Submission Information:
Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon HeartGold Version & Pokémon SoulSilver Version
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: The Pokémon League
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Latios212 (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4344)
Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mus/2203) | MIDI (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mid/2203) | PDF (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/2203)
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
[attachment deleted by admin]
[attachment deleted by admin]
A very much needed replacement.
Trying something new... (Let me know if you can't read my handwriting)
Feedback: https://www.dropbox.com/s/p94zl10c50tjjjy/368%20-%20The%20Pok%C3%A9mon%20League%20%28HGSS%29.pdf?dl=0
Note 5: I don't hear the G come in until beat 2. I do hear a faint F# on beat 1 but I honestly might suggest just making beat 1 a dyad. The main thing for me is that it sounds weird to hear the same chord repeated on beats 1 and 4, so I think it might be better to delay the dissonance until beat 4 altogether.
Quote from: mastersuperfan on August 16, 2021, 04:09:49 PMTrying something new... (Let me know if you can't read my handwriting)
Feedback: https://www.dropbox.com/s/p94zl10c50tjjjy/368%20-%20The%20Pok%C3%A9mon%20League%20%28HGSS%29.pdf?dl=0
Interesting idea, works just fine for me as the person responding to feedback!
3 - A bit hard to tell, but works for me so that the top notes of those chords ascend in m. 1-4
4 - I started it halfway through m. 2 since that's where the upper voice starts to sustain which is partially responsible for the increase in volume
7 - Still sounds like a D to me?
9 - That's partially playback, but I've changed it to dim. out completely (I think that was my original intention anyway). However maybe it'd just be better if I cut it out completely after the fourth note? Getting into #10...
10 - Not sure what you meant here exactly?
Files updated with those comments + the rest, with m. 14 LH still up in the air :P
Had a quick chat with MSF and decided to cut out the last few notes of m. 14 since it's so quiet anyway. Updated the files with that change~
Looks good!
Looks pretty good...
- Maybe staccatos on those 8th notes on beat 4 of m1-4 (and 14-17)? Those sound shorter than the other ones.
- Is there a reason why you have the last chord in m4 RH voiced that way? I hear the Db on top in the original (different than m17).
- m10: The Bb right next to the A sounds a bit weird, like I know that's technically what happens in the original, but you might want to consider moving the last A's in the LH down in octave or something. Just sounds somewhat more dissonant than the original to me.
- m13 LH beat 6: Weird how the bassline is F# here, but that metallic voice is actually G-C#... I think just keeping the F# is fine.
- m16 LH: That low C should be D
Got the first two things! For the third, I added parentheses around the LH note since I don't really want to move the bass around - good catch though because I don't like minor seconds like that...
The last two things I've left as is - I still hear a C for that second 16th note in m. 16 LH.
Files updated!
I give this one the gold seal of approval (but not the silver one)
This submission has been accepted by Static (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4960).
~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot