Submission Information:
Series: Xeno
Game: Xenoblade Chronicles 2
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: Loneliness
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291)
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Finally, by popular demand! (Not really, Latios just keeps asking me to sub this haha.)
This is a beautiful piece, thanks for arranging it!
- m23 it sounds like there's a higher G nat in the left hand on beat 2
- m24 maybe you could add a low D in beat 1 (RH), but if I can understand not wanting to put one there
- m29 is there a reason why you omitted the F# in the LH chord?
- this is just me being picky, but I think the subtitle is a little too close to the title
Nice work overall!
Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PMThis is a beautiful piece
Indeed it is!
Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PM- m23 it sounds like there's a higher G nat in the left hand on beat 2
- m24 maybe you could add a low D in beat 1 (RH), but if I can understand not wanting to put one there
- m29 is there a reason why you omitted the F# in the LH chord?
All great points! After trying it out on the piano, I put the D in bar 24 into the left hand so that it resolves correctly and doesn't get in the way of the piano line too much. I also added in a missing A in the left hand of bar 25 while I was here.
Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PM- this is just me being picky, but I think the subtitle is a little too close to the title
The spacing looks to me like the same as it is for all of my sheets and it doesn't look particularly close so I left it as is.
Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PMNice work overall!
Thanks! And thank you for taking the time to check it over.
Yay! Sorry for the wait, just a few minor things to call out.
- The first chord in m. 18 is rooted on an E at the bottom. I think the LH should be E-A
- I'm not really hearing the LH D on beat 2 of m. 18 although it makes sense where it is
- m. 24 first chord sound like G# on bottom
- Chord in m. 28 sounds like the wrong inversion, like it should have the B on bottom
- You could combine 8vas in m. 28-29
- Cross staff line between 29-30 like 25-26?
- m. 32 chord also sounds like it has an E on top
- Tied octave in m. 36 is at the wrong octave
- The downward rolled chord arrows could be adjusted a bit so that the vertical line of the arrow doesn't stick out from the wavy part at the bottom
New files!
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- The first chord in m. 18 is rooted on an E at the bottom. I think the LH should be E-A
I added the E, but I don't think there's an A. I think it's a holdover from a previous A that moves to a G# (perhaps slightly delayed).
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- I'm not really hearing the LH D on beat 2 of m. 18 although it makes sense where it is
I think you meant bar 19, but yeah you're right; I was just imagining it I think.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- m. 24 first chord sound like G# on bottom
I agree, and it already was? Maybe you meant something else though.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- Chord in m. 28 sounds like the wrong inversion, like it should have the B on bottom
I had another listen and it's root position as far as I can tell.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- You could combine 8vas in m. 28-29
- Cross staff line between 29-30 like 25-26?
Fixed.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- m. 32 chord also sounds like it has an E on top
I think so, and I added another one at bar 28 as well.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- Tied octave in m. 36 is at the wrong octave
Whoopsie.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- The downward rolled chord arrows could be adjusted a bit so that the vertical line of the arrow doesn't stick out from the wavy part at the bottom
Hopefully that looks better now!
Unrelated to the above, I also went through and rewrote some of the left hand to make it more clear how to pedal the piece. This required some interesting stuff in bar 29, but I think that's as good as it can get really.
Thanks for checking!
Quote from: Libera on June 08, 2019, 11:13:38 AMI agree, and it already was? Maybe you meant something else though.
oops disregard I can't read the key signature, the Gn in the previous measure threw me off, it's good
Quote from: Libera on June 08, 2019, 11:13:38 AMI had another listen and it's root position as far as I can tell.
Ah okay I can hear the root E but I think what was throwing me off was that it sounds like a G# on top. It's fine though
All good to go :P
I have one issue. m35 has been changed in such a way that the chord progression in the LH has been misrepresented. Here is the most literal transcription of it I could make:
(https://i.imgur.com/6LMJFfe.jpg)
fix this in a nice way and I'll approve as well
Quote from: Maelstrom on June 15, 2019, 01:25:54 PMI have one issue. m35 has been changed in such a way that the chord progression in the LH has been misrepresented. Here is the most literal transcription of it I could make:
Very nice catch. Though I do hear the F# on the first beat (it might not be in the piano though, but still worth including I think.) Anyway, I've tinkered with that bar so hopefully it's better now.
Thanks for checking!
That works fine.
accepted
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