Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Undertale
Console: PC
Title: Release Trailer - Nintendo Switch
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Olimar12345 (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=83)
Bump
Good sheet! Some small comments:
- It sounds like there are some grace notes leading up to beat 1 of m8 in the RH that aren't in the sheet.
- There's also a grace note on beat 3 of m18, RH.
- IMO beat 3 of m23 in the RH should be an eighth note, not a quarter note. But the grace notes take up the last bit of the beat anyway so it doesn't really matter.
- In m34-37, there's a bell/chime part in the background that strikes half notes. I think incorporating it would make the phrase more dynamic so that the bass isn't the only moving line.
- Minor nitpick, but for the first time signature, you use a comma while for the second you use parentheses. Is there any reason not to keep the two consistent?
I'll have to check out the note questions later, but I can answer some of these now:
-m34-37 I initially tried to add part of that in but it didn't work very well. I'll check it out again later.
-The tempo markings are different because one is a change of tempo and one is an initial tempo marking. They could be written differently, but that's why I did what I did.
Okay, here we go:
-Measure 8 has no grace notes. You're hearing the percussion, which does have a sort of pick-up into that bar.
-Added at 18.
-Eighth at 23 sounds accurate.
-I added the chime part back in (and noticed that I had left everything in the second layer in my previous version, oops)
-See my previous comment about the tempo displays.
Files will be up momentarily
Also, @ Updaters: If it wouldn't be too much trouble, could I get the standard version of this sheet uploaded as well? (it's here (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=4561.msg404821#msg404821)) They are literally the exact same sheet with the exception of the 8 bar introduction. I've even gone ahead and updated that sheet with the above changes too.
Looks pretty fine to me, although I'd suggest moving all the music down on page 2 away from the header, there's ample space to. That, and perhaps connect the beams between m. 17 beats 3 and 4 LH like they are everywhere else. Also is there a reason the eighth rests aren't at a consistent height in m. 34-37?
Quote from: Olimar12345 on September 30, 2018, 04:21:20 PMAlso, @ Updaters: If it wouldn't be too much trouble, could I get the standard version of this sheet uploaded as well? (it's here (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=4561.msg404821#msg404821)) They are literally the exact same sheet with the exception of the 8 bar introduction. I've even gone ahead and updated that sheet with the above changes too.
Eh sure why not just toss it in as a submission and I'll approve of it.
Quote from: Latios212 on September 30, 2018, 04:47:54 PMEh sure why not just toss it in as a submission and I'll approve of it.
I think he means without making a separate submission since they're basically the same sheet
The NSM Panel automates uploading sheets to the site when we post an update, so manually uploading and editing the update would be more work than a separate topic. I took that as a "hey do you guys mind if I just slip this in here"
But that would take up his second submission slot for the update
At least, that's how I'm reading it
Both sheets have been updated.
Cool
Quote from: Latios212 on September 30, 2018, 04:47:54 PM(...) perhaps connect the beams between m. 17 beats 3 and 4 LH like they are everywhere else.
This though?
I addressed that in the updated sheet. They're disconnected, like everywhere else in the sheet.
(https://i.imgur.com/AH6RWjf.jpg)
(https://memegenerator.net/img/images/15300528/confused-will-smith.jpg)
Wrong measure. I connected that since apparently that is extremely important.
I would highly appreciate it if you stopped being so snarky.
Anyway, looks good
Yeah, yeah.
This submission has been accepted by Brassman388 (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=521).
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