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Title: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Zeta on July 12, 2019, 03:47:59 PM
Submission Information:

Series: Fire Emblem
Game: Fire Emblem Fates
Console: Nintendo 3DS
Title: Lament
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291)
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Libera on July 12, 2019, 03:49:11 PM
Decided to fix up one of my sheets from earlier this year.


Play As All Stars Fall before this for extra sadness, if you desire.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Libera on August 05, 2019, 08:32:16 AM
I made some minor edits to spacings and also showed a crescendo that was unintentionally hidden.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Latios212 on August 06, 2019, 12:48:17 AM
Sorry for the wait. Here's some stuff!
- How about LH tremolos as pickups to m. 1 and 5 similar to the pickup to m. 9?
- You could try making the top melody octaves in m. 5-9 to make it stand out more.
- Hearing a Bb below the chord on beat 2 of m. 9, not the Eb within it.
- Thoughts about making the LH treble clef fro m. 7 beat 2 to the end of m. 24?
- I think the LH Bb in m. 19 should have an Ab under it
- RH in m. 30-31 is missing a few subtle notes I think are needed to flesh out the right hand a bit better. Hearing Cn under the two F's in m. 30, and Ab under the Eb in m. 31.
- Small suggestion: flipping the group of four eighth notes in the measures at the end to make the downward contour to the lower staff more apparent.
- It sounds to me like the LH chords in m. 33+ should be inverted up once or twice to produce a somewhat lighter sound.

Other than that, looks great! Glad to see more Fates stuff going up.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Libera on August 06, 2019, 01:11:12 AM
Pretty much everything was fixed except a few things:

- How about LH tremolos as pickups to m. 1 and 5 similar to the pickup to m. 9?

I added one at the start but I left it out in m.5 as I felt it would be too distracting.

- RH in m. 30-31 is missing a few subtle notes I think are needed to flesh out the right hand a bit better. Hearing Cn under the two F's in m. 30, and Ab under the Eb in m. 31.

I don't hear the Ab in bar 31, but I did hear an F underneath the Eb so I added that.

Also this is one of those sheets that I swear every time I look at it I find more stuff to improve.  I added a missing note in bar 2 and added a roll on the first chord in bar 1.  I also adjusted some rolls here and there.

- It sounds to me like the LH chords in m. 33+ should be inverted up once or twice to produce a somewhat lighter sound.

A good point, although I feel like the really important thing here is to get a consistent sound which I certainly wasn't before but which I now am.  (This was achieved only by inverting chords upwards so you'll be happy anyway!)

Thanks for checking, and no worries about the wait.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Latios212 on August 06, 2019, 01:31:45 AM
I don't hear the Ab in bar 31, but I did hear an F underneath the Eb so I added that.
Listening again I hear both. It's got the sound of Bb7sus4.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Libera on August 06, 2019, 01:33:31 AM
Listening again I hear both. It's got the sound of Bb7sus4.

Hmm it's pretty quiet, at least to me anyway, but I've added it.  Also I put in an extra An in bar 30 below the chord.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Latios212 on August 06, 2019, 01:35:00 AM
Sounds good.

(https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/401094846107877377/608095605490974741/bOlHXL-sWtTK8PbxylxEKMF6apRCSCuBGlKj6xlX9bEYQBIoEc8NbYQGft2_BvW3-dtMKmd7SuuqVQ-Mo2s78X8gISoLNyg2RvVK.png)
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Maelstrom on August 06, 2019, 02:08:36 AM
First of all, can you never post that picture ever again latios.
thanks

Secondly, this is the 2nd sheet in a row I'm accepting that has a good ost while being a bad game, but even more so in each direction than FFXIII.
Title: Re: [3DS] Fire Emblem Fates - "Lament" by Libera
Post by: Zeta on August 06, 2019, 02:08:47 AM
This submission has been accepted by Maelstrom (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4119).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot