Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Splatoon
Console: Wii U
Title: Splattack!
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: BrainyLucario (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4742)
I need the Metronome marking to be 175 but i can't seem to add that to the mus file
Edit: I also noticed that the pdf does not work...... Does anyone know how to convert mus files to pdf files?
For future reference with submitting things, always including a YouTube link in the comments below the OP to give the mods and mupdaters an easier time and so the people who've never heard the song can kinda have an idea as to what they're seeing in your sheets.
Edit: Ok, I see I'll need to help you with the BPM markings and such. I'll get to that ASAP.
Edit 2:
Here's some feedback-
-Concerning the title, it needs to be bold type along with composer name, and the game name and arranger name need to be italicized (I'm pretty sure the game name is Splatoon w/o the "s", but I may be wrong)
-It seems as though there is an absence of dynamic markings; you need at least one
-Measure 12 looks a bit messy; see if there's anyway you can make it a bit cleaner and easier to read
-Correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm pretty sure you can't have a half note in the middle of a measure (such as in m5, 7, 9, 11 (all RH), and others), and similarly, you mustn't have a dotted quarter note like that (m40 LH); change it to an eighth tied to a quarter
-m53 and 55-64: I'm pretty sure you meant legato markings (referred to as slurs) where those ties are. While the two are similar in structure, they serve two different purposes and shouldn't be used interchangeably.
That's all I saw in a quick run-through of the piece, if there's more, I apologize for not seeing it. If I'm wrong on anything, it'd be appreciated for someone to notify me as such.
Nice Arrangement!
Here I made a mus (https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/24842881/Splattack%21.zip) with good formatting so we have that out of the way; use the template on this thread (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?topic=481.0) next time.
there is one frequent error I see:
The song goes in 4/4 which have 1 and 3 as the strong beats. You have to have a note on the 3rd beat, there are many times where you have a quarter note on the up-beat of the 2nd beat, like 3 8th notes and one quarter note. For example in measure 3, as you can see 3 8th notes followed by a quarter note. The correct way of writing this is by using ties, like 4 8th notes and the last one tied to a half note or what ever note value you want. Sometimes you have done correctly however, measure 10 is one example where you have used ties to show the 3rd beat.
also measure 44: make the layer beam opposite: red notes upwards black downwards, so they doesn't collide.
There are a lot of stuff concerning the music that needs to be checked but I'll return later with that. One thing however, measure 37, I'm pretty sure the melody plays C-A-C-A, rather than C-A-B-A, just all the other times.
Also feel free too take inspiration from my arrangement on the E3 version of Splattack!, you can find it on the main site.
PDF has been updated thabks to the help of E. Gadd Industries!!! It should work now..
Definitely get on those changes that Tobbeh suggested. Those things alone would do wonders for this arrangement.
Fixed E. Gadd's corrections
How exactly do i make the layer beam opposite? I have Notepad so i am kind of disabled. ???
Those C sharps in 15 and 19 shoud be Ds.
Also, somewhere in between 29 and 32 there is a point of bass-melody non-agreement.
Quote from: BrainyLucario on December 22, 2015, 08:48:40 PMHow exactly do i make the layer beam opposite? I have Notepad so i am kind of disabled. ???
I think you can just use the letter L as a shortcut
yeah, "L" is for "flip"
"P" is for "courtesy accidental"
Nocturne, are you sure you know how the alphabet works?
Fixed ShadowChords corrections....
Pdf is not updated... E Gadd helps me with that
Quote from: Zeila on December 22, 2015, 09:15:34 PMI think you can just use the letter L as a shortcut
And how would i do that? Bear with me everyone... I really have not gotten used to notepad yet.
Just select the note and press 'L' specifically. There's a difference between lower and uppercase
Quote from: Zeila on December 22, 2015, 11:38:03 PMJust select the note and press 'L' specifically. There's a difference between lower and uppercase
I had no idea that was even possible :o :o
There are plenty of other Hotkeys/shortcuts including cross staffing, transposing (it's useful for raising things up or down an octave), and etc. so you should look into that
.Mus file has been sucessfully changed to fit Tobbeh's suggestions.
Pdf will not be updated until later since E. Gadd is catching Zzzz's
Wait, I thought you said the version I made was completely fixed. Yeah, I intend to show you all the hotkeys and such in the tutoriEl if I can find the time.
PDF has been updated. Tell me what you think!
Quote from: E. Gadd Industries on December 23, 2015, 06:04:51 AMWait, I thought you said the version I made was completely fixed. Yeah, I intend to show you all the hotkeys and such in the tutoriEl if I can find the time.
Did I say that? ;D ;D ;D
Yes, in PM
Quote from: E. Gadd Industries on December 23, 2015, 12:59:14 PMYes, in PM
shhhhhh!!! That never happened *slips you a $5 bill under the table*
Bribery!!
I refuse to accept!
Rhythm grouping errors persist. In 4/4 time, you shouldn't have the down-beat of 3 hidden by a note, or in other words, you need to show it clearly. For example, quarter notes and half notes should not be used on the up-beat of two.
Also in the future, please create an arrangement topic and get feedback from the community before posting arrangements straight to the submissions. Common formatting errors are inexcusable, and in the future your submission might be deleted (the submission process will slightly change soon). Also, if your arrangements need to be edited prior to their submission (like the tempo marking you previously asked about) that needs to be done before submitting it.
Sorry about that Olimar... This was literally my first submission.... It won't happen again! I'll get to work on that BTW
I think i fixed it..... I still need to update the pdf, but i have the mus file and midi file updated though.
Are you using the export option when creating the pdf?
Quote from: Olimar12345 on December 23, 2015, 08:11:01 PMAre you using the export option when creating the pdf?
Actually E. Gadd helps me with the pdf's by sending them to me.... I tried downloading some of the suggested programs... but I can't seem to download them.... I even tried to use musescore to help me save pdf's
Edit: If you could help me with the pdf, it might finally be site ready.... but you don't have to if you don't want to
Quote from: Olimar12345 on December 23, 2015, 06:47:58 PMRhythm grouping errors persist. In 4/4 time, you shouldn't have the down-beat of 3 hidden by a note, or in other words, you need to show it clearly. For example, quarter notes and half notes should not be used on the up-beat of two.
Also in the future, please create an arrangement topic and get feedback from the community before posting arrangements straight to the submissions. Common formatting errors are inexcusable, and in the future your submission might be deleted (the submission process will slightly change soon). Also, if your arrangements need to be edited prior to their submission (like the tempo marking you previously asked about) that needs to be done before submitting it.
ah I smell a solution to get the personal arrangement threads flowing
Pdf has been updated.... If nobody else has any problems with the sheet.... It should be ready to go!
Take another look, the same rhythm error I explained exists in bulk, especially in the LH.
Ugghhhh... That was tedious! Anyway, unless i missed some.....it should be ready! It's updated and everything
some things I noticed:
measure 3: power chords, I think they're just 4ths as the other ones.
measure 4 to 5: a glissando would be nice, as the guitar slide in the original.
measure 8 and 12: make the 2nd layer notes grace notes. If not in measure 12 your intention is that the D should remain, so that you first play the D and then take the chord (E and B) and having all 3 notes down. I'm also not sure in measure 8 if it leads up to an F, I think the F on the 4th beat should be an E.
Also some general things:
dynamics: think about if you want more dynamic variety, add more and different dynamics, or if you want it all to be in f.
Articulation: I feel like the organ parts sound more legato, some slurs would be nice in those parts.
Quote from: Tobbeh99 on December 25, 2015, 02:43:29 PMsome things I noticed:
measure 3: power chords, I think they're just 4ths as the other ones.
measure 4 to 5: a glissando would be nice, as the guitar slide in the original.
measure 8 and 12: make the 2nd layer notes grace notes. If not in measure 12 your intention is that the D should remain, so that you first play the D and then take the chord (E and B) and having all 3 notes down. I'm also not sure in measure 8 if it leads up to an F, I think the F on the 4th beat should be an E.
1. What do you mean by that?
2. Left hand or Right Hand?
3.How do you add Grace notes? Remember that I have Notepad..
1. basically that you are missing harmony notes in those notes. I think it's just 4ths below, so if the melody goes A-C-D-A then change that to chords E+A G+C A+D E+A. I think it's just like measure 5.
2. RH, it slides down to the melody.
3. hmm, I don't know if you can actually, I, or someone else, might need to help you out with that.
Is this what you meant?
https://www.dropbox.com/s/3i5lefe33y4gktg/Splattack%21.mus?dl=0 (https://www.dropbox.com/s/3i5lefe33y4gktg/Splattack%21.mus?dl=0)
Not really, you should make a note at the end of the measure like on the 4th beat or so that goes down to the chord next measure, the glissando line should be angled downwards too I think. Don't know how much you can do in notepad however.
I think i accidentally messed up on the last file!
Here's how i think you wanted it to sound
https://www.dropbox.com/s/3i5lefe33y4gktg/Splattack%21.mus?dl=0 (https://www.dropbox.com/s/3i5lefe33y4gktg/Splattack%21.mus?dl=0)
Edit:I updated the links with this version just in case!
Not really, I said that there should be a note on like the last beat that the glissando should start on. Also you only need one line.
I think I understood what you meant..... I also updated some of the dynamics (did not want to go too overboard) Tell me if it's wrong!
I also need someone with Finale To replace some notes and turn them into grace notes....
Grace notes added! Thanks to the help of N
Bump? Any more changes?
-Remove the double glissando and replace it with a single wavy line from the lowest pitch to the first note of the next measure
-Hide the half rest in measure 4 by highlighting it and pressing "h."
-Fix measure 12 (RH) I have no idea what you're trying to do there. Same at 8 to a lesser degree.
1. I really don't understand glissandos.....could you show me what you ment?
2. I have notepad..so someone will have to fix that for me
3. Should I remove the grace notes?