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Quote from: Static on June 20, 2024, 06:38:15 PMI feel like it's simple enough to be fine either way, but it couldn't hurt. I feel like it'd look weird to put one in m22 though since the bottom octave wouldn't have it... and if it did that also seems weird to me.
Yep either way works, I think this looks fine with them. Agreed about 22 not needing them, it's more useful in the other measures where beat 1 looks like it could be the same chord as the prior measure.

I have nothing else to add to your comments above; everything else sounds good. Have our first approval!

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Persona 5 - Rivers in the Desert

Pretty long, but there's quite a bit of repeated material in the form and the chords are pretty straightforward!

Kirby's Epic Yarn - Splash Beach

Don't want to stress the updaters out too much, so here's a quick and easy second one :P I actually arranged this back in 2016 and never submitted it... it needed some cleanup

Projects / Re: Bloop's Aquatic Project Sheets
June 20, 2024, 04:19:51 PM
Frothy Waters

I've wanted to see a sheet for this since the first time I heard the piece haha. "From this point on, don't worry about accuracy" best performance direction

I really don't have a lot to say here! The alternating 4/4 and x/8 time signatures look good for the beginning and end sections. The cello(?) part is a bit hard to discern in m. 47/55 but otherwise I think what you have matches the original quite well.
- LH part in m. 36 and the even numbered measures after it: the 3rd/4th/5th eighth notes here. I feel like they might be a half step up (G#-A-G#) but I'm not certain. Mind double checking?
- I'm hearing the upper RH chords in m. 43 as such:
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- Do you think a courtesy Gn would help in m. 10/14/18?
- Is there any reason for the specific duration of the chord in m. 12? Could be simplified a bit
- Do you think the upper C# is necessary in the chords in m. 23-26? I find it distracts from the A/G# movement a bit, and I'm not sure I hear the major seventh that prominently here
- I'm not sure how I feel about m. 1-8 / 31-42 being a ton of repeated material, but there's nothing wrong with it I suppose haha
Kine's Theme

Yay, classic! I first learned about the existence of this piece when writing my replacement sheet for Silver Submarine from Canvas Curse lol

- Thoughts about just making this 4 measures per system throughout? I don't think it's necessary to fill out the second page, and maintaining hypermeter helps visualize the similarities between corresponding measures in the section
- Maybe a courtesy natural on the RH G in m. 15? Maybe the one on beat 3 in m. 24 as well

Ripple Field Map

Not much to say here!

- Maybe put the tempo (timesig too?) in half notes? q = 180 is quite fast
- You could just write something like "sempre staccato" instead of using all the dots, but there's also nothing wrong with keeping it as is
Projects / Re: 🫧🌊Aquatic Update🌊🫧
June 19, 2024, 07:49:48 PM
Yeah! It has rain in it, so you're good :)
time for some wet sheets
Just finished this game this morning, what a masterpiece

Quote from: cashwarrior1 on June 06, 2024, 09:43:43 AMSince its written in the Baroque style, all non-slurred notes are played detached (I put hidden staccatos on all of them). I'll put an expressive text for clarification.
Could just be me not being very familiar with the Baroque style, but I think the placement of the "detached" text directly underneath the slur seems confusing. Think there might be any better way to convey this? At the very least, it'd be better moved down and not so close to the slur.

Quote from: cashwarrior1 on June 06, 2024, 03:50:43 PMI find it falls better on the hands with the lh up the octave. There's less jumping and less need for large intervals. It also has the call and response going between hands and then it comes together in one hand in measure 7, which I find really satisfying (and more musically inclined, probably)
For what it's worth, I'm inclined to agree with goldenscruff since it feels like the lowest voice drops out suddenly. I'll leave it up to you though!

Looks good other than that; though it sounds to me like the middle voice does play a few more notes in places you have it empty:
- In m. 2/6 beat 1-2 I hear the third voice playing C and G (underneath the RH notes)
- In the last measure beat 4 I hear a D under the melody
Quote from: Radiak488417 on June 10, 2024, 07:48:19 PMLooks awesome, thanks so much! Not sure if you saw the thing about the pedal marks but if you could grab those too that'd be great.
Sorry, missed that! I updated the files with that and the spacing from above, lemme know if that looks okay.

Quote from: Radiak488417 on June 10, 2024, 07:48:19 PMOh huh, do we normally ever use 8vb? I don't recall seeing it on most sheets on the site and I've never put it in a sheet of mine before.
Arranger's choice, though personally I always opt to do so because I don't see any downside in disambiguating.

I think that's an approval from me :)

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Quote from: XiaoMigros on June 17, 2024, 12:41:46 PMPerhaps using measure numbers rather than a Segno marking is best, since I've never seen those used to jump forwards rather than backwards in a sheet
Yeah, I think the D.S. would be confusing to read as such. I think "To measure 3" or something would suffice, or including a performance note as a text box in order to explain the structure.

"Sludgy Groove" works as a tempo indicator but the way the intro names are laid out, it reads as the name of the looping part so I would suggest removing it or finding some other way to work it in.

The first intro is missing a tempo marking. Also, make sure the 1./2. in the endings are shifted left a bit to be roughly above the beat 1 noteheads.

(Thanks for reformatting this one and sorry about the delay! I've had a lot going on lately and have been slow to reply on subs)
Ah yes thanks! Updated that~
Quote from: Latios212 on June 02, 2024, 07:32:49 PM8va (which would also be an 8va, if you want)
Quote from: Radiak488417 on June 03, 2024, 08:40:48 PM- Not exactly sure what you meant by the parenthesized bit but I've shortened the 8va.
whoops I meant to say 8vb. It's fine either way though and the position looks good now

Quote from: Latios212 on June 02, 2024, 07:32:49 PM- m. 17 is a bit cramped on top, could space the systems out a bit more and sacrifice a little space somewhere else to make up for it
Quote from: Radiak488417 on June 03, 2024, 08:40:48 PM- Yeah I'm not really sure what to do about this, I could put an 8va under the whole LH here but I don't like how that looks later on in the sheet and I'd prefer to keep it consistent. If you have any suggestions I'd appreciate them.
I think the notes and everything are fine as they are, I'd just make some manual adjustments to the heights of systems on the first page. See how you like the attached file~

Other than that, I don't think I have anything else!
Feedback / Re: Sheet Music Errors Thread
June 06, 2024, 03:08:51 PM
No, 180 still seems right to me?
Quote from: Radiak488417 on May 31, 2024, 10:59:04 PMVery sneaky Vegetable Valley remix.
Kirby is the king of sneakily reusing material to no end but never making you tired of it

This looks really good! A couple of comments on the arrangement:
- I would suggest removing the D from the second chord in m. 35; it clashes with the Eb in the left hand a lot especially since there's pedal
- Not sure if I'm imagining it, but a D on top of the second chord in m. 36?
- m. 37 first chord - I think I hear Bb instead of C?

A couple of presentation-related things (let me know if you need help with Finale)
- Dynamics in m. 1/9/33) are all a bit displaced a bit far to the right
- 8va (which would also be an 8va, if you want) could be poked left a bit in m. 24 (both the start and end of it)
- m. 17 is a bit cramped on top, could space the systems out a bit more and sacrifice a little space somewhere else to make up for it