Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: New Super Mario Bros. Wii
Console: Nintendo Wii
Title: Castle
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: skiaak (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4688)
Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mus/829) | MIDI (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mid/829) | PDF (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/829)
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
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Again, excellent song! I'm very glad how good you are this early in NSM life :P
Some feedback:
- The name is "Castle". Unfortunately, you can't change the name with replacements. Only Updaters can.
- You have the page size set at 67% which is way to small. It is wise to never go below 80%.....then it's too small to read :P
- Remember to watch your accidentals.
Here are some rules to help you (quote from Olimar):
1. Look at the harmony and analyze the chord (use an F# instead of a Gb if it's a D chord.)
2. Look at the motion of the melody. If it's going upward, use sharps, if it's moving downward, use flats.
3. If all else fails, just make it easier to read.
- In measures 11 - 17, you should use layers so you can hold those notes throughout the whole measure.
- The 16th notes in measure 27+ could use a little tuning up.
- The formatting needs some work. You can use a template to save the hassle.
Again, here is file with the above changes (XML, MUS, PDF, & MIDI):
https://www.dropbox.com/s/wvvtby6ws9a9epl/New%20Super%20Mario%20Bros.%20Wii%20-%20Castle.pdf?dl=1
https://www.dropbox.com/s/8n6mvz5q0drduap/New%20Super%20Mario%20Bros.%20Wii%20-%20Castle.xml?dl=1
https://www.dropbox.com/s/aq7j3g4lw8xglhy/New%20Super%20Mario%20Bros.%20Wii%20-%20Castle.mid?dl=1
https://www.dropbox.com/s/mitnso772929cer/New%20Super%20Mario%20Bros.%20Wii%20-%20Castle.mus?dl=1
Please tell me if there is anything you disagree with :)
Great Job!
This one I see some things I want to change back, which I will do later. I don't get why you put double flats on a chord, that makes my eyes water...
Quote from: skiaak on September 19, 2015, 04:16:04 PMI don't get why you put double flats on a chord, that makes my eyes water...
Because that is correct. An E flat diminished chord has a double flat in it.
Spoiler
(https://www.basicmusictheory.com/img/e-flat-diminished-chord-on-treble-clef.png)
You don't have to put "not ready" :P
I'm starting to work on this, though the changes may take a couple of days, since I don't have too much time. Although MLF, your ideas spurred some new ideas of mine, also. :)
I finally got Finale Notepad after I waited like forever! I updated the OP again.
- You have slurs clashing against notes
- No title on second or third pages
- BPM is 127
- All sheet info is way to far down. How I had it was fine.
- The copyright info is clashing with the bottom of the page.
- You should be able to get all this on one page.....like I had it.
I'll give you more feedback when I get on my computer and can take a closer look/
Sorry, if you could edit that for me in a MUS, PDF, and MID that would be great, plus please tell me how to fix those things in Notepad (sorry I don't know how).
Sure thing!
Sorry about my slowness on this one. I'll get to those fixes you want ASAP!
The underground one also needs to be fixed. Remember to get the files from the OP. And please just edit the metronome and the stuff clashing, thanks.
Of course!
Quote from: skiaak on September 20, 2015, 04:29:41 PMSorry, if you could edit that for me in a MUS, PDF, and MID that would be great, plus please tell me how to fix those things in Notepad (sorry I don't know how).
A lot of this stuff you can't fix in notepad. I re-edited it for you. You can just edit these files into the NSM panel (This is a Zip file with a XML, MUS, PDF, MUSX, & MIDI):
https://www.dropbox.com/s/0ccb97s19fvaw8n/New%20Super%20Mario%20Bros.%20Wii%20-%20Castle.zip?dl=1
Thanks, I will fix the files into the panel at home.
Awesome!
Yeah, notepad is really bad :/ It changes the formatting immensely.
Files reedited.
So, is this one ready to go?
While a noble effort was made, the accidental spellings were still wonky. I edited the OP with the correct spellings, which I will detail below for your benefit:
*Measure 12, while enharmonically equivalent to Eb dim, does not function as such. Measure 13 is a Gm chord, so therefore we can determine that m. 12 is an F#dim7 chord that has a leading tone IAC into Gm. The result -- the RH, beat 1, needed to spelled as Eb, F#, A, Eb.
*Measure 16, had an A# that needed to be respelled as a Bb. This is because the following measure was an A7 chord, and having m. 16 spelled as C#dim7 was most logical for reasons of voice leading (Bb -> A) and chord progression (C#dim7 is essentially an A7b9 minus the root).
*Measure 18 functions as a secondary dominant D major leading into measure 19's G minor. It's the classic V--> I motion, but more precisely V/v --> v. With this understanding, the A# needed to be respelled as Bb.
This submission has been accepted by Bespinben (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=2510).
~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot