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Title: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Zeta on June 15, 2018, 07:24:01 AM
Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Sweet Home
Console: Nintendo Entertainment System
Title: West Island
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Rwars (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=5243)

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Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Rwars on June 15, 2018, 07:24:25 AM
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Sebastian on June 15, 2018, 07:39:02 AM
Nice work! I'll double check the notes when I get home.

One thing I noticed formatting-wise: You don't have a dynamic. :P
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Olimar12345 on June 15, 2018, 09:36:41 AM
Nice Bob, job. Just a fre things:
-Composer/arranger names are not right aligned (they're off a bit). Also lower them a tad so that they're below the title and subtitle, like the picture in the Formatting Guidelines.
-I recommend getting rid of the large left margin. It's unnecessarily large, and you could utilize that spacing in your notation.
-Measure 13, 15, and 16's F naturals should be E#s. The harmony is D# minor, making E# the diatonic second scale degree (rather than F natural being the double-lowered third).
-Measure 14 and 16's C naturals should be B#s. The harmony is A#m13, making B# again the diatonic second scale degree, or the 9th.
-And yes, like Seb said you will need a dynamic marking. Probably mezzo piano or something similar.

This file contains the changes: https://www.dropbox.com/s/60za94ceq1tcl0x/westisland12345.mus?dl=1
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Rwars on June 15, 2018, 10:09:24 AM
Quote from: Olimar12345 on June 15, 2018, 09:36:41 AM-Composer/arranger names are not right aligned (they're off a bit). Also lower them a tad so that they're below the title and subtitle, like the picture in the Formatting Guidelines.
-I recommend getting rid of the large left margin. It's unnecessarily large, and you could utilize that spacing in your notation.
-Measure 13, 15, and 16's F naturals should be E#s. The harmony is D# minor, making E# the diatonic second scale degree (rather than F natural being the double-lowered third).
-Measure 14 and 16's C naturals should be B#s. The harmony is A#m13, making B# again the diatonic second scale degree, or the 9th.
-And yes, like Seb said you will need a dynamic marking. Probably mezzo piano or something similar.
Added dynamics, fixed spelling and margins, and lowered names.
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Olimar12345 on June 15, 2018, 10:15:15 AM
You forgot to change the F natural in measure 16 to an E#. Also, remove the s from the https in the url.
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Rwars on June 15, 2018, 10:34:12 AM
Quote from: Olimar12345 on June 15, 2018, 10:15:15 AMYou forgot to change the F natural in measure 16 to an E#. Also, remove the s from the https in the url.
Double fixed.
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Sebastian on June 15, 2018, 03:19:36 PM
I approve. More nice work, Rwars! : )
Title: Re: [NES] Sweet Home - "West Island" by Rwars
Post by: Zeta on June 15, 2018, 03:19:41 PM
This submission has been accepted by Sebastian (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=3424).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot