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Piano Arrangements / Re: Libera's Arrangements (Battle Garegga)
« on: June 28, 2022, 03:56:06 PM »
Updating this with my 'recent' submissions.  I guess this also takes me past 250 arrangements in a slightly uninteresting manner.

Fly to the Leaden Sky: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]
Stab and Stomp!: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]



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I could also go with the first four bars flipped around (like the final four bars); I don't mind really.


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Submissions / Re: [PS4] Bloodborne - "Lullaby for Mergo" by Zunawe
« on: June 18, 2022, 02:05:41 PM »
This piece is a nightmare to transcribe.  I have tried to before and decided to stop because I didn't really think the finished product was going to sound that good given the difference in timbre, especially compared to the amount of effort it would take.

The number one important thing to try and achieve with this is a consistent sound.  It's easier enough to work out the melody and stick it in octaves but there is nearly always more going on than that.  If you only write in some of it, when you default back to octaves it sticks out like a sore thumb and ruins the consistency.

I'll point on some bits of what I mean, but this is going to need another attempt from you to get everything in.  I like to think that it's my job to check that your hard work is correct, not my job to do the hard work.

-The repeated sections 1-6 is not the same the second time round.  The harmony is different.
-There is more than just octaves in bar 5-6 both times.
-Beat 1.75 of bar 4 LH should be a Db, not an Eb.
-I think most of the RH in bars 11+ should be in thirds, sometimes fourths.
-Beat 3 of bar 17/25 RH should be a Bn rather than a Bb.
-The voicing of the left hand in 11+ is very inconsistent, with extra notes appearing very rarely, but seemingly at random.
-I'm not convinced that the top line repeats the same thing every bar in the final section.  It doesn't sound right to me.
-I don't think we should go completely overboard with rolls, but definitely using some rolls in choice positions would go a long way here.  Have a play around with it.

In addition to the accuracy, the overall layout could do with spreading out a lot, but it'll be easier to see what that should look like with the repeats written out.  Also, losing the repeats should allow you to get rid of using the D.S. al Coda, which is not very aesthetically pleasing (it should all be doable with a single first time bar second time bar repeat structure I think).

Let me know if you have any questions or need some more elaboration.

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Sorry for the wait.  What I mean about 21+ is something like this:

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with the dynamic changed to forte and much much bigger chords.  The piece has a huge sound here and this sort of voicing helps enormously to achieve that on piano.  Obviously this idea then continues in the obvious manner.

In relation to that, the final chord in 29 should again be a G7sus4 i.e. it is missing an F at the top.  Similarly bar 43/44/45 is missing an F.

As I said last time, again with he this C -> G7sus4 sound in 46-47, but it probably shouldn't be voiced quite as brutally as in 21+.  I don't hear the B-D in bar 46 or the B in 47, at least not anywhere as loudly as the chords I mentioned.

I would just make that lower C in bar 40 be in the second layer also, as it's currently causing some collision issues being in layer 1 and I don't think it really makes any difference musically.

You should show the final dynamic at the end.  I also think there could be more dynamics in general on page 3 e.g. at 40/46.

Similarly to in bar 28/29 the crescendo in 20 should probably end at the end of 19.



I think this is fairly close it just needs more consistency in the voicings and dynamics really, as well as some accuracy adjustments.

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I'll be honest, this seems like way too much for one sheet.  Some of these pieces are not really all that short and I don't think it's fair (or something to be encouraged) to have all of this stuff bundled together into a single sheet.

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Site News / Re: Update, Thursday 16th of June 2022
« on: June 16, 2022, 11:47:51 PM »
wait what another update this soon?

Back in the good old days there used to be an update every second, so this is nothing really.

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OK, more feedback from me.

-The pickup is still erroneously included in the bar numberings and so everything is off by one.

-I think the left hand of bar 40 should be an octave higher.  It is currently very low and muddy and doesn't really sound like the original there.

-I don't hear anything on beat 1 of bar 44.

-Bar 50-52's left hand sounds like it should be an octave lower.

-I agree with Static about the bass in bars 24/28 etc.

-I feel like the left hand pattern in bar 17-20 would be a lot easier to play if it was every third note that was up the octave, rather than every second.  At the moment this is very awkward to play at tempo and I don't think changing it would affect the sound that much.

-I hear something completely different in the bass in the second half of bar 18 and all of bar 20.

-I think it'd be cool if the left hand pattern changed for the first run through 29-36, where the percussion drops out in the original.  It would be a nice source of variation in the arrangement and would reflect the original better I think.

-I don't think you need to specify that repeats should be played on the D.S. since this isn't classical music.

-Is the extra piano part left out of bars 46-48/50-52 for simplicity?  I think it's a bit confusing having it be there in bars 45/49 and then suddenly disappear, so it might be a more consistent to just not have it all.

-There are a bunch of systems where the staff separation is much wider and pretty much the only one I think is necessary is the third system of the first page.  All of the others ones should just be normal width.

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Submission Archive / Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Scarlet Forest" by Bloop
« on: June 15, 2022, 08:41:03 PM »
Are you sure? I don't hear it myself and it wouldn't fit the E major chord at all.

I don't hear this either.

I shall accept.

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  • m7 RH beat 3: I hear this as a Bbm9 chord. Maybe it'd be better to put Db-F in the lower layer, similar to m15.
  • m9 RH beat 1: Maybe change the Ab to G to get the maj7 sound here, similar to m17.
  • m29 RH beat 3: The Eb in the melody sounds like it should be tied to m31.

Fixed all these, thanks!

m32 RH beat 2: I hear a Cb above the Gb in the melody. I think there are two trumpet voices there.

Hmm I still hear the melody here as Gb.  I can hear what you are saying though, I just don't think it's the same part as the melody.

Maybe if it was slower I'd suggest adding extra stuff, but I think it's fine as you have it currently.

Makes sense.  I'll leave it as it is then.  Thanks for checking!

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I was also wondering if you noticed any specific aspects of the formatting that was incorrect. I did my best to follow to guide on this website, but if there are any problems please tell me so I can fix them.

Look again through the guide and note the sizes of text, whether they should be bold/italicised, where they should be positioned etc.  The 'Pno.' markings also need to be removed.  E.g. it should be 'Composed by' rather than 'by' and that should be in bold face.  Things like mini-titles and page numbers aren't aligned to the margins etc.

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Yes I would advise against indenting the final system.  It unnecessarily messes with the spacing.

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Submission Archive / Re: [PC] Deltarune - "Scarlet Forest" by Bloop
« on: June 13, 2022, 09:25:39 PM »
Should there not be As in the final two chords in the left hand of the final bar? (like in the first two chords).  It's kind of hard to tell with how detuned the piano sound is.

Otherwise it looks good.  I agree with Static about 28/36 but I think I prefer this simplification.

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Your original is very nostalgic for me haha.  I remember downloading it years ago but this is a definite improvement.

Honestly this all checks out to me.  The only thing I noticed is that the url/copyright isn't aligned to the bottom margin.

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