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Sorry for the wait! Great pick, one of my favorites from Color Splash.

-m4/52 LH: I'm hearing the two bass notes an octave lower than you have them.
-m5-m12 LH: I really like the idea of including the chords on the offbeats, but it seems like a shame to only do it for the first few measures. How would you feel about raising the bass an octave in m7-8 etc. and adding some more offbeat chords there? To me it sounds a bit empty without them. Here's what that could look like:

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I inverted the chords in m7/8/11 so that they would be easier to reach, and put the beat 1 bass note up an octave in m12. Also heard the m5-6/m9-10 chords a bit differently so I changed those as well. Let me know what you think of all this!
-m15 RH: The Bb on beat 2.33 sounds like it should be down an octave.
-m16 RH: Hearing an additional F on beat 1.33, you could also leave out the low Bb to avoid the repeated note. Beat 2.33 sounds like Ab-C-Eb bottom to top.
-m18 RH layer 2: Hearing the beat 2 chord as G-Bb-C-E bottom to top, feel free to leave out the low G since the melody has it already and it's a bit of a stretch.
-m19 RH layer 2: Hearing an Ab-Bb-Eb triad on beat 1, the Ab is probably fine to leave out though. The Ab on beat 2 sounds like a Bb to me instead.
-m20 RH: Not hearing the Ab on beat 1, but I do hear an Eb and F, and an additional Bb on beat 2. You could put the lower harmonies into layer 2 here for consistency as well.
-m21 RH: This should all be up an octave, including beat 1 of m22.
-m27 RH: I hear Cs under both chords.
-m28 RH beat 1: Hearing this as A-C-F bottom to top.
-m31-32 RH: There's a descending line that goes A, G, F starting on beat 2 of m31 that you could include; in m32 you could move it into the LH since it gets pretty low.
-m33-40 RH: Hearing some additional harmonies here:

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I'm going to echo Kricketune's request that you use flats for m36, reading an E# in the key of F is unnecessarily confusing. The move from Cb to A in the bass is indeed weird, but so is Eb to C#, which is what you currently have in m35-36. This is just kinda what happens when you do enough downwards whole tone movement; you'll eventually need to cross over from flats to sharps/naturals to maintain readability, which unfortunately means using a diminished third somewhere. The trick is where to put that diminished third. When in doubt, use the option that creates the fewest accidentals; Db major has one less accidental in this key than C# major so it's preferable to read here.
-m37 LH: Not sure how necessary the gliss is to include, but up to you.
-m40 LH: I don't think a discrete 16th note really captures the bass slide here, a grace note would make more sense to me.

A comment on Dolphin Shoals: this is only one of three variants of this piece, this one being labeled "Dolphin Shoals (On the Sea)" on Nintendo Music. (yes they actually called it that) You could either change the title, or arrange the "Underwater" and "Sea Depths" variants as well and include them in this sheet.

[Splash Beach]

Splash Beach
Soothing indeed, thanks for reminding me of this piece.

-m6/m8 LH: I think I hear a C on beat 1 here like in m14, but it's probably fine to leave out.
-m14 LH: This measure's a bit weird but I definitely hear another F on beat 3.5.
-m17 RH: There's an F on top on beat 2, and I don't hear the A on beat 3.

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Here to finally accept Ripple Field Map.

[[GCN] Cubivore: Survival of the Fittest]

Wow, first few months on the job have flown by, can't believe I finally get to see the updating console room!

*creeeeak*

...boy, it's dusty in here. And what a mess! Half-finished sheet music, overturned monkey cages, broken seashells... whoever was last in here must have left in a hurry.

Oh, and the window's broken too, lovely.  Wait, is that... a meteorite embedded in the floor? It's still smoldering... There's something written on it:

FINALE TERMINATION NOTICE
"Attention all Nin Sheeters: Due to recent and unforeseen circumstances, I have decided to end support for Finale, effective immediately. Thank you for understanding. Sincerely, NoteMan."

...Could this be the cause of all this devastation?

Oh, looks like the updating console is flashing. "Update Queued: 16 Sheets Ready"? Hmm, I wonder what this giant red button labeled "Let's Update!" does...

*click*

[GCN] Cubivore: Survival of the Fittest
"Theme 1" by SlimyWyvern

[NES] DuckTales 2
"Last Stage" by Fullmetalgrudo

[MUL] Genshin Impact
"Down by the Forgotten Gardens" by Latios212

[MOB] Len'en 00: Book of the Cafe
"Mnemonic => Extraction" by BlueKirby

[SW] Master Detective Archives: RAIN CODE
"Melancholy - And..." by Bloop

[NES] Mega Man 2
"Air Man Stage" (Replacement) by LeviR.star
"Heat Man Stage" (Replacement) by LeviR.star

[SNES] Pac-Attack
"The High Life" by Nine Lives

[MUL] Paranormasight: The Seven Mysteries of Honjo
"I'll Be Close By" by Metamyrrh

[N64] Pokémon Stadium
"Gym Leader Castle Battle (Trainer) (Two Pianos)" by Yug Guy

[3DS] Pokémon X & Pokémon Y
"Trainers' Eyes Meet (Roller Skater)" by Kricketune54

[3DS] Rune Factory 4
"LAFS" by Static39

[3DS] StreetPass Mii Plaza
"Kidnapped!" by Cashwarrior1
"Your Garden (Flower Town)" by Latios212

[GCN] Super Mario Sunshine
"Sludge Plant Battle" (Replacement) by Fantastic Ike

[MUL] Wanted: Dead
"Venomous Grace" by Static

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No worries on the delay, thanks for checking again! Looks great, I will now accept.

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Looks great! Yeah the system distribution wasn't the issue, just the spacing between them, which it looks like you've corrected. Great work, and congrats on your first accepted sheet!

Oh I didn't even notice the last measure was shortened lol, the lack of a timesig change there threw me. The repeat looks great, but looking at the sheet now I'm noticing that you have the page size set at 120%, was that intentional? I think it looks a bit cramped (the second page especially), and would benefit from being resized to 100%. You can do this with the Resize tool by clicking on any blank space in the margins of the sheet. Doing this messes up the spacing a bit on the 4th and 6th systems, for the 4th you can change it back with the Page Layout tool by right clicking the upper left box on the system, selecting "Edit margins," and copy-pasting the "Bottom" value from the 3rd system. For the 6th, you can just use the Staff tool and drag it until it looks right.

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Awesome, I shall accept!

What a lovely little piece! My only comment is that I think you could add the D pickup to the final measure on beat 3, and place a repeat after the pickup in m1. This is partly so that the performer doesn't have to look back at the first page to realize there's a pickup, but also because the way you have it right now implies that there are 4 beats before the loop, whereas I hear it as just a slow 3.

Maybe the bottom of the arpeggio line in the last measure could end a bit higher, since it's a bit low

Agreed with this, also maybe a fermata in the last measure? Looks good otherwise!

[nice work.]

Got nothing to add, nice work. Also how is this our first and only Flower Town sheet?? That can't be right... I'll be sure to rectify that sometime soon.

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Nice, with that I will accept! We'll change the sheet title for this and your other sub before they get uploaded to the site.

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Looks great, I will now approve! Leaving these for the next updater to get a second opinion on:

-m5-10 RH beat 4: I understand the removal of the thirds here to make it easier, but I actually find the parallel thirds here pretty idiomatic (and fun) to play. Up to you though.

-m1-4 LH beat 1: I agree with simplifying the LH for the rest of the sheet, but I think you could get away with adding the second 16th here on beat 1.25.

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With my newfound powers I will now approve based on implementation of my previous feedback.