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Not sure where you want the top G# added in 1-3. You should specify octave numbers (i.e. G#4)

The caesura isn't correct when the timing of the track is still metered rests which is why I used 5/4 rather than a caesura

At meas 18-25 I don't know what else is missing. If you hear more voices feel free to let me know so I can add them.

I initially arranged this for piano with a pipe organ patch sound so that may be why you hear many missing layers as the harmonics are no longer reinforced. I added the changes you suggested so far and uploaded the changes.

Whoops! I used one of his arrangement mus files as a template so I didn't have to fill in all the text manually/format it and forgot to change that part!

Edit: Changes were made - condensed the arrangement to fit 3 pages, removed excess measure numbers, added and adjusted harmonies to make it fuller

Sorry, meant measure 5 not 3

Oh no page 6 looks sad :(

Maybe lock the last system into the previous one? (might have some re-formatting to fit the previous systems evenly)

Looks much better!

Just one thing I noticed

Meas 49 in the LH, how about adding a dotted 8th rest and then a quarter rest to imply the 4+3+4 feel?

Submission Archive / Re: [GCN] Super Monkey Ball - "Desert" by Static
« on: July 02, 2018, 08:04:36 AM »
Glad it works for you!

Cool! Works for me

Looks good!

Only one thing I noticed:

It's best to put quarter note  = 90, just so it's clear that you mean that rather than a eighth note etc. Just be super clear with tempo markings! I suggest notating it like this:

Swing (swing marking)
quarter note  = 90

Well arranged sheet here!

Just be sure to follow the formatting guidelines for two pianos. (Use I and II instead of P.1/P.2 in the subsequent systems)

Also, consider 8va in meas 3,7,8 for piano 2 etc. My personal golden rule of thumb is making sure G6 (4 ledger lines max) is the highest you should go before needing an 8va. (Staff/other members feel free to argue this, it's just my preference)

I don't see anything else at the moment, so good job!

Very interesting tune, brave choice to arrange this.

Some things that I noticed:

Include a dynamic marking at the beginning (I suggest mf)

Just a suggestion, maybe use a different key? Although it is in Ab, it's not Ab major (probably dorian or mixolydian, not sure from first glance). Try a key with 6 flats and see if that eliminates repetitive accidentals

The staccatos over the eighth notes are redundant (the length of the eighth suggests short articulation already)

meas 12 I'm not too convinced those notes should be on the beat (I heard upbeats in the recording still)

There's a sick bassline missing starting at measure 18! The upbeat notes 19-25 become least important imo, so move the LH line you already have t the RH and try transcribing the bassline in the recording to the LH (keep the RH with beat 4 of 25 as well as all of 26)

Also, there's a sudden change in volume at meas 19, so I'd mark the new dynamic F as well as accenting the main line there.

Lastly, some spacing issues towards the end. Highlight all the measures and press (ctrl+4 or cmd+4 for mac) to space things out nicely.

Also, drag the last measure to the left so it's un-stretched.

Best of luck with the edits!

Nice arrangement!

Couple things I noticed:

Consider hiding all of the the Pno. abbreviations as that's only useful in a big score with many different instruments.

*If your version of finale won't let you, I can do it for you and make a new file, just let me know.

Meas 7 be careful with the range written in the RH. Looks like a crazy stretch. I suggest moving the A's and G#'s (meas 8) down an octave and moved to the LH, as well as change the LH notes in those 2 measures up an octave to stay playable. If you prefer the C#'s to stay that low, maybe take out the A's and G#'s and replace them with C#'s to make the RH the span of an octave.

Meas 14, change the D# to Eb, as chromatic rules imply that generally, notes going chromatically down will use flats and notes chromatically going up will use sharps. This will also rid the measure of that extra natural in the D. Also, a slur marking over the two grace notes (drag it all the way to the C# on meas 15) will help the player connect them into the C#.

I understand your beaming choices to express the rhythmic pattern in the LH on meas 13, but make sure that's consistent (i.e. change the beaming to that on meas 19/20)*

meas 35 I'd move the F#/C# high notes in the LH to the RH, for easier playability especially in regards to beat 4 of meas 36 in the LH (it's still possible but unnecessarily difficult)

Lastly, consider a switch to treble clef instead of bass clef with an 8va in the last two systems*

Notes look correct so far, great work!

Submission Archive / Re: [GCN] Super Monkey Ball - "Desert" by Static
« on: July 01, 2018, 08:11:13 PM »
Beautiful looking sheet!

I do hear G,C,G, (the C eing C4/middle C) as the RH voice instead of D,G,C. The rest of the chords would voice lead accordingly.

Also maybe make the "LH sempre 8vb" bigger? I was almost gonna comment about the LH colliding with the RH but I see the light now, lol

Good work!

It is possible that it isn't transposing correctly because you're using the relative Major (Db) as your key, so changing it to D major (B minor's relative) would be the solution to proper transposing.

I do think it's strange that finale handles both minor and major key transpositions differently (I.E. changing the key from D maj to B min would shift the pitches)

Either way, here's the updated mus with the correct key

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