Submission Information:
Series: Kid Icarus
Game: Kid Icarus
Console: Nintendo Entertainment System
Title: Game Over
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Yugikun (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=3253)
Found this in my old arrangement thread! Didn't take too long to fix back up.
Welcome back Yugi!
It's short but there's a few things to fix before we're good to go :)
- The key signature should be three sharps (A major; A is the tonic here).
- The dotted eighth notes are played shorter in the original - as such I think they'd be better as (8th note + 16th rest).
- The first LH note in the second measure is actually an E below the A you have written.
- Beats 1-3 in the RH of the second measure are harmonized as major thirds - they should have A, Bb, and A underneath respectively. (The A# in the left hand should also be spelled as Bb).
- The last RH note sounds like an E below, and may be better written in the left hand part. Or you should just write the whole second measure's RH part in bass clef.
Made all requested changes (and also added dynamics since I seemed to have forgotten them)! Kept right hand in treble clef because Finale proceeded to act super weird when I tried changing it to bass clef — transposed the notes down to their thirds but still made them sound the same in playback.
Cool, sounds good! The last thing I have to say note-wise is that I don't think the last R in the right hand is actually there, it just sounds like the two notes in the left hand.
Formatting-wise, this has a little neatening up to do. Can you give this topic (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=10719.0) a read and update the sheet accordingly so the music and text are properly aligned on the page? Also, the tempo marking should be expression text (using the Expression Tool, just like the dynamics) rather than just text.
Made all requested changes, I think!
Looks good! The title is still outside the top margin, so that height needs to be set to 0 and the subtitle moved down accordingly too. The composer info also needs to be right aligned.
Other than that though it's got my approval. Thanks! :)