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As (one of) you know, I'm taking a break from Random Madness (pauses as the reader cheers) because of my internet problem. I'm going to post a Pokémon story, but one that's very different from both Steps to Simplicity and Emergence.

Don't expect it to be well-done because unlike Random Madness, I don't have the whole plot in my head. Don't really have anything past where I'm at in chapter one. I will ask you to be patient, though. This is my version of the story. I hope you can understand that.

The prologue is rather short, I'm not planning on the story to be that way. xP

I'm telling the story of... well, you'll see.


   Will woke with a start. Glancing around frantically, he leapt out of bed and ran as fast as he could down the hall, stumbling as he went. He paused outside his parents’ bedroom, panting heavily. Without hesitating, he knocked on their door and threw it open. He ran inside and shook his heavily snoring father.

   “Dad!” he whimpered. “Daddy…wake up…”

   His father’s eyelids fluttered slightly.

   “W-Will?” he said sleepily. He looked at his bedside clock. “It’s three o’clock in the morning,” he yawned. Will’s father turned on the light and sat up, rubbing his eyes.

   “Daddy,” whispered six-year-old Will, “I had a nightmare again.”

   “Again?” said his father wearily.

   Will nodded shakily.

   “All right,” said his father resignedly. “Tell me about it.”

   Will recounted the dream.

   “…and then the phone rang… it was the hospital… and they said that Mommy had…Mommy had…died.”

   His father sat up quickly.

   “WHAT?” his father shouted, causing poor Will to jump horribly. “They said… she had…? Are you ABSOLUTELY SURE that’s what they said, Will?”

   Will simply stood there, his lip trembling.
   
   “ARE YOU SURE THAT YOU DIDN’T MISHEAR?” roared his father, almost angrily.

   Will began sobbing, softly at first, then giving off violent, shuddering wails, tears simply pouring down his face.

   “Y-YES!” howled Will, then buried his face in his hands, still crying miserably. Will’s father felt a lump form in his throat. His eyes welled up. Within a moment they were both weeping, but Will’s father silently.

   After a while, Will’s father lifted his son onto the bed and hugged him. He wiped his eyes before speaking.
   
   “I apologize, Will,” said his father gently. “I know it’s – it’s not your fault.”
   
   Will hiccupped and gradually stopped bawling.
   
   “I’m sorry, Daddy,” whispered Will miserably.
   
   “Don’t be,” insisted his father comfortingly. “It’s really not your fault.”

   His son flashed a brief, weak, watery smile.

   They sat there side by side for some time, Will’s father looking at the ceiling, Will himself huddled up, hugging his knees.

   Just as the clock struck seven-thirty, the telephone rang.

   Tearing up again, Will’s father took a deep breath and picked up the phone.

Beginning with a tragedy, the perfect way to get readers to sympathize with the main character and to have a lingering sense of sadness throughout the story, making it more interesting. Good show, my friend.

Feedback much appreciated, SFK.

And thank you.  ;D

Woah! Telekenetic abilities! That kinda freaked me out. And what SFK said was something along the lines what im going to say.

But all in all, great job!

(Im gonna post the first few chapters from the book im writing... still unedited of course)

Well, not to sound like a know-it-all, but technically telekinetic abilities means that you can move things with your mind...


Thanks anyway! :D

i use the term as a generality! i know what telekenetic abilities mean... ill just use psychic abilities from here on out

hes like that girl reading the tarot cards from live and let die

I know, I was just being irritating. :D

I was thinking... should he do the gym challenge? Because the gym leaders would probably be different back then...

Anyone know who Falkner's father is? I know it says he gave Falkner the gym... :P

he is "Unnamed Father"... so youre free to do that. Most of the Gym leaders are in their late teens... (Whitney is supposed to be 16)

Anyways, maybe make Phoebe the gym leader of Ecruteak, since it was a while ago!

But, maybe make him travel with Aaron or Flint... oh, and Bertha can be his grandmother!!!

For his father, it could be Chuck or even Professor Rowan!

o_O

You make it sound like all the gym leaders and elite four are related...

Well, obviously, Roark and Byron are, as well as Tate and Liza...

I think he's going to travel with Volkner and Karen.

As of the moment. But I like Aaron, and now you've got that in my head.

...

Okay, so I already finished chapter one and although I should probably wait to put it up, I can't resist. Try not to look at the poll until after you've finished the chapter! xP

Chapter One

   Will had always had the gift â€" or, possibly, curse - of Sight. On a hot summer day, one-year-old Will looked up at the cloudless, sunny sky and spoke his first word â€" “rain”.

   His parents looked quizzically at each other, but shrugged it off to congratulate Will on talking. Before ten minutes were over, gray clouds began to move in. In under fifteen, thunder could be heard in rumbling in the distance. Within twenty, buckets of water were being dumped unceremoniously on their heads, and they had hurried inside. Listening to the steady pounding of the rain, Will’s parents had gazed upon the odd little wonder they had been given, and Will slept on…

   If his parents had thought that a coincidence, all skepticism was wiped clean from their minds in the next few years. Will seemed to know things others didn’t. He was particularly fond of knowing the weather â€" that was one area he never failed in. His parents always asked him the weather before they planned anything, and he always came through for them. He was extremely happy in his home in Eterna City.

   Around the age of three, Will began to have strange dreams often, at least once a week, none of which failed to come true. He dreamt that their neighbor’s Skitty was run over. It happened the next day. One year he dreamt all of his Christmas presents accidentally â€" but he still acted surprised, so as not to make his parents upset. The strange thing was that no one could really figure out whether the dreams caused the future or simply saw what would happen. Will didn’t know himself.

   Either way, around Will’s fifth birthday, he had a nightmare that his mother had fallen deathly sick.

   She did.

   She would spend the next year and a half in a hospital.

   At the end of that year and a half, the other members of her family would receive a phone call.

   Will took this loss extremely hard. He was very close to his mother, being an only child. His nightmares came far more frequently after that, sometimes on a nightly basis.

   Soon after his mother’s death, Will’s father decided to move with his son to a small town in the Johto called New Bark. Perhaps he was thinking that some fresh air, maybe some friends would get Will out of his slump. I really don’t know. If that is what he was thinking, though, he was absolutely right â€" Will quickly became far healthier than he ever had been. He also made two friends, who would become the best friends he ever had…for some time, at least… His best friends were named Karen and Aaron, both of whom lived in New Bark Town.

   Will and his father lived peacefully in New Bark Town for seven years. Will was anxiously awaiting his fourteenth birthday so he could start his Pokémon journey.

   For those of you wondering, rules were quite different back when Will was starting out. Pokémon were considered highly dangerous creatures, and it was the law that one needed to be at least fourteen to handle them. This was utter nonsense, of course, and Professor Birch of Hoenn led a campaign to change the rules during Will’s sixteenth year. He succeeded, as you probably have figured out, and while Professor Birch was not exactly the most…orthodox…of professors, he is remembered and respected for this even today.

   Will would have the happiest, and also saddest, time of his life when he set out to train his own Pokémon.

   And our story begins there…



   â€œWill!”

   â€œCan’t hear you…” mumbled Will.
   
   â€œWILL!”

   â€œFive more minutes…” muttered Will.

   â€œWILL! GET UP!”

   Will jerked awake.

   â€œComing, Dad!” he yelled, leaping out of his bed and making it hastily. He threw some clothes on and collected his backpack. This was it…Today was the day…

   â€œWILL!” shouted his father. “YOU HAVE FIVE MINUTES TO BE AT THE LAB!”

   Will bolted down the steps in a frenzy.

   â€œI know, Dad!” he yelled. “I have time!”

   â€œFOUR minutes!” corrected his father urgently.

   Will smiled and met his father at the door. They hugged awkwardly.
   
   â€œStay safe,” said his father gruffly. He was smiling, but his eyes told Will that he was serious.

   Will nodded.

   â€œThree minutes!” said his father, glancing at the clock.

   â€œRight!” said Will, and ran out the door toward Professor Elm’s Laboratory. He rushed inside just as the clock struck eight.

   Will grinned sheepishly at the sight that awaited him. Aaron, his green mess of hair shining loudly, was sitting in an armchair, bent forward in an anxious position. He looked up, saw Will, and smiled in a friendly way. Karen was standing up. Her arms were folded and she did not look happy.

   â€œWell, Professor Elm,” she said sardonically, “I think that everyone’s here now.”

   â€œI wasn’t late!” said Will defensively. “I was just… on time.”

   â€œYes, well, the other group has already picked their Pokémon, and we said we’d wait for you,” snarled Karen. “So we don’t get the starter Pokémon we were counting on.”

   Will stared guiltily at Aaron, his heart sinking.

   â€œWe don’t get Pokémon?” he asked, dreading the answer.

   â€œOf course you get Pokémon!” said Professor Elm scornfully. “Do you really think I would call you here without a backup plan?”

   Will looked at Professor Elm. Actually, that was exactly the type of thing absentminded Professor Elm would do.

   â€œWell, I do have a backup plan. I’ve received three Pokémon recently whose evolutions are currently unknown. We need you three to train each to train one on a Pokémon journey, and immediately notify us of their evolutions.”

   â€œSo… we only get to train one?” said Karen, horrified.

   â€œOf course not!” laughed Professor Elm. “You can train as many as you like. But I do have a suggestion.”

   â€œA…suggestion?” said Will cautiously.

   â€œYes,” said Elm, looking serious. “Now, as you know, the Pokémon regions are setting up something called the Pokémon Gym Challenge.”

   The trio nodded, puzzled.

   â€œGym leaders train one specific type of Pokémon,” said Elm, pacing back and forth. “And we have all the applicants. But the regions are…shall we say, taking it a step further. They’re forming something called the Pokémon League, where one fights four strong trainers and then, should they succeed, the regional Champion.” Elm turned to face the teenagers. “As of now, our region has no applicants for the Elite Four. I suggest that you each train a separate type of Pokémon…”

   â€œâ€¦And register to be in the Elite Four?!” said Will incredulously.

   Elm’s face fell.

   â€œYes, I’d assumed you wouldn’t want…” he began, but Aaron cut him off.

   â€œThat would be frickin’ SWEET!” said Aaron enthusiastically.

   Elm blinked.

   â€œThat would be really cool,” said Karen, forgetting her anger in the excitement of the moment. “Wouldn’t it, Will?”

   Will looked over at Karen. Her eyes were shining excitedly and she was looking at him apprehensively.

   â€œThat would be amazingly cool,” agreed Will.

   â€œI’m glad you’re so eager,” said Elm happily. “Alright, let’s get you three your first Pokémon!”

I like it!

You're going back into the past to the formation... but remember one thing Will is new to the Elite Four and Karen is a seasoned veteran (but you might be able to change this around)

I know mine is taking place in the future! But I do see one discrepency. There is something about Will's 14th birthday and starting his journey, and then Prof. Birch campaigning to lower the age at his 16th birthday... is this just showing how it changed to ten years old at the time?

Also, I'd hate to be the dampener, but Pokémon were being battled with long before people like Bertha and all the old people were born... in the same type of Pokémon League (but dont take this advice)

Overall, it's shaping to be a great story!

Thanks so much! So far it's one of my favorite stories I've written. I voted for Smoochum. Which may mean that your vote has no say! xD

Why I voted on my own story, I don't know. ('-_-)

I didn't vote yet. I can't make up my mind  :P

Oh, really? Wonder who voted for Slowpoke. A Guest, maybe? :P Or was it SFK?

I don't know if he's keeping up with this, though.  :D

EDIT: I voted for Smoochum! :D Sorry, it's changed to Slowpoke now!

I didn't notice the voting panel until just now. And keep in mind my pokemon knowledge doesn't extend very far past generation 1. Not sure what a smoochum even is except it most likely has big lips, gathering from the name.

Not really. :D

And don't worry - for the most part, this won't go outside gen II

It evolves into Jynx

Aaaaaaand.... voting is now locked. Come here for the next installment of The Will to Go On, will be up tomorrow first thing (when I get up... my local time is five hours behind the NSM time).

And im 8 hours behind UTC... hahaha! woooo the Pacific Side Rules!

I'll take your word for it :D

but most of California sucks... i hate it.

GO WASHINGTON!

HOORAY!

lol

When I post chapters two, three, and four, I'll post my notes - I tried something new this story that seems to be working. Before I write a chapter, I'll make skimpy, few-details notes on what's going to happen. Didn't do that with chapter one, and I'd like to post 2, 3, and 4 at the same time. It's funny how much easier writing is when I know what's going to happen. Even if things don't work out exactly like I wrote them. :)

might work a little bit!  ;D

Now... should I post chapter two HERE? Or should I make an entirely new topic? I just don't want this to get clogged up. xP But then the Story Telling board would get clogged up... gah...

make a new post... ive been doing that. it wont get clogged

Cool - then I won't have to make new polls.

Updated title

Cool! Its writing time for me now! Im going to try the pages feature where I can black out my desktop!

I'm going to try to find some inspiration for Violet City... the way this is going, TWTGO may nt be finished. I'm sure it Will, though. xD pun very much intended

I always find a way to keep going. :)

That was me when i was writing a fanfic for a kanto journey based on myself! got about 50 pages in word in and i went meh... which is a lot considering what I write... and this was in 10 pt font

hahahahaha
and you don't even put nnew paragraphs for quotes in your unedited version.

Story threads are better when there's actually a story in the thread.

Here it is, the fairly short and average chapter two.

Chapter Two – Will He Choose the Right One?

   “Wow…” whispered Will, looking at the choices. There were three PokéBalls sitting in a large display case. He suddenly frowned. A nasty thought had just occurred to him. He turned to Professor Elm. “What if I pick the wrong one?” he said uneasily.

   Elm laughed.

   “You’re supposed to be psychic, Will! I think you know which one you should take.”

   “You mean that there’s a Psychic-type Pokémon in here?” said Will, astonished.

   “Of course!” said Elm impatiently. “I know about your…background. How could I ask you to collect a certain type and not expect it to be Psychic?”

   Will smiled, closed his eyes, and put his hand over the PokéBall farthest to the right. He didn’t need to think about it. He knew it would be the right choice.

   “Well, send it out!” said Elm encouragingly.
   
   “Here goes,” said Will, suddenly so excited that it hurt. “Go!” he shouted, throwing the PokéBall into the air. A small, humanlike Pokémon came out. It had a cute, pink little face with big, round eyes and a pair of pink lips. It had what appeared to be a small mop of blonde hair.

   “It’s so cute!” said Will enthusiastically. He frowned again and turned to Elm. “Uh…what is it?”

   “Oh, right!” said Elm, smacking himself. “I almost forgot – I haven’t given you three your PokéDexes yet!” He ran from the room and returned a second later with three large electronic Pokémon encyclopedias – to the average Pokémon Trainer, a PokéDex.

   Will, Karen, and Aaron accepted their PokéDex one by one. Will started his up and flipped to his Pokémon’s picture. The PokéDex entry read:

   “Smoochum, the Kiss Pokémon. Its lips are the most sensitive parts on its body. It always uses its lips first to examine things.”

   “Smoochum is an Ice- and Psychic-type Pokémon, Will,” said Elm.

   “Awesome!” said Will happily. “I did pick the right one! Hey! What’s so funny?” he demanded; Karen was stifling a fit of the giggles and Aaron was actually rolling around on the floor chortling.

   “Kiss Pokémon?” choked Karen, eyes watering from laughter.

   Will went very red.

   “Let’s see yours, then!” he demanded.

   “Alright,” said Karen, managing to stop laughing. She walked over to the display case and picked up her own PokéBall. She sent out a black dog-esque Pokémon with a bit of armor on its back. She fired up her own PokéDex and checked the entry.

   “Houndour, the Dark Pokémon. It uses different kinds of cries for communicating with others of its kind and for pursuing its prey.”

   “Houndour is a Dark- and Fire-type Pokémon,” explained Elm.

   “Wait…” said Karen slowly. “Dark and Fire? So… which type do I train?”

   Elm shrugged. “That’s completely up to you, my dear.”

   Karen growled rather like a Houndour and stepped out of the way of Aaron as he came up to the display case. She sat quite huffily down on an armchair and Houndour immediately attempted to jump on her lap. She shoved Houndour off in disgust and went to stand next to Will. Houdour followed her loyally.

   “Guess that leaves me with this Pokémon,” said Aaron brightly. He picked it up and sent out a large dragonfly with large green eyes that somehow covered its whole head.

   Karen and Will both took an involuntary step back.

   “I – don’t – like – insects…” said Will disgustedly.

   “Me neither,” said Karen, shuddering.

   “I do!” said Aaron happily. Aaron whipped out his PokéDex in a cool way that Will somehow knew he wouldn’t be able to pull off. He flipped to the page of his Pokémon, which was now buzzing around the room at lightning speed.

   “Yanma, the Clear Wing Pokémon. Its large eyes can scan 360 degrees. It looks in all directions to seek out insects as its prey.”

   “I LOVE Bug Pokémon!” said Aaron, extremely psyched.

   “Did I SAY it was a Bug Pokémon?” said Professor Elm, rather offended.

   “Umm… no,” Aaron said sheepishly. “Is it?”

   “Well…yes,” admitted Elm. “A Bug- and Flying-type. But…” he said, and his face got very spooky, “…DON’T interrupt me again,” he hissed.

   “G-got it,” said Aaron. “Uh…sir, yes, sir!”

   “Well,” said Elm, looking at all of them, “you should head west, toward Cherrygrove City. From there, you can easily get to Violet, where the first gym is.

“Keep in mind that you can keep one Pokémon out walking with you,” he advised. “It will have its benefits, believe me.”

He smiled good-naturedly at them all. “See you later.”

Karen’s Houndour led the way out towards Route 29, followed by Will, then Aaron last of all, who was talking to Will.

   “So…Kiss Pokémon? Really?” Aaron taunted.

   Unfortunately, Smoochum heard him. Smoochum blasted him with an icy cold Powder Snow, knocking him to the ground. She stuck her tongue out as she passed him.

good! kinda short, but concise! and i voted too!

Thanks! Can't wait to post chapters three and four... And I just now finished chapter five... which involves a depressing Dark Cave scene.

You know, i havent gone into dark cave in a LONG time.

I recently did in my HeartGold, actually.

And Aaron is probably my favorite character now. xD

in the story? or in general? and i kinda think your enthusiasm for Will has kinda died a little!

Maybe so. He certainly doesn't have as much dialogue as Aaron and Karen do...

But I still like Will a little more than Aaron. I need Will to be the main character because it's fun to write arguments between Aaron and Karen, but I like having the reader view them from the outside. It kind of leaves them to side with either one. If you're viewing it from Karen's perspective, you're kinda obliged to siding with her... but if you just see them fighting, you can make up your  mind. You've not really seen any of this yet....

But I have too much fun writing them and they fill up much of chapters three and five.

well... maybe you can post chapter 3 today... since chapter 2 was short

I'm doing it right now (yes, I know you meant later today)... But I think you'll be disappointed. I don't know if it's really as good as I was hyping it up.

Chapter three, folks.

   So that’s how Will, Karen, and Aaron (wow, accidental rhyme!) set out on their epic journey across…Route 29.

   â€œHow much longer do we have?” groaned Aaron, still bringing up the rear.

   â€œOh, is the little baby tired?” Karen said sarcastically. Smoochum let out a distinctive giggle. Karen smiled at her. She looked at her own Pokémon and grimaced. Why couldn’t she have gotten something cute?

   â€œCome on, Smoochum,” called Will. Smoochum toddled ahead to catch up.

   Karen sighed. Her Houndour was now walking a tad in front of her. She glared at it.
   
   â€œNo,” snapped Karen. “I’m in front. Me. Not you.”

   Houndour gave her an adoring look and let her pass, which somehow made Karen even angrier.

   â€œOh, come on, Karen, lighten up!” said Will pleadingly.
   
   Karen turned her head away.

   Will looked at Smoochum and shrugged in an “I tried” sort of way.

   â€œSo, who’s going to catch their first Pokémon?” said Aaron, breaking the silence.

   â€œMe,” said Karen without hesitation.

   â€œOh, really?” said Will skeptically. “And what type are you going to train?”

   â€œFire,” said Karen. “I think they match my fiery passion.”

   â€œOr fiery temper,” suggested Aaron, earning a glare.

   Suddenly, out of the bush in front of them came a small scorpion-like Pokémon.

   â€œThat is so cool!” said Aaron. “I bet it’s a Bug-type!”

   â€œAren’t you going to check?” said Karen suspiciously.

   â€œNah, I can go with my natural instinct,” said Aaron, nonchalantly reading the PokéDex protruding from his pocket.

   â€œSkorupi, the Scorpion Pokémon. It burrows under the sand to lie in wait for prey. Its tail claws can inject its prey with a savage poison. Type: Poison/Bug.”

   â€œSweet, it IS a Bug-type!” said Aaron. “Go, Yanma!” Yanma flew towards the frightened Skorupi. “Use Tackle!”

   Yanma flew towards Skorupi in a weak Tackle. Skorupi nevertheless took some damage.

   Skorupi let out a freaky, hissing cry and shot out a poison barb at Yanma.

   Aaron gasped. “Why, you little -”

   â€œFreak?” suggested Karen.

   â€œDanger to society?” said Will worriedly.

   â€œ- beauty!” gushed Aaron.

   â€œAnd he’s making fun of me for having a Kiss Pokémon,” Will muttered to Karen. She smiled reluctantly.

   Aaron shouted, “Here…I…GO!”

   At the word “GO”, he threw a PokéBall at the Skorupi… well, it was meant for Skorupi. It ended up cracking Karen’s skull.

   â€œEEEEEEYAAH!” shouted Karen in pain, massaging her head. “That… really… HUUUUUURT!” She turned toward Aaron with a look that would have frightened the Grim Reaper. “The PokéBall is supposed to go towards the POKÉMON, you frickin’ IDIOT!”

   Aaron recoiled slightly.
   
   â€œUmm… yeah. S-sorry about that, Kare. Won’t happen again.”

   â€œQUIT CALLING ME KARE!” shrieked Karen. She flopped down on the ground to sit cross-legged frustratedly. Houndour bounded up to her happily and jumped onto her lap.

   â€œTHIS IS NOT THE TIME!” she screamed. Houndour recognized the signs and climbed carefully off her.

   â€œI caught it!” cried Aaron joyously. “Look, Kare! I caught a Pokémon first!”

   This did not improve Karen’s mood.

   â€œI wanna catch a Psychic Pokémon,” announced Will.

   â€œEEEK!” shouted Karen.

   â€œWill you please stop screaming?” said Will irritably, pointing to his ears.

   Karen opened her mouth, but no sound came out. She pointed behind him.

   Will turned around to find himself looking straight into the eyes of a Pokémon. He leapt back, caught off guard. “Whoa… what is that?” He pulled out his PokéDex (We’re going to like these things, he thought) and looked up a yellow Pokémon with a white ring of fur around its neck and a pendulum in hand.

   â€œHypno, the Hypnosis Pokémon. Always holding a pendulum that it swings at a steady rhythm, it causes drowsiness in anyone nearby. Type: Psychic.”

   â€œDon’t look at it!” commanded Karen. She looked at Hypno’s seductively swaying pendulum as if it were dangerous. “You’ll get hypno…” She blinked, her eyes following the subtle movements of the pendulum. “You’ll get hyp -” she began again, but was cut off by a large yawn. “You’ll get…hypn…” her eyelids drooped, but from what Will could see of her pupils, she was still watching the pendulum. “You’ll…get…” she mumbled, and her knees began to buckle. Aaron caught her in his arms triumphantly just as she fell and laid her down on the ground, where she fell asleep.

   Will rolled his eyes.

   â€œDude, you have to catch that thing now!” said Aaron happily.

   â€œAnd…why?” Will inquired suspiciously.

   â€œNow we can get her to sleep whenever we want!” said Aaron enthusiastically.

   Will’s eyebrows met his hairline.

   â€œWe can WHAT?!” he cried.

   Aaron went bright red and covered his mouth.

   â€œOh, God… not like that, dude…” he said quickly. “I meant it would be useful if she keeps screaming like she has been doing… to shut her up…”

   Will nodded, his eyebrows still way up.

   â€œSure, Aaron…” he said. “Oooookay, then.”

   He turned back to the Hypno, while keeping his eyes distinctly off the pendulum. “Go, Smoochum!” he shouted. Smoochum toddled forward importantly. “Use Sweet Kiss!” (He heard Aaron snigger in the background.)

   The Hypno staggered around, confused and unable to attack.
   
   â€œNow, Smoochum!” shouted Will. “Powder Snow!”

   Smoochum, having practiced this on Aaron, was excellent in freezing the Hypno solid. Will wasted no time in using a PokéBall. It was more than successful, and Will caught his first Pokémon.

   â€œOkay, it’s…seven o’clock,” said Will, checking his watch, “and it’s starting to get dark… We need to get to Cherrygrove City.” He looked at Houndour, who was sniffing at Karen. She was still slumbering. He sighed. “What should we do about her?”

   â€œI can carry her,” said Aaron all-too-innocently.

   Will looked at him suspiciously.

   â€œI don’t think so,” he said. “Just wake her up.”

   â€œKaren,” said Aaron, prodding her arm. “Kaaaaren…” He sighed. “Kare, get up!”

   Karen’s eyelids fluttered weakly.

   â€œDon’t call me Kare…” she mumbled.

   â€œWake up, Karen,” said Will. “We need to reach Cherrygrove City.”

   â€œAll right,” she grumped. She stretched hugely and yawned, but obliged in getting up and trudging alongside Aaron and Will towards Cherrygrove City.

   â€œHey, Kare!” said Aaron happily (Karen growled). “Guess what â€" Will caught that Hypno!”

   Karen groaned.

   â€œDo you two hate me or something?” she moaned miserably.

   â€œâ€™Course not,” insisted Aaron seriously. “If we did, we wouldn’t be nearly so mean.”

   Will laughed and even Karen gave a grudging smile, and they continued toward the bright lights of Cherrygrove.

Ok! So FREAKING hilarious! I love a good bicker scene (and you're setting it up a little so that Aaron has that secret crush for Karen... i can sense these things)

You kinda overly hyped it, but it was still kind of cool!

If you like a good bicker scene, you'll LOOOOVE chapter five - that's basically one big Dark Cave of bicker.

I think I was just excited while writing it.

But I like chapters four and five a bit better. I filled chapter five with all sorts of ridiculous poor-Aaron moments because I needed to fill it up a bit. Maybe I'll release two chapters every two days... or a chapter a day. Or do what I was originally going to do. :)

my stuff is going to be pretty boring, travelling alone and all... but wait until chapter 6 probably when we meet professor araragi in her true form!

I knew something was going to be up with her when it said she would be traveling with him on one of the regions...

;)

it may be chapter 7 or 8... who knows, i gotta cover 5 gyms in Kanto in 3 chapters... and cover my bases

 ;D You didn't vote in my poll! Hahahaha
you probably don't like any of the choices!

I did... i picked the cool one (hypno is not cool)

I like Hypno... I just like it in the story because of the next chapter.

I was asking story wise, not actual "which is your favorite"...

Smoochum is a close second in the story for me.

And I think I'll post chapter four tomorrow... nothing more because it's pretty long.

you voted on your own poll... now that is biased sampling and it should be thrown out! (statistics taught me that!)

I think houndour has potential... and so does Karen

Yep. You've got to have figured out that she switches to Dark-types eventually. Hypno partially causes that... But gah, I can't give away too many details!

i kinda figured anyways... she hates psychic pokémon

Whatever you think will happen to make her switch, you're most likely wrong. xD

I don't see how you could guess.

ok... i may not know, but i will use four little words if im right!

I think the words are, "so", "told", "you", and "I".

Though not necessarily in that order.

damn... you cracked my code... or youve seen that American Dad episode "Four Little Words"

Nope, never seen that show. :D

i am watching that episode now...
haha!

I'm just writing the opening Violet City scene...

Have no idea what should happen.

dont come asking me!

Why would I do that? This is my story, bub.

And I've got a pretty clear idea now! :D

Wow, eight minutes can make a difference.

yes it can!

I'm still too lazy to start writing it though. :)

Whatever.

well im not to write in mine!

Next Chapter: I'm Celadon Happy!

Okay... I'm going to go write.

Tomorrow, up will be..
Chapter Four: Karen Loses Her Will

;D

hahaha I love the pun!

I had to put that chapter title... and it really fits.

thats doubly better! woo!

Although no one seems to be reading this... I have to keep posting it. For me. xP

Chapter Four
Karen Loses Her Will

   They arrived in the city, yawning and slumping. High above them, a black bird Pokémon watched Karen closely. They walked a few blocks to the Pokémon Center and entered happily. They noticed that there was a bit of a line to heal their Pokémon, so they decided to sit down for a moment.

   They each took a chair and sat in silence for a while.

   “So,” said Aaron. “What should our next move be?”

   “Definitely head towards Violet City,” said Karen. “The first gym is there.”

   “Yeah,” agreed Will. “But we should probably wait till morning.”

   “But then the other group might beat us there,” pointed out Aaron anxiously. “Hey, does anyone know who the other group is?”

   “The other group of what?” inquired a voice behind them. They turned their heads to see three people listening in on their conversation.

   The one who had spoken was a guy with shoulder-length purple hair, rather the color of Will’s own. Next to him was another guy, this one with plain, black hair. And next to him was a beautiful tall blonde girl clad entirely in black.

   Will watched Aaron size up the first guy, and scrutinize the second. Will rolled his eyes – he knew what was coming next. Aaron took one look at the blonde girl and his mouth fell open. Aaron took in her appearance and Will could practically see any thoughts of Karen pop out of existence.

   Aaron sidled past the guys rather like an insect and approached the girl. “Hello,” he said, working his mouth into what he clearly thought was a winning smile. “I’m Aaron.”

   The girl looked at him in disgust.

   “Fantastic,” she said sarcastically, and pushed him away.

   Aaron looked shocked. Will sighed, got up, and dragged Aaron back to his chair.

   “The other group of what?” asked the purple-haired boy again.

   “The other group of trainers aspiring to join the Elite Four,” explained Aaron, his eyes still on the blonde girl’s flawless body.

   The purple-haired boy laughed rudely.

   “I don’t think that we’re the other group,” he said, rolling his eyes. “I was told our rivals had potential.”

   Aaron went bright red.

   “Do you really want to say that?” he growled.

   The boy shrugged.

   “It doesn’t matter, really. You’ll be horrible whether I say it or not.”

   “Lucian, stop,” said the plain-looking kid, frowning.

   Aaron sniggered.

   “You’re name’s Lucian?” he laughed.

   Lucian didn’t look fazed in the least.

   “Yes,” he answered. He looked at the rest of Aaron’s group. “This is Norman,” he said, gesturing to the plain boy, “and this is Cynthia.”

   Aaron smiled at Cynthia again.

   “Wow,” he said hopefully. “That’s a nice name.”

   Karen rolled her eyes.

   “Can you spell desperate?” she muttered.

   “Now we’re at a disadvantage,” said Lucian. He looked at Smoochum, who was in the chair and cuddling up to Will. “Er… so to speak.”

   “In what way?” asked Karen.

   “You know our names, but we don’t know yours, of course,” said Lucian.

   “Sucks to be you, doesn’t it?” grouched Aaron, still angry.

   “No, not at all,” said Lucian, smiling at the very idea. “I would like to know, though. What’s your name, green-hair?”

   “Aaron,” muttered Aaron.

   Lucian gave a loud chortle.

   “The freaky bug-obsessed weirdo Aaron?” he snorted. “Wow. Elm is lowering his standards. And you would be…?” he asked, pointing to Karen.

   “Karen,” she said, an intense look of dislike on her face.

   “I’ve heard of you as well,” said Lucian, smiling. “You can’t be much of a threat. Maybe you’ll whine at me, but that’s the worst you can do.”

   Karen went bright red and stared at Lucian with a look of hatred.

   “And you would be…?” he asked, coming to Will at last.

   “Will,” he said reluctantly.

   “The only person on your team with a shred of potential,” snorted Lucian. “If that. But we must be going. We can’t afford to sit here and talk with losers all day. Norman! Cynthia! Come on.”

   Smoochum stuck her tongue out at him as he passed. Compared to that kid, she seemed to be saying, Aaron’s a treasure.

   “What a jerk,” Aaron said angrily. He sat down and folded his arms, clearly in a bad mood.

   “It’s okay,” Karen said. “He’s just another idiot amateur. We’ll get him.” Karen reached into her bag and pulled out an apple. “Here,” she said, handing one to Will and pulling out another for Aaron. “God,” she snapped at Aaron. “No need to look so angry.”

   “Who said I was angry?” said Aaron darkly as he squeezed his apple into a pulp.

   “No one did,” said Will cautiously. “But I think you should heal your Pokémon.”

   Will got up, took all of their PokéBalls to the counter, and handed them to the nurse. Shortly after getting them back, he dished out the PokéBalls to his friends.

   Will rubbed his forehead.
   
   “It’s already ten o’clock, guys,” he sighed. “We’d better stay here.”

   Aaron went up to the nurse and booked three rooms in the Pokémon Center. He bade Karen and Will an annoyed goodnight and walked off to his room.

   “Goodnight,” yawned Will, and shuffled to his own room.

   Karen went to her room shortly afterward, exhausted. She made to put her PokéBalls away – Huh? PokéBalls? With an s? Karen frowned. She only had one Pokémon. One of the boys must have given her his by mistake. She bit her lip, wondering which one it was. She threw the PokéBall in the air and out came…

   “Oh, crap,” she whispered. “No… no…”

   Will’s Hypno loomed over her and swung its pendulum right in front of her face. She gathered up the PokéBall and attempted to call it back, but she was too afraid to try.
   
   “No…” she whispered again, looking on with fear. The pendulum made a sound as it swung back and forth… Whoosh. Whoosh. Whoosh. Whoosh. Karen’s pulse seemed to slow down to align perfectly with it. Her eyes were pulled to the irresistible sway of the pendulum. Her eyelids drooped as the alluring Pokémon began to do its job. Her mind was suddenly filled with tempting ideas of sleep and relaxation. Suddenly, something snapped inside her, and she could resist no longer. Her eyes took on a glazed look and closed halfway; a small, dreamy half-smile formed on her face; and, completely hypnotized, she pocketed the PokéBall and followed the Hypno gradually out of the room.

   She followed it out of the Pokémon Center and entered into the silent night. The pendulum sparkled slightly as it swung, enticing Karen a few steps at a time. They went on like this for some time, and she finally followed it all the way to Cherrygrove’s beach. Hypno walked backwards into the lake and Karen pursued. High above them, the black bird Pokémon that was keeping tabs on Karen was panicking – if she continued to follow, she would drown.

   The bird Pokémon was struck by an idea, and it flew off to the city.



   Meanwhile, Will was having a nightmare. Karen was following something into a body of water, completely unaware of what she was doing… How could they help? She was going to drown! He was startled awake by a TAP-TAP-TAPping on his window. A small black bird Pokémon was trying to get his attention.

   He let it in, and it zoomed straight for the door, trying to get it open.

   “Do you know where Karen is?” Will yelped. “Is it too late?”

   The bird didn’t answer, but Will got the message. He woke Aaron up frantically and they set off down the streets, chasing the bird Pokémon. They arrived at the beach, and they saw Karen following Will’s Hypno into deep waters. She was already in up to her neck and she was approaching the middle of the lake, where there was a huge drop-off.

   Will wasted no time in diving into the waters and swimming a bit further in.

   “Come on!” he yelled to Aaron, who was panicking.

   “No!” said Aaron anxiously. “I could drown!”

   “YOU’RE helpful!” snarled Will, and swam as fast as he could toward the middle of the lake. Karen was completely oblivious as to where she was. Hypno was not in the water, but somehow standing on top of it. “KAREN!” he shouted as he got nearer to her. She didn’t hear him, or appeared not to. She took another step towards Hypno. Will finally reached them and seized Karen around the waist. He tried to drag her back towards him, but she fought to keep her eyes on Hypno. She took another step, pulling Will with her. Will started to panic as well. He couldn’t pull her; this was more suited for Aaron. He wasn’t strong enough.

   Karen tried to shake Will off, and his hands slid farther down. Hold on – there was something bulging in her pocket… the PokéBall! He thrust his hand into her pocket and extracted the PokéBall, calling Hypno back just in time.

   Karen looked extremely dazed and exhausted. She mumbled something incoherently and immediately fell asleep. Feeling triumphant, Will lifted her up – with much difficulty – and carried her back to shore. He reached the beach and Aaron – who had calmed down – looked extremely relieved.

   “I can take her from here,” he offered.

   Will glared at him, but reluctantly handed her over. They walked in silence for some time. The bird insisted on following. Just outside the Pokémon Center, Karen woke up. She looked around, puzzled, then looked up and saw Aaron’s face.

   “Good morning, sunshine,” said Aaron pleasantly.

   “EEW!” she shrieked. “Put me down, you perv! Put me DOWN!”

   Aaron shrugged, but dropped her. She got up, folded her arms, and glared at him.

   “And what was that all about?” she demanded.

   “You don’t remember any of it?” said Will incredulously.

   “Just tell me what this is all about. Now,” she said angrily.

   They entered the Pokémon center and sat around a table while Will explained what had happened.

   “And then, we saw you in the water and, uh…” he said, trailing off. He had just glanced at Aaron, who was behind Karen and pointing at himself frantically. “…and we saved you.”

   “We?” inquired Karen.

   “Well,” began Will, but Aaron cut him off.

   “And by that, he means that I dived heroically in the lake, reached you, and carried you back to shore,” said Aaron importantly.

   Karen raised one of her eyebrows as she looked from one boy to the next.

   “Really,” she said, clearly disbelieving. “Please explain why your clothes are completely dry, and Will and I are soaked from the neck down.”

   Aaron faltered.

   “And I’m supposed to believe you called Hypno back, too?” snorted Karen. “Nice. Real nice.”

   She looked over at Will, who was smiling weakly.

   She smiled wryly, leaned over the table, and kissed him – SMAK – on the cheek.

   A small grin broke out on Will’s face.

   “What, none for me?” said Aaron indignantly. “I carried you here!”

   “Whatever,” she said, shrugging, and leaned over to his cheek. However, he held up his hand.

   “Nope,” he refused. “None of that cheek crap. Right here,” he said, pointing to his mouth, clearly hoping to get Karen furious. Surprisingly, she shrugged again.

   “If that’s what you want,” she said. Aaron looked pleased as she leaned forward… he closed his eyes… and Karen grabbed Smoochum from the ground and shoved it against his face.

   Aaron opened his eyes and saw with disgust what was pressed to his lips.

   He tried to wrench Smoochum off, but it was stuck fast. A series of screaming noises from Aaron followed before Will stopped laughing long enough to call Smoochum back.

   Aaron glared at Karen, who was laughing behind her hand. Will suddenly noticed that the sun was rising and hurried them out to Route 30.

   “Do you think Smoochum needs some mouthwash?” he asked Karen just loud enough for Aaron to hear.

   “SHUT UP!” roared Aaron as his friends laughed.

   “Oh, come on, Aaron,” said Karen, putting her arm around his neck. “We’re only joking! Why can’t we just be one big happy family? Look, Will’s up for it!” she said, pulling Will over and putting her other arm around his neck.

   “We are a family,” said Aaron. “Big, happy…and dysfunctional.”

   Karen sighed.

   “Hey, Kare,” said Aaron suddenly. “It’s that bird Pokémon!”

   “The one who led you guys to me?” said Karen in surprise.

   “Yeah! Let’s find out what it is,” said Aaron, pulling out his PokéDex.

   “Murkrow, the Darkness Pokémon. Feared and loathed by many, it is believed to bring misfortune to all those who see it at night. Type: Dark/Flying.”

   “Didn’t bring misfortune to us,” said Will.

   “Hey, Kare!” said Aaron, struck by a sudden idea. “Why don’t you catch this and train Dark-types instead of Fire!”

   “Do Dark-types suit me?” asked Karen skeptically, looking at the Murkrow.

   “Oh, believe me, they suit you,” said Aaron.

   “Okay, then!” said Karen agreeably. “Go… PokéBall!”

   She threw a PokéBall at it, and Murkrow all-too-willingly hopped inside.
   
   “This Pokémon is just as useless as Houndour,” she muttered, reading its PokéDex. But Will wasn’t fooled; her eyes were shining and he knew she was really happy with her new catch.

   Will took out a PokéBall.

   “What are you doing?” Karen said suspiciously.

   “I’m releasing Hypno,” said Will firmly.

   “What?” gasped Aaron. “Why would you do that?”

   Will and Karen both turned to look at him.

   “Umm, it put Karen to sleep, made her walk all over the town, and tried to drown her.”

   “Why wouldn’t he release it?” Karen said.

   Aaron shrugged.

   Will threw the PokéBall far into a forest on the edge of the road, where he heard it open. When he ran to retrieve the PokéBall, Hypno was gone. He slammed the PokéBall shut, finalizing the release. He looked down at the empty PokéBall and sighed.

   When he came back, Aaron was shaking his head.

   “Can’t believe you did that,” he sighed. “Your first Pokémon.”

   “It was insane!” said Karen heatedly. “It tried to kill me!”

   Aaron shrugged as if it were no big deal.
   
   “So what? Good riddance, in my opinion,” he said.

   She glared at him, then turned back to Will and talked to him instead.

   “I’m really glad I caught this little guy,” she said, looking up at Murkrow.

   “It suits you,” said Aaron seriously. “I mean, look at that PokéDex entry: ‘feared and loathed by many…believed to bring misfortune…’” He looked up. “If I didn’t know better, Kare, I’d say that was written about you.”

   He stared at Karen’s face, slowly turning red, and bolted down the path as quickly as he could. She was in hot pursuit, screaming “WHY, YOU LITTLE –”

   Will rolled his eyes, smiling, and followed them.

Chapter Five
Will We Ever Reach Violet City?

   They continued on Route 30 for some time. Will and Karen were especially bad off, because they had just gone for an unplanned swim and their clothes were still damp.

   “So, Will,” said Aaron, breaking the silence. “Are you still training Psychic-types?”

   “Of course he is,” snorted Karen. “The guy’s psychic, isn’t he?”

   “Yeah, but what if all his Psychic-types try to hypnotize you?” demanded Aaron. “There are plenty of Psychic Pokémon that learn Hypnosis.”

   “His choice,” Karen sniffed, but she did look a little pale.

   “I’m not going to catch my Pokémon based on their moveset,” scoffed Will.

   Karen looked extremely relieved.

   “That’s good, then,” she said comfortably.

   “What do you mean?” sniggered Aaron. “He never said that they wouldn’t know Hypnosis. He just said that wouldn’t be a contributing factor.”

   Karen gave him a nasty look and went to walk on Will’s other side.

   “I wonder what those other people are training,” she said thoughtfully. “Lucian…Cynthia…and that forgettable kid.”

   “I don’t care,” said Aaron angrily. “I just want to see him get paid back. Lucian is the biggest –” (here he called Lucian something that made Karen glare at him) “– that I’ve ever seen.”

   “Yeah, but you…” began Karen angrily.

   “Guys, look!” said Will suddenly. A small Pokémon had just crept nervously out of the forest and was approaching Will gingerly.

   “What is it?” said Aaron excitedly, but was immediately “SSSSSHHHHH!”ed by Karen and Will. Will carefully took out his PokéDex, not wanting to startle the Pokémon. He looked up a small, white Pokémon with a round green head of hair covering its face.

   “Ralts, the feeling Pokémon. The horns on its head provide a strong power that enables it to sense people’s emotions. Type: Psychic.”

   Will looked up.

   “I think I’m going to catch it!” he whispered. He picked up a PokéBall and gently tossed it at the Ralts (something told him he wouldn’t have to weaken this one).

   Jerk. Jerk. Jerk. DING.

   “Great for you,” said Karen happily, shooting a smug look at Aaron.

   “Why don’t you check its moves, Will?” suggested Aaron slyly.

   “Let’s see…” mumbled Will. “It knows Psychic, Magical Leaf, Double Team, and…” his voice trailed off. “Oh…” he gulped. “Um…Hypnosis.”
   
   Aaron broke into derisive laughter.

   Karen turned her head away from Aaron to talk to Will.

   “I really don’t mind,” she said honestly. “I don’t think this one will try anything.”

   Will smiled and nodded.

   Walking on, Will noticed that the trail became less and less pronounced. Soon they left Route 30 and came to Route 31. Right in front of them, there was a cave entrance. Will looked at his friends, who were looking back at him.

   “I don’t think we should enter,” voiced Karen. “We’re not supposed to take any detours. Let’s just keep heading west to Violet City.”

   By saying that they shouldn’t, she sealed Aaron’s vote that they definitely should.

   “Come on, Kare, where’s your spirit of adventure?” asked Aaron, grabbing her wrists and tugging her towards the little entrance.

   “Right here,” she said nervously. “But my spirit of common sense is overpowering it.”

   “It’ll be fine,” he said coaxingly, pulling her closer to the cave. “Besides, we really couldn’t do it without you,” he added sweetly.

   “Shut up,” she snapped, but she looked slightly flustered as she reluctantly followed Aaron into the cave.

   They all missed the sign next to the entrance – “DARK CAVE – AVOID UNLESS POKÉMON KNOWS FLASH. DARK AND DIFFICULT TO NAVIGATE.”

   They figured out the consequences shortly after stepping in.

   “Aaron!” shrieked Karen, terrified. She was unable to see anything, not even the light of the entrance. It was pitch-black. “AARON! WHERE DID YOU GO? THIS ISN’T FUNNY!”

   “Boo,” whispered Aaron right into her ear.

   “EEEEEYAAAH!” she screamed.
   
   “Relax, it’s only me,” said Aaron soothingly. “You’re fine. I didn’t mean to scare you.”

   “How can you mean anything otherwise when saying the word ‘boo’?” she snapped, and Aaron knew exactly the way she was glaring at him. “Besides, I was NOT scared.”

   “Why’d you scream, then?” he asked, and Karen could tell he had that annoying superior smirk.

   “Uh…” she said, at a loss. “Uh… I was humoring you,” she said lamely.

   “You were humoring me?” repeated Aaron, the smug smile more pronounced than ever in his voice. “Okay, then. Consider me humored.”

   “Good,” she snapped, and walked in what she thought was the opposite direction. It wasn’t.

   “OWWCH!” said Aaron in pain. “What, are you trying to run me over?”

   “No, but that’s an excellent idea,” she snarled. “The best one you’ve had all –”

   “Will you two PLEASE SHUT UP!” Will shouted, from somewhere to their left.

   “Will?” Karen gasped.

   “No, it’s Professor Elm, coming to tell you there’s been a mistake, and you OOOOF!” Aaron started to say sarcastically, but ended in a cry of pain; Karen had finally had enough and had slugged him in the stomach with all her might.

   “We need to find the exit,” bellowed Will.

   “Thanks for the update!” shouted Karen sarcastically. “Oh, there seems to be a problem. WE CAN’T SEE IT!”

   “Don’t mind her, Will!” yelled Aaron. “She’s just in a bad mood because I scared her! Maybe we should leave her here and –” he suddenly stopped speaking, clearly in pain. Karen had kicked him harder than she knew she could, in the last spot he would have chosen to be kicked. “– owwwwwwww…” he groaned slowly.

   “Ooohh…” said Karen, feeling a little bad. “Umm…sorry, Aaron. I didn’t mean to, uh… hurt you.”

   “I wasn’t hurt,” muttered Aaron through clenched teeth, trying to stop himself from screaming.

   “Okay, then,” said Karen with that annoying wry smile of hers. “Come on, let’s find the exit.”

   “Got it,” muttered Aaron. He stood up and walked straight into the wall. Karen and Will winced at the nasty crack they heard and could tell his face was contorting with pain. “That hurt,” he whimpered.

   “Uh, are you…okay?” Karen asked uncertainly.

   “Fine,” he said shortly. “Come…on…” he insisted bravely, taking another step and tripping over a small rock. “Oh my God,” he groaned. “I think…my ankle’s…broken.”

   Will and Karen groaned. This was all they needed in a pitch-black cave where they couldn’t even see their hands in front of their faces.

   “Can you walk on it?” said Karen worriedly.

   “Don’t know,” he grunted. He tried to stand up, but he couldn’t quite manage and he fell down hard on his knees. He was overcome with pain and he passed out.

   “Aaron?” said Karen frantically. “…AARON?”

   “I think he’s fainted,” said Will, grimacing.

   Karen walked over to where they had last heard Aaron and nearly tripped over him. She groaned and lifted him off the floor of the cave. Meanwhile, Will felt along the sides of the wall and found the small hole they had crawled through.

   “Yessss,” he murmured. “Karen!” he shouted. “Come here! I found the exit!”
   
   “Thank God,” moaned Karen. “I’m done with caves… forever.”

   Will nodded grimly. Then he realized she couldn’t see him and said “Yeah.”

   Karen and Aaron went through first, Will pushing Aaron’s head through. Will crawled through after that, and they were in much dismay to find that it was already dusk on Route 31.

   Will’s PokeGear suddenly rang. He checked the caller ID – Professor Elm. Puzzled, he answered.

   “Hello?” he said.

   “Will? KRZ…that…KRPZT…you…?”

   “Is this Professor Elm?” he said loudly. Karen gave him a puzzled look. “Elm… you’re breaking up!”

   “I…forgot…KRST…tell…BZZT…something…”

   Will groaned. Absentminded Professor Elm… he turned around and tried it from a different angle. It worked slightly better.

   “Only one of…can take the gym challenge…must decide…yourselves…that one person will…other…
   
   This was followed by a series of buzzing noises, then a dial tone.

   Will turned around frustratedly.

   “What did Professor Elm want?” asked Karen curiously.

   “He said only one of us could take the gym challenge…that we would have to decide who… and he started to say what that one person will do at the end… then our connection broke.”

   Karen gaped.
   
   “I know he’s absentminded, but how could he forget to tell us THAT?” she said incredulously. Will shrugged resignedly. Karen bit her lip and voiced a serious question. “Who’s going to take the challenge?”

   “We’ll figure it out when we get there,” said Will miserably, and led the way for Karen, who was still carrying Aaron. They trudged dejectedly through a gatehouse and into Violet City.

Next chapter. Writing these pretty quickly (probably because they're so short).

Chapter Six
Will Anyone Take the Gym Challenge?

   â€œAhh…” murmured Karen, breathing in. Violet City was full of nostalgic and wonderful smells and neither Will nor Karen could stop themselves from stopping a moment and taking several long breaths. They shook themselves after a minute and walked on to the somberly-painted Pokémon Center. They hurried inside and Karen set Aaron down carefully on a couch. Will walked up to the elderly nurse.

   â€œHello, I’m sorry to bother you, but…” he said, and then glanced over his shoulder at Karen, who was brushing Aaron’s neon green hair out of his eyes. “…we have a situation.”

   â€œA…situation?”  the nurse asked. “Er… what kind of situation, exactly?”

   â€œUmm, we kind of walked into Dark Cave by accident,” Will said, and the nurse clicked her tongue irritably.
   
   â€œSay no more,” she muttered, and rushed over to Aaron’s side. “Have more accidents in Dark Cave then any other place in Johto, you lot do… Nobody reads signs anymore, that’s what it is… Half of you can’t even read… Ridiculous, that’s what it is…” she mumbled under her breath.

   â€œEr â€" sorry?” Will said.

   The old woman looked up, appearing surprised to see him there.

   â€œNothing, dearie. Nothing. Of course,” she began mumbling again, “you all do eavesdrop on old people… Nosy things, teenagers are… You should be wiped out… all of you… All of you wiped out as early as possible…” Her voice trailed off and Will heard her mutter something that sounded distinctly like “nasty little buggers”.

   Will gave a questioning look to Karen, who rolled her eyes and shrugged.

   Aaron stirred slightly and murmured something under his breath. The nurse suddenly stood up.

   â€œWhat is it?” said Will, startled.

   â€œNothing,” she snapped. “He has a broken ankle, that’s all. He’s going to have to stay here for a couple months.”

   â€œWhat?” Karen gasped. “No!”

   The nurse chortled loudly.

   â€œFWAHAHAHA!” she said, wiping a tear of laughter from her eye. “Gets ‘em every time!”

   Will smirked at Karen, who was blushing.

   â€œYou there!” said the nurse suddenly, pointing at Karen. “Come here. Help me carry some tools out here.”

   Karen grimaced at Will but followed the nurse to a back room.

   Aaron mumbled something that Will couldn’t understand again; he was lying face-down. Curious, Will turned him over and Aaron murmured something again.

   â€œKar…en…”

   Will froze. Aaron sighed deeply in his sleep and again muttered “Karen…”

   â€œCome on, Blissey, we haven’t got all day!” snapped the nurse. Evidently she was returning. She was carrying nothing. Next to her waddled a fat, pink Pokémon with an egg growing out of a little pouch on its stomach. Karen was carrying three large and apparently heavy boxes.

   Karen groaned and dumped the boxes onto the table. Rubbing her back, she collapsed onto the couch… except she collapsed on the, er…wrong couch.

   â€œHello,” came Aaron’s muffled voice from underneath Karen. “Just a thought, but do you think you could get off of me? Because I hurt enough without you adding to things.”

   Karen gulped and stood up quickly. Aaron sat up, rubbing his eyes and wincing with pain.

   â€œOkay, Kare,” said Aaron. “I know I’m amazing, but sitting on my head isn’t the right way to go about telling me.”

   â€œIt was an accident!” snapped Karen.

   â€œOkay. If you insist,” Aaron said knowingly, winking at Will.

   â€œBlissey, get over here,” ordered the nurse irritably. The Pokémon â€" evidently Blissey â€" bounded forward happily. “Blissey, use Softboiled so I don’t have to look at these…” She looked at the three teens, searching for the right word. “…things any longer.”

   â€œUmm, hello?” said Aaron indignantly. “We’re not things. We’re teenagers.”

   â€œIt’s all the same thing if you really think about it,” said the old woman nastily.

   Blissey saved Aaron a retort by removing the egg from her pouch (a new one immediately replaced it) and carefully breaking it over Aaron’s ankle. They heard a CRUNCH as his bone mended itself. He stood up without wincing and was able to walk around.

   â€œI think my ankle’s better than it was before,” he said, frowning.

   â€œOf course,” said Karen. “But can you hurry up? We really need to get to the Gym. You’re holding us back, like usual.” Will knew she was being nasty with him to hide the fact that she was secretly relieved. She turned to the nurse. “Hold on… what did you have me carry the tools for?”

   The nurse broke into hysterical laughter.

   â€œTo make you miserable,” she choked with glee. She walked away, cackling maniacally.

   â€œThat lady has serious issues,” said Aaron, frowning. “How does it feel to know there’s another of your kind, Kare?”

   Karen gave a weak smile.

   â€œThis really isn’t the time for jokes, Aaron. We have something serious to tell you,” she said.

   â€œWho said I was joking?” muttered Aaron, but he went quiet.

   They explained their Gym situation.

   Aaron frowned at nothing for a while after that, and finally spoke.

   â€œI think I should do it,” he proposed.

   â€œWhy?” asked Karen.

   â€œWell,” he said slowly, “Bug-types are the least liked Pokémon there are. If I beat eight Gyms with only Bug-types… maybe they would finally get some credit.”

   Karen looked at Will.

   â€œSounds okay to me,” said Will, shrugging.

   â€œOkay, then,” Aaron said as they walked out of the Pokémon Center. “So where’s the Gym?”

   â€œRight there,” said Karen, pointing. They started to walk in, but she pulled them out. “Not so fast. Remember what happened last time we didn’t read a sign?”

   â€œUmm…vaguely,” said Aaron.
   
   â€œLook at this sign,” said Karen musingly. “No Gym Badges will be handed out unless the competitor has received a token from Sprout Tower.” She looked up, perplexed. “Where’s Sprout Tower?”

   â€œI’m guessing it’s that really tall tower with a sign in front reading ‘SPROUT TOWER’,” said Will.

   â€œNo, that’s crazy talk,” said Aaron distractedly.

   Karen shook her head in disbelief. She grabbed Aaron’s wrists and hauled him to the Sprout Tower, Will behind them as always.

Chapter Seven
You Must Have the Will

   The threesome stopped in front of Sprout Tower. The stared up at the alarmingly tall and narrow structure. If one looked closely, one could actually see it swaying slightly.

   â€œWell,” said Will finally, “There’s not a whole lot of sense staying out here.” He walked inside, leading for once, with the other two following apprehensively.

   Inside, fierce Pokémon battles were being waged on either side of them. In front of them was the reason the building was shaking: Sprout Tower was supported only by a very tall wooden beam that went straight up the middle of the structure. It creaked as they walked past, seeming to warn of impending dangers. They climbed three flights of stairs to the top.

   Their path was blocked by an elderly Sage who stood deep in thought. His eyes flashed open when the trio approached him.

   â€œSo…” he said very slowly and quietly, though the children had no problem hearing him. “…which of you has come to challenge our training grounds?”

   Karen and Will stepped back willingly.

   â€œNice support,” muttered Aaron.”

   â€œYou,” said the Sage, gesturing to Aaron slowly. “What is your name?”

   â€œAaron,” said their green-haired friend defiantly.

   â€œAaron…” said the Sage thoughtfully. “‘Enlightened. To sing’. Well, enlightened one. Are you ready for your lesson?”

   â€œLesson?” said Aaron, puzzled.
   
   â€œHere at Sprout Tower, you are taught a lesson,” said the Sage calmly. “And although your name means ‘enlightened’, I daresay you need to be taught…”

   â€œTeach me, then,” said Aaron defiantly.

   â€œGladly,” replied the Sage coolly. “Let us battle.” The Sage retrieved a PokéBall from his pocket and threw it in the air. “Another lesson, Bellsprout,” he announced.

   An ordinary Bellsprout popped out of the PokéBall. None of the trainers bothered to look it up in their PokéDex; that Grass- and Poison-type Pokémon was one of the easiest opponents a Trainer could hope to battle.

   â€œUmm…” said Aaron uncertainly, looking down at his own PokéBall. “…Do you want to swap yours out? It’s going to be at a big disadvantage.”

   The Sage stared at him firmly.

   â€œYou know… because Bellsprout only uses Vine Whip…” Aaron said, trailing off.

   The Sage didn’t reply, but looked intently at him.

   Aaron gulped and said, “Uh…right. Okay, then. Go…Yanma!”

   Aaron’s Yanma soared out of its PokéBall and flitted around frantically.

   â€œCome on, Yanma!’ said Aaron a little more confidently. “Let’s show this guy we don’t have anything to learn!”

   The old man’s mouth turned up its corners a bit. Then he bowed to Aaron and said “It is an honor.”

   â€œYanma!” said Aaron, “use Wing Attack!”
   
   The Bellsprout simply swayed back and forth. The effect was disarming; Yanma’s vision seemed to be malfunctioning. It aimed in the wrong direction and missed.

   â€œBellsprout,” said the Sage fiercely, “use Double Team!”

   The Bellsprout continued to wave its body, but another one appeared next to it suddenly.

   Karen looked at Will questioningly. He shrugged and turned to watch the battle.

   â€œYanma!” said Aaron a little less confidently. “Use Wing Attack!”

   The Yanma, confused by the now-doubled Pokémon, went for the space between them instead and missed again.

   â€œBellsprout,” called the Sage. “Double Team!”

   A second later, there were four Bellsprout silently swaying.

   â€œYanma! Wing Attack!” said Aaron, and they could all hear the panic in his voice now.

   Yanma missed again.

   â€œBellsprout!” shouted the old man. “Double Team!”

   Karen and Will watched on in horror as the four Bellsprout became eight.

   â€œThat’s what he’s doing!” gasped Karen. “He’s making his Pokémon multiply so that Aaron’s Pokémon that has the upper hand won’t get a hit in!”

   Will nodded grimly.

   When there were thirty-two Bellsprout standing in front of the Sage, he switched tactics.

   â€œBellsprout! PoisonPowder!” shouted the Sage.

   Will groaned.

   â€œHe’s siphoning its HP out… it’s all over now,” he said resignedly.

   Yanma kept trying to attack, but failing, and at the end of every attack, a small amount of health was sapped from it.

   Finally, Yanma’s tired wings stopped beating, and it fell to the floor in a faint.

   Aaron glared at the old man.

   â€œYour first lesson,” said the man quietly and seriously, “is that things are not always as they appear. Return when you are ready to make me accept defeat. Only then will you receive the token of Sprout Tower.”

   Aaron walked off, leading the way for his friends. It was dusk in Violet City. Aaron was biting his lip and looked deep in thought.

   â€œWhat did I do wrong…?” he murmured. “I don’t get it… It’s so disconcerting… so confusing…” He stopped suddenly, and Karen walked into him.

   â€œOh, sorry, Kare,” he said distractedly, and instead of walking with them to the Pokémon Center, he ran off to Route 31, muttering, “Confusing… confusing…”

   Will and Karen turned in for the night after a quick supper, and they found Aaron the next morning. He was dozing on a couch in the Pokémon Center’s lobby, looking exhausted. They shook him awake. He yawned and stood up.

   â€œMe and Yanma were out all night training,” he said, still tired, but smiling confidently. “Come on. Let’s go to Sprout Tower for that rematch…”

   Karen looked worriedly at Will, but followed him nonetheless.

   They walked in and up to find the Sage in the same spot as yesterday.

   â€œLet’s get started,” said Aaron bravely.

   â€œBellsprout, go!” shouted the old man. The familiar writhing plant zapped out of its PokéBall.

   â€œYanma, you’re up!” said Aaron determinedly. “Yanma! Use…”

   â€œI can’t watch,” muttered Karen, covering her face.

   â€œâ€¦Hypnosis!”

   â€œHuh?” Karen said incredulously.

   The Bellsprout fell onto the floor, fast asleep. The Sage smiled and nodded.

   â€œWing Attack!” commanded Aaron. Yanma zoomed toward the sleeping Pokémon. One hard smack of the wings did it in, and Bellsprout fainted.

   Karen and Will cheered for their friend, but Aaron was listening to something else: the Sage was smiling and clapping slowly.

   â€œWell done, enlightened one,” said the Sage. “Take this.”

   The Sage handed Aaron a small badge-like item, on which a picture of a Bellsprout was embossed.

   â€œThere is your token of Sprout Tower,” said the Sage. “Yes, you have learned much… You cannot defeat an opponent just by having an advantage… No, to have the true advantage, you must have the will to defeat it the way you would if you had no advantage. Now, go do me a favor… and kick that gym leader’s butt.”

   Aaron smiled slightly and accepted the item, then nodded. He left the Sage to his musings and approached his friends. Before he could get a word out, though, Karen flung her arms around him.

   â€œAaron!” she squealed. “That was amazing! How did you figure that out?”

   â€œWell,” said Aaron, frowning slightly at the way she had said “you”, “It got the upper hand on my Yanma last time by confusing it… I figured if I trained Yanma so that it was faster than his Bellsprout… I could confuse it first.”

   Will nodded.

   â€œSo,” said Aaron, grinning, “let’s go carry out that favor!” He raced down the tower. Will went down after him, and Karen, still looking slightly impressed, followed suit.

Yes! The infamous filler chapter. Its good I guess, less tension between Aaron and Karen. Slowly. Becoming. Dull... ARRRRGH! (jk)

I cant wait for chapter 8!

Quote from: drpamplemousse on July 23, 2010, 02:01:53 PMYes! The infamous filler chapter. Its good I guess, less tension between Aaron and Karen. Slowly. Becoming. Dull... ARRRRGH! (jk)

I cant wait for chapter 8!

I'm totally taking that to heart... :(

did you see the jk in the ( )???

But you can't cut the tension with a knife anymore, it can be cut with scissors.

Sorry, I was joking as well. :)

I wouldn't get mad at criticism, if it was in good taste. I love feedback, good or bad. Then I know what I can fix about it.

Oh, I do too, but when it gets out of hand or just is plain dumb... then I say さã,ˆãªã,‰ to the sucker and just press the "ignore" button

Chapter eight is finally done! (Is ANYONE reading this? Seriously)

Note that I got lazy and didn't write the Gym battle sequence.

Chapter Eight
I Will Solve the Puzzle

   Karen and Will were waiting outside the Violet Gym. Aaron had gone in without them – only challengers were allowed. He returned less than thirty minutes later, bearing a shiny Zephyr Badge on his jacket.

   “Come on, Karen,” said Aaron smugly. “Give me a compliment.”

   “No way,” scoffed Karen. “Once a day is enough.”

   Aaron smirked and shrugged. “If you say so,” was all he said.

   “So, what’s our next move?” Will asked Aaron.

   “The Gym Leader in there told me the closest Pokémon Gym is in Azalea Town, due south from here,” said Aaron. “We have two choices – take Route 32, or cut through the Ruins of Alph, southwest of here.”

   “More caves?” said Karen skeptically. “I think we better take the safe route.”

   “The long route,” corrected Aaron. “I disagree…”

   “Big surprise,” muttered Will.

   “…because although the Ruins of Alph are creepy, old, and dangerous, not to mention they contain the freaky Psychic-type Pokémon called Unown, and no one really knows why they’re there, and scientists are still trying to figure out what was there a long time ago, and it’s creepy, and old, and dangerous, and they house the Unown, and it’s dark, and…” his voice trailed off. “What was my point again?” he said, confused. He thought for a second and said, “Oh, yeah. But it’s the shorter route.”

   “I don’t want to go,” said Karen nervously.

   “Scared, are you?” said Aaron in a falsely pitying voice. “Okay, then. I guess we could…”

   “I’m not scared,” said Karen defensively. “I just don’t feel like seeing you break another arm today.”

   “It’ll be fine,” said Aaron, subtly leading her to the western exit of Violet City. “I’ll be right there to hold your hand.”

   “Try anything in the dark and you’re dead,” said Karen darkly, but reluctantly followed Aaron and Will.

They walked through the entrance to the Ruins. It was startlingly quiet.. There were a few rotting buildings standing here and there, looking lonely and forlorn.

   “Why don’t we look in the ruins?” said Aaron enthusiastically.

   “No,” said Karen sharply. “I just want to get out of here.”

   “Why can’t you ever just be okay with doing something fun?” said Aaron exasperatedly.

   “What you call fun I call life-threatening,” said Karen furiously. She suddenly had a mental image of Aaron standing in the Ruins, and the floor crumbling beneath him. He was screaming and falling into the white-hot core of the Earth… Karen suddenly perked up a little bit. “You know, maybe this could be fun,” she said, smiling malevolently. “Why don’t we go in?”

   “That’s the ticket!” said Aaron, looking pleased. Will lagged behind them a bit, and Karen all but shoved him into the building. Inside, there was a young attendant standing by a small slate. She had black circles under her eyes and was yawning.

   “Hello,” she said glumly. “Visitors. Hooray. Though why you would want to be here, I have no idea.”

   “Why do you work here, then?” said Will, frowning.
   
   The attendant looked at him with dislike.

   “Why do you think?” she snapped. “No one wants to accept a résumé without a college degree on it. So I have to work at this stupid old historical place…”

   “You didn’t go to college?” laughed Will.

   The attendant lost it and grabbed him by his shirt collar. She pulled him right up to her face and shrieked, “IT’S HARDER THAN IT LOOKS, YOU LITTLE LIMA BEAN!”

   “‘Lima bean’?” said Aaron questioningly.

   “DON’T JUDGE ME!” she screamed, and ran crying from the room. They stared after her incredulously.

   “What was that about?” said Aaron in disbelief.

   “Some people have feelings,” said Karen nastily.

   “How would you know?” snorted Aaron.

   Karen turned her head. Will was examining the slate that the attendant had been standing near. It was a slider puzzle. Above, letters  read, “TRY YOUR LUCK AT THE SLIDING PUZZLE! REWARD FOR COMPLETION!”
   
   I wanna try!” said Aaron enthusiastically. Karen shoved him aside and leaned over the puzzle herself.

   “No thanks,” she said. “We don’t want this place to come down on our heads. Will and I will do it, thank you very much.”

   “Whatever,” said Aaron, looking a bit crestfallen. “Okay, then… yeah… you guys do it… that’s cool…”
   
   Will and Karen worked on the puzzle for a full half hour before giving up.

   “This is impossible!” cried Karen in frustration.

   “Can I try?” said Aaron hopefully.

   “Whatever,” snapped Karen. She and Will stepped aside. Aaron had been there about two minutes when he cried out, “I got it!”

   “What?” said Karen in amazement.

   “It’s not that hard,” said Aaron, shrugging. “You just AAAAAAAAAUUUUUGGGGHHH!”

   “Aaron!” shouted Will and Karen together. The floor below him had opened up.

   “Where did he go?” said Karen frantically.

   “The floor below him opened up!” said Will in horror. “Who would have guessed that would happen?”

   Karen suddenly turned fiercely red and became very interested in the top of her shoes.

   “Look!” said Will in a hushed voice. The letters that read, “TRY YOUR LUCK AT THE SLIDING PUZZLE! REWARD FOR COMPLETION!” were peeling off the wall. They floated through the air and out the door. “I think we should follow them,” hissed Will.

   “You mean you see them too?” said Karen lightly.

   “Yes, of course,” whispered Will.

   They followed the letters out into a different building, and down a ladder into the ruins themselves. Karen drew closer to Will; it was very eerie. Crumbling Pokémon statues could be seen everywhere, and thousands of faintly glowing, pulsating letters were stuck to the walls.

   “Where’s Aaron?” murmured Karen to Will (this was the sort of place where you felt you needed to speak quietly).

   Will pointed, and they saw Aaron, getting up and dusting himself off.
   
   “Aaron!” hissed Karen. “Get over here!”

   Aaron groaned; he had a few bruises.

   “I’m on it, princess,” he said resentfully. “Give me a second.”

   “We don’t have a second,” said Karen urgently. “Those letter things are going to attack us…”

   “What, the Unown?” said Aaron, puzzled. “They’re not very dangerous.”
   
   “Those are the Unown?” said Will incredulously. He pulled out his always-helpful PokéDex.

   “Unown, the Symbol Pokémon. Its flat, thin body is always stuck on walls. Its shape appears to have some meaning.”

   “Hmm,” said Karen. “They may not be dangerous… but they are creepy.” She shuddered. “Let’s get out of here.”

   They climbed the ladder noiselessly.

   “Well, Kare,” said Aaron sourly. “Nice job, convincing us to get in the ruins. We just wasted a whole afternoon.”

   She gave him such a look that, had he looked her directly in the eyes, it’s possible he would have been turned into stone.

This chapter was EPICALLY AMAZING! I cant wait for the Karen/Aaron fight with the tree... maybe it could be a Sudowoodo... haha

you have readers! trust me... and it aint just me (for reassurance purposes only)

Thank you very much, good sir.

Here's the next chapter, DP and, apparently, readers who, er... "ain't just him".

Chapter Nine
Will the Slowpoke Come Out to Play?

   They headed out to Route 32, and were dismayed to find that they were right next to the southern entrance to Violet City.

   â€œNice shortcut,” muttered Karen. She still seemed bitter.

   â€œCalm down, Kare, we still have quite a bit of time,” said Will, frowning. “And could you please not be so spiteful to him?”

   â€œYeah, Kare,” said Aaron, looking offended. “Stop being so spiteful.”

   â€œDrop dead,” suggested Karen.

   â€œDrop the conversation,” said Will sharply. “You too, Aaron,” he added, as Aaron opened his mouth again. “One can only take so much of Karen and Aaron arguments. I’m going to go insane, and it won’t be because of my Psychic-type Pokémon.”

   They continued for some time in silence. It was nearing three o’clock when they saw a Pokémon Center in the distance. And just behind that was…

   â€œAnother cave?” said Karen in horror.

   â€œAnother cave?” said Aaron enthusiastically.

   â€œUnion Cave,” said Will, reading the sign. He sighed as he looked up at the monstrosity of a cavern. “Is there a way around it?” he said hopefully.

   â€œDoesn’t look like it,” said Karen dejectedly. “The sooner we get through this place, the better. Why don’t we stop at the Pokémon Center first?”

   No one agreed, but no one objected either, so she led the way to the Pokémon Center. Before they reached the door, however, three people walked out.

   â€œOh, crap,” Karen muttered. “Not these guys.”

   Lucian, Cynthia, and Norman gazed critically at Will, Karen, and Aaron.

   â€œGood afternoon,” said Lucian in a polite tone. “…Or, it was until we caught sight of you three.”

   â€œJust shut up,” snapped Karen, shoving past him.

   Lucian glared at her, all traces of amusement gone.

   â€œMake me, you â€"” snarled Lucian, but was cut off by a rather satisfying scene. Aaron, already about to explode at this foul creature that was Lucian, was not about to watch him insult Karen. He raised his fist and punched Lucian as hard as he could in the face. They saw a tooth fly out of Lucian’s mouth, which was bleeding.

   â€œYou nasty, spiteful, vicious, vulgar, atrocious, brutal little â€"” Aaron was screaming, and here he called Lucian something rather offensive. “No WAY you’re going to think you can push HER around! Leave Kare alone and GET OUT OF MY LIFE!”

   Lucian, Cynthia, and Norman were staring at Aaron in stupefied disbelief, and Will was looking at him with something that almost seemed like awe. Lucian picked himself off the ground, glared at all three of them, and muttered, “Come on” to his friends. They walked hurriedly toward the cave and disappeared through the entrance. Aaron stared after them for some time, breathing heavily.

   â€œWow,” said Will finally. “I’ve never seen you this angry before, Aaron.”

   â€œThat guy seriously irks me,” muttered Aaron, a bit pink in the face.

“We noticed,” Karen said, smiling slightly.

“Come on, I’ll take those,” he insisted, taking each of their PokéBalls inside and returning a moment later, their Pokémon fully healed.

   They entered Union Cave, prepared for the worst… and then some. They were pleasantly surprised. It was dark in this cave, but not pitch-black. A few fire breathers lit up the darkness briefly. They could see that this cave probably connected to the ocean; there was running water all over the place. It was completely silent, but not in an eerie wayâ€"it was just peaceful.

   â€œThank God I can see in here,” sighed Karen.

   â€œYou’re not the one who has to look at your face,” said Aaron, but Karen merely looked at him, no glare involved.

   It wasn’t long before they could see the exit. It was nice to be able to relax for a little and enjoy themselves.

   Karen was looking at Aaron strangely, Will notedâ€"though Aaron appeared not to notice. The reason he thought it was strange was that she didn’t have a murderous look in her eyes, nor did she seem to want to hit him over the head with the nearest heavy object. She simply stared at him as though she were puzzled, as though she were trying to figure something out.

   What was wrong with her?

   Will left that fascinating issue for another day and headed out to Route 33. It was pouring rain now and they all ran as fast as they could towards Azalea Townâ€"but of course they still got soaked. Their feet splashed in mud puddles and they put their arms over their heads.

   They ran through the town, past a water well, past a house with a smoking chimney, past the PokéMart, past the Pokémon Gym, until they at last arrived in the Pokémon Center, completely drenched. Karen’s hair was sopping wet; it hung in front of her face and Aaron had to bite his tongue to keep from calling her Cousin It. Her t-shirt stuck uncomfortably to her body. Aaron and Will were dripping all over the floor, but luckily there was a young and friendly nurse at the Pokémon Center here and she was not visibly angry.

   They looked up at the clock and saw it was already 6 o’clock.

   â€œUgh,” shivered Karen. “I hate being wet… Hold the phone! I have an idea!” She began to rummage in her pocket. “I knew you would come in handy somehow,” she said, triumphantly holding out a PokéBall and sending out her Houndour. “Houndour, dry us off!” she commanded.

   Houndour yelped happily at being released and blew flames at Karen. She yelped as well, but out of fear, and dodged the fire narrowly. The minimal exposure she had dried her immediately and effectively. Will and Aaron reluctantly did the same.

   They glanced outside and saw that the rain was letting up a bit, and so walked out of the Pokémon Center to look around. Karen, still not quite in a murderous mood, allowed her Houndour to trot proudly alongside her… seeing, of course, as it stayed behind her. Will’s Smoochum toddled happily alongside him, and Aaron (wisely deciding against bringing Skorupi out) sent his own Yanma out to soar above them. They took the time to examine the features of the rather pleasant town, and they stopped outside the well they had passed earlier. The sign in front read, “Slowpoke Well. When a Slowpoke yawns, it is believed to be a sign of coming rain. Records show that a Slowpoke’s yawn ended a drought four hundred years ago.”

   â€œSlowpoke…” said Will musingly. He suddenly realized something. “Slowpoke is a Psychic-type Pokémon… I can catch one!”

   â€œGoody for you,” said Aaron sarcastically. “Look at Will, about to catch his fourth Pokémon, while the rest of us only have two. How thoughtful.”

   â€œIf you remember correctly, I released one of mine,” said Will, frowning. “I’d only be one ahead.”

   â€œAaron doesn’t care anyway,” said Karen, with a warning look at her green-haired friend. “We’ll all end up with tons of Pokémon in the end.”

   â€œWhatever,” sighed Aaron melodramatically.

   They climbed warily down the Slowpoke Well. A flurry of Zubat greeted them on their way in. They reached the bottom and looked around. Zubat and Golbat were hanging everywhere from the ceiling, but there wasn’t a single Slowpoke to be found.

   â€œThat’s strange,” said Will thoughtfully. “I wonder where they went.”

   â€œLook behind you,” said Aaron.

   Behind him was a Slowpoke with its tail in the well water. It had an extremely dopey and happy look on its face.

   â€œI’m going to catch it,” said Will.

   â€œWhat else would you do to it?” snapped Aaron. He was evidently still in a bad mood.

   Will called Smoochum forward to battle the Slowpoke. Smoochum glared at it and narrowed her eyes. The Slowpoke didn’t seem to realize it was entering battle; on the contrary, its pleasant smile only seemed to widen. This infuriated Smoochum.

   â€œSmoochum, use Pound!” said Will.

   Smoochum ran forward importantly and punched the Slowpoke as hard as she could. A nasty bruise appeared instantly and Will winced slightly, realizing how hard the Pokémon had been hit.

   The Slowpoke smiled at Smoochum, apparently unaware that it had been attacked. It yawned contentedly.

   Karen, Aaron, Will, and Smoochum looked at the Slowpoke incredulously. Was this Pokémon even fully alive?

   Suddenly, a full ten seconds later, Slowpoke gave a violent start as if it had been shot, startling Smoochum into falling over. Slowpoke moaned loudly and screwed up its face in pain. Its breathing was labored.
   
   â€œThat’s what you called a delayed reaction,” said Karen, still a little dubious of the Pokémon.

   The Slowpoke took a step forward, pulling its tail out of the water. The trio saw that its tail had the tiniest little Shellder hanging from it. Suddenly, the Slowpoke began to glow brightly. It stood on its hind legs. It grew quite a bit. The Shellder was even affected, and it grew into a shell worthy for a giant hermit crab. As the Pokémon stopped glowing, however, the three were astonished to find that that was exactly what it had become. It had the same relaxed and uncaringly pleasant face, but it was on its hind legs and it had grown huge. Completely nonplussed, Will pulled out his PokéDex.

   â€œSlowbro, the Hermit Crab Pokémon. Naturally dull to begin with, it lost its ability to feel pain due to Shellder's seeping poison. Type: Water/Psychic.”

   Will looked at the vacant expression on the Pokémon’s face and pulled out a PokéBall. Smiling, he threw the PokéBall hard at the Slowbro. It bopped unpleasantly off its head (Slowbro didn’t notice) and drew it inside. The PokéBall shut and Will picked it up.

   â€œNow I have a Pokémon that can’t even feel pain,” he laughed. “How cool is that?”

   The three walked up out of the Slowpoke Well and back into Azalea Town. It was nearly dark, so Aaron decided to leave the gym challenge for tomorrow. They went to book rooms at the Pokémon Center, but…

   â€œEr, three rooms?” said the nurse. “I’m sorry… we only have two open. What will the arrangements be…?”

   Aaron’s eyes lit up with a greedy and excited flame.

   â€œSince I’m so nice, I’ll give Will a whole room to himself,” he said, unable to keep a broad grin off his face. “Kare and I will go in the other room (she won’t mind coed) and…”

   â€œI don’t think so,” said Karen, glaring at him, and Will was relieved to see her angry again. “I’ll take one room and they can have the other,” she said to the nurse sweetly. While the nurse booked the rooms on her computer, Karen turned around and made a face at Aaron.

   Will patted Aaron on the back as they headed towards their room.

   â€œSorry,” he said, though he didn’t look it. “Better luck next time.”

   â€œWith the way things are going, I’ll need it,” said Aaron, looking disgruntled.

   The three said their goodnights (Aaron rather moodily) and went to bed.

well, im surprised that Aaron didnt go gaga over Cynthia again...

overall, nice writing dude.

Chapter ten, which is the first chapter not to have the word Will in its title. :3

Chapter Ten
Of Forests and Strangers

   Karen and Will watched smilingly as Aaron paraded confidently out of the Azalea Gym, proudly flaunting his new Hive Badge on his jacket.

   “How did you beat him?” asked Karen.

   “He had Bug-type Pokémon,” said Aaron. “I know how they work.”

   And Karen, though that wasn’t really much of an answer, inquired no further.

   They left town via the west entrance and walked straight into the dark and silent Ilex Forest.

   “Pretty creepy here, huh?” said Aaron happily.

   “Very,” said Karen, looking around.

   “Very dark…” pointed out Aaron.

   “It is…” said Karen, a little nervously, drawing a bit closer to Aaron.

   “And quiet…” said Aaron helpfully. “No one would ever hear our screams if a tree fell on us and pressed us to death.”

   Karen turned white.

   “Why the heck would you say that?” she scoffed, but she stayed very near the center of the path, away from the trees, after that.

   “You know, we really should be getting through here as quick as possible,” said Will. “We don’t want to get bitten by some freaky Bug Pokémon.”

   Smoochum shivered at the thought.

   “Er…Will?” said Karen tentatively.

   “What?” said Will.

   “Umm…” she stammered.

   “What is it?” said Will, slightly impatient.

   She just pointed at his shoulder and said weakly, “Bug.”

   Will looked at his shoulder. A tiny Nincada was injecting its long proboscis into Will’s neck. Will blanched. He looked back towards his friends and mumbled something that they couldn’t understand, then his eyes rolled up into his head and he fainted.

   “Great job, Kare,” snapped Aaron. “You had to tell him.”

   “I wasn’t going to let him keep going!” said Karen indignantly.

   “Whatever,” said Aaron, clearly at a loss. He plucked the little Bug- and Ground-type Pokémon out of Will’s skin and threw it into the forest.

   “Er… you were pretty mad when Will caught a Slowbro because you only had two… then you pass up an opportunity to catch one of your own,” Karen pointed out.

   Aaron considered it, then sighed.

   “Too late now, I suppose,” he said.

   Will started awake and shook himself. Seeing how his neck was completely insect-free, he sighed in relief and continued on.

   Soon they started hearing strange noises—mainly, they kept hearing loud thuds. After a while it was apparent what the cause was: a young man was slamming his head into a thick and hard tree trunk, over and over.

   They watched him in bewilderment for some time before Aaron finally called, “What the heck are you doing?”

   The boy smashed his head once more, then shook himself and looked around to see the source of the voice.

   “What am I doing?” he repeated in a very southern accent. “I’m honing my Headbuttin’ skills.”

   “Your…Headbutting skills?” asked Will cautiously.

   “Yessirreebob,” said the boy proudly. “I can teach any Pokémon the Headbutt—practically any Pokémon at all. Seein’ as they have a head.”

   Karen’s eyes lit up.

   “Actually, I’m pretty good at teaching Headbutt myself… And I have a pretty worthy candidate,” she told the boy. “Aaron!” she called slyly, and Aaron jerked back to Earth. He had been zoning out for a minute. “Come here!”

   Aaron obliged.

   “Yes?” he said suspiciously.

   “I want to show you something,” she said, her eyes widening innocently. “Or…maybe we should say…teach you.”

   “What is it?” he said, still rather wary.

   “Just come here,” she said coaxingly. “That’s right…now, bend a little forward…Yep! Perfect…turn this way…and do this…Uh-huh…You’re a natural! Now…are you paying attention? Here goes…” she said gleefully, and, driving him from behind, pushed him with a running start and rammed his head at full power into the tree.
   
   Aaron realized what had happened for a split second. But now it was his turn to faint.

   Karen giggled maliciously behind her hand. She turned around and saw Will staring at her exasperatedly, arms folded.

   “Did you have to?” he said weakly.

   “No,” said Karen. “But I think you know as well as I do that he deserved it. He’s the one who suggested that we would be hurt by a tree, remember?”

   There was no point in arguing that logic, so Will dropped it and went to wake Aaron up. Thankfully, he didn’t seem to remember what had happened (Karen was actually far stronger than she looked) and they waved the boy off.

   Soon they came to the entrance to Route 34. They gratefully entered through it and it wasn’t long before Goldenrod City was within their sights. It wasn’t long after that that they passed through the town’s gate.

   “Wow,” said Aaron.

   Goldenrod was the New York City of the Johto region – the city that never sleeps. There were huge skyscrapers on every side of them. A bright casino flashed on their left while an enormous department store stood on their left. It was truly an amazing sight.

   They entered the Pokémon Center, and though they had been walking all day, none of them were the least bit tired. A boy their own age with dark brown hair stood in front of the PC. He didn’t appear to be anywhere near done.
   
   “Dang, I wanted to use that,” said Karen. “I haven’t checked my mailbox in a while.”

   “Same here,” said Aaron, looking crestfallen.
   “Go ask him for it,” suggested Will.

   Karen bit her lip.

   “You know, I think I will,” she said, and went to go talk to him. Aaron followed. Karen tapped the boy on the shoulder.

   “Excuse me?” she said politely. “Do you mind if I use this PC?”

   The boy turned around and looked at Karen. His eyes did a sweeping motion as he scrutinized her up and down, and a smile formed on his face. A slight frown formed on Aaron’s.

   “Of course you can use it,” said the boy. “Who would I be to turn down a beautiful lady?”

   Aaron’s frown was suddenly more pronounced, and his eyes had a dark look about them.

   Karen’s cheeks went a tiny bit pink.

   “Thank you,” she said breathlessly, looking flustered but pleased. “It’s not often that I get compliments from the people around me,” she continued, and that last bit was perhaps spoken a bit too pointedly for Aaron’s liking.

   “Then you are being robbed,” said the boy with a confident smile. “The name’s Bill, by the way. What do you go by?”

   “Karen,” she said, and her grin was a little bigger than before.

   “That’s a fantastic name,” said Bill. “You know,” he said conversationally, “I invented the Pokémon storage system.”

   Karen’s eyes widened. “No way! But you’re so…”

   “Unintelligent?” suggested Aaron hopefully.

   “Young,” finished Karen, ignoring her companion.

   “Yeah, well, I’m great with technology,” said Bill modestly. “Anyway… were you looking to use my storage system?”

   “No,” said Karen regretfully. “I don’t really have enough Pokémon to start using it yet.”   

   “Well, I do have a Pokémon that I’ve been hoping to get off my hands here,” said Bill. “Would you like to take it?”

   “Of course!” said Karen, surprised but looking very pleased indeed.

   “It’s an Eevee,” said Bill, handing her a PokéBall. “And it’s at a pretty low level. But I already have all of Eevee’s evolutions… so I really have no reason to train it.”

   “Oh, no,” said Aaron quickly, “she only likes Dark OOOF,” he finished in pain as Karen stomped on his foot.

   “I love it,” she said, eyes sparkling. “Thank you.”

   “My pleasure,” said Bill. He leaned down and kissed her hand lightly. “Till we meet again,” he said, still smiling, and left the Pokémon Center. Karen smiled vaguely and walked back to Will without using the PC. Aaron followed her, crossing his arms and muttering under his breath.

   Will’s Smoochum was making Will laugh by pulling off crazy faces. He looked up and saw Aaron and Karen returning. He picked up his Smoochum and held it in his arms.

   “How’d it go?” he asked brightly.

   “It sucked,” Aaron snapped grumpily and flopped down on the couch.

   “It was great,” said Karen pleasantly.

   Will looked from one face to the next.

   “Erm… Okay, then,” he said awkwardly. “What took you so long?”

   “I met this amazing guy,” said Karen happily. “He was really nice and had nothing but compliments—” (here she glanced at Aaron meaningfully) “—for me, actually.”

   “Cool,” said Will.

   “I’m going to bed,” said Aaron darkly, and without even looking at Will or Karen, left for his room.

   “Why?” Will asked disapprovingly, looking at Karen in an annoyed way.

   “He needs to know that he’s not the only one who’s noticed I’m a girl,” said Karen reproachfully. She got up, stretched and yawned, and went to bed, and Will followed not long afterward.

<3

This chapter was AMAZING!!! and Karens getting an Umbreon!!! WOO! And you made the "headbutt" scene parfait!

What else to say that this is the most epic chapter in this story!

Hee hee hee.

Like I said, I haven't been this happy with a chapter since number four.

see... just like my chapter 7... chapter 8 in my story may in fact be great (cause i got bored of talking about Kanto)... and now there's dialog since Professor Araragi is joining him!

Chapter eleven, people (more like person)...

btw, sorry if this is turning into more of a relationship story. I didn't mean it to be that way, Honest.

Chapter Eleven
I Truly Kare For You   

        “Good morning, Will,” said Aaron pleasantly as he walked in on Will and Karen eating breakfast.

   “Good morning,” said Will, sure that Aaron would be ignoring Karen.

   “Morning, Kare,” said Aaron brightly, surprising Will. “Good sleep?”

   “Um, yes,” she said, looking at him suspiciously. “Why are you so interested in how I sleep?”

   Aaron went bright red and quickly stammered something under his breath.

   “I’m only joking,” laughed Karen. “You should see your face.”

   “Nah, I can see everything I need to,” said Aaron casually, still looking at Karen. He blinked, realizing what he’d just said.

   Karen opened her mouth to say something, but Will cut her off quickly.

   “So, Aaron, when are you going to go and face the Pokémon Gym?” he asked.

   “Probably as soon as possible,” said Aaron. “I think we should head out right away.”

   They did just that, but found that the Gym didn’t open for a half hour.

   “I wonder what the Gym Leader’s like here?” said Aaron thoughtfully.

   “You don’t know who the Gym Leader is?” said an old man who happened to be passing by. He had a rather southern accent, even more so than the Headbutter; meanwhile, he rather looked at Aaron like he had gone mad.

   “Er, no. We’re not from around these parts,” said Will hastily.

   “Gotcha,” said the man, relieved. “All right. The Gym Leader here’s a pretty young girl. Goes by the name o’ Margaret. She’s just taken over for her mother—parents wouldn’t let her become leader till she was fifteen. She’s right steamed, too. She got saddled with a younger sister a few years back—when Whitney turns fifteen, it’s out with Margaret….”

   “Sounds cool!” said Aaron, who had truthfully heard only the words “pretty”, “girl”, and “fifteen”.

   “You know, I think that Will and I should come with you this time, Aaron,” said Karen. Seeing the look on Will’s face, she quickly added, “You know… because we haven’t seen him face a Gym Leader before…”

   Will didn’t need his psychic powers to know that that wasn’t the whole story, but he decided that it would be, on the whole, better if he didn’t fight this.

   “Okay,” he agreed.

   They walked around the city for a bit, waiting for the Gym to open. Finally, the clock struck nine, and they all headed for Goldenrod Gym, not wholly sure what to expect.

   The Gym was in the distinct shape of Clefairy, with a complete wall for the spiral on its head and others for its ears and arms. Flowers that smelled intoxicating were placed pleasantly about the room. But none of the trio really noticed, because they were more focused on the Gym Leader, who stood confidently right in the middle of Clefairy’s belly.

   Margaret, Goldenrod’s pride and joy, was the prettiest girl any of them had ever met. Her big, clear blue eyes were complemented by long eyelashes. She had a flawless body. Her long hair (dyed bright pink) was tied into a ponytail behind her back. She was, all around, an extremely appealing person look-wise, and Aaron was ogling her with his mouth so wide open that a bee that had been hovering about the flowers flew into it and he didn’t even notice. It fluttered around a little in there, then floated lazily back out. His face wore a dazed expression.

   Will too was looking at Margaret, but he was not so captivated as to not be able to look away. He glanced at Karen, who was glaring not at Aaron, but at Margaret.

   “Aaron!” she snapped. “You’re here for the Gym Challenge, remember?”

   “Huh?” said Aaron, his face slack. He shook himself. “Uh… Oh. Right… I’m here to…to…” He was staring at Margaret, and he appeared to lose his train of thought. “to…” he trailed hopelessly.

   Karen had had enough.

   “He wants to challenge you!” she snarled at Margaret.

   “I’d surely take on any challenger who wants to fight,” Margaret said, smiling and winking at Aaron. Her accent was also southern, more so than the Headbutter and the old gentleman together. “When did you want to do battle, hon’?” she asked Aaron pleasantly.

   “Umm…” he said, completely fascinated with this striking new creature.

   “Right now!” Karen said angrily. “Why would he come in here right now if he didn’t want to battle you right now?”

   Margaret looked surprised.

   “Oh, I’m sorry,” she said, looking honest. “There’s no need to be like that, is there? We’ll battle as soon as you like. I won’t hold you up none, promise.”

   Her sweet and agreeable reply left Karen more infuriated than ever.

   “I never got your names, now, did I?” asked Margaret. “As you know, I’m Margaret. Gym Leader of Goldenrod. You are?” she asked Karen, a look of polite interest on her face.

   “Impatient,” said Karen darkly.

   “How ‘bout you, hon’?” asked Margaret, looking at Will.

   “I’m Will,” said Will pleasantly.

   “And what’s your name, you lucky challenger?” Margaret inquired.

   “Aaron,” said Aaron eagerly.

   “Well, want to battle, Aaron?” asked Margaret, winking at him again.

   “Definitely,” said Aaron breathlessly.

   “One Pokémon each sound good?” she asked. “Great. Go, Clefable!”

   Clefable, the pink evolved form of Clefairy, was sent out.

   “I choose…Skorupi!” said Aaron decisively. “Skorupi, use Pin Missile!”

   A series of sharp and seemingly painful stinging barbs were shot at Clefable, who winced but shook off the hit.
   
   “Use Metronome!” said Margaret enthusiastically.

   Clefable waggled a finger back and forth, back and forth, back and forth… suddenly, an enormous Flamethrower was belched out of its mouth and Skorupi took the hit full-out.

   “Umm…What the heck was that?” said Aaron anxiously.

   “That was Metronome,” said Karen, who was smiling malevolently. “The user becomes capable of using any move in the book.”

   “Why are you only happy when someone else is miserable?” asked Will defeatedly.

   “No matter,” said Aaron, but he was growing pale. “Skorupi…use Crunch!”

   Skorupi darted quickly up to Clefable and bit down hard into it.

   “Doubleslap!” ordered Margaret, but Clefable suddenly started shaking violently and couldn’t budge.

   “It Flinched!” shouted Aaron with joy. “Skorupi, finish it off! Poison Sting!”

   One hit seemed to do the trick and, within a very short time, Aaron was presented with the Plain Badge.

   “Nice job!” said Margaret, eyes shining. “That was really good work! You must have trained that thing really well!”

   “Not really,” said Aaron with unconvincing modesty.

   “Don’t be modest,” she said. “You did a great job.”  She hugged Aaron.

   Karen’s smile had vanished. She blurted out “See you later, Will!” in a choked voice, and rushed out of the Gym.

   Will sighed. He really hated this. Aaron walked over feeling very confident and together they walked to the Pokémon Center. They decided to head for Ecruteak City as soon as possible, and Will went to his room to prepare.

   Aaron gritted his teeth and knocked on Karen’s door.

   “Kare?” he said tentatively.

   The door flew open. Her eyes were bright, shiny daggers that pierced Aaron’s skull. He wouldn’t be surprised had his eyes started to bleed.

   “What do you want?” she said fiercely.

   “I just thought you should know…we’re going to go to Ecruteak really soon…” he said hopefully.

   “Fantastic,” she snarled. She slammed the door shut.

   Aaron sighed ruefully and knocked on the door again. It opened again.

   “Yes?” she said coldly.

   “Umm, this may be just my imagination,” he said, “but I’m getting this feeling you’re mad at me.”

   She gave him a disbelieving look and folded her arms.

   “Whatever gives you that idea?” she said sardonically.

   “Tell me why!” pleaded Aaron.

   “Why?” she said, her voice rising. She gave a frightening high-pitched laugh. “Why?”

   “Kare, please don’t be like this,” begged Aaron.
   
   The nurse walked over from the lobby and whispered that they’d either have to keep it down or take it in the room. Aaron gave her a “can’t-you-see-we’re-in-the-middle-of-something-right-now” look and turned back to Karen.

   “Why were you flirting with that cheerleader of a Gym Leader?” Karen hissed.

   “I wasn’t flirting!” Aaron said angrily.

   “Yeah, okay,” said Karen, clearly disbelieving.

   “Even if I was, it couldn’t have been as bad as you with that creepy Bill guy!” said Aaron accusingly.

   “Oh, please,” said Karen, rolling her eyes. “I was one hundred percent not doing anything.”

   “Neither was I with Margaret!” shouted Aaron.

   A crowd had gathered behind Aaron, and they were watching the shouting match with much interest.

   “Well, you weren’t exactly avoiding her!” said Karen loudly.

   “Why do you care?” demanded Aaron. “You’re ALWAYS bringing me down! Half the time it’s like you hate me!”

   “I don’t hate you!” cried Karen. “I actually sort of…”

   The crowd watched with bated breath.

   “…like you,” finished Karen.

   Aaron blinked.

   “…Like me?” he said, shocked.

   Karen nodded resignedly.

   “As a friend, you mean,” he said quickly.

   Karen shook her head.

   “You’re lying,” said Aaron with horrible realization.

   “No, I’m not,” said Karen. “I…really do like you.”

   Aaron cleared his throat and stood there awkwardly.

   “Umm, okay then,” he said nervously. “Umm…”

   “Wrap this up already!” yelled an angry voice from the crowd. Looking over Aaron’s shoulder, Karen saw it was the old man who had interrupted their conversation earlier. The old man stamped his cane on the ground angrily—except he accidentally bashed a woman’s foot. The woman subsequently hopped up and down on her uninjured foot, bumping into the man right behind Aaron. The man stumbled forward into Aaron, who was pushed into Karen. Their faces banged together, and they kissed—true, with more force than they would like; true, so hard that it actually hurt; true, their teeth clacked together painfully—but they kissed.

   The crowd cheered.

Mediocrity leads to a delightful romantic ending. I'd give this chapter 2 and a half stars. That battle scene was atrocious and dull.

I know...that's why I never write them, I'm not good at it!

Thanks for your honest feedback, I'll take it into account when writing other chapters! :D

I didn't have much fun writing this chapter. It took me an hour (maybe more) to write six pages. ;P

And it's weird...I thought you were going to say that I overdid the ending! ;D

Quote from: SlowPokemon on August 14, 2010, 05:04:27 AMI know...that's why I never write them, I'm not good at it!

Thanks for your honest feedback, I'll take it into account when writing other chapters! :D

I didn't have much fun writing this chapter. It took me an hour (maybe more) to write six pages. ;P

And it's weird...I thought you were going to say that I overdid the ending! ;D

you didnt overdo it... im older and i have seen WAYYYY too many romantic comedies. its just the right amount of doing it

...and I can't write romance scenes, too... especially for my book. I want to focus more on the war than the behind the scenes

But REALLY fix up your battle scene. Give it more "umph", and give that Clefable a more photo finish faint!

Surprise! :D

A short filler chapter that nonetheless took me a long time to write. Enjoy. (I should have been doing an English essay...feel fortunate xD)

Chapter Twelve
Lucian Helps With Aaron Dirty Laundry

   Will, Karen and Aaron were out of Goldenrod City. Route 35 was a short but peaceful road with a few roadside fire breathers entertaining passerby. Will cleared his throat.

   â€œSo, have you two made up now?” Will said cautiously.

   â€œMade up?” asked Aaron. “Yeah, weâ€"OOF,” he finished as Karen elbowed him in the ribs. “â€"made up,” he finished lamely.

   â€œGood,” said Will happily. He knew nothing about what had happened while he had been packing his bags. He walked ahead, and Karen grabbed Aaron and stood him next to her behind Will.

   â€œWhat?” said Aaron loudly.

   â€œShut up!” hissed Karen. “I don’t think we should tell Will about…what happened.”

   â€œWhy not?” said Aaron blankly.

   â€œWell…” she said hesitantly. “I don’t want to let him know just yetâ€"”

   â€œGuys?” called Will, who was at the gatehouse leading into the National Park. “Are you coming?”

   â€œYep!” called Aaron, and, without waiting for Karen to finish, ran to Will.

   Karen sighed and followed suit.

   â€œThe National Park…” said Aaron in a bored tone. “Hold on… look at this sign! Bug…Catching…Contest…held every day except Friday, Sunday, Monday, and…” he frowned. “Wed…nes…day… Wed Nes Day?” he said, bewildered.

   â€œThat’s how you spell Wednesday,” snorted Karen.

   â€œNever mind arithmetic right now, Kare,” said Aaron impatiently. “What day is it?”

   â€œTuesday,” said Will.

   â€œI’m gonna catch a Bug Pokémon!” said Aaron importantly. “Ticket for one, please,” he asked of the officer standing near the door.

   â€œI hate my life,” sighed the officer as he handed Aaron a ticket.

   Karen looked at the officer strangely, but made no comment. Aaron walked into the National Park (Karen and Will were asked to wait in the gatehouse).

   They heard a voice say, “On your marks…get set…GO!”

   Then they heard a lot of scrambling around. They sat there awkwardly for a few minutes. Will got up and left for the restroom. Then Karen heard a very familiar voice shouting, “NO WAY! THAT WEEDLE IS MINE, BUB!”
   
   Karen sighed.

   â€œYour boyfriend doesn’t have a very good temper, does he?” sneered a voice behind Karen.
   
   She turned around to see Lucian folding his arms and looking so smug it ought to have been illegal. Cynthia and Norman weren’t with him.

   â€œWhat do you want?” she snapped.
   
   â€œI want to point out to you what an idiot your boyfriend is,” said Lucian, the smirk even more pronounced in his voice than on his face.

   â€œHe’s not my boyfriend,” said Karen angrily.

   â€œI was there when he tackled you to the ground,” said Lucian knowingly. “You two are an item.”

   â€œWe are not!” said Karen, more loudly than she had intended.

   â€œYou are,” said Lucian, smiling superiorly.

   Karen stood up abruptly and glared threateningly at the purple-haired jerk in front of her. She was taller than him by a few inches.

   â€œWhat does it matter to you?” she seethed.

   â€œIt doesn’t,” said Lucian, shrugging. “But I think it might matter to…Will.”

   Karen could have killed him. If only there were a weapon handy…and there weren’t so many people present…

   â€œYou’re not going to tell Will,” said Karen dangerously.

   â€œWhy?” said Lucian with a look of mock concern. “He’s your friend. He would WANT to know, wouldn’t he?”

   â€œYes,” admitted Karen grudgingly. She sat down.

   â€œThen why aren’t you telling him?” inquired Lucian.

   â€œI think it would be really awkward for him to be…between us,” said Karen.

   â€œI don’t think it would,” lied Lucian, looking serious. “He wouldn’t care one bit.”

   â€œReally?” said Karen, looking doubtful.

   â€œCross my heart,” said Lucian, looking honest.

   â€œMore like cross your fingers,” said Karen darkly. “Why should I listen to you? Why should I even give your opinion a consideration?”

   â€œBecause,” said Lucian, looking sincere. “I don’t want to see my rivals be torn apart. Then I would have absolutely no incentive to keep going.” Except power, fame, respect, and admiration, he thought to himself. No, he really wanted to see Will blow up at his friends, to make him (Lucian) look better by comparison.

   â€œWow,” said Karen, looking surprised. “I’m surprised you actually care.” She frowned. “Really surprised. Wait a second…” she said with dawning realization. “You just want Will to blow up at us to make yourself look better!”

   â€œLook who’s caught on,” said Lucian, looking bad-tempered. He suddenly smiled horribly. “You know what? I think I should tell Will…for you.”

   â€œWhy do you think that Will would care so much, anyway?” she inquired.

   â€œWell, he’s your guys’ best friend…” said Lucian. “He would feel awkward and it would be horrible for him if you guys broke up.”

   â€œYou know what?” said Karen thoughtfully. “I don’t think it would.”

   â€œHuh?” said Lucian, shocked.

   â€œAll of this seems…silly…when you look at it in the light of day…” she said. “I think that, if anything, he’d be happy.”

   â€œYes, but what if Will likes you?” asked Lucian hopefully.

   â€œI don’t think he does,” said Karen, frowning. “In fact, I have a sneaking suspicion that Will…”

   â€œNo, no, no!” said Lucian, looking angry. “He’d be miserable! This isn’t how it’s supposed to go!”

   â€œYou’ve just shown me that it will all be okay!” said Karen, beaming. “Thanks, Lucian!”

   She hugged him tightly and then went to meet Will as he walked out of the restrooms.

   â€œStupid…completely missed…preposterous…” muttered Lucian. He was bright red. He stomped out the door, muttering, and a second later Aaron entered.

   â€œHey, guys, check out my Bug Pokémon!” said Aaron happily. A small honeycomb-type Pokémon was flitting about his ear.

   â€œIs that a bee?” said Karen, looking cautious.

   â€œYep!” said Aaron proudly. “Her name is Combee!”

   â€œFantastic…” said Karen, but she looked a little disgusted. “You know I’m allergic to honey, right?”

   Aaron shrugged.

   â€œAnyway, Will, I have something to tell you,” said Karen, looking happy and apprehensive.

   â€œYes?” said Will.

   â€œAaron and I are a couple!” she said, smiling and taking Aaron’s hand.

   Will looked at the ceiling and sighed with relief.

   â€œFinally!” he sighed. “I was wondering when you were going to tell me!”

   Karen’s smile faltered.

   â€œYou…knew?” she said uncomfortably.

   â€œOf course!” said Will. “The way you two acted…your strange stiff way of sitting next to me…it was completely obvious that you two made out in front of a crowd.”

   â€œWe didn’t make out,” muttered Karen. Her ears were red. She shook herself. “But that doesn’t matter. How do you feel about this?”

   â€œI’m definitely cool with it!” said Will, looking very happy. “You two were made for each other!”

   â€œIt took HER a little while to figure that out,” whispered Aaron loudly.

   â€œDon’t even get me started,” muttered Karen.

   With a large weight off her chest, Karen led the way out of the National Park and a few steps closer to Ecruteak and the fourth Gym.

I really like this actually. Kind of an awkward transition into a romance but it works. Kinda seems like it was your original intention actually.

^^ HEY! you stole my spot!!!

Anyways, great writing, as always... you just need to make smoother transitions from event to event, not using phrases to cause instant change. This is definitely a transitional chapter and probably leads to nowhere (and yes, I did get the hidden element that you placed so obviously in there).

Good work dude

Also, you should change your poll or something

Second commenter, hooray! :D

Thanks Winter Kid and DrP...

No matter how the story turns out, I really want to her more! Maybe spend a chapter in the underground tunnel and a chapter in the radio tower? You could have houndour face off with houndoom at the top of the radio tower.

That English essay I didn't turn in? Turns out it was a rough draft, so I can bring it tomorrow for a full grade minus ten points! :D Already done.

SO I may write tonight.

woo! I say continue on to Ecruteak and do a Bell Tower scene or something

I feel like writing, but I don't FEEL like writing right now, you know?

And I'm surprised, Dr. Grapefruit, that you haven't realized--or at least commented on--a certain Gym Leader's name significance.

What Gym leader's name significance? from your story or mine? if it's from mine, is it Candice??

Nope, from mine.

You'll figure it out eventually, as I only named one so far.

and what about this fantastic Norman? something special with him coming up?

Norman is just normal; he's the Gym Leader of Petalburg in the future.

You probably realize now why I named...

Quote from: SlowPokemon on August 13, 2010, 06:03:26 PMthe prettiest girl any of them had ever met

...Margaret.

THAT was your subtle thing... you know you told me everything a while after I read that part of the story, so I really didn't pick up on it (I kinda forgot the story a bit... it was kinda a filler chapter)

But... haha... you put things in... maybe one of these other gym leaders in Merin might see something special!!!

That wasn't my subtle thing. That subtle thing takes a LOT of inferring about a line spoken by Karen to figure out.

Surprise! :D Chapter thirteen tells of two interesting strangers.

Chapter Thirteen
Have Eusine Suicune?

   They walked into Ecruteak City, an old and historic city. Something about the place just left one feeling sad and maybe a little creeped out.

   A Pokémon Gym was standing within sight. There was a Pokémon Center, a shop, and two large towers. Something affected Will a little strangely, though. There was a sign that proclaimed “Ecruteak City” on a tiny corner of a huge patch of dirt. There was nothing on the spot of land, though it was surely big enough for a house. It saddened Will to wonder what had been there before. Was there a house there? If so, what had happened to it?

   He was pulled from these melancholy thoughts after a short period of time, however, as he was traveling with Karen and Aaron, the latter of which was only quiet when sleeping. And sometimes not even then. Will rolled his eyes to recall an incident in which Aaron had begun shouting in his sleep andâ€"but that is an incident perhaps best left for later.

   Or never.

   â€œWe should go check out the tower,” suggested Will.

   â€œWhich one?” said Karen. “The intact one that’s said to be home to a horribly powerful creature or the rickety and burned down one?”

   Will frowned.

   â€œNever mind.”

   Aaron looked up at the Pokémon Center. A small Weedle, hanging from the doorframe, was wrapping itself in a thick shell of string. Aaron murmured, “Sweet, a cocoon.”

   â€œYou there!” shouted a voice right behind Aaron. He turned around quickly, startled.
   
   â€œWhat?”

   Behind him was a very theatrically dressed boy about their own age, with a purple suit and a cape. He had three PokéBalls at his waist.

   â€œYou’ve seen it, haven’t you?” said the boy excitedly. “You saw the Pokémon I’ve been looking for! Admit it!”

   â€œUmm, I don’t know what you’re talking about,” said Aaron.

   The boy groaned in frustration.

   â€œThe Pokémon of the pure water! The life-giver! The canine beast so wickedly fast that no one in history has ever managed to catch it! Sightings are few and far…ever so far…between… But you, just now, said its name! You must have seen it! Where did it go?”

   Karen looked sideways at Aaron, who was looking at the boy with a bewildered expression.

   â€œHuh?” he said, perplexed. “Which Pokémon is that?”

   The boy glared at him.

   â€œSUICUNE!” the boy shouted dramatically. “THE POKÉMON OF PURE WATER! THE LIFE-GIVER! THE CANINE BEAST SO WICKEDLYâ€"”

   â€œYeah, yeah, we get it,” grumbled Aaron. “But I didn’t say ‘Suicune’. I said ‘sweet, a cocoon’.” He pointed up at the Weedle, now a Kakuna, hanging from the doorframe.

   The boy looked up at the Kakuna, then back at Aaron, then back at the Kakuna, then back at Aaron.

   â€œSo you didn’t see…?” he said hopefully.

   â€œNO,” said Aaron firmly.

   The boy sighed and hung his head.

   â€œIt’s the same everywhere I go,” he said mournfully. “Everywhere, I hear ‘Suicune was just here’ or ‘wow, did you see how fast it was?’ or ‘look at that freaky kid’. It is my ultimate life dream to find and capture Suicune. The day I accomplish that, my friends, will be my glory day!” he said, his eyes suddenly ablaze. “The day I accomplish that…I will have lived a full, complete, happy life!” His face darkened a bit. “That day, I fear, may never come, if you would like to know the truth…”

   The trio blinked a few times, staring with incredulity at this strange boy.

   â€œSo…have you ever seen Suicune?” inquired Karen interestedly.

   â€œAh,” said the boy, his eyes shining again. “Indeed I have, my good lady. That was the most rewarding and gratifying day of my entire life. It is because of that sighting that I will search all across Johto, and perhaps even beyond, to catch one more glimpse of that extraordinary, breathtaking creature. I will never be fully satisfied until the beautiful Suicune rests at my waist in a PokéBall.” He shook himself, and the fire in his eyes died down. “Well, my friends,” he continued. “I never did get your names. You are?” he said to Aaron.

   â€œAaron,” said Aaron importantly.

   â€œAaron…” murmured the boy. “You?” he inquired of Will.

   â€œWill,” said Will flatly.

   â€œWill…” said the boy. “What about…you?” he asked of Karen.

   â€œKaren,” said Karen, looking a bit wary of the boy, as if he was perhaps mentally deranged.

   â€œFantastic!” said the boy, smiling. “Good-bye, then!” He began to walk away.

   â€œWait!” called Will after him. The boy stopped.

   â€œWhat is it?” he said a bit impatiently. “I have to track down Suicune at top speed, my friend. Absolute top.”

   â€œYes, but you can’t just get our names and walk away!” said Karen, a stupefied expression on her face. “At least give us yours or something!”

   â€œAh, it is my name you wish to know?” said the boy, smiling wryly, as if he had been waiting for them to ask. “I am Eusine! Sworn tracker of the Pokémon Suicune!” said the boy with a faraway look in his eye. “I must be going now…you’ll have to excuse me. Good luck to you all, and may we meet again, Aaron, Will, and Karen!” he said mysteriously, and ran out of Ecruteak City to track the Pokémon of pure water, the life-giver, the canine beast so wickedly fast that no one in history had ever managed to catch it.

   The trio stared after him in silence for a moment.

   â€œThat guy,” said Aaron frankly, “was a COMPLETE nut job.”

   â€œHe was a bit strange, wasn’t he?” said Will thoughtfully.

   â€œI think it’s neat that he’d travel alone all over Johto to find one Pokémon,” said Karen musingly. “But he seems a little obsessed.”

   They stood there in silence for a second longer, then they all shook themselves.

   â€œAaron--Will and I are going to check out the town,” said Karen. “How long do you think it will take for you to win a Fog Badge?”

   â€œAn hour, maybe,” said Aaron, shrugging.

   â€œAlright,” said Karen decisively. “We won’t book rooms, then. Maybe we can be in and out of this depressing town within the day.”

   â€œGot it,” said Aaron, and headed towards the Gym.

   Karen and Will looked around the town for a few minutes. Will left Karen to go to the PokeMart. Karen wandered about for a bit. A large crowd was gathering outside the Ecruteak Dance Theater. She walked inside and watched as five Kimono Girls danced and battled their Pokémon artfully and elegantly.
   
   The Kimono Girls danced unlike anything she had ever seen. It was quite entrancing.

   That’s amazing, thought Karen, her eyes wide.

   â€œYes,” said a boy of their age who was standing near them. “They’re very beautiful, aren’t they?” he continued a little sadly. There was something bittersweet in his voice.

   Karen took a good look at this stranger. He had piercing blue eyes. He was rather strange to look at. He gave off a distinct aura of awkwardness, but in a likable sort of way. He was holding with one arm a notebook that had a pencil placed inside its spiral binding.

   â€œWho are you?” asked Karen curiously.

   â€œMe?” laughed the strange boy. “I’m no one. I really don’t belong here.”

   Karen looked at him, confused.

   â€œOkay, then,” she said, a little awkwardly. “I’m Karen, and I’m here with my friends, Aaron andâ€"”

   â€œWill,” finished the strange boy. “Believe me, I know who you are. It’s strange to think that you don’t know me…” He sighed sadly, and then he walked out of the theater.

   â€œWait!” said Karen, running after him. “Where are you going?” she said, confused again.

   The strange boy gave a sad sort of half-smile and replied, “Goldenrod. I need to meet with an old friend. And from there…” he said, and threw his hands up in the air. “…Anywhere. Who knows? Who can tell, really?” he said, and laughed a little bit. “It was nice to see you,” he said sincerely, “but I have to leave.”

   And with that, the strange boy walked away, leaving Karen with more questions than answers. She decided to forget about it and walked instead to the Gym. Will was already waiting there with Aaron. Aaron offered his hand and they walked out of Ecruteak together, Will at their side.

Oh, and I've composed (sort of) a theme for this story. When I record myself playing it, I'll upload it to YouTube and you guys let me know what you think. :P It's pretty generic.

Just another installment of the story. Eusine was probably the highlight of the chapter, since it was were most of the action is! You're definitely starting to mellow down!

...Mellow down...

What do you mean by that? And is that bad?     ???

:D

Also, I had fun writing the Eusine scene, but the most fun writing the scene with the Strange Boy.

I have a feeling this is not Eusine's (or the Strange Boy's) last appearance in The Will to Go On.

You know, I briefly considered adding Eusine to the traveling party, but I came up with a better idea that I'll save for later.

I like the pace change, instead of tying all the loose ends at the end of the story, we have 3 branches, the eusine branch, the stranger, and the original story, I like that.

There's also a Lucian branch, and I was considering writing the next chapter as a filler chapter, from his perspective, to add a bit of backstory, but I don't know if I Will. [/horrible pun]

I dont know about a point of view change but a filler chapter is definitely needed. Also, I liked when you had the slowpoke avatar.. it just fit... better

What's this? Two chapters in two days??? This is crazy!

Crazy it may be, but it's happening. ;)

I may do some things that you won't like, but maybe not. Let's see how it goes. This was interesting for me to write, but I don't know how it will go over.

Without further ado, here's the next expertly named installment of The Will to Go On.

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Chapter Fourteen
I Heard it Through the Olivine

   They continued on Route 38 for some time, then set up camp and stayed the night. When they rose, Aaron had a runny nose and was coughing loudly.

   â€œI think I might have a cold, you guys,” he said when he finished. “Did either of you give me some sort of bug?”

   â€œI certainly did not,” said Karen, rolling her eyes. “You don’t see me wheezing like a school bus, do you?”

   â€œI guess not,” said Aaron, wiping his nose.

   â€œPlus, Professor Elm’s the only one who’s ever given you a bug… but if I recall, you seemed to want that one,” said Will.

   â€œTrue,” concurred Aaron.

   They walked silently across the scenery and soon came upon a little farm. A small girl was waving her arms frantically at them. She called in a southern accent, “Y’all three! Over here!” Aaron, Will, and Karen looked at one another, shrugged, and walked over to the little girl.
   
   â€œYou folks wouldn’t happen to have any Oran Berries, would you, now?” asked the little girl anxiously.

   The trio looked at one another, then dug into their bags and pulled out their Berry Pouches.

   â€œI have three,” said Karen.

   â€œI have two,” said Will.

   â€œI have two,” said Aaron.

   â€œThat’s great!” said the little girl. “This is gonna sound awful rude, but y’all wouldn’t mind givin’ those Oran Berries to a needy soul, would you?”

   â€œWhat kind of needy soul?” said Will curiously.

“Our Miltank’s been real sick lately,” said the girl, looking sad. “She stopped givin’ milk and everythin’. But,” she continued, and her face brightened, “we figure that Miltank’ll surely get better if we give it enough Oran Berries! Those are healthful to Pokémon, you know.”

   â€œSo, you want us to give our Oran Berries to your Miltank?” said Karen. They all looked at each other a third time. Karen shrugged. “Why not? It’s going to a needy soul, after all.”

   â€œJust follow me right through here,” said the small girl, and led them to a barn at the side of the farmhouse. “But,” she added, “could you stay outside, green-hair? You seem pretty sick yourself, and I wouldn’t want Miltank to get any worse.”

   â€œI don’t mind,” said Aaron, and the others went inside to coax Miltank to eat.

   He wasn’t waiting long before he saw an odd pair. Margaret, the Goldenrod Gym Leader, was walking hand in hand with a strange-looking boy. He looked pretty awkward, but his bright blue eyes were noticeable from quite a distance. He carried a notebook that had a pencil stuck inside its spiral binding in his other hand. Aaron thought it was pretty strange that someone Margaret’s league would be walking with this odd person.

   â€œHi, Margaret!” called Aaron loudly. Margaret glanced right, then left, then finally saw Aaron and her hand rushed out of the Strange Boy’s.

   â€œHowdy, Aaron!” said Margaret, looking radiant. “How’s the Gym challenge comin’ along?”

   â€œGreat, actually,” said Aaron. He looked to her companion. “I don’t think we’ve met,” he said to the Strange Boy, frowning as he tried to remember. “I’m pretty sure I would remember you, and I don’t. Strange, though…it seems like I know you.”

   The Strange Boy scrutinized Aaron and smiled.

   â€œYou’re exactly how I thought you’d be,” he said, looking pleased. “No, we haven’t met before. Well, not exactly.”

   â€œSo, who are you?” said Aaron curiously.

   Margaret glanced at the Strange Boy briefly.

   â€œHe’s…” she began, but the Strange Boy cut her off.

   â€œI’m still nobody,” said the Strange Boy, grinning broadly. “It doesn’t really matter. I don’t think that you’ll see me again, Aaron…” he continued, his smile faltering a bit.

   Aaron blinked. Who was this psycho?

   â€œOkay, then,” said Aaron, frowning. “So, what are you guys doing here?”

   â€œJust walking,” said Margaret, smiling.

   â€œMargaret’s an old friend of mine,” said the Strange Boy with a wry smile. “We were just…” (now it was his turn to glance at her) “…catching up.”

   â€œOkay,” said Aaron, though he really didn’t understand.

   â€œHmm…” said the Strange Boy, who was still watching Aaron intently. “Is there something bothering you, Aaron?”

   â€œNot really, except this stupid cold,” said Aaron, wiping his nose irritably.

   â€œCold,” repeated the Strange Boy, frowning. “Okay.” He opened his notebook to about one-quarter of the way in, and made a note of something. He then shut it and returned the pencil to the spiral binding. “Well, Aaron, it was nice to finally meet you,” said the Strange Boy with another dry smile. “But we’d better be getting back to Goldenrod.”

   â€œBye, Aaron,” said Margaret in a friendly way. The two set off and within a few seconds were gone.

   As he waited for Will and Karen to exit the barn, Aaron took note that the air here smelled really fresh. It really gave one a sense ofâ€"hold on. He could smell.

   Aaron frowned again. His nose wasn’t stuffed up or runny. He swallowed once and his throat didn’t ache. Hs cold was gone.

   Before he had much time to wonder about this, though, Karen and Will came out. Karen said happily, “We cured the Miltank, Aaron!”

   â€œThat’s great,” said Aaron, puzzled. He shook himself. “Cool. Well, Olivine City is just south of here. Let’s go, shall we?”

   â€œOf course!” said Will. “They have a huge lighthouse there! We could check it out after you battle the Gym Leader!”

   â€œDefinitely,” said Aaron distractedly. He led the way to Olivine, and the ocean air cleared his head. He looked around at all the sights of the port city.

   â€œHey!” he said suddenly. “They have a huge lighthouse here! We could check it out after I battle the Gym Leader!”

   Will looked at him strangely.

   â€œWhat?” said Aaron.

   â€œUmm…great idea, that’s all…” said Will.

   They all healed their Pokémon at the Pokémon Center, and Karen and Will again chose to wait outside the Gym. Aaron exited about thirty minutes later, an enormous bee Pokémon at his side.

   â€œWhat is…that?” asked Karen, repulsed.

   â€œMy Combee evolved while it was facing an Aggron!” said Aaron happily. “Now it’s a Vespiquen!”

   â€œGreat…” muttered Karen, but Will said, “That’s really cool!”

   â€œLet’s hit the Lighthouse, shall we?” said Aaron enthusiastically.

   They headed for the Lighthouse. Inside, it was very dark; the only sources of light were dim lamps hanging every six feet and the windows only reminded them of the late hour. They climbed for quite a while, the huge, winding stairs looking quite daunting (there was unfortunately no elevator installed at the time).

   At the top, they gasped. The view was breathtaking. Olivine City lay out before them like a map, with tiny cars flashing their tiny headlights and honking their tiny horns. On the east side, the trio could just make out the Bell Tower of Ecruteak, and a large bird Pokémon was flying around it, glowing brighter than the sun. To the south, they saw the Whirl Islands, and Will could have sworn he saw a gargantuan bird Pokémon diving into one of the whirlpools, but no Pokémon came back out. To the west, the enormous Battle Frontier and, a little to the south, they could make out Cianwood City.

   â€œThis is amazing!” said Karen, stunned.

   â€œWow,” snorted a voice behind them. “You could be out raising your Pokémon, and you decided to come up here and enjoy the view?”

   â€œHello, Lucian,” said Will politely. “Care to join us? Cynthia and Norman would of course be free to as well.”

   â€œCynthia and Norman…aren’t here right now,” said Lucian, looking a little put-out.

   â€œThey’re not?” said Aaron, looking confused. “Where are they?”

   Lucian swallowed.

   â€œProbably halfway across the Hoenn region by now,” said Lucian with difficulty.

   â€œWeren’t you three traveling together?” said Will, bewildered.

   â€œThey left you, huh,” said Karen pityingly. It wasn’t a question.

   Lucian nodded in a withdrawn sort of way.

   â€œWhy did they leave?” said Aaron in shock.

   â€œBecause I’m Lucian,” said Lucian bitterly. “The cruel jerk who doesn’t care about anyone but himself.” He looked over to the Bell Tower. The bird Pokémon was gone. “They got…fed up with me. Not many people can stand me for too long.” He smiled joylessly. “I was wondering how long it would take them.” He sank into a chair and put his head in his hands. “I have no friends again,” he said. “Story of my life.”

   There was a silence as Will, Aaron, and Karen processed this new knowledge, looking at each other with wide eyes.

   Finally, the three walked over to him. Aaron pulled him out of the chair.

   â€œYou’ve got friends in us, Lucian,” said Karen.

   â€œDefinitely,” said Will.

   â€œAnyone who’s put through that stuff deserves a better group,” agreed Aaron.

   â€œWhy don’t you come with us?” suggested Karen.

   â€œNo,” said Lucian before the words were out of her mouth. He laughed bitterly. “I couldn’t do that to you guys. I’d only hold you back.”
   
   â€œYou don’t have a choice,” said Will. “You’re coming.”

   â€œI really can’t do that,” said Lucian.

   â€œYou’re coming with us whether you like it or not,” said Aaron matter-of-factly. “So get used to it. We’re your new traveling companions. I’m Aaron, that’s Karen, and that’s Will.”

   A cry of objection came from Smoochum, who was out of its PokéBall to enjoy the view.

   â€œAnd that’s Smoochum,” added Aaron, rolling his eyes. He leaned over and whispered loudly, “AVOID HER AT ALL COSTS.” Then he glanced around. “So, Lucian, what do you say?” he said, offering his hand.

   Lucian considered the hand, then smiled at its owner and shook.

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Post comments and/or feedback below, please!

Finally Lucian gets his Just-desserts. but then then they pick him up again. So I think the Strange boy wit Margaret was the same boy with the Kimono girls, maybe.

You mean the one who talked with Karen?

Of course it's the same one... besides having similar descriptions, they have a conversation, and he says something like...

Quote from: SlowPokemon on September 11, 2010, 03:05:29 PM“Wait!” said Karen, running after him. “Where are you going?” she said, confused again.

   The strange boy gave a sad sort of half-smile and replied, “Goldenrod. I need to meet with an old friend."

I really dont have anything to say... It's just good! Good use of diction, stylistic devices (which includes diction) and caramel macchiatos

Mmmm...caramel macchiato...  :)

I just had to do it!!! but if I do have to say... it was a nice "mellow chapter"... felt like I was in a coffee shop (hence the caramel macchiato). I did like Lucian switching sides (but I dont blame the other two)

Have you picked up anything about the Strange Boy?

Doubtless you have, but I was just wondering.

I have, but I am not making any accusations/guesses yet... i am still observing!

You have more than two readers, slow!  :D
Even if one of them irritates you, lol.

My favorite character is the strange boy so far...
And I have a feeling Lucian is going to start acting snotty again.  :P

LOL

You are so right!

Lucian is going to be a pain to write for if he stays with them...so expect this alliance to be short-lived.

I have written halfway through the next chapter. I need to write the rest.

Also, you really don't irritate me all that much. I'm just a very rude person occasionally.

This chapter may have some clumsy tone shifts as I wrote it over several different days. I rather like the way it turned out, though.

Chapter Fifteen
Lucian’s Big Mistake

   â€œSo, where do we go next, Kare?” said Aaron, walking a little ahead of her.

   Karen was frowning at a map of Johto.

   â€œCianwood City seems like a good choice. There’s a Pokémon Gym there.”

   â€œGreat!” said Aaron happily. “How you coming, Lucian?”

   Lucian was walking behind everyone, sulking. He was not used to waking up as early as our trio did.

   â€œMy feet are killing me,” he moaned. “It’s too hot out, and it’s still early in the day. It’ll get even hotter later.”

   Will glanced at Aaron, his eyebrows raised.
   
   Aaron looked angry for a second, but swallowed and said, “That’s nice. I’m sure it’ll get cooler later on.”

   â€œI doubt it,” said Lucian sulkily.

   Aaron swallowed again.

   â€œOkay,” said Karen, “we need to cross the ocean to reach Cianwood. Any ideas?”

   â€œWe could get Slowbro to carry us there,” said Will.

   â€œWater?” whined Lucian. “I hate traveling over water. I get seasick.”

   Aaron swallowed again.

   â€œI’m sure you’ll be fine,” was all he said.

   Will released his Slowbro into the water and they all climbed atop it, Lucian in a reluctant manner.

   They rode on peacefully for some time, Lucian muttering all the while. Every once in a while they could make out words like “ridiculous” and “seasick” and “fools”.

   â€œAnd who wants to ride on a Slowbro, anyway?” complained Lucian. “It’s uncomfortable and not fast at all.”

   Aaron looked dangerously mad for a second, then swallowed again and said, “Well, at least you don’t have to walk and hurt your feet.”

   â€œSmall comfort,” grumbled Lucian, and Aaron swallowed yet again and said, “But the sea breeze is so nice!”

   Lucian sniffed and said, “It’s too cold. I’ll get hypothermia and die.”

   Aaron just swallowed for the umpteenth time and remained silent.

   Finally, they reached Cianwood City. The day was beautiful. They climbed off of Slowbro, who followed them out of the water. It looked happy and dull as usual. They found several Carvanha with their teeth digging into Slowbro’s underside. It hadn’t noticed.

   Will smiled affectionately and called it back. The Carvanha fell to the ground, where they flopped about somewhat uselessly.

   â€œAre we finally there?” griped Lucian. “That trip was a nightmare. I hope we have a different way of getting back to Olivine.”

   Aaron swallowed againâ€"Will figured his throat must have been getting sore by that timeâ€"and simply said, “Yes, we’re there.”

   â€œOh my God,” breathed Will, and everyone turned to look.

   The legendary Pokémon Suicune stood before them, looking out over the ocean, and appearing elegant and superior. It actually shone with a bright light, and all three of them were mesmerized.
   
   â€œIs that…” murmured Karen, but she found that she couldn’t complete her sentence.

   â€œI think it is…” said Aaron, his eyes wide.

   â€œSuicune…” said Will softly.

   â€œFriends!” said a delighted voice behind them. They all broke free of their trances and saw Eusine running to them.

   â€œEusine,” whispered Karen. “Look.”

   Eusine turned to see Suicune staring right at him. The noble Pokémon nodded its head before dashing away across the water at top speed. It was gone within a few seconds.

   â€œSuicune,” moaned Eusine with delight. “The Pokémon of pure water…the life-giver…the canine beast so wickedly fast…”

   â€œâ€¦that no man in history has ever been able to catch it,” finished Karen with a faraway look in her eye. “Yes… I can see why you want so much to capture it, Eusine,” she said with a slightly dreamy tone.

   â€œAh,” said Eusine, grinning. “You now see that I am not crazy, miss. I am very justified in chasing that wonderful beast.”

   Karen shook herself and said, “Yes…well. So, what brings you here, Eusine?” she said, looking interested.

   â€œWhat else, miss, but the aforementioned Pokémon of pure water?” said Eusine brightly. “I am getting better at this! I meet you three, and I see Suicune for the second time in my life!”

   â€œYou’ve devoted your life to chasing that thing?” snorted Lucian. “What a waste! I’d hardly call it a life! That was the most boring, plain-looking Pokémon I’ve ever seen! My Ralts has more class!”

   â€œShut up,” advised Will quietly.

   Aaron swallowed.

   â€œAh,” said Eusine, his grin fading. “Who is this friend of my friends?”

   â€œThis is Lucian,” said Karen, glancing at Aaron; he didn’t open his mouth. Possibly he didn’t trust himself to speak.

   â€œHello, Lucian,” said Eusine, taking his hand and shaking it. “What a pity it is that you don’t appreciate Suicune’s otherworldly beauty.”

   â€œOtherworldly beauty?” chortled Lucian. “You must have a screw loose, kid!”

   Eusine was definitely not smiling now; rather, he looked quite insulted.

   â€œI’m sorry if I offend you, your rudeness,” he said icily. “Either way, I must be going now.” He glanced at the trio behind him. “I do not understand why you travel with this lowlife, but you all deserve better than himâ€"you especially, madam,” he said to Karen. He collected himself and walked away.

   â€œAre you out of your freakin’ mind?” shrieked Karen, grabbing Lucian by the shoulders and shaking him violently. “Why the heck are you so evil?! I can’t believe I ever felt sorry for YOU! You don’t deserve my pity!”

   â€œYou’re the biggest idiot I’ve ever met,” said Lucian calmly, rather enjoying her anger.

   Aaron triedâ€"he really and truly triedâ€"to swallow his anger once more. But all of the day’s anger had piled up and up and up inside of him, and this last swallow was like the tenth piece of pizza that causes one to regurgitate the original nine. All of his rage and irritation came pouring out of his mouth.

   Karen and Will took a step back as Aaron let loose with a hugeâ€"and loudâ€"string of curses and screams. They could catch a few words here and there:

   â€œâ€"BIGGEST LOWLIFE I’VE EVER MET IN MY LIFE, YOU DON’T DESERVE TO BE HERE, YOU SHOULDN’T EVEN BE CONSIDERED A HUMAN BEINGâ€"”

   The other two glanced at each other, eyebrows raised.

   â€œâ€"WILL’S SLOWBRO HAS MORE SENSE THAN YOU, AND I BET IT TAKES HITS BETTER THAN YOU AS WELL, DOESN’T IT, OH I WOULD LOVE TO FIND OUT, AND YOU ARE PUSHING ME OVER THE EDGE, CALLING KARE AN IDIOT WAS A HUGE MISTAKEâ€"”

   Lucian was cowering up against a wall; although he was a few inches taller than Aaron, he was shaking in his shoes.

   â€œâ€"AND I’VE BEEN PUTTING UP WITH YOU ALL DAY, BUT I CAN’T PUT UP WITH THIS FOR ANY LONGER! THIS IS IT, YOU ARE OUT, WE’RE NOT GOING TO TAKE YOU JUST BECAUSE YOUR LITTLE FRIENDS WALKED OUT ON YOU! YOU’RE ON YOUR FREAKIN’ OWN!”

   Lucian’s mouth fell open. He stammered a bit, and backed away towards the water. Karen and Will joined him in slowly advancing on him.

   â€œâ€¦you can’t do this, guys, you really can’t…I was just joking, heh heh… Seriously! Joke’s over!” He looked over his shoulder nervously. “Guys, one more step and I’m in the water…” He gulped and entered the water. “What can I possibly do now?” he whimpered.

   â€œSWIM!” shouted the three together, and they watched him swim frantically until he was off the horizon.

   They stood there for some time, until Will finally said, “You had better get to the Gym, Aaron.”

   â€œHuh?” said Aaron, looking confused. “Oh. Right.” He looked around and located the Pokémon Gym. “Do you guys want to come?” he asked.

   â€œI’ll come,” said Karen.

   â€œI will too,” offered Will.

   â€œOh, but I thought you said you wanted to get some fresh air,” said Karen a little pointedly.

   â€œRight,” said Will, cottoning on. “Umm, I’ll just stay out here, then,” he said a little helplessly.

   â€œGreat!” said Karen happily, and she took Aaron’s arm and walked with him to the Pokémon Gym. Will had a strange feeling that wasn’t the only place they were going, but he brought his mind to other things as he sat down on a smooth rock and stared out at the sea. Any little kids that had been playing out on the beach were inside now as the sun was setting. The only other people out was a couple, holding hands and walking slowly.

   â€œSo…” said the girl with a very southern accent. With a bit of a jolt, Will realized it was Margaret, the Gym Leader of Goldenrod.

   â€œSo…” said the boy with her. Upon cautious inspection, Will noted that he looked very strange. He had a few pimples dotting his unassuming face. Underneath a small mop of hair, bright blue eyes gazed into the clear blue eyes of Margaret. He looked decidedly strange, but not unlikable.

   â€œListen,” said Margaret to the Strange Boy. “This time we’ve spent together…it’s been great. But…” she continued, then hesitated. “…I can’t do this anymore.”

   â€œCan’t do what anymore?” said the Strange Boy, his smile faltering.

   â€œThis,” said Margaret gently. “Look, I like you. I really do. But I can’t go out with you any longer.”

   â€œYou’re…breaking up with me?” said the Strange Boy, looking shocked.

   â€œYes,” said Margaret. “Look, don’t make this difficult. You’re just not the guy for me. I really hope you understand,” she said anxiously.

   â€œI understand,” said the Strange Boy dejectedly.

   â€œI’m sorry,” said Margaret softly. “But it’s over.” She leaned forward and kissed him lightly on the cheek. For a moment, she looked as though she might say something, but in the end she simply walked away, leaving him.

   The Strange Boy stood there for a moment, then finally sat down on a rock near Will, and gazed over the crashing waters, appearing to be in deep thought.

   Will wondered whether he ought to say something, but decided that it was best not to. They sat in silence for a while, and the Strange Boy finally seemed to notice him. He broke into a wide grin and said, “Will!”

   â€œUmm…” said Will, looking startled, “do I know you?”

   â€œI suppose not,” said the Strange Boy. “I knew that the others didn’t… but I thought perhaps you…Well, never mind.”

   â€œSo, horrible luck, huh?” said Will.

   â€œWhat, you mean Margaret?” sighed the Strange Boy. “I wouldn’t call that luck. It was inevitable… Pretty sad, really.”

   â€œOkay, then,” said Will, more than a little confused. “So, how did that happen in the first place?”

   â€œHow did what happen?” asked the Strange Boy.
   
   â€œYou know… you and Margaret,” said Will awkwardly.

   â€œWell, that’s a story far too long to tell,” said the Strange Boy with a sad sort of smile. “Although I suppose if anyone can tell a long story, I can. Margaret is an old friend of mine. We were never truly meant to be.”

   â€œI see,” said Will, but he really didn’t.

   â€œI must be off, my friend,” said the Strange Boy, getting up abruptly. “I have many places to be, and Karen and Aaron should be getting back to you soon. Good luck,” he said, his piercing blue eyes meeting Will’s as they shook hands. He began to go forth, but stopped suddenly and turned around. “Oh, and truthfully, Lucian isn’t all bad,” said the Strange Boy. “But you already knew that, didn’t you?”

He walked off, and although Will knew they had never met prior to that, he couldn’t deny that there was something familiar about the boy.

   He had little time to ponder all of this, however, as the Strange Boy was correct in thinking that Aaron and Karen were coming. They didn’t say much as they went to book rooms at the Cianwood Pokémon Center, but it wasn’t a negative silence; rather, everyone seemed to have much on their mind.

   Will wondered what the boy had meant about Lucian, but very soon fell asleep.

slow, that was beautiful!

I actually like this chapter... but for it's content, rather the story

You have departed from the threesome, with Karen and Aaron bickering constantly (the best part, I might add)... but you added yuppie/snobbish Lucian and the recurring crazy Eusine that I find quite funny!

And I keep on liking what you're doing with Margaret... nice!

Hopefully when I finally open word again, I will finish writing, and you shall see what happens with a certain someone in the chapter after that (oh, and the Anastasia I added in the last chapter is my cousin!)

Quote from: drpamplemousse on September 26, 2010, 07:30:51 PMI actually like this chapter... but for it's content, rather the story

You have departed from the threesome, with Karen and Aaron bickering constantly (the best part, I might add)... but you added yuppie/snobbish Lucian and the recurring crazy Eusine that I find quite funny!

And I keep on liking what you're doing with Margaret... nice!

Hopefully when I finally open word again, I will finish writing, and you shall see what happens with a certain someone in the chapter after that (oh, and the Anastasia I added in the last chapter is my cousin!)

You've probably figured out who the Strange Boy is by now (if you know, don't post it here!).

Quote from: winterkid09 on September 26, 2010, 07:22:13 PMslow, that was beautiful!

LOL
Thank you very much.

Quote from: SlowPokemon on September 26, 2010, 07:48:46 PMYou've probably figured out who the Strange Boy is by now (if you know, don't post it here!).
LOL
Thank you very much.

Oh, I won't... the secret boy's identity is safe with me!

You may get a bicker chapter soon, since you so nicely told me that was entertaining.

What is the color of the strange boy's eyes?

Quote from: SlowPokemon on September 27, 2010, 04:12:44 AMYou may get a bicker chapter soon, since you so nicely told me that was entertaining.

its my favorite part!!!

I actually might write something today before my Wind Orchestra rehersal!

I just wrote an extremely short story; you don't mind reading it, do you?
http://www.ninsheetm.us/smf/index.php?topic=2354.msg72474#msg72474 (http://www.ninsheetm.us/smf/index.php?topic=2354.msg72474#msg72474)

BTW, your story is looking really good. Keep it up!!!

Quote from: Jub3r7 on September 27, 2010, 12:09:39 PMWhat is the color of the strange boy's eyes?

A very deep blue that is quite different from Margaret's clear blue eyes.

Quote from: Jub3r7 on September 27, 2010, 12:52:15 PMI just wrote an extremely short story; you don't mind reading it, do you?
http://www.ninsheetm.us/smf/index.php?topic=2354.msg72474#msg72474 (http://www.ninsheetm.us/smf/index.php?topic=2354.msg72474#msg72474)

BTW, your story is looking really good. Keep it up!!!

Done! :D

There is an 90% chance of my posting Chapter 13 tonight!!!

SURPRISE!

This chapter is very meh, so don't get your hopes up. This story is becoming something of a disappointment, most likely, but that's okay. I just want to finish it--then I can revise all I want.

I had meant this to be a bicker chapter, but I will do one two chapters from now instead... I'm doing something different with the next chapter.

Chapter Sixteen
The Will to The Show Must Go On

   A few days later, our three favorite heroesâ€"no, I’m not talking about Harry, Ron, and Hermioneâ€"were walking out of Ecruteak. They arrived on Route 42 with high spirits. Upon walking a bit, they saw a large traveling circus. Rides were set up, from the small kiddy rides to the monstrous, rickety roller coasters. The ticket booth had a small line, but there were hundreds of people inside.

   â€œCome on, Aaron, let’s go!” said Karen excitedly.

   â€œAre you sure?” said Aaron skeptically.

   â€œAbsolutely!” she said. “It’ll be fun!”

   â€œFor who?” muttered Aaron, but he followed her to the ticket booth. “Three tickets,” he told the portly man behind the counter. He was huge; it was a wonder he could fit into the tiny booth.

   â€œSeventy-five dollars,” said the man promptly.

   Aaron’s jaw dropped.

   â€œSeventy-five…?” he sputtered. “That’s highway robbery! There are only three of us!”

   â€œRight!” said the large man. “Thank you for reminding me.” He typed something into his computer and printed the check again. “Eighty-five dollars,” he said smoothly.

   Aaron turned purple and said, “What’s that for?”

   The huge man pointed to a sign near the counter. It read, “Two is plentyâ€"three’s a crowd! Additional $10.00 fee will be charged for every person after the first two.”

   Aaron looked at the man in disbelief.

   â€œAre you kidding me?” he said incredulously.

   â€œYou are the kid here,” said the man seriously. “So pay me now, or you will be forced to leave the premises.”

   Aaron grumbled something under his breathâ€"Will could hear a few not-so-nice wordsâ€"but he paid the man eighty-five dollars.

   â€œDon’t worry,” said Karen briskly. “Like I said, it’ll be fun!”

   â€œFor eighty-five freakin’ dollars, it better be,” muttered Aaron.

   And so they entered the fair. Karen pointed out something every few seconds: “Ooh, Aaron, look! â€"it’s a snack bar!” “Look, guys! â€"a roller coaster!” “Look at that! â€"guess your weight or win a prize!” “Look!” “Look!” “Look!”

   Finally Aaron just said, “We can see it, Kare. We’re right here. You don’t need to point out every little thing.”

   â€œI know!” said Karen. “I’m just happy to be here!”

   â€œWhat are you doing that’s so fun?” demanded Aaron.

   â€œWalking and seeing the sights!” she said defensively.

   Aaron looked at Will in a “she’s completely nuts” sort of way and said to Karen, “I paid eight-five dollars so you could walk around? You can do that for free anywhere else!”

   â€œIt’s not the same, and you know it,” said Karen, no longer smiling.

   â€œDo I?” said Aaron in a stressed sort of way.

   â€œWell, why don’t we do something, then?” said Karen angrily. “If you want to so bad?”

   â€œBecause you’re having too much fun enjoying the sights!” shouted Aaron.

   â€œFriends, let’s not argue!” said a voice quite near them. Will, Karen, and Aaron turned to see Eusine, grinning broadly.

   â€œHi, Eusine!” said Karen, forgetting her argument and making a smile to match his.
   
   â€œHello, miss!” said Eusine, bowing deeply. “And hello to my other friends as well! Are you having fun at this place?”

   â€œYou’re looking for trouble,” said Aaron warningly, and Karen flashed daggers at him.

   â€œWe absolutely are,” she said. “Are you here with anyone?” she asked.
   
   â€œNo,” said Eusine. “Surely you jestâ€"you know that I have no companions on my solitary journey! That’s what makes it solitary!”

   â€œHow is your journey a card game?” said Aaron, very confused.
   Karen rolled her eyes.

   â€œSo…” said Will, breaking the silence. “…Is there anything you wanted to do?”

   â€œThat looks cool!” said Karen enthusiastically. She was pointing at a small tent with a sign in front that read “Want to know your future? Ready to be amazed? Come to the PSYCHIC tent, free of charge!”

   â€œWhy do you need a psychic?” said Aaron curiously. “We already have Will.”

   â€œThose visions have been stopping lately,” said Will suddenly. “I haven’t had one since the night my Hypno went berserk.”

   â€œLet’s just go in!” said Karen, dragging her friends inside. Eusine waved them off and ran somewhere else.

   In the tent, there was a boy sitting at a small table. He was absentmindedly writing in a notebook. His blue eyes lit up the darkness.

   â€œYou!” gasped all three of them.

   â€œMe,” said the Strange Boy. He smiled wryly. “So, come to have your fortunes told, have you?”

   They were all gaping at him.

   â€œI guess so,” laughed the Strange Boy. “Well, if you want to do that, I would like to see you all separately. Will first, please.”

   Karen and Aaron looked at him strangely as they walked out of the room.

   â€œWill,” said the Strange Boy, smiling. “Hmm. How ironic is it that you of all people are at a psychic’s tent.” He laughed. “That’s perfectly fine, though.” He took out a deck of tarot cards and spread them facedown on the table. “Pick three, please,” he said, still smiling.

   Will picked three of the cards and set them aside.

   â€œExcellent choices,” said the Strange Boy. He flipped over the first one. “Hmm…” he said, frowning. “Strength. You have a great destiny… But we both knew that.” He flipped over the second one. “Chariotâ€"long journey. Again, obvious.” He flipped over the final one. “Justice. You shall get your dues in the end.”

   The Strange Boy sat awhile in thought, then finally announced, “Bring me Karen.”

   Karen entered the tent after Will had departed. She looked a little nervous.

   â€œSit down,” said the Strange Boy. She obliged. “Pick three cards, Karen,” he said.

   She took three cards and handed them to the Strange Boy.

   He flipped over the first one. “The Lovers… there is someone very dear to your heart,” said the Strange Boy, smiling wryly again. “Judgment… Oh yes, you will have to choose… And finally, World. The sky is the limit with you, is it not?” said the Strange Boy, blue eyes shining brightly. “Bring me Aaron, please.”

   Will left to find that it was dusk outside, really almost completely dark. He delivered the message; Aaron walked through the door a moment later and sat down.

   â€œPick three,” suggested the Strange Boy, and Aaron did as he was told. The Strange Boy flipped them over. “The Fool… of course, you can’t help being who you sometimes are… The Star… there is one big bright light in your life, I must say… and finally, Death.” Aaron looked up at the Boy, alarmed, but the Strange Boy merely said, “Comes to us all in time. Could mean…nothing at all… Aaron, could you bring me Will again?” Startled, Aaron left and sent Will back inside.

   â€œI apologize, Will…” said the Strange Boy apologetically, “but I can’t permit you to remember this meeting… You’ll understand…”

   â€œWait, what?” said Will.

   The Strange Boy reached for a PokéBall and released a Hypno. It stood face to face with Will, waving its pendulum sideways. Will found himself unconscious within a few seconds. He was dimly aware of someone murmuring instructions in his ear, but soon those words were locked in his subconscious. The Strange Boy sat him in a chair behind the tent, then entered again and called outside, “Aaron, here, please!”

   Aaron entered to find the Strange Boy looking a bit pitifully at him. “Sit, Aaron.”

   â€œWhat are you doing now?” said Aaron curiously.

   â€œIt’ll all be over soon,” was the Strange Boy’s reply. Aaron suddenly saw a shining, silvery thing, in motion back and forth, and suddenly everything grew fuzzy…

   

   â€œKaren!” called the Strange Boy, and she timidly walked back inside.

   â€œWhere are the other two?” she asked hesitantly.

   â€œSit, please,” said the Strange Boy firmly. She sat down.

   â€œWhat are you doing?” she asked, somewhat frightened but not about to show it.

   â€œNothing,” said the Strange Boy soothingly. “Just relax, please…”

   â€œRelax?” said Karen suspiciously. “Whyâ€"?” Suddenly, Hypno loomed over her and she cowered into her chair. “Help,” she whimpered.

   â€œJust look at Hypno…” said the Strange Boy. He hated to do this, but it was absolutely necessary. “I wouldn’t do this if I didn’t have to, Karen,” he said gently.
   
   â€œNo…” she whispered.

   The Hypno locked eyes with her and swung its pendulum seductively in front of her eyes… she was slipping into unconsciousness… she had to fight it… she struggled to keep her eyes open…

   The next thing she knew, she was being carried down a long route by Aaron. It was early in the morning, she could see glimmers of a sunrise barely peeking over the horizon.

   â€œWhat happened…” she croaked groggily.

   â€œWe don’t know,” admitted Aaron. “Will and I woke up in chairs behind the Psychic tent… funny, though, I don’t think we ended up going in there…”

   â€œOkay…” she mumbled. She slipped back into sleep once more as they approached Mahogany Town.

Comment and rate, please!

meh... i wish i had time to write. In my Monday schedule, from 9-9, I have about four hours in between class times collectively... it sucks! im just glad finals are over

Your readers are waiting, Slow.

Meh, If it takes a bit longer than normal for Slow to make a work of art, so be it. Don't forget his name either :) note "work of art"

What are you waiting for? ???

More story!!  ;D

Even though your readers are impatient, don't rush too much, k?

I know, but no one's even commented on chapter 16 yet... I knew it was bad, but was it THAT bad?

Quote from: SlowPokemon on October 12, 2010, 01:21:51 PMWhat are you waiting for? ???

for the remainder of the quarter... maybe I might have time this weekend!

No, I was asking Jub3r about his previous post

Quote from: Jub3r7 on October 12, 2010, 10:05:08 AMYour readers are waiting, Slow.

:P

meh... too lazy to press the button leading to the previous page. I thought my post was the last one because it wasn't quoted or something

Quote from: SlowPokemon on October 12, 2010, 02:40:28 PMI know, but no one's even commented on chapter 16 yet... I knew it was bad, but was it THAT bad?

I called it a work of art, am i invisible?

I thought you meant the story as a whole. xD

well when you walk into an art gallery, you don't cal the building a work of art, you single out each picture instead, you know? but if you ever do finish this and make it one long novel-ish thing, then yes it'd be a work of art as a whole :)

I suppose when I read a story, I'm not used to being able to communicate with the author about their writing...

But yeah, every chapter so far, including chapter 16, is good. So write chapter 17 already!!!  :D

I just did! Here it is. I wrote this chapter for me. I've been wondering how long it would be before I did a chapter like this... well, there won't be another one. At least, not unless I feel like it. Because I'm the writer. Gwahaha, etc.

It's really short. Wrote this one in 40 minutes.

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Chapter Seventeen
A Most Interesting Meeting

   Lucian was walking angrily down Route 39. Those idiots. Why had he ever thought that they were all right? They were just idiots, all of them. Just like everybody else.

   It was official. There was no one he could turn to. He could only depend on himself.

   Except…

   Not everyone was an idiot. Not everyone. Lucian’s heart shrank as he thought of his now-gone love. She would never love him in return.

   You can’t trust anyone, Lucian thought bitterly. He should have learned this lesson long ago.

   A small group of boys and girls were running around, chasing each other and screaming with laughter.

   â€œTag!” shouted a little Asian boy, tapping a girl on her shoulder and running away at full speed. “You’re it!”

   Tag, thought Lucian wistfully. I remember…

   â€œAlex!” squealed the little girl. Her blue eyes shone in the almost-night air, her brown hair streaming behind her as she ran after the boy. “I’ll get you for that!”

   She laughed joyfully and ran right in to Lucian. He leered down at her.

   â€œSorry, mister!” she giggled. She reached out and struck Lucian on his knee (that was about her face height). “Tag, you’re it!”

   Lucian clenched his teeth, reached out, and pushed the little girl. She fell down and looked up with frightened shock.

   â€œYou’re it!” he shouted, and stormed away. Behind him, he heard the little girl begin to cry. He felt a twinge of guilt, which was quickly brushed away.

   It suddenly grew dark, and the full moon was his only source of light as he approached Ecruteak. Suddenly, walking towards him was a boy about his own age. Like the little girl, he had blue eyes, though his were a more solemn, sincere, bright color. He held at his side a spiral notebook. He was walking with an air of purposeâ€"but it didn’t seem as though he were going anywhere in particular.

   The Strange Boy walked past Lucian, then suddenly stopped. He turned around and ran up to meet him.

   â€œLucian…” said the Strange Boy, now walking at an even pace with him. “Lucian…”

   â€œYes,” snapped Lucian irritatedly. “That would be me. Is there anything you wanted, or can you go away now?”
   
   â€œI shall go away soon enough, trust me,” said the Strange Boy somewhat grimly. “I had a feeling I would be seeing you soon.”

   â€œHow do you know who I am?” demanded Lucian.

   â€œI just know,” said the Strange Boy simply, and Lucian somehow didn’t feel the need to question the matter any longer.

   â€œSo why are you here?” said Lucian after a period of silence.

   â€œI don’t know,” said the Strange Boy, his blue eyes piercing Lucian. They gave Lucian an uncomfortable feeling of being put under a bright light, as if the Strange Boy was looking into his soul. “There must be a reason, or I wouldn’t have come.”

   â€œThat doesn’t make sense,” said Lucian angrily. He already disliked the Strange Boy.

   â€œIt may not to you,” said the Strange Boy matter-of-factly. “But it does.”

   â€œI haven’t the slightest idea what you are talking about,” said Lucian shortly.

   â€œThere’s something bothering you,” said the Strange Boy. It wasn’t a question. “You don’t need to relive the experience. I already know. But I’m here to advise you in times when…you need it.”

   â€œI don’t need advice,” said Lucian. “Ever,” he added defiantly, realizing how childish this sounded.

   â€œAlright,” said the Strange Boy calmly. “I have some to offerâ€"just for you to keep in mind, in case you ever do need some.”

   â€œWhat is it?” said Lucian impatiently.
   
   â€œAnyone and anything can be forgiven, Lucian,” said the Strange Boy gently. “The world is not as out to get you as you might think.”

   â€œHow do you know?” cried Lucian suddenly, with despair. “You have no idea what I’ve been throughâ€"the things I’ve seenâ€"youâ€"youâ€"I hate you!” he said with as much anger as he could muster. “You don’t know anything about me and I’m not about to let you tell me how to live my life! Get out of here!” he said, but he looked deeply troubled, as if the Strange Boy’s words had upset him.

   The Strange Boy only raised his eyebrows and continued to walk.

   â€œWhy don’t you try being nice for a change?” he said finally. “Look at the glass as half-full. People will like you. It will do you good.”

   â€œHow do you know?” whispered Lucian wretchedly. “How do you know things won’t go horribly wrong? Theyâ€"they all still hate me, I’m sure of it. I know they do.”

   The Strange Boy stopped and pulled Lucian aside.

   â€œLucian,” he said softly. “There’s only one way to find out, my friend.”

   With that, he nodded in acknowledgment and walked away abruptly.

   Tears of hatred and misery welled in Lucian’s eyes. My friend…

   There was no way she would ever again think of him like that… No one would. He was sure of it. And yet…

   Something was nagging at the back of Lucian’s mind. She had thanked him…befriended him when no one else would…

   But how could someone…like her…ever, ever love a beast like him? he thought bitterly as he entered Ecruteak.

   If only… he thought wistfully.

   There was absolutely no chance of love from his one, his only…Karen.

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Prize for the person who can pick up my subtle hint about this previously in the story.

oh woo freaking hoo! i knew about that ages ago... I kinda wanna see someone else pick up that subtle hint..

And how do you have time to write... I envy high school students for time to do frivolous things (not that this is frivolous in any manner, writing for fun won't add to my education in preparing reading for my extremely dull psych class and MY MOST FAVORITE CLASS OF ALL TIME... BUSINESS LAW!!!)

LOL I started at 9:18 PM and finished at 9:51 or so.

I was pretty sure I made that fairly obvious, but I wanted to more bluntly put it in there.

To be honest I didnt  actually catch the hint, but now I know, Nice chapter, I'm liking the Strange boy more and more

I hope so! At first I was kinda like, "All right, let's put him in there and see how the audience likes that," and I was feeling like it didn't go over very well... So now that I've put him in so much, I'm definitely going to expand on his background at the very end.

If DrPamplemousse already has an idea, no spoilers please! :)

I do see the subtle hint...

The only problem is, when I saw chapter 16, and I scrolled to the top to see what chapter it was, I went all the way up to chapter 15.
So I thought there were no new chapters... *Facepalm*
I probably would have noticed it beforehand, but I didn't read chapter 16 until going back to look for the hint...

In other words, I failed. But yeah, I actually really like chapter 16.


Edit: I'm coming up with some characters that would be four years AFTER Ash had his journey...
Although I'm sad that I have to choose between two of them...

Janina - In the anime, owns an Onix and apprentice to Jasmine.
OR Forrest - Brock's little brother, who is the leader of the gym while Brock is gone.
Although Janina was my original idea...

Then Sakura - One of the kimono sisters in the anime; Owns an Espeon and a Beautifly...

And Max - Befriended a Raltz and promised to come back to it, and sometimes battled with May's Munchlax.

bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Janina (http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Janina)
bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Forrest (http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Forrest)
bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Sakura (http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Sakura)
bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Max (http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Max)

We're ready for the next chapter!  ;D

Dude sweet, Brock's brother has my name, I've never seen my name in a game!!

Quote from: Jub3r7 on October 28, 2010, 02:31:39 PMWe're ready for the next chapter!  ;D

I will try to write over this long weekend (you probably also have Monday and Tuesday off). However, since I most likely have to work right after school tomorrow, then all day Saturday, and much of the day Sunday, I probably won't get to finishing chapter eighteen till Monday or Tuesday. xP

@WK--What the heck are you talking about. :-|

Not that I don't know, but...Why here? xD

Brock's brother's name is Forrest, so is my name.

And I said it cause at the top of the page Jub3r7 gave those links, and that's how I found out :/

Oh, and I only have Tuesday off, Slow. Not Monday...

XD Don't worry about what's convenient for your readers, any time is fine.

Ok... I actually have a motive to write this weekend (WHAT A CONCEPT)!!!

I am finally balancing the stress out... I do have to write my next presentation on the NASA budget!!! woo!

This is what I imagine whenever the strange boy shows up:
http://lparchive.org/LetsPlay/Persona3/Update%204/21-Persona3-3-065.jpg (http://lparchive.org/LetsPlay/Persona3/Update%204/21-Persona3-3-065.jpg)

You will know who the Strange Boy is eventually. It will probably be the last thing you figure out. But I'm pretty sure Will already knows, or he will figure it out shortly.

This chapter is mediocre at best, but I couldn't get into a writing mood.

Sorry. :-\

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Chapter Eighteen
Coffee Shop Conversations

   Karen shivered, inching closer to Aaron as they walked to Mahogany Gym. It was definitely getting colder; it was already Decemberâ€"and Christmas was quickly approaching.

   Christmas…

   Aaron walked into the Gym alone, relying on nothing but his friends’ “good lucks” for victory.

   Will and Aaron entered the local coffee shop in hopes of finding something hot to drink. There was the typical café crowdâ€"a couple chatted happily in one corner. Two businessmen talked earnestly, immersed in conversation. A man sitting by himself stared thoughtfully into a coffee that had been long gone. Another man, this one very young, sipped his favorite coffeeâ€"one that he got every day, in factâ€"while typing on a laptop. Will looked curiously at the screen, but could only make out a few phrases. The words “Aspirations of an Emperor” headed the page, but the rest was blocked and Will felt it would be rude to engage the young man in conversation. Minimized on the screen was a tab that read “NSM Forums â€" Index”. Karen touched Will on the shoulder lightly and asked him what he wanted, breaking him from his thoughts. He and Karen bought a coffee each and sat in a booth together, the pink on their noses the only color on their faces.

   â€œHey…” said Will slowly. “Isn’t that…?”

   Eusine was buying himself a drink at the counter. He paid the barista and turned around.

   â€œEusine!” said Karen, waving. “Over here!”

   Eusine grinned broadly and came to their booth.

   â€œAh, hello, my friends!” he said happily. “Might I take a seat?”

   â€œWe insist,” said Will, and Eusine sat down next to Karen.

   â€œSo, friends,” said Eusine, “what brings you here?”

   â€œAaron is taking the Pokémon Gym challenge,” said Will.

   â€œOh, really?” said Eusine, looking mildly interested. “And you, madam, are all right with that?”

   â€œOf course,” said Karen, puzzled. “Why wouldn’t I be?”

   â€œWell…I only wondered…” said Eusine, looking as if he wished he had not spoken. “Anyway, all that matters is that we are here, no?”

   â€œI suppose,” said Karen. “How goes the search for Suicune?”

   â€œAh, not so good, miss,” said Eusine, his smile fading a little. “A sighting here…a sighting there… but they do not connect, if you catch what I throw. I am hunting all over the region… and yet Suicune stays in the same place no longer than a minuteâ€"no longer, I say! It is all very confusing, but I feel that it will be worth it, miss…yes, indeed.”

   â€œThat’s good,” said Will, wanting to take part in the conversation. “At least you’re really enthusiastic about what you’re doing.”

   â€œThat I am, my friend, that I am,” said Eusine.

   Suddenly the PokeGear that was clipped onto Eusine’s pocket started beeping. He jumped and pressed a button on it.

   â€œSorry, my friends, but I must go!” he said apologetically, racing out the door with Suicune-like speed. “Till next time, miss!”

   â€œBye,” said Karen, but he was already gone.

   They sat drinking their coffees for a silent moment.

   â€œHe’s always nice,” said Will. “Not a mean bone in his body.”

   â€œNot one,” agreed Karen.

   They sat in silence for a little longer, then the shop door’s bell broke them from their thoughts. A couple was walking inâ€"Oh, no, thought Will in an annoyed way. Not him again…

   â€œWhat do you want, then?” asked the awkward boy with bright blue eyes and a spiral notebook at his side (http://www.mediafire.com/?7jr8del9jbwqgd2).

   â€œI’ll take just a hot chocolate, please,” said Margaret of Goldenrod, her teeth chattering.
   
   â€œRight…” said the Strange Boy. He walked up to the counter and said to the barista, “She’ll have a hot chocolate…and I’ll have…” He scanned the menu in a criticizing sort of way. “…I suppose I’ll have an iced cappuccino,” he said. Both the barista and Margaret looked at him incredulously.

   â€œWhat?” he asked self-consciously.

   â€œYou’re having a frozen drink? In this weather?” said Margaret, looking at the Strange Boy as if he was crazyâ€"which, Will decided, he already was.

   â€œYou know where I’m from,” said the Strange Boy, rolling his eyes. “Besides, I could never turn down an icecap.” He paid the baristaâ€"he looked slightly confused while handling the moneyâ€"and they started to head towards the seating area. The Strange Boy paused at the young man who was typing on the laptop, nodded in acknowledgement and said, “Grapefruit” while smiling in that annoyingly superior way of his.

   â€œQuick,” hissed Karen. “Put your head down and act like you don’t notice them.”

   Karen herself turned away to look out the window, becoming interested in a bird Pokémon flying overhead.

   â€œHey, guys!” called Margaret happily. Karen groaned.

   â€œHi!” said Will, forcing himself to smile.

   â€œWell, this has been nice, Will,” said Karen, a little pointedly, standing up quickly. “But Aaron’s probably finished with his Gym battle right now.”
   
   She dragged him out of the shop, the Strange Boy looking after her in a thoughtful way.

   â€œUgh, that last thing I needed was to talk to him,” Karen said, rolling her eyes.

   Will privately agreed, but was too nice to say so.

   Aaron was just walking out of the Gym (Will marveled at the fact that he never got to see those battles) and smiled at them.

   â€œWhat do you say we head west from here?” he said, and the other two agreed to go into the Ice Path.

   â€œSoon I’ll be done with this Gym business,” said Aaron thoughtfully, “and we’ll be members of the Elite Four. Weird, huh?”

   â€œYeah…” said Karen. “Weird…”

   Thoughts of an approaching Christmas put Karen in good spirits, and she soon forgot about the coffee shop.

   Which, of course, was exactly how the Strange Boy wanted it…

Loving it!  ;D

So...
1. The Strange Boy can read French...
2. Fourth wall breaking FTW.

Meh, you're making me wish that different people from NSM could show up in guest appearances, although this feels like a 1-time thing...
Still, you might say this chapter is Mediocre, but I really did enjoy it.

So, Christmas is approaching...
If I ran up to a random stranger in the Pokemon world and gave them a present, what would be inside the box?

1) Why?
2) That's NOT the right title!
3) Maybe.

Explaining what questions you are answering might help?

Quote from: Jub3r7 on November 17, 2010, 07:20:22 PMLoving it!  ;D

So...
1. The Strange Boy can read French...
2. Fourth wall breaking FTW.

Meh, you're making me wish that different people from NSM could show up in guest appearances, although this feels like a 1-time thing...
Still, you might say this chapter is Mediocre, but I really did enjoy it.

So, Christmas is approaching...
If I ran up to a random stranger in the Pokemon world and gave them a present, what would be inside the box?

Hmm. NSM people? I was more thinking about Nik's numerous comments about Starbucks, and how the people there recognized him and got him what he wanted without even really asking him.

...Fourth wall?

And I don't get the Christmas riddle.

I wanted someone to tell me it was bad; that would have given me an excuse to post this:

Quote from: SlowPokemon on August 01, 2010, 01:18:04 PMThe attendant lost it and grabbed him by his shirt collar. She pulled him right up to her face and shrieked, “IT’S HARDER THAN IT LOOKS, YOU LITTLE LIMA BEAN!”

;D

Anyway, if you don't mind spoilers, the very last scene will be a sort of Christmas party.

I'm going to be sad when I finish this; I don't know if I could write anything else as good as it! Dx

Although it would be cool if the Strange Boy popped up in all my stories.

Except that would ruin the effect because at the end of this story you're going to find out who he is.

Anyway, thanks for the comment.

I never go to coffee shops to work... I usually grab-n-go. It was a nice thought!

Currently, I would be one of the businessmen conversing, not wasting money on something... I have begun to lost my taste for Starbucks... then again, the campus Sbucks is horrible

Okay then! ;)

I might write again tonight.

Good chapter, and you WERE referring to Drp right?

Yep. And it is winter now in the story. I think another couple of people from NSM will get honorable mentions.

Maybe some of your dedicated readers ;)

Quote from: winterkid09 on November 18, 2010, 05:25:54 PMMaybe some of your dedicated readers ;)

And since I really don't have a following anymore, il n'y a pas de chapitres dans le "works"

Chapter Nineteen
It’s All Ice Under the Bridge

   Not surprisingly, the Ice Path was cold. One really only had to look at its name to figure that out. However, none of our travelers thought that its name might actually describe exactly what it isâ€"a path of ice.

   â€œI think that we should try to get through here as qui-quickly as possible,” said Karen, her teeth chattering together.

   â€œWhy?” said Will. “I think that Ice Pokémon would be cool to catch.” He paused. “…Get it? Cool?”

   Karen gave him a reproachful look and turned to Aaron.

   â€œWh-what did you do with my j-jacket?” she managed to stammer.

   â€œI think you’re too cool for a jacket,” said Aaron dismissively. He paused. “…Get it? Cool?”

   â€œIt wasn’t funny the f-first time!” she seethed, hot with anger despite her freezing body. “Give me my jacket!”

   â€œYou don’t have one,” said Will, reading a map absently.

   â€œYes I do!” she screamed.

   â€œWait,” said Aaron slowly. “Do you mean that ugly, bright green one? Oh, I gave that to a homeless man I saw on the streets in Goldenrod.”

   â€œWHY?” shrieked Karen.

   â€œHe looked cold,” said Aaron blankly.

   â€œNO!” she shouted angrily. “WHY didn’t you tell ME about it, as it was MY freaking jacket!?”

   â€œWell…” he said, frowning. “I thought you would get angry.”

   â€œWhy would I be angry!” she shouted, half laughing in a maniacal, highly frightening sort of way. “ME! Imagine that, Will! ME, angry! ME! Can you even SEE why he would think that?”

   â€œYes,” said Will vaguely.

   Karen glared at him, then turned away to face Aaron. Remembering that she was mad at him too, she folded her arms in a way that was half to show her anger and half because she was freezing and needed to hug herself for warmth.

   â€œIt’s alright, Kare!” said Aaron brightly. “Look on the bright side!”

   â€œThere IS no bright side!” she said hotly. “We are in a freezing, dark, slimy, disgusting, CAVE! A CAVE, Aaron!”

   â€œA cave?” said Aaron.

   â€œYES, AARON!” she shouted, her voice echoing. “A CAVE! A large, naturally hollowed-out place in the ground, or in rock above the ground, that can be reached from the surface or from water!”

   â€œI know what a cave is!” said Aaron, looking hurt. “You take me for some sort of idiot!” She merely looked at him angrily, and he said indignantly, “She thinks I’m stupid! STUPID, Will! Me! Stupid! Can you even SEE why she would think that?” he asked in an offended way.

   â€œYes,” said Will vaguely. They continued to walk…and walk…and walk… until finally…

   â€œI see a light!” yelped Karen.

   â€œNo!” cried Aaron in despair. “No, Kare! Not now! You can’t leave me like this! DON’T GO TOWARDS THE LIGHT!”

   â€œWILL YOU SHUT UP!” she screamed, and raced out of the cave and into Blackthorn City.

   Once the other two caught up with her, she was in the middle of town. Unfortunately, it was freezing outside as well, and a small flurry of snow was showering down with great gusto.

   â€œCome…on…” said Karen, shielding her eyes from the gently falling snow. They all trudged against the howling wind, trying to keep the snow from their eyes, when they finally arrived at the Pokémon Center.

   They all went inside the Pokémon Center, and Karen collapsed on a couch. Aaron came over and sat next to her.

   â€œWell…” she murmured defeatedly. “At least there’s one good thing about going through that horrible, horrible, cave.”

   â€œWhat’s that?” said Aaron, looking down at her and smiling.

   â€œThat super annoying, arrogant kid with the blue eyes will still be back in Mahogany, meaning that there’s no way he can just pop up and give us mysterious advice and try to seem like he’s all weird and solitary…” she said bitterly.

   â€œHe is all weird and solitary,” Aaron pointed out.

   â€œI know,” sighed Karen. “I just hate the way that he smiles. You look at him, and he smiles like he knows something that you don’t. Like he’s soooo intelligent and the rest of us are all fools. No…” she continued thoughtfully. “Not like we’re fools. More like…we’re all puppets. And he’s controlling our strings. You know?”

   â€œI don’t know,” yawned Aaron. “Interesting theory.”

   Karen sighed and sat up.

   â€œAnyway,” she said, “we haven’t seen Lucian in a while.”

   â€œOh, him,” said Aaron resentfully. “I hope we never do again.”

   â€œMmm,” said Karen uninterestedly.

   Suddenly overcome with tiredness, she yawned, leaned onto Aaron and fell asleep.



   The next morning, she awoke in a bed, apparently placed there by someone. Today was the day, she realized grimly.

   Aaron was going to obtain his eighth and final badge.

   The three of them met in the lobby of the Pokémon Center and talked for a moment.

   â€œGood luck,” whispered Karen as she hugged him.

   Aaron didn’t say anything, but nodded importantly. He left for the Gym, isolating the other two.

   They sat in silence for a little time, when suddenly in the door ran…

   â€œProfessor Elm?” said Will incredulously.

Indeed it was.

   Elm was not looking good. His hair was uncombed, and he kept running his hand through it worriedly. He looked slightly out of breath.

   â€œKaren! Will! Where is Aaron?” he said urgently. “I need to tell you something about the Pokémon Gym challenge, immediately.”

   â€œIs this what you tried to tell me through my broken PokeGear that day?” said Karen disdainfully.

   â€œYes!” he said, looking distraught. “I’ve been looking all across the region for you! It seems I was always in your shadow. Everywhere I went, people had seen three kids running around, one with bright green hair. And now, I find you… But I fear it may be too late,” he finished grimly.

   â€œWhat is it?” said Karen uneasily. She had a strange nauseous feeling in her stomach, like a rider on a roller coaster does just before he takes the plunge down the hill.

   Elm began to pace back and forth.

   â€œAs you already know, only one of you can take the Gym challenge. This is because something happened with the Johto Elite Four.” He took a deep breath, stopped pacing with, it appeared, some effort, and turned to face them. “There are only two open spots in the Johto Elite Four. However, there is an opening. If the Gym challenge was taken, and completed successfully, that would prove strength beyond belief.” He swallowed painfully. “Anyone who completes the Gym challenge in Johto has no choice but to join the Elite Four in Sinnoh, which is far more powerful than ours here. I’m very, very sorry to have to tell you this, children.”

   Karen was in an alternate reality. Everything was moving in slow motion. She heard but she didn’t quite understand. Someone, somehow, must have made a mistake. Elm must have misspoken.

   â€œNot…Johto?” she managed to choke out.

   â€œNot Johto,” confirmed Elm sadly.

   â€œSo Aaron will be…gone?” she said woodenly.

   â€œI’m afraid so,” said Elm ruefully.

   Karen’s vision was blurred for a second. She wasn’t crying. It was more like her eyes chose to fill with tears; she still didn’tâ€"couldn’tâ€"quite believe what was happening. She wiped them, ignoring the painful lump in her throat.

   Elm stood there awkwardly, and after a moment just sat down in an armchair uncomfortably.

   Will quietly placed Karen in an armchair of her own, where she sat blankly for a long three minutes until Aaron came back into the Pokémon Center.

   â€œHey, guys!” he said, grinning broadly, waving his shiny Rising Badge in the air. “Look what I…Kare, what’s wrong?” he said, noticing her and Will.

   Karen’s eyes filled with the tears that weren’t tears again as she shook her head firmly. She wasn’t sure what she was saying no to, but she couldn’t quite do anything else.

   Elm explained the situation quietly to Aaron, getting up from his armchair. Aaron turned pale with shock as the realization dawned on him.

   He sat down on the couch near Karen’s armchair and asked Elm quietly, “How long do we have?”

   â€œYou have about three weeks,” said Elm unhappily. “The last ship to Sinnoh for six months sets sail on the first day of the new year.”

   Elm must have felt slightly out of place there, because he said an awkward goodbye and left the Pokémon Center.

   Aaron and Karen both got up and embraced each other tightly.

   â€œThese next three weeks,” whispered Aaron promisingly, “are going to be the best of our lives.”

   Karen could still say nothing, but nodded painfully.

   She didn’t have to see him to know he was telling the truth.

   And Will, feeling that it would be prudent to leave them on their own, went off to bed, wondering…

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Still mediocre. xD

maybe you can hook will up with karen, idk... that chapter was sad, sad as in depressing, a little rushed, but there was a lot of detail in certain places which I enjoyed... maybe the next chapter can be about the dragon's den?

Quote from: SlowPokemon on November 18, 2010, 05:24:28 PMYep. And it is winter now in the story. I think another couple of people from NSM will get honorable mentions.

When you said that, I thought you were putting WinterKid in the story. >_<
Wishful thinking. :( Because if you somehow managed to put all of the people who posted in this thread in the story...
drp appeared in a coffee shop...
you can put yourself anywhere you want, unless you already have.
winterkid... would appear... uhh. You're the writer.

QuoteSo, Christmas is approaching...
If I ran up to a random stranger in the Pokemon world and gave them a present, what would be inside the box?

That was for you to decide, not a riddle. Bleh. forget everything I said and do what you want.


The Strange boy....  ;D :D :) I actually had suspicions of who it was, but that suspicion was in the very back of my mind.
I'm really excited to see what you'll do with the next few chapters!

i thought winter was referring to me too, but then i remembered.. oh yeah, christmas, snowing.. haha

Now that I know who the Strange Boy is, I want to take my vote off him. XD
Only kidding.

Hey, person, with the green hair! Take this, my friend didn't want it.

Quote from: Jub3r7 on November 18, 2010, 08:59:05 PMNow that I know who the Strange Boy is, I want to take my vote off him. XD
Only kidding.

Hey, person, with the green hair! Take this, my friend didn't want it.

I haven't told you who the Strange Boy is yet; who do you think it is?

Quote from: winterkid09 on November 18, 2010, 07:47:46 PMi thought winter was referring to me too, but then i remembered.. oh yeah, christmas, snowing.. haha

It was, you and Jub will both get a mention.

That's awesome!  :D

Well, I believe that the strange boy is... _{Private messaged to Slow.}
If I'm wrong, I'll feel stupid.

Like I'd tell you even if you were right. ;) Love the guesses though.

Chapter Twenty

   Exactly two weeks later, December twenty-third, several people across the Johto regionâ€"and two in a different oneâ€"received a small piece of paper with the following words typed:

   â€œYou are invited to come to a party tomorrow night, on Christmas Eve. It will take place in Ecruteak City, at my estateâ€"26 Isolé Avenue. Come or do not come. It is your choice. ~SB”

   Among those who received an invitation were Karen, Aaron, and Will. Karen’s read slightly different than all the othersâ€"that is, exactly the same, except it was signed “The Puppetmaster”.

   Karen gritted her teeth when she saw thatâ€"partially in annoyance, and partially because she had to give him kudos for the irony.

   The three agreed to go to the party the following night.

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Why am I so happy with this chapter??? xD

you wrote a dash but didn't write a second on to complete the interjection :p

huh chapter 20 already? time flies...

This is my favorite chapter ever. I'm very sad to say that you can expect an epilogue...then TWTGO will be over.

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Chapter Twenty-one
At 26 Isolé Avenue

   Karen, Aaron, and Will were walking around Ecruteak City, attempting to locate 26 Isolé Avenue, the address of the Strange Boy’s party. It was December 24, and gently snowing.

   They arrived at Isolé Avenue and Will gave a sharp intake of breath. There was only one house—and it was standing on the piece of land which on their previous visit had been barren.

   Neither Karen nor Aaron seemed to notice, but went to the front door and knocked on it twice. Almost immediately the door was opened and the Strange Boy greeted them.

   “Welcome, friends,” said the Strange Boy with a wry smile. “Glad you could make it.”

   “Well, that makes one of us,” said Karen with a very forced smile. “Thanks for inviting us…?” she said, and then paused. “I’m sorry, I don’t believe we ever got your name,” she pointed out.

   “That is correct,” he said gravely. He led them inside without another word.

   Karen glared after him.

   “…Of all the unsatisfactory people…” she muttered under her breath, but followed Aaron and Will.

   Inside, there was a very, large, old-fashioned room. Christmas music was playing and several people were dancing to it. Will was highly surprised to see several people that he knew. In fact… Will started to look at every person individually and found that he had met almost all of them, at some time or another, during their travels.

   Bill, the young inventor of the Pokémon storage system, was talking pompously to the young boy who had been practicing Headbutt in the Ilex Forest. Near them were the irritable nurse from the Violet Pokémon Center and the old man who had talked to them about the Goldenrod Gym Leader: they were dancing together slowly and were looking as if they had never been happier. Also among the crowd were the five Kimono Girls, dancing slowly in a circle around a thin boy who was looking very bewildered. He kept trying to squeeze past one of them, but the Kimono Girls were too close together and kept advancing. Finally a tall boy, a few years older, delved into the circle and helped the boy out. Will heard the first boy stammer “Thanks, Winter,” and the second one sigh, “Don’t mention it, Jub…” and they both went to sit down with the boy from the coffee shop (Grapefruit), who had been watching the scene with some amusement. The tall boy—Winter—asked of a mischievous-looking girl, “Would you get the cards out, ETF?” ETF grinned and stuck a pencil behind her ear as she pulled out a deck of cards—and they began to play.

   In the corner, the Strange Boy was joining Margaret at an old piano and they were presently playing a simple duet. Eusine was explaining about the Pokémon Suicune to Professor Elm, with much hand motion. Elm looked a little awkward; rather, he was looking at Eusine with something that was half intrigue, half caution. The small girl whom they had helped with Oran Berries to her Miltank was sitting at a small table with the attendant from the Ruins of Alph and Margaret’s five-year-old sister, Whitney. And the man from the ticket booth at the traveling circus was sitting in an armchair near the fire, gently snoring.

   “Hey, guys,” said a slightly timid voice near them. They turned to see Lucian, looking a little sheepish.

   “Umm, hey,” said Karen cautiously. “What are you doing here?”

   “I got an invitation,” said Lucian, looking a little surprised. “And I thought I’d come…could be fun, you know…”

   “I’ll bet you don’t get invited to many parties,” said Aaron flatly.

   Karen looked over at him angrily. “Honestly, Aaron. It’s Christmas. Can’t we just be nice to him? This one night?”

   Much to Will’s surprise, Aaron laughed loudly and grabbed Lucian in a hug.

   “Just kidding, man!” he said, grinning. “Glad you could make it.”

   Lucian turned bright red and stammered something, then carefully broke free. He nodded gratefully to all of them and went to sit at a small table with Cynthia and Norman. Norman looked a little more noticeable than normal, and Cynthia looked radiant in a long dress. Aaron stared at her while walking, and as a result banged his head into a pole that rose from the floor to the ceiling. Karen laughed.

   The night wore on. Some of the older people had more than a bit to drink. Suddenly the Strange Boy turned the station on the radio, so quickly that Will was fairly sure no one else had seen him do it. The radio emitted a very strange tune, but very catchy. Abruptly, and all at once, everyone felt the inexplicable urge to dance to the music. Everyone leapt up from their seat and quickly seized the nearest dance partner; and without saying a word, they all began.

   Aaron danced with Karen. The nurse danced with the older gentleman. Winter danced with ETF. Norman danced with Cynthia. And although there were more boys than girls at the party, everyone seemed to have a partner. At the center of everyone, the Strange Boy danced with Margaret, an elegant, complex dance, all the while looking piercingly into her eyes with a wry smile on his face.

   They continued in this manner for about eight minutes, then suddenly everyone swapped partners.

   Grapefruit danced with the attendant from the Ruins of Alph. Eusine danced elegantly and confidently with Karen. Bill danced with Margaret’s five-year-old sister. Elm danced with the young girl from the farm. Nobody cared.

   Suddenly everyone swapped partners again.

   Will danced with Karen. Aaron danced with the elderly nurse. Winter danced with each of the Kimono girls in turn. Norman danced with ETF. And the boy called Jub—although he was a good few inches shorter than her and his eyes were level with her chest—was dancing rather vigorously with Cynthia, who was appearing a little flustered and kept having to push Jub back an inch or two—he kept getting closer and closer…

   Eventually several people stopped dancing and sat down as the song changed to a very slow one. Will sat down on a couch, deep in thought for some time, when the Strange Boy sat down next to him. There weren’t very many people left dancing: Karen and Lucian, Aaron and the girl called ETF, and Eusine and one of the Kimono girls were among those still present. Cynthia, who had apparently been unable to escape Jub, was waltzing slowly with him, Winter and Grapefruit looking on and rolling their eyes.

   “Pretty good turnout,” said the Strange Boy happily. He set down his spiral notebook on the coffee table in front of the couch.

   “What are you always writing in that?” said Will suddenly. He had abruptly realized that he wanted to know very badly.
   
   The Strange Boy hesitated. He put a hand on its cover protectively. “I don’t think I’m supposed to tell you, Will.”

   “You’re not supposed to?” said Will, puzzled.

   “Would you really like to know?” said the Strange Boy finally.

   Will paused, then nodded.

   The Strange Boy handed him the notebook resignedly and sat back. Will opened the cover. It was very full—in fact, there were only a few pages left in the notebook. He flipped to the first page. It read, “Will woke with a start. Glancing around frantically…”

   Will gasped.

   “I knew it!” he said in awful realization. He turned to the Strange Boy and said in a hushed voice, “You’ve been writing this…the whole time?”

   The Strange Boy nodded slowly.

   “You’ve been controlling my whole life?” Will said in horror.

   “No,” said the Strange Boy quickly. “I can’t control anything.”

   “Then why?” said Will.

   “This is how the best stories are written, Will,” said the Strange Boy, his eyes lighting up. “How can I know what happened in my story perfectly unless I was there myself? So I came.”

   “You…came?” said Will, not fully understanding.

   “Yes…” said the Strange Boy quietly. “I came. It was not that difficult. I came and I gathered facts about your life. And then…to actually meet the people I was researching…it was too much temptation. I had to approach you all…to talk to you. And I watch you all the while, taking notes on events that are happening.”

   “So,” said Will slowly, “you’re going to go back to…your world…and pass this off as your own?”

   The Strange Boy sighed.

   “Well, I don’t know about that yet, Will… I don’t think I will. I’ll show it to others, of course—for what is an author without his audience! I really don’t know.”

   “So…” said Will. “When do you have to go back?”

   “I am leaving on New Years Day,” said the Strange Boy. “And, as I understand, I might run into you there.”

   Will nodded. He did not quite understand this highly weird boy, but he didn’t need to.

   “I think we’re going to leave now,” he told the Strange Boy.

   He nodded and waved goodbye to them—Karen and Aaron were coming to join, along with everyone else who had been at the party.

   “Goodbye, friends,” said the Strange Boy, seeing them out the door. “I’ll see you three next week.” He closed the door and they all walked off.

   “Wait…” Karen said, pulling Will and Aaron toward her, allowing everyone else to pass. Everyone walked past them, except ETF, Winter, and Grapefruit. They were trying to wrench Jub from Cynthia’s body, but it appeared he was stuck to her with all-purpose glue. It looked like Cynthia was having trouble breathing.

   Finally, they jerked him off and Cynthia took a huge breath.

   “Bye!” said Jub happily, waving to her. She looked very flustered but more than a little pleased, and bent down to kiss him on the cheek.

   “See you,” she said, and went to join Norman, who was folding his arms and glaring at Jub. The pair walked away, followed by the group of three who were dragging Jub, and all was silent.

   Karen turned around to look at the house. It was as she expected: the house was gone.

   “I thought so,” she said softly.

   The land was barren once more. She and Aaron turned back around and went to the Pokémon Center. Will stayed behind. He stood there for a moment and at last saw them: the Strange Boy and Margaret were waltzing slowly, revolving on the spot, dancing to a song that no one else could hear.

Wow! That was by far my favorite chapter! You made me out to be such a pimp too. XD

Now I feel bad about my vote on the poll -.-

Could not stop laughing about Jub and Cynthia..... All purpose glue... Nice

Thank you very much, Winterkid. :) I enjoyed writing the very last paragraph the best.
It took me a while to go through the whole story and figure out all the people they spoke to. :P

Yeah, seemed like it must've taken a lot of effort to get all that right.

Did you have the Strange Boy/Notepad Idea from the beginning, or did you figure that out as you went along?

I knew that the Strange Boy was me as soon as I put him in. :P Maybe more on that later.

Alrighty.. Hopefully more on Aaron's path too :p

I'm going to make a separate topic with the whole story in one place, so this thread won't have to be hunted through to read it.

Also, I'm going to post some afterthoughts there as well.

Sound's good :)

I THINK MY FAVORITE CHARACTER IS ETF.

THAT'S FANTASTIC

I DIDN'T KNOW YOU READ THIS

I didn't, but winter told me we danced in it or something so I came and read this. :3

lol thanks for advertising winter.

Anytime :)

Epilogue

   It was New Years Day. Our favorite heroes were in the Olivine City harbor.

   Will and Karen watched as Aaron set his bags down. He was leaving. It was official. Karen could procrastinate the thought no further, and she was working hard to fight back tears.

   Will, too, felt a little odd as he realized that one of his best friends would be leaving the entire region.

   A voice rang over the loudspeaker: “Attention, all passengers on the 1:30 ship. We will be departing for Sinnoh in approximately ten minutes. Please be on the ship in five. Thank you.”

   â€œSo,” said Karen, looking at the ground. “I guess this is goodbye.”

   Aaron lifted her chin up to meet her eyes and said, “On that you’re wrong, Kare. This is ‘so long,’ not ‘goodbye.’”

   â€œWhat’s the difference?” said Karen bitterly, turning away from him.

   â€œA whole lot,” said Aaron. “It’s not like we’ll never see each other again.”

   Karen knew that his words were honest, but she didn’t want to hear it right then.

   â€œYou might meet someone else,” said Karen accusingly.

   Aaron laughed.

   â€œSomething tells me that no one else will have that same…spark that you do,” he said brightly.

   She suddenly hugged him tightly.

   â€œSo long, then, Aaron,” she laughed miserably through her tears. “I hope you always miss my spark.”

   â€œI already am,” he said unhappily, and they stood there in silence, Will looking away awkwardly.

   â€œIs this really going to work out?” whispered Karen.

   â€œI don’t think so,” sighed Aaron. “I was afraid this would come up…”

   â€œI’m not saying I don’t want to be with you,” said Karen quickly.

   â€œNeither am I,” assured Aaron hastily. “It’s just…”

   â€œWith you in another region…” said Karen, “…it’s not likely things are going to work very well.”

   â€œI know,” said Aaron quietly, and let go of her carefully.

The loudspeaker voice spoke again: “Attention , all passengers on the 1:30 ship.
We will be departing for Sinnoh in five minutes. Please board the ship.”

   There was a pause.

   â€œWe are talking to you, green hair.”

   Aaron sighed and reluctantly picked up his bags, saluted his friends, and started toward the ship.

   â€œBye Aaron,” whispered Karen to herself.

   â€œGuys!” shouted a voice behind them. “Wait up!”

   Karen and Will turned around and saw, to their surprise, none other than Lucian running towards them at his top speed.

   â€œAm I too late?” he gasped. “Is the ship gone?”

   â€œNo,” said Will. “You have time.”

   â€œGood,” he said in relief. “Because…” he continued, drawing himself up, “…I’ve decided to join the Sinnoh Elite Four.”

   Karen raised her eyebrows and said, “That’s interesting.”

   â€œAnd…” he continued, hesitating, “there is something else that I want to confess.” He shut his eyes tightly, then said as quickly as he could: “Karen, I’m doing this for you. I’ve always loved you, from the first moment I laid eyes on you. And even if…if…if there’s no chance in the entire world I could ever be with you even if everyone else on the earth was dead…I have to tell you.” He opened his eyes and exhaled with relief.

   Karen looked at him momentarily with shock on her face, but in a second shook herself. She leaned forward, kissed him on the cheek, and said, “Well…there might be some chance.”

   Lucian broke into a wide grin, shouted, “HE WAS RIGHT!”, and bolted towards the ship just before the gates closed.

   â€œâ€¦if everyone else on the earth was dead,” Karen said.

   â€œHello, friends!” called a voice once again from behind. This time it was Eusine coming to greet them.

   â€œHey, Eusine,” said Karen. “Are you leaving, too?”

   â€œI could never!” laughed Eusine. “Suicune is found nowhere else in the world, you know, besides the Johto region. “I came because I heard one of my friends was leaving and I wanted to see him off.”

   Will bit his tongue to keep from asking if Eusine had actually come to see if the friend leaving was “Miss Karen.”
   
   â€œHe’s gone,” said Karen, smiling sadly.

   â€œThat is too bad, miss,” said Eusine, shaking his head mournfully.

   â€œEusine,” said Will suddenly. “Look.”

   The elegant Pokémon Suicune stood right in front of them, looking out over the water. Eusine’s eyes widened as it turned around, leapt towards him effortlessly, and licked his face affectionately. It then winked one of its monstrous eyes and bounded away.

   Eusine stood frozen in shock for a moment, then whooped loudly and ran after it with amazing speed. Will and Karen heard him shout, “Till we meet again, my friends!”

   â€œLet’s see,” said Karen, counting on her fingers. “That’s Aaron, Lucian, and Eusine… I think there’s really only one more person we might see today…”

   And there he was.

   Getting ready to board his own ship, and saying goodbye to the pretty-faced Gym Leader of Goldenrod, was the awkwardly thin, bright blue-eyed boy, with a now-full spiral-bound notebook at his side. After Margaret turned away, the Puppetmaster, the Strange Boy, turned to Karen and Will and winked. Will knew what the wink said. The Strange Boy was moving on to bigger and better things. With this story’s end came a more intense, larger story’s beginning. The Strange Boy got onto the ship going who-knows-where and turned his back to the Johto region, looking only forward.

   Will watched the two ships’ retreat until they were gone, then Karen touched him lightly on the shoulder and said, “Will…let’s go home.”

   They were all part of a bigger story, Will realized. All of them. But then he lay those thoughts aside and followed Karen home. He was going to live the rest of his story to the fullestâ€"sometime in the future. For now, New Bark Town was his obligation, where his father would be waiting…

Should I spill who the strange boy is??? or is this our little secret?

I already revealed. :P

I was gonna say that :/

:o No one commented on the actual chapter. Also, I'm waiting for Concerto's "Okay" or "No-kay" before I make a new topic.

Oh, so everyone "knows"... i don't recall it being announced publically... or did I just miss something when I skimmed?

And what new topic... what were you planning on doing. It should be fine!

I was gonna post my story all in a few posts so that no one has to sort through piles of comments to read it... also I was gonna post some afterthoughts. :P I didn't know if that would be spam or what.

I loved it, but you forgot to put me in it, the lucian thing was surprising

Well, I didn't want to throw it in there that he was in love with Karen and then just leave it at that. That would be unprofessional. :)

Sorry. I think one of my pitched ideas was to put you, DrP, Jub (who has gone missing), and ETF on the ship with me the Strange Boy, but since you were only in one of the chapters it didn't feel...right. :-\

It should be fine... not many people go into this board.

Better do it and be told not to rather than not doing it and waiting a millenia for Concerto for respond.

I was thinking of resurrecting the "Finger Game"... it seems fun enough, but Concerto didnt respond

That chapter was the best chapter ever.  :D :D :D  ;D
When Concerto gives you permission, can you post the link in this thread?


Oh, and apparently I'm back.

Why does it have to end?!?! :(

You only liked that chapter because you got up close and personal with Cynthia. ;)

The links to what?

The link to the thread with the whole story in it?

Dude, it's in this board.

I was gonna say... :p

I am too lazy. FINE GAWD

:( I feel bad now

lol, It's okay, I should stop being lazy. Unless you were feeling bad about something else.