Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Dark Souls
Console: Multiplatform
Title: Great Grey Wolf Sif
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291)
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I'm glad you warned me, I am in tears - over how it crashed Finale when I tried to play it back.
I don't have much to say here, just that the quarter rest in m34 is clashing with the note above it. Also, I think that the C#m key signature at the beginning is kind of unnecessary since it's such a short section. It's fine if you want to keep it, though.
Quote from: Static on December 06, 2019, 02:50:09 PMI'm glad you warned me, I am in tears - over how it crashed Finale when I tried to play it back.
Even finale doesn't want the Sif boss music to play.
Quote from: Static on December 06, 2019, 02:50:09 PMI don't have much to say here, just that the quarter rest in m34 is clashing with the note above it. Also, I think that the C#m key signature at the beginning is kind of unnecessary since it's such a short section. It's fine if you want to keep it, though.
Both things fixed. Thanks for checking!
Looks good! This is kinda nitpicky, but there should be a little more space at the beginning of m2.
Hmm yeah you're right. I think some weird spacing stuff happened when I changed the key signature that don't want to reset automatically. I manually adjusted a bunch of the spacings on the first system so hopefully that should be ok now....
Looks good to me. Just a few small things:
- Watch the tie directions in m. 6 and 45 (points up when there's nothing below it)
- 8vas have odd cutoff points in m. 20/65. (Also watch out where the right part of the line ends when you move the line left, like in m. 25/40 it doesn't reach the end of the measure)
- Could we move the F# in m. 43 over a bit so it's not so close to the D# which you've shifted right?
- Not really sure what can be done about this, but is the A between m. 40-41 meant to be tied? It looks like it could be interpreted as a slur or tie
Thanks for checking! I've put new files up with the changes as you've suggested.
Quote from: Latios212 on December 20, 2019, 03:35:35 PM- Not really sure what can be done about this, but is the A between m. 40-41 meant to be tied? It looks like it could be interpreted as a slur or tie
Yes it's a tie. I think it's reasonably clear on inspection that it has to be a tie and I think this way makes the voices clearer. Although I admit that it could be confusing for a sight reader, I think it's best to go this way.
Okey, sounds good. Looks good too, approved!
only thing i'm curious about is why you didn't notate that choir coming in at m.32, since (i feel) the way it punctuates the relative peace is a bit important, so i'd add emphasis to that currently notated arpeggiated chord or something
I guess since the notes the choir sings there are already covered by the harpsichord I didn't think it'd make any difference in the arrangement. If you've got ideas I'm happy to hear them though.
I think m32 would be fine either way. I'll accept this one now.
This submission has been accepted by Static (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4960).
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