Submission Information:
Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Ever Grande City
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Latios212 (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4344)
Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mus/987) | MIDI (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mid/987) | PDF (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/987)
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
[attachment deleted by admin]
Looks pretty good to me, just a few things.
-I think that the Fs on beat 2 of bar 3-4 in the left hand should be lengthened to crotchets, like you actually have later on (the final bar for example.)
-You could try incorporating the trumpets a bit more for the second time (bars 13-20). You have them in for a few bars but you could probably get more in. In particular I'm thinking about the really nice sixths movement in bars 16-17 as being a really easy and effective place to add them in.
-There are some hidden directions on the musx which I assume aren't meant to be there? In which case you could just get rid of them rather than hiding them (not particularly important, I know.)
I'm always happy to see more Hoenn stuff, so thanks for that!
You're welcome, and thanks for checking! :)
Quote from: Libera on August 12, 2019, 10:51:32 AM-I think that the Fs on beat 2 of bar 3-4 in the left hand should be lengthened to crotchets, like you actually have later on (the final bar for example.)
Oops! Good catch.
Quote from: Libera on August 12, 2019, 10:51:32 AM-You could try incorporating the trumpets a bit more for the second time (bars 13-20). You have them in for a few bars but you could probably get more in. In particular I'm thinking about the really nice sixths movement in bars 16-17 as being a really easy and effective place to add them in.
Hmm I wrote out the whole thing but wasn't sure how much I wanted to keep. Spoke a bit on Discord and decided to write in a bit in m. 16-17 as lower harmonies.
Quote from: Libera on August 12, 2019, 10:51:32 AM-There are some hidden directions on the musx which I assume aren't meant to be there? In which case you could just get rid of them rather than hiding them (not particularly important, I know.)
Ah yeah I sometimes write notes to myself via hidden directions to re-think about/finalize before posting the final version. The note at the beginning can go; the repeat marking at the end is intentional to make playback work right because of the courtesy key change.
Also while looking at this again I noticed the beat 4 rest in m. 20 was accidentally split, so I condensed that back into a dotted quarter rest.
Files updated!
Looks great!
- m4 RH Layer 3: The last 8th note sounds like it shouldn't be staccato.
- m24 RH: You should put some articulations here (similar to m1-2).
- If you want to add even more trumpet notes, I would suggest the triplet on beat 4 of m17 (maybe some stuff in m18 too). Up to you though.
That's all I got. Nice sheet!
Thanks! Ah good catch on the first two, updated. I wasn't too keen on adding too many more trumpet notes before m. 19 so I think I'll keep it as is. The melody in m. 18 is new and different enough from before to generate enough interest anyway, I think.
Alright, sounds good for the m18 stuff. Everything else also looks great, so I'll go ahead and accept.
This submission has been accepted by Static (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4960).
~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot