Submission Information:
Series: EarthBound
Game: Mother 3
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Beyond the Sunshine Forest
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Maelstrom (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4119)
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Cool piece, generally looks great. Some small things:
-I think it might make more sense to write the metric modulation in quavers instead since 6/8 doesn't relate so well to them.
-I'd recommend either changing the C#s and Bn to Db and Cb OR the Fn to an E# in the final bar, since that way it would be spelt like a 7 chord like the rest are. The other possibility is to view this final chord a little differently and think of it like G7flat5 without the G, and then spell it Db F Bn. An argument in favour of this would be that it's functioning as a dominant for the loop back to Cm. Something to think about anyway.
-Dots + staccatos make me sad, did you consider writing them as normal quavers with semiquaver rests?
-I can see the reasoning for writing it the way you have it, but you might want to also consider writing the RH in 19-23 to prioritise the cool double chromatic descension thing that's going on, rather than mirroring the bass. Just another thought.
Quote from: Libera on April 10, 2021, 07:32:02 AM-I'd recommend either changing the C#s and Bn to Db and Cb OR the Fn to an E# in the final bar, since that way it would be spelt like a 7 chord like the rest are. The other possibility is to view this final chord a little differently and think of it like G7flat5 without the G, and then spell it Db F Bn. An argument in favour of this would be that it's functioning as a dominant for the loop back to Cm. Something to think about anyway.
I would normally agree with that spelling, but m19-23 is a cycle of 4ths sequence of parallel dominant 7th chords - it should be written as a Db7 (Db-F-Cb-Db) rather than the G7b5. Probably would work either way though I guessIgnore what I said mael and just spell it Db-F-Bn, it's a tritone sub so it's easier to just spell it to show the resolutions (Db to C, B to C, F to Eb, Ab to G)
This is what I'm hearing for these chords:
Spoiler
(https://i.imgur.com/c1AfGjg.png)
The progression is A7b5 (no 3rd), D7, Gm7, C7, F7, Bb7, Eb7, Ab7, Db7. There's actually only 3 notes in each of the chords, and the bass note should be up an octave.
used static's suggestion for the final measures.
the rest fixed and files were udpated
Accepted!
This submission has been accepted by Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291).
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