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Title: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Zeta on August 24, 2015, 05:37:07 AM
Submission Information:

Series: Super Smash Bros.
Game: Super Smash Bros. Brawl
Console: Nintendo Wii
Title: Victory! (Star Fox)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: LifeMushroom (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4236)

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Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 24, 2015, 05:37:37 AM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7svaJdRF8hw
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 11:53:31 AM
Added a glissando on the G chord and accents on the last two eighth notes.

Does anyone think this should be an octave higher?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 11:59:16 AM
You're going to have to name all the composers. "SSBB Team" is not gonna fly.

Quote from: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 11:53:31 AMAdded a glissando on the G chord and accents on the last two eighth notes.

Does anyone think this should be an octave higher?
Yes an octave higher please.

And that's not a glissando what you put on. What you want is a trill but what you put on was a mordent. I suggest multiple voices. I'll demonstrate what I mean:
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi1147.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fo555%2FJDMEK5%2FCapture_3.png&hash=2a3b2d15c422ee6cde2ab6d77c613a9e0d2c6bf2)
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 12:06:27 PM
Quote from: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 11:59:16 AMYou're going to have to name all the composers. "SSBB Team" is not gonna fly.
There are way too many composers. I did that with my previous two Victory theme submissions, and everyone was fine with it.

Now it's an octave higher. I didn't really like the trill when I put it in so I left it out.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 12:25:03 PM
Quote from: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 12:06:27 PMThere are way too many composers. I did that with my previous two Victory theme submissions, and everyone was fine with it.
Oh really? Hm. Alrighty then. I guess that's a very fair point XD

Quote from: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 12:06:27 PMNow it's an octave higher. I didn't really like the trill when I put it in so I left it out.
You mean you didn't like how the playback sounded? Cuz irl it'll sound infinitely better I guarantee you.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: mikey on August 29, 2015, 12:27:14 PM
Quote from: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 12:25:03 PMYou mean you didn't like how the playback sounded? Cuz irl it'll sound infinitely better I guarantee you.
^ Finale playback is notorious for this sort of thing
I usually save it as a midi and open it in WMP cause that often sounds a little better
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: skiaak on August 29, 2015, 12:28:08 PM
Try exporting to Musescore. The trills and stuff can playback now in 2.0.2, I believe.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 12:29:29 PM
The point is, if it sounds good in real life, keep it. It doesn't really matter if it sounds crappy in Finale cuz that's not the end goal.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Brawler4Ever on August 29, 2015, 12:31:24 PM
It sounds to me like the last B natural in the first measure should be a 16th note, followed by an A flat (another 16th note), instead of just the B natural 8th note.

Like this (https://www.dropbox.com/s/0kbp37c5iqu14el/Victory%21%20%28Star%20Fox%29%20%281%29.mus?dl=0).
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 12:31:40 PM
The trill lasted too long. That's why I didn't like it.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 12:33:03 PM
Quote from: Brawler4Ever on August 29, 2015, 12:31:24 PMIt sounds to me like the last B natural in the first measure should be a 16th note, followed by an A flat (another 16th note), instead of just the B natural 8th note.
Yeah, just noticed that. I'll fix it! Bob the Builder All rights reserved.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Tobbeh99 on August 29, 2015, 12:35:36 PM
This arrangement is really good but I have some suggestions for making it even better:

1) There is a second violin/viola voice that you're missing, might try add it.

2) The harp arpeggios in measure 2. I think those could add great value to the arrangement since you got a crescendo there too. Put them in the LH in a suitable octave.

3) measure 3: maybe add an octave to that G. It's a bit weird having chords just before and a crescendo, but then after ending on a single note. An octave feels more natural and adds some dynamic to the accent. An octave on the second, low G doesn't hurt either, but this time an octave above.

btw funny thing: "6 new replies while I was typing this post" (wtf?)
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 12:37:07 PM
Quote from: LifeMushroom on August 29, 2015, 12:31:40 PMThe trill lasted too long. That's why I didn't like it.
Well then do something like this:
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi1147.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fo555%2FJDMEK5%2FCapture_4.png&hash=838f3f83862a3e51d90e6486ce17020eae561e9d)

There's always a way.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Tobbeh99 on August 29, 2015, 01:08:15 PM
Quote from: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 12:37:07 PMWell then do something like this:
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi1147.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fo555%2FJDMEK5%2FCapture_4.png&hash=838f3f83862a3e51d90e6486ce17020eae561e9d)

There's always a way.

Ahh y, I had that problem in one of my sheets Wild Arms - "Adlehyde Castle". My solution was to put a tr expression and the manually put curved line so that it looked the actual one, very tedious however.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 30, 2015, 05:16:44 PM
Quote from: Tobbeh99 on August 29, 2015, 12:35:36 PMThis arrangement is really good but I have some suggestions for making it even better:

1) There is a second violin/viola voice that you're missing, might try add it.

2) The harp arpeggios in measure 2. I think those could add great value to the arrangement since you got a crescendo there too. Put them in the LH in a suitable octave.

3) measure 3: maybe add an octave to that G. It's a bit weird having chords just before and a crescendo, but then after ending on a single note. An octave feels more natural and adds some dynamic to the accent. An octave on the second, low G doesn't hurt either, but this time an octave above.

btw funny thing: "6 new replies while I was typing this post" (wtf?)
1) I'll try.
2) I dunno if I can, but I'll try. :P
3) I actually think the song sounds better on the low G. If you listen to the song, you can hear that the low G is very short, and accented, and feels like a closure.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on August 29, 2015, 12:37:07 PMWell then do something like this:
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi1147.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fo555%2FJDMEK5%2FCapture_4.png&hash=838f3f83862a3e51d90e6486ce17020eae561e9d)

There's always a way.
Where do I get the squiggly thing?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: skiaak on August 30, 2015, 05:38:26 PM
I agree. The low G definitely sounds like a good closure, but I dunno about the squiggly thing?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 30, 2015, 06:45:17 PM
The "squiggly thing" is a trill and you'll find it in the Smart Shape Palette. Of course, that depends. Which version of Finale are you on?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on August 31, 2015, 09:40:24 AM
2012. There's a tr symbol, and a short squiggly symbol.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 31, 2015, 10:02:31 AM
Use the tr. Tr is for trill and double click and drag to the right overtop of the note. You'll understand once you try it.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on September 10, 2015, 05:05:05 PM
I'm not really sure what to do on this sheet now.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: skiaak on September 11, 2015, 03:57:07 PM
Is it ready for the updaters?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Bespinben on September 11, 2015, 04:11:12 PM
As has been discussed before, this song is not G minor, nor G major, but in fact, G mixolydian.

(This post can be found in the Archives -- http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?topic=3814.msg178422#msg178422)
Quote
Quote[GCN] Super Smash Bros. Melee:
"Fox's Victory":
[MUS] [MIDI] [PDF]
Hey, I'm gonna be super picky about your choice of key signature.

This is actually in G mixolydian mode! That is why it's really hard to tell. it's neither major nor minor. <: One clue is that it starts and ends in a g major chords, yet it sounds in a different mode. The seven is flat, which is why you see a lot of f natural when you would assume there would be an f sharp. Because this is in g mixolydian mode, this would preferably be written as if it was in c major. :P
Now the chord in the 2nd major may bring skepticism. The e flat chord in first inversion is a flat sixth chord (VIb) of the g major scale. It borrows from its supposedly minor counterpart. That chord is not really in the scale so it has nothing to do with the key signature. It just adds flavor to the music!

Feel free to argue against me fellow music theorist. haha

Now for the samus victory theme, it does indeed end in a picardy third. <: It is totally in d minor.

I apologize if I am sounding egotistical...I just never got to use my music theory knowledge outside the classroom. So yes, this is the cool stuff you learn when you go to music school!
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on September 12, 2015, 05:56:05 AM
Updated the mus file. Is it okay?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Tobbeh99 on September 12, 2015, 06:00:05 AM
You missed a flat on the lower note in the Eb chord.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on September 12, 2015, 04:13:09 PM
fixed
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on September 15, 2015, 03:20:16 PM
Is this ready for submission?
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Bespinben on September 15, 2015, 03:56:45 PM
Your PDF file is still the old one.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on September 15, 2015, 05:51:02 PM
All updated now! :)
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Bespinben on September 15, 2015, 10:12:16 PM
I hate to be the king of nitpick but:

*Your copyright info is EXTREMELY close to the bottom page margin. It's generally a good idea to keep the distance of the top margin equal to that of the bottom margin.
*The "arranged by" info isn't right-aligned like it should be.
*The title seems to be skewed slightly to the right. Make sure you assign that text be centered.
*Check your font sizes. The composer info shouldn't be larger than the arranger info or the subtitle.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: LifeMushroom on September 16, 2015, 03:40:23 AM
Done.

The font sizes were already the same though. They were all 12.
Title: Re: [Wii] Super Smash Bros. Brawl - "Victory! (Star Fox)" by LifeMushroom
Post by: Zeta on September 16, 2015, 03:58:17 AM
This submission has been accepted by Bespinben (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=2510).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot