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Title: [DELETED] [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Zeta on January 17, 2018, 02:44:38 PM
Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Doki Doki Literature Club!
Console: PC
Title: Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: BrainyLucario (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4742)

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Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on January 17, 2018, 02:46:00 PM
needs extra formatting fixes that I cant do
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on January 21, 2018, 02:07:36 AM
Nvm, I fixed the formatting errors using a template sheet. Those things are life-savers
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Yug_Guy on January 21, 2018, 09:43:29 AM
QuoteDon Salvato
Now, listen kid; I like you, but if ya don't start acting like you know how to be with other people... well, let's just say your waifu gets the knifu, capiche?

Yeah, this definitely needs a bit of work. My suggestions are as follows:
DDLC arrangement project when?
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on January 21, 2018, 10:53:20 AM
Done to my limit. I can't change the bass clef to treble in Notepad though, so that's still wrong until someone helps me with that

I can't believe I missed that typo

Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Yug_Guy on January 21, 2018, 11:17:11 AM
Quote from: BrainyLucario on January 21, 2018, 10:53:20 AMDone to my limit. I can't change the bass clef to treble in Notepad though, so that's still wrong until someone helps me with that

https://www.dropbox.com/s/ys2j1qm3kwzrm9e/Okay%20Everyone%21%20%28Natsuki%29%20Fix.musx?dl=0

Done.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on January 21, 2018, 11:20:28 AM
Can you make it a mus file, I can't seem to open musx files
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on January 22, 2018, 10:00:24 AM
Oh yeah, it should be fixed now
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: F. L. U. D. D. on January 22, 2018, 12:13:25 PM
 :P
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on January 22, 2018, 12:14:39 PM
I don't think I can add emoji's to my sheet, Fludd
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: F. L. U. D. D. on January 22, 2018, 12:15:54 PM
Quote from: BrainyLucario on January 22, 2018, 12:14:39 PMI don't think I can add emoji's to my sheet, Fludd
If it doesn't have emojis, I don't like it  >:(
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: mastersuperfan on January 24, 2018, 04:03:05 PM
Before this sheet goes anywhere, you need to do a lot of work with the rhythm grouping. Since the sheet is in 12/8, all rhythms have to be grouped accordingly with the three subdivisions per beat. This means that places like m5, m6, m9, and m12, where in the RH you have an eighth note starting on the third subdivision on a beat and extending over into the first subdivision of the next beat, are a big no-no; this need to be written as two eighth notes tied together instead. Rests also need to be regrouped into subdivisions of three (dotted quarter rest, dotted half rest). Examples of other places to fix include:


I only went through the first page and there's a good chance I didn't find everything. The rest of the sheet suffers from the same problem, so you need to go through each measure with a fine-toothed comb and fix all the rhythm groupings. After that we can start talking notes.

(While you're at it you should probably fix the rest collisions in m40 as well)
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 02, 2018, 05:31:31 AM
I'll fix it up as soon as I have the time, maybe Saturday. This is my first sheet in 12/8 so I kind of expected the rhythm to be off.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Latios212 on February 02, 2018, 08:47:32 AM
No one's blaming you for getting things wrong when you're new to things, so no need to make excuses. What's important now is spending the time to learn via feedback what you can do better, and to internalize it.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 03, 2018, 11:42:04 AM
Gotcha, Latios.

Fixed the rhythm I think
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Olimar12345 on February 03, 2018, 11:52:32 AM
Not quite. Count all four groups of three eighth notes in every measure. If there is more than one eighth note in any of these groups, they need to be beamed together, even if there is an eighth rest between them.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 03, 2018, 01:35:21 PM
How do i beam something in Notepad
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: WaluigiTime64 on February 03, 2018, 01:43:28 PM
If it's in 12/8, NotePad should automatically beam notes when you input notes/rests, including over 8th rests (where applicable). You can just go through the whole sheet clicking on a note/rest in each bar with a note tool and it'll automatically beam them.

Obviously it won't split quarter notes into tied 8th notes though.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 03, 2018, 01:46:19 PM
Ah, I imported this from Musescore so that's probably why it isn't yet.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 05, 2018, 07:00:10 AM
Could I get some more feedback on this sheet before I fix that? It messes up my formatting each time I make changes, which I have to manually fix
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Maelstrom on February 05, 2018, 12:01:06 PM
I'm not sure how to put this nicely, but I just took a close look at your arrangement and it needs work than the updaters can give it. It's full of wrong rhythms, wrong notes, and formatting and arranging issues to deep inside it to be attributed solely to using musescore. It's clear you put time and effort into this, but, quite frankly, it's not up to the minimum we expect from submitted sheets. I'll delete this in a few days to give you a chance to respond.
Oh, and to give you tips for the future: Watch out for rhythm groupings. MSF's post (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?topic=9814.msg393014#msg393014) does a good job of explaining those. Oh, and don't put staccatos on tied notes. That defeats the purpose.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 05, 2018, 12:27:15 PM
I mean it's not like I wanted to have this on site or anything......b-baka...

Guess I'll try and finish up Sayonara and upload that instead.

Thanks for what little help you guys could give.
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: BrainyLucario on February 05, 2018, 12:28:47 PM
Still bums me out that I failed so miserably
Title: Re: [PC] Doki Doki Literature Club! - "Okay Everyone! (Natsuki)" by BrainyLucario
Post by: Latios212 on February 05, 2018, 12:33:20 PM
I think you're missing the point - we're not preventing you from getting this on site; you just need to go back and have another hard look at this sheet first. There's a lot of work that needs to be done that you need to do. Keeping this thread open would result in endless replies about thing after thing until, perhaps, one of us just redoes the whole thing for you. What you need to do now is read the feedback more closely (particularly MSF's post, which I didn't see implemented in the sheet) and learn from it to shape up the sheet. We're here to help! The submissions board just isn't the place for this; rather the submissions board is for reviewing sheets that are almost ready to go. You're always welcome to ask for help in your arrangement thread or one of our Discord servers.

No offense intended. Just pointing out what needs to be done. Archiving of a submission isn't a flat-out rejection, we just invite you to come back after it's in better shape.