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Title: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeta on July 09, 2018, 04:54:49 PM
Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Steins;Gate 0
Console: Multiplatform
Title: Messenger -piano-
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Zeila (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4766)

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Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeila on July 09, 2018, 04:57:38 PM
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: LeviR.star on July 09, 2018, 06:04:13 PM
Zeila, let me be the first to say I adore how this sheet looks. Very clean, and a very delicate piece. Amazing work!
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Maelstrom on July 09, 2018, 07:06:37 PM
Ok, so the copyright is weird on this game. Iirc, when boot it up, it lists both Mages and 5pb, even though 5pb is a division of Mages. I'd suggest having both
I found the intro and only Mages is listed. Use that.
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Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeila on July 09, 2018, 07:41:13 PM
Quote from: LeviR.star on July 09, 2018, 06:04:13 PMZeila, let me be the first to say I adore how this sheet looks. Very clean, and a very delicate piece. Amazing work!
Thank you! Most of it can be attributed to The Deku Trombonist sprucing things up though

I changed the copyright to MAGES.
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Maelstrom on July 16, 2018, 05:12:13 PM
(https://i.imgur.com/3Kuk1bx.jpg)
The last 2 beats of m36 should look like this in the RH
Did you mean for the grace note on m3 of m44 to be tied?
m46 RH - b3 - There's actually 3 notes in that triplet set. The middle one is a D, but it's pretty faint so you must have missed it.

Double check your rolled chord marks. Not all of the extra large ones reach the top note. (e.g. m37-39)

Fix this and I approve.

Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeila on July 19, 2018, 12:43:20 PM
Quote from: Maelstrom on July 16, 2018, 05:12:13 PMDid you mean for the grace note on m3 of m44 to be tied?
Yes, but I decided to just get rid of the grace notes. Everything else was fixed, and I also got rid of the mf at m81 because it was repeated as well as cramped. Thanks!
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Latios212 on July 19, 2018, 03:53:27 PM
Nice work! Few things from me:
- I'd suggest 4/4 all around instead of common time since you swap between /4 signatures a lot
- Would suggest flipping the LH octave A's at the end of m. 6 (and nudging the cresc. down a bit as such)
- Any particular reason m. 27-28 is in 3/4 and not 6/8? 67-68 too
- There's an unusually large amount of space at the beginning of m. 40
- Would recommend flipping the RH chords in m. 51 upwards (this would help it interfere with the dynamics less)
- Move the "a tempo" and "rit." further apart at the beginning of m. 33 - it looks like one direction
- m. 61 would probably be easier to just throw the G into the lower layer - it makes a simple octave with the lower G in the LH
- m. 72-73 - a fermata would make more sense than rit./a tempo since there's nothing to slow down, it's just holding notes
- Not sure how I feel about the two consecutive dotted quarter notes at the end of 89-91 - in all the other 7/4 measures you handle the last 3 beats individually so I'd be inclined to suggest you change the second in each pair to an eighth-tied-quarter (but I'm not super adamant about it)

Other than that, looks fantastic!
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeila on July 20, 2018, 12:07:54 AM
Quote from: Latios212 on July 19, 2018, 03:53:27 PM- Any particular reason m. 27-28 is in 3/4 and not 6/8? 67-68 too
Not really. It has been changed

Quote from: Latios212 on July 19, 2018, 03:53:27 PM- Not sure how I feel about the two consecutive dotted quarter notes at the end of 89-91 - in all the other 7/4 measures you handle the last 3 beats individually so I'd be inclined to suggest you change the second in each pair to an eighth-tied-quarter (but I'm not super adamant about it)
I think I'll leave it the way it is

The rest was fixed. Thank you!
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Latios212 on July 24, 2018, 07:50:09 PM
Awesome, fantastic. Just last quick thing - how about tying over the top octave G in LH in m. 61? It seems kind of arbitrary that it isn't.
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeila on July 26, 2018, 11:14:53 AM
Done!
Title: Re: [MUL] Steins;Gate 0 - "Messenger -piano-" by Zeila
Post by: Zeta on July 26, 2018, 07:08:54 PM
This submission has been accepted by Latios212 (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4344).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot