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Title: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: Zeta on September 03, 2019, 05:17:54 AM
Submission Information:

Series: Rhythm Heaven
Game: Rhythm Heaven Megamix
Console: Nintendo 3DS
Title: First Contact
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ThatHiddenCharacter (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5110)
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: ThatHiddenCharacter on September 03, 2019, 05:18:17 AM
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: Latios212 on September 07, 2019, 05:24:51 PM
Looks pretty good. Bunch of small things:

- The first measure sounds unusually empty. Try filling out the Am chord a bit more to reflect the original better.
- m. 2 beat 3 dyads should be C-F not D-f (F chord)
- Is there a reason you have the melod in m. 19+/25+ an octave lower and the chord in m. 21+ an octave higher than in the original?
- I suggest slurring your grace notes to the next melody note in m. 21 and 28
- m. 21 beat 4.5 LH should be a rest
- m. 22 beat 4 LH sounds like A-G-E-B instead of what you have written?
- Melody in beat 24 - I think the A on beat 2 should be two 16th notes instead of one eighth note, and conversely I think the E on beat 3 should only be one eighth note instead of two sixteenths.
- The mordent in m. 27/31 should be flattened (i.e. to indicate D-Eb-D instead of D-E-D). Feel free to ask if you need help getting that symbol.
- m. 36 LH - B should be flat and C# should be natural
- Small suggestion - 4 systems on page 1 and 5 on page 2 to use the space more effectively. Right now there's a disproportionately small amount of space around the footer and page 2 header (something I suggest you check for all your sheets - been seeing similar potential improvements across other recent submissions too).
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: ThatHiddenCharacter on September 12, 2019, 03:09:31 AM
Files have been updated.

Also, in m24 beat 2.5 (and so on), I hear two E's play there distinctly (as does E. Gadd), but Latios does not. I was hoping that another Updater could provide some input there as well. It's at about 0:52 in the video.
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: Latios212 on September 12, 2019, 11:48:10 PM
Cool. I approve given that whoever checks this next verifies this:

Also, in m24 beat 2.5 (and so on), I hear two E's play there distinctly (as does E. Gadd), but Latios does not. I was hoping that another Updater could provide some input there as well. It's at about 0:52 in the video.

(Also think the music on page 2 could be moved down away from the header a bit more since there's ample space at the bottom, but I won't hold up the submission over it)
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: Libera on September 14, 2019, 12:41:37 AM
A few things:

-I agree with Latios on bar 24.  I don't hear the E on beat 3.25.
-The forte in bar 1 could be better lined up with the notes.
-I also agree that you could spread things out a bit more on page 2 since you've got a lot more space at the bottom then you do at the top.
-There are more harmonies that you include pretty much everywhere, but if you've left them out to make the right hand easier to play then that's fair enough.  Though I would at least beef the final bar up to being a full A minor chord, like you did for the start.
-I'm not sure the crescendo marking in bar 34 is really worth much as it basically only applies to the glissando in the left hand.  I'd just leave it out, personally.
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: ThatHiddenCharacter on September 23, 2019, 03:05:49 AM
Alright, I've updated the files.
Title: Re: [3DS] Rhythm Heaven Megamix - "First Contact" by ThatHiddenCharacter
Post by: InsigTurtle on September 23, 2019, 07:52:33 AM
More feedback time!
- You could still add more meticulous articulation notation by adding slurs to show which notes are joined vs which are detached.
- m.18 hearing a F# dim as the 2nd chord, not the split 3rd it is right now
- m.21-22 not at all hearing what you've written in the jazz organ. Sort of sounds like a Dmadd9->Em7? I'll check on that once I refresh my brain unless someone else wants to chime in