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Title: [DELETED] [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Zeta on August 13, 2017, 12:09:20 AM
Submission Information:

Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Oldale Town
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: dajwxp (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=3863)


Replacement Information:

Links to Existing Sheet: MUS (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mus/944) | MIDI (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mid/944) | PDF (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/944)
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: daj on August 13, 2017, 12:10:01 AM

Hey, we all know this one ^^
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Sebastian on August 13, 2017, 05:40:14 AM
A couple things I noticed right away. The PDF of the first page is somewhat cut off at the bottom. Also, you don't have a second page title.
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: daj on August 13, 2017, 07:38:40 AM
Quote from: Sebastian on August 13, 2017, 05:40:14 AMA couple things I noticed right away. The PDF of the first page is somewhat cut off at the bottom. Also, you don't have a second page title.

...well then. This is embarassing. xD

So that's what they meant with that whole "print size is different" thing. My bad, my bad ^^;

I'll fix it in a bit! ^^
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Olimar12345 on August 31, 2017, 12:09:22 PM
-I'm not a fan of how this grew to two pages. The on-site one is proof that it can be done on one page. (I'm also not too big of a fan of the added ending if it means it must have two pages...)
-What's with the "sing" in the first measure? Do you really want performers to sing the melody instead of play it on the piano? If you're using that as a means to indicate a stylistic thing, I'd recommend changing it to "song-like" or something clearer.
-Your first system needs to be indented to accommodate the "piano" text.
-There is no copyright info present.
-Like said above, there is no second page title present.
-Measure 8 has a staccato in the RH that is flipped for no reason.
-Due to the scaling of your sheet, all of the text looks way too small. I would recommend leveling out your staff size with your page size so that it looks more balanced.
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: JDMEK5 on August 31, 2017, 12:30:38 PM
Quote from: Olimar12345 on August 31, 2017, 12:09:22 PM-What's with the "sing" in the first measure? Do you really want performers to sing the melody instead of play it on the piano? If you're using that as a means to indicate a stylistic thing, I'd recommend changing it to "song-like" or something clearer.
"Cantabile". ftfy
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Olimar12345 on August 31, 2017, 12:35:20 PM
^there we go!
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Maelstrom on September 23, 2017, 11:18:20 AM
Bump for daj. I know you're out there somewhere
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Latios212 on September 23, 2017, 11:58:51 AM
I'll make the edits shortly
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Maelstrom on November 05, 2017, 07:12:07 PM
or longly
Title: Re: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp
Post by: Olimar12345 on December 02, 2017, 12:11:11 PM
Bump for arranger.