
Quote from: Bespinben on July 20, 2015, 05:16:11 PMwut bout dem sick lyrix boi
7.8/10 Too much water.
Quote from: Bespinben on July 20, 2015, 05:16:11 PM*Your current measure distribution needs work. A general guide for this song would be to 4 measure per systems where there are primarily 8th notes, and 2 measures per system where there are those 16th note scale runs. I would suggest 4-4-2-2-2-2-4-4-4-4-4-4.
I'm afraid I don't quite understand you on this one; what systems are we talking about?
Quote from: Bespinben on July 20, 2015, 05:16:11 PM*Fill in the RH with chords and harmonies when they occur. Measures 1-8 have some other background synths you could incorporate into the RH, and measures 25 to the end have some interesting "2-voice unison" effects that I think you could pianistically adapt as octaves on the melody.
Yeah, after going back and listening, I can hear a bit between measures 1-8 that I'll try to work in. But are you sure about there being anything at measure 25? I know there's stuff starting around measure 33 that I initially decided not to put it in, because I didn't think it would work well. But I'll give it a second look.
Quote from: Bespinben on July 20, 2015, 05:16:11 PM*You spelled the bass of m. 37 as B natural. This should be a Cb. This tone actually occurs diatonically in the key signature of Eb minor, so you don't have to overthink it.
Easy enough fix. :D
Quote from: Bespinben on July 20, 2015, 05:16:11 PM*Might you consider a more.... convincing tempo qualifier than "Driving"? It doesn't have to be Italian, especially a song like this, but maybe something more like "with driving force" or "driving motion" or "driving rhythm".
I could have sworn there has been at least one piece of music I've seen with the tempo just labelled as "Driving." In any case, "With driving force" it will be!
I'll try to get to these tomorrow; it's too late at night right now for me to really get anything done.
Quote from: Yug_Guy on July 20, 2015, 09:21:18 PMI'm afraid I don't quite understand you on this one; what systems are we talking about?
Systems are basically the musical term for lines. I don't know why they can't call them lines, they just don't. Someone correct me if there's a reason its system rather than line. Anyway, I did the measure distribution for you.
MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/7at1gbd1ymk27db/Splatoon%20Final%20Boss%20Final%20Phase%20%281%29.mus?dl=0)
Quote from: cqk328 on July 20, 2015, 09:34:45 PMSystems are basically the musical term for lines. I don't know why they can't call them lines, they just don't. Someone correct me if there's a reason its system rather than line. Anyway, I did the measure distribution for you.
OOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHH I get it. Like the measure distribution on the page. Got it.
I just looked, and apparently Musescore does allow for formatting systems like what you just did, cqk328. That'll come in handy when I import XML files for other arrangements. Thanks!
Update time!
cqk328 helped me with the system formatting, otherwise I did everything Bespinben suggested. There were some synths that I couldn't quite work into the arrangement, so I had to leave them out of a couple of measures.
I really hate to harp on this, but...
QuoteFinale Defaults
- Remove the abbreviation "Pno." to the left of each system. It's redundant to even put that sort of thing on a solo. To remove it, go to the file info/score manager and where it says "abbreviated name", click it and backspace what's there.
- Measure numbers are now required. They should occur naturally, but if it is an issue, select the Document tab at the top, then select "edit measure number regions". When the pop up appears, hit "delete" then "add". This should reset them.
Also, while I welcome your additions, always be mindful of their physical execution. There's an 11th interval in the RH of m. 26 and m. 30.
Another thought -- I think the 8va markings you put in m. 9+ confuse more than they clarify. In a context line this (descending diatonic scales), ledger lines will work just fine.
Quote from: Bespinben on July 23, 2015, 04:02:51 PMI really hate to harp on this, but...
- Remove the abbreviation "Pno." to the left of each system. It's redundant to even put that sort of thing on a solo. To remove it, go to the file info/score manager and where it says "abbreviated name", click it and backspace what's there.
- Measure numbers are now required. They should occur naturally, but if it is an issue, select the Document tab at the top, then select "edit measure number regions". When the pop up appears, hit "delete" then "add". This should reset them.
I use Notepad 2012, and these instructions do not yield any results. I don't think it's possible for me to get rid of them unless I get a paid version. :(
Quote from: Bespinben on July 23, 2015, 04:02:51 PMAlso, while I welcome your additions, always be mindful of their physical execution. There's an 11th interval in the RH of m. 26 and m. 30.
That's why I was hesitant at first to put in any of those extra synths. Some of the background synths got in the way of the melody, and moving it up an octave led to a severe case of hand-stretching. In this particular case, I'm just going to leave it in for consistency's sake.
Quote from: Bespinben on July 23, 2015, 04:02:51 PMAnother thought -- I think the 8va markings you put in m. 9+ confuse more than they clarify. In a context line this (descending diatonic scales), ledger lines will work just fine.
I wasn't quite sure what the opinion was on that kind of thing. I'll change it soon!
Also, don't worry about sounding like a harpy. You're an updater, it's your job to do this. Plus, I really appreciate all the valuable insight you give us newbies! :D
Dude, don't feel afraid to put large intervals in, provided you arpegigate them. It's very, very common in all sorts of music.
Well, there should be some kind of marking indicating how to play it.
In this case it looks perfectly fine to toss that note to the LH.
Updated it with no 8va's, and put the B♭ from measures 26 and 30 into the left hand. The only problem is that I can't beam it, and that the right hand auto-formats the eighth notes to be together. Most of that I'm pretty sure I can't do in Notepad, so hopefully someone is willing to help me out.
Quote from: Bespinben on July 20, 2015, 05:16:11 PMwut bout dem sick lyrix boi
Spoiler
Lyrics
Intro portion
You. With me. The moon, the rock around, give it. To me.
You need to hear our song.
Need to, have it,
You need to hallelujah
when I rule when I rule And I fuel the melody
you better kid
Main portion x3
Too many foes,
shouldve shouldve better been with me,
to keep this melody.
Two fellow deeds, your body that cha know i'm a kid,
you're the hero and a squid
bang bang
You. And me. The world.
reach out and give it. To me.
You need to hear our song.
Give it/in. To me.
You need to hallelujah when I rule when I rule
And I fuel the melody you better
Not, give in, to them,
reach out and heed out the air,
you need to hear our song.
Give it/in. To me.
You need to hallelujah when I rule when I rule
And I fuel the melody
you better kid.
Did you get that from PALogy?
I took the time to THOROUGHLY spot-check your transcription, but I had to stop after the first 8 measures. This is the correct transcription:
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi1111.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fh475%2FBespinben%2Foctavio%2520notes_zps82nsfpzh.jpg&hash=0ef10290353739e17c2bf9c17b7ef47f89e0ab11) (http://s1111.photobucket.com/user/Bespinben/media/octavio%20notes_zps82nsfpzh.jpg.html)
Review m. 33+ as well -- it's similarly afflicted.
Updated.
Quote from: Bespinben on July 28, 2015, 09:08:54 PMI took the time to THOROUGHLY spot-check your transcription, but I had to stop after the first 8 measures. This is the correct transcription.
Review m. 33+ as well -- it's similarly afflicted.
How exactly is it afflicted? Are the notes wrong? Are the fingerings inconsistent? Is the formatting wrong? Is it all three?
Hey! Sorry for dropping the ball on this one.
While the following is a fairly liberal arrangement of the song, I think it might be useful to consider it for playability considerations (like fingerings), and perhaps even draw inspiration from the player's choices of accompaniment, texture, and chord voicings.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jZ7hMZ21F5Q
While I can certainly take care of fingerings/dynamics/articulation/etc., I'm a little bit concerned about the actual notes and as to whether or not they are accurate. Mainly because, I thought I had all the notes from measures 1-8 all figured out, until you came along and corrected me.
I'm usually more concerned about a piece being as accurate as possible with transcribing the music & notes exactly rather than worrying about extra frills or ornaments to the overall piece. While I would love to be able to do this, I don't think I'm advanced enough music theory-wise to recognize and implement that sort of thing.
(Though I do like the idea of playing octaves in the left hand; that'll be my first addition.)
I edited your sheet a bit: https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/24842881/Splatoon.zip
Among the things I did was:
formatting
made the arrangement fit on 2 pages
measure 12-13, put some notes an octave higher for the sake of playability.
26 and 30, rebeamed some notes to make it more clear that they are melody notes that are supposed to be played in the left hand.
Thanks, Tobbeh! Don't know what I'd do without ya. ;)
*coughcough*
Not gonna let this one fall to the bottom!
Bump
I'm really sorry guys, but I really want to get this one done. I don't even really care about Bubsy (thus why it's on the fourth page), just this one.
The tempo marker got un-capitalized. Fix that real quick ;) Also, if your version of Finale allows it, use Special Tools to move the half note of the LH in m. 7 beat 1 over to the right by a few clicks -- this way, the vertical stem doesn't collide with the whole notes in the other layer.
I was able to update the tempo marking, but my version of Finale does not have a special tools option. :(
Would someone be so kind as to fix the note in measure 7 for me?
Which version do you have?
Here (https://www.dropbox.com/s/cf7fisn13s9e1ef/Splatoon%20Final%20Boss%20Final%20Phase.mus?dl=1)
This submission has been accepted by Bespinben (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=2510).
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