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Title: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Zeta on August 10, 2019, 01:00:48 PM
Submission Information:

Series: Fire Emblem
Game: Fire Emblem: Three Houses
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: As Swift as Wind
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Maelstrom (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4119)

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Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Maelstrom on August 10, 2019, 01:02:34 PM
https://www.dropbox.com/s/gh8aagm17bf8g85/As%20Swift%20as%20the%20Wind.mp3?dl=1

Here's a direct download to the MP3.
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Libera on August 11, 2019, 03:19:58 PM
I don't have time tonight to do a full check on this, but I found I few things that stood out to me:

-I'm almost 100% convinced that the final eight bars should look like this:
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https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/492809359961882625/610228725182758934/unknown.png
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It's just a normal eight bar phrase but with some 5/4 bars scattered around in a fairly regular fashion.
-The bass is missing a few notes here and there from the original (bars 9-12 is a good place to listen to see what I mean), which are admittedly ghost notes played on the bass which we can't do on the piano but the missing rhythms is not ideal.  I'll leave you to decide whether you want to remedy that by throwing in some appropriate pitches for the missing rhythms.
-http to https!  And still it should be Koei Tecmo Games, right?
-Double barline when leaving the B section at bar 41?
-Bar 7 right hand beats 3-4, I'm hearing this:
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https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/492809359961882625/610232553605038130/unknown.png
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And the same thing for bar 15.
-I am not hearing any sort of thing like you have written in in beats 3-4 for bar 11.
-In the right hand of bar 5, bar 9 etc (everywhere this figure comes up) the last C I'm hearing as a Bb.  Also the rhythm sounds slightly different to me, with an extra semiquaver on beat 3.25.
-The middle tie could do with adjusting in the chord in bar 20.
-Beat 3.25 in bar 48 (using my own bars and bar numberings here) of the bass I'm hearing as a Eb rather than an F.

Edit: Some more things now that I'm checking it fully.

-In bars 18 and 22 left hand I'm hearing the Db Eb at the end of the bar as C Eb.
-The off beat chords in bars 25-40 seem a bit more complicated than you have written and I'm not really sure about the bass notes you written in here.  I don't really hear any bass notes in the original and I think that everything would be better just kept in off beat chords.  Like this? (but with the rests in the right place.)
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https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/492809359961882625/610960861833461771/unknown.png
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Also sometimes the chords change part way through the bar rather than staying the same, like in bar 29.
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Maelstrom on August 18, 2019, 02:49:05 PM
All fixed. I also noticed I wrote the rhythm slightly incorrectly in the final measure so that has been fixed and sounds better now.

I also completely rewrote the bassline for that section and it's much better now.

oh, and the DS no longer repeats infinitely
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Latios212 on August 18, 2019, 04:34:08 PM
Nice. I've been hearing a lot of this lately...

Notes:
- Is the first the lower dyad in m. 9 not supposed to be like the others?
- Hearing a Bb on top of the beat 4 chord in m. 21
- The bass figure at the end of m. 44 is misplaced (it should fall earlier, the Eb should play the same time as the Rb in right hand)
- Bass figure in beats 1-2 of the last measure should look like this (a wrong note, also you had the rhythm correct initially)
  https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/401094846107877377/612791246464876600/unknown.png

Visuals:
- Make the RH slur at the beginning not pop up so much
- Write the chord at the beginning of m. 21 like this:
  https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/401094846107877377/612766681231523882/unknown.png
- Align the pedal markings between m. 26-27
- Also make sure they're all a sufficient distance below the chords (m. 31 intersects, but I think they should all be lowered some)
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Maelstrom on August 19, 2019, 03:55:18 PM
M9 is actually the same as m1, just like m13 is like m5.

everything else is fixed. I really should have triple checked for issues in the stuff I just wrote in ....
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Latios212 on August 19, 2019, 04:16:49 PM
Ah gotcha. Cool, it's got my approval now
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Libera on August 19, 2019, 05:40:44 PM
Nice, just one thing left from me: I just double checked the sound test and this track is called: 'As Swift as Wind'.  I also made the same mistake as you when I was naming my files, which I suppose is because 'As Swift as the Wind' sounds more natural.  Still, it is what it is.
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as the Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Maelstrom on August 19, 2019, 05:52:40 PM
Oops

fixed
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Libera on August 19, 2019, 05:58:52 PM
Awesome!
Title: Re: [SWITCH] Fire Emblem: Three Houses - "As Swift as Wind" by Maelstrom
Post by: Zeta on August 19, 2019, 05:58:57 PM
This submission has been accepted by Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291).

~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot