Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Splatoon
Console: Wii U
Title: Splattack!
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arrangers: Olimar12345 (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=83) & BrainyLucario (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4742)
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Thought i would re-submit to make my submission seem less menacing! I'm not including the glissando, due to the fact that i feel it is really unnecessary for a piano arrangement when in the actual song.. it's percussion.
Everything has been updated
This...is literally the same file as the last submission, so here are my comments again:
Quote from: Olimar12345 on December 28, 2015, 09:03:59 PM-Remove the double glissando and replace it with a single wavy line from the lowest pitch to the first note of the next measure
-Hide the half rest in measure 4 by highlighting it and pressing "h."
-Fix measure 12 (RH) I have no idea what you're trying to do there. Same at 8 to a lesser degree.
Ohhh!!!! The pdf is Not updated! That's why It's not different to you! I'll fix that right away!
Edit: Fixed the pdf! it should be up to date now!
oh okay, good. I was like ?????????????????
Same here.... I thought you were seeing things and then i saw that someone downloaded the pdf file and decided to check it out!
Glad i did!
Any more changes?
There are more of the same errors I said last time though, and some new ones I should probably mention:
-rhythm grouping errors of the same caliber still exist in measures 38(LH, layer 2), 42(RH), 44(HL, layer 2), 48(HL, layer 2).
-The diminuendo in the last measure is too big (it's colliding with the measures), reduce it's opening.
-The rest in measure 44 (LH, layer 2) is on the wrong side, move it above the layer 1 notes. (for the future, use layer 1 (black notes) for the upper parts and layer 2 (red notes) for the lower ones. Finale automatically stems them correctly if you do this)
-For measure 29-32, you've got it all wrong. Fortunately, you can cheat. Everything should be UP a half step from what it normally is (for example, in 25 the RH goes A-C-D-A, in mm.29 it should go Bb-Db-Eb-Bb)
-The triple forte at the end seems highly unnecessary, since it doesn't do that in the original. (it's switching instrumentation, not volume) Perhaps change it to just fortissimo?
-Measures 54 & 62: The B in the RH needs to be a C
You do know I have Notepad right? anyway... I should have fixed that! I got rid of the diminuendo because i felt like it was no longer needed! Did i fix the notes correctly?
Quote from: BrainyLucario on December 29, 2015, 11:08:53 AMYou do know I have Notepad right?
I'm not holding you or anyone else to lesser standards. Everyone has to follow the same rules, and
Quote from: G-Han on April 28, 2008, 05:26:18 AMIf there are clear improvements that can be done to an arrangement it will not be accepted.
If you need help from someone with the full version, you can use this topic. (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?topic=685.0) The submissions board is not the place to get your arrangements fixed for you.
I know that... I could do all this... I was talking about how i can't access that red/ black note stuff you were talking about...You were going on like i had finale
Quote from: BrainyLucario on December 29, 2015, 11:20:45 AMI know that... I could do all this... I was talking about how i can't access that red/ black note stuff you were talking about...You were going on like i had finale
You
can do that in finale notepad. bottom left-hand corner has four numbers in boxes, each representing a colored layer. one is black and two is red.
Quote from: Olimar12345 on December 29, 2015, 11:41:13 AMYou can do that in finale notepad. bottom left-hand corner has four numbers in boxes, each representing a colored layer. one is black and two is red.
Mine look like they're all black though....
PDF will look all black. Mus file might look all one color too, that's a setting (not the default, I thought). You should still have the number boxes in the corner though.
I do.... So... is there anything else i need to fix?
-mm. 29-32 is still not in the correct key. Everything is a major third too low.
-rhythm grouping error still in measure 42
-combine the second eighth note and following quarter note in measure 44 into a dotted quarter note.
Fixed... moved them a major third up. corrected flats, fixed rhythm grouping error, combined note!
Files are now updated!
*Bump
Mm 29-32 still has wrong notes. I'm not at my pc, but the Eb in 30 should def. be a D. Literally that entire section should just be the same as the four bars that came before it, with everything a half step higher (and the LH accompaniment varying a tad).
So like this?
https://www.dropbox.com/s/3i5lefe33y4gktg/Splattack%21.mus?dl=0 (https://www.dropbox.com/s/3i5lefe33y4gktg/Splattack%21.mus?dl=0)
olimar's literally saying "copy the contents of m. 25-28 into 29-32 and raise everything a half step no more no less", so I don't really know where you're getting this from? here, the melody should literally be as follows:
(29) Bb Db Eb Bb Ab (30) Ab D (31) same as 29 (32) Ab F
the bass should be (idk about the chords but the lowest line in the left hand, and anytime it plays octaves, should be):
(29) Bb Db Eb Bb Bb Bb Ab (30) Ab Ab Ab D D D D (31) same as 29 (32) Ab Ab Ab F F G G (i'm not quite sure about those last three notes though)
like i said double check the chords and the last three notes of the bass
but see this is all exactly 1 half step above the contents of m. 25-28
ahhh, I see now. I'll make the changes right away. I have to post something on the Official Undertale Project before i do this, though.
Updated! I edited the chords and kept the last 3 notes, for the ones you gave me seemed right...
-Put a courtesy natural sign on the D natural in the RH in measure 30.
-the chord in the LH in measure 30, up-beat of 2 should be (low to high) D - A - D all notes having visible natural signs.
-the last three eighth notes in measure 30 (LH) should be D naturals.
-the second to last eighth note in measure 32 (LH) should be an F like the note that precedes it.
On second thought, this arrangement is just dragging on with error after error and blemish after blemish, so in an effort to end this, here is the corrected file.
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/59554832/nsm/NSM%20subs/Splattack%2112345.mus
In the future I urge you to get more feedback in the Personal Arrangements board before bringing arrangements here.
This is how I meant the glissando to look, if you want it in your arrangement.
Spoiler
(https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi.imgur.com%2FDVxsP5s.png&hash=c8fd06c02eb6f6a1ab1b171220bcc46d515467af)
You could also write measures 1-4 in G-clef if you want the glissando. Also you could change the starting note of the glissando (how high you want it) it doesn't have to be a G.
Will update in a few..before i do, i feel like i should add your name to the "Arranged By" area, Olimar...since you helped finalize it. Is this okay with you?
Eh, sure that's fine (If you want to, that is).
Aaanndd...Updated!
Wait...doesn't that mean someone else has to accept it?
No?
This submission has been accepted by Olimar12345 (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=83).
~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot