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Title: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: xenophanes on April 14, 2019, 09:42:15 PM
Completed Arrangements:
Works In Progress:

Haven't Started:
I'm still learning how to arrange for piano, so I would love criticism to help me improve.

Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: Latios212 on April 15, 2019, 06:24:37 PM
Hi, welcome to NinSheetMusic! :D Good to see Super Circuit getting some love, I'll see if I have some time to take a quick look sometime later this week...

For your question, unfortunately we don't allow (on the main site) using other people's arrangements as source material for your arrangements without their permission. Think of it as a courtesy; we don't want to be hosting anyone's work without their consent. Don't let that stop you from doing them, though!
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: Splatoon Inkling on April 15, 2019, 06:26:28 PM
That is awesome! Nice to get super circuit seeing some love. The music from there is really good!
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: xenophanes on April 15, 2019, 08:20:55 PM
Quote from: Latios212 on April 15, 2019, 06:24:37 PMFor your question, unfortunately we don't allow (on the main site) using other people's arrangements as source material for your arrangements without their permission. Think of it as a courtesy; we don't want to be hosting anyone's work without their consent. Don't let that stop you from doing them, though!
Thanks for the help, it's much appreciated! I'll take this into consideration.
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: Code_Name_Geek on April 16, 2019, 12:50:21 PM
Welcome and congrats on your first sheets!! They look very nice so far, and you've done a great job notating those tricky rhythms especially. I just have a few comments on the rhythms in Cheese Land:

-You almost always leave beat 3 visible, which is exactly what you want in 4/4 so good job! I did see a couple of spots where you might have missed this however (like measure 44 in Cheese Land) so it wouldn't hurt to double check.

-In the section from measures 9 -14, on beat 4 you sometimes notate the rhythm as two eight notes and other times as two 16ths separated by 16th rests. I think it would be better to keep this consistent as eighth notes, and if you do think there's a length difference (I didn't listen closely enough to tell) to use staccatos on the eighth notes rather than switching to 16th notes.

And some Cheese Land comments not related to rhythms:

-I would switch the left hand to bass clef since that's what piano players are accustomed to reading, and there's really no reason to use a 15vb treble clef when a bass clef exists. If it goes too low in bass class, just write it an octave up and indicate "8vb" in the score--no need to change clefs!

-There are a couple of spots where the second voice in the right hand has stems facing up instead of down, which is causing them to overlap the top voice in places. Knowing Musescore there's two possibilities here: either the notes were accidentally entered into voice 3, in which case you just have to switch them to voice 2; or you accidentally flipped the stems when entering the notes in which case you just have to select the notes you want to change and press "x" on the keyboard and they should flip right back. It's an easy fix but it will clean it up nicely :)

I didn't look over Shy Guy Beach in too much detail but I hope that was helpful! The sheets were quite clean and easy to read in most parts and those were some pretty minor complaints, but fixing them up will go a long way!

I'm glad to see some more Mario Kart sheets in the works, those games have always had great music!
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: xenophanes on April 16, 2019, 03:39:22 PM
Thanks a lot for your input! I'll make the changes soon and update the links.
But one question: did you see anything wrong with the bass line in Cheese Land from measure 33 to the end? I wasn't so sure I got the right notes because the audio in the Youtube video got covered up by the melody.
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: Code_Name_Geek on April 16, 2019, 04:36:11 PM
Quote from: xenophanes on April 16, 2019, 03:39:22 PMThanks a lot for your input! I'll make the changes soon and update the links.
But one question: did you see anything wrong with the bass line in Cheese Land from measure 33 to the end? I wasn't so sure I got the right notes because the audio in the Youtube video got covered up by the melody.
No problem!

I can't quite pick out the exact notes myself but it sounds like that pattern in starting in measure 33 might be more similar in shape to the original pattern... I think the notes on beat 1 and beat 4 are slightly higher than what you have written, and the two 16th notes might also be some kind of walk-down like in the other pattern. I would especially check the third time this happens when the melody is on an Ab because there's a good chance the bass goes into F minor instead of F major there. The last four bars seem alright to me though. Does anyone else with slightly better ears have some input on this?

A useful trick for transcribing basslines is to import the track into an program like Audacity and transpose the entire track up an octave--this puts the bass in an octave we're more used to hearing (and helps to get the melody out of the way). You'd have to download the audio from the YouTube video to do this, but maybe give it a try and see if it makes it any clearer?
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: xenophanes on April 16, 2019, 05:45:27 PM
I tried your suggestion using Audacity to raise the pitch, and it worked very well! I updated the bass line in some sections, and added some harmonization in the second voice in the last few bars. I'll get to the other changes sometime tomorrow, and I'll create a .mus file and pdf as well. Thanks for the tip, I'll definitely use it a lot in the future.
Title: Re: Xenophanes' Arrangements
Post by: Code_Name_Geek on April 16, 2019, 07:13:25 PM
Quote from: xenophanes on April 16, 2019, 05:45:27 PMI tried your suggestion using Audacity to raise the pitch, and it worked very well! I updated the bass line in some sections, and added some harmonization in the second voice in the last few bars. I'll get to the other changes sometime tomorrow, and I'll create a .mus file and pdf as well. Thanks for the tip, I'll definitely use it a lot in the future.
Awesome I'm glad it helped! That's a trick I learned from a bass player :D