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Title: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: Zeta on June 26, 2020, 04:08:23 PM
Submission Information:

Series: Undertale
Game: Deltarune
Console: PC
Title: Friendship
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: mastersuperfan (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=3561)

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Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: mastersuperfan on June 26, 2020, 04:08:57 PM
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: Latios212 on June 27, 2020, 07:50:54 AM
Awesome sheet! Just a few minor things.

- I'd suggest moving all the systems down on page 2-3 - you have some extra space down on the bottom and the header would like a bit more space
- Finale tends to put the 1./2. ending numbers a bit far to the right... they'd be better above the beat 1 notes
- It looks like the vertical line to the left of the 2. doesn't perfectly overlap the vertical bar of ending 1....
- Page 3 number is a bit high
- The last melody notes in m. 22 should be flipped downwards
- m. 39 beat 1 melody is missing a grace note C# before it
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: mastersuperfan on June 27, 2020, 06:52:56 PM
It has been done.
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: Latios212 on June 27, 2020, 08:29:57 PM
neato!
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: Libera on June 30, 2020, 02:34:34 PM
Arrangement looks good, just a few things.

-Url, page numbers and minititles aren't aligned to the margins.
-I think pages 2-3 would look neater if the distribution of the systems was more consistent between the two of them.  Right now, page 2 has all five systems lower down than the corresponding systems on page 3, which gives that 2-page spread a bit of a lop-sided look.
-The E on beat 2.5 in bar 42 (RH) is the same note as the one on beat 3 in the left hand.  The synth that plays the rest of the melody doesn't come in until the C# on beat 3, so I think it'd be better to move the left hand E back a quaver and remove the E in the right hand.  At any rate, regardless of the voicing, there is no restrike of the E on beat 3 (at least not that I can hear anyway).
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: mastersuperfan on June 30, 2020, 02:55:34 PM
Quote from: Libera on June 30, 2020, 02:34:34 PM-The E on beat 2.5 in bar 42 (RH) is the same note as the one on beat 3 in the left hand.  The synth that plays the rest of the melody doesn't come in until the C# on beat 3, so I think it'd be better to move the left hand E back a quaver and remove the E in the right hand.  At any rate, regardless of the voicing, there is no restrike of the E on beat 3 (at least not that I can hear anyway).

Good point—I was treating it like m7. Fixed.

Finale told me that everything was already aligned except for the mini-title, but I went ahead and re-aligned them all anyway.

How does the system distribution look now?
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: Libera on June 30, 2020, 03:07:04 PM
Yep, everything looks better now.  Just got the articulations for you and will now accept!
Title: Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Friendship" by mastersuperfan
Post by: Zeta on June 30, 2020, 03:07:58 PM
This submission has been accepted by Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot