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Title: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Zeta on June 01, 2020, 04:11:39 PM
Submission Information:

Series: Super Smash Bros.
Game: Super Smash Bros. Brawl
Console: Nintendo Wii
Title: Target Smash!!
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: amc (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5519)

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Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: amc on June 01, 2020, 04:11:59 PM
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Latios212 on June 17, 2020, 04:58:10 PM
- I think the whole note G in m. 9/19 would be better split into quarters...
- Courtesy flat should be removed in m. 10/20
- Measure 10/20 beat 1 (RH) might be better with another note or two underneath it to give it more punch
- Measure 29 should have a dynamic between the cresc. and dim. indicating how loud to get in the middle
- Any way we could fit this on two pages? I think you could make do with making m. 3-10 a repeat section with m. 11-12 as the first ending and m. 21+ as the second.

Nice work!
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: amc on June 18, 2020, 08:00:56 PM
Updated. Couldn't get the first ending to play the second time. Is there anything I can do about that?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Latios212 on June 19, 2020, 07:52:25 PM
Neat. Not sure if there's a neater way but this should work:
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/401094846107877377/723731595311448154/unknown.png

Aside from that, I think it would be good to have a double barline at the DC and raise the DC text up a bit. Everything else looks good!
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: amc on June 19, 2020, 08:14:37 PM
Updated.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Latios212 on June 19, 2020, 08:54:59 PM
Ah to be clear, use "1, 3" as the ending number for playback, but the sheet should just say 1 to avoid any confusion for the performer. (See text boxes in my image)
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: amc on June 20, 2020, 06:35:15 AM
Updated.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Latios212 on June 20, 2020, 06:16:54 PM
Great! Approved :)
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Libera on June 22, 2020, 09:35:05 AM
Generally looks pretty good!  Did Nobuo Uematsu actually compose this?  I know he did the main theme that it's based off of but I wasn't aware he'd done any of the other tracks in Brawl.

With regards to the arrangement, the one thing I'd suggest is changing the bass note in the chords for bars 3-4 to an En, like this:
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https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/492809359961882625/724662934030254090/unknown.png
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My reasoning is that those two bars are lighter on the bass compared to the pattern in all the other bars, but if you keep the bass note as a C like you have you lose the contrast that those two bars give in the original.  Also, you're missing the En anyway so there's no harm in adding it.  You could also add the En in for all of the other offbeat dyads, but I assume that you thought it'd be too annoying to play like that, which is fair enough.

Everything else checks out, although I need to fix some articulations afterwards I think.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: amc on June 22, 2020, 09:58:31 AM
Updated.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Libera on June 22, 2020, 11:43:43 AM
Looks good!  While I was fixing the v26 articulations I also noticed that the url, mini title and page number weren't correctly aligned to the margins so I fixed that also, which I hope is alright with you.

Accepting now!
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Target Smash!!" by amc
Post by: Zeta on June 22, 2020, 11:43:50 AM
This submission has been accepted by Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot