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#1
Sorry for the wait on this one, I took a look through and this looks pretty solid. Just have some additional notes and a spacing comment as my current feedback

  • m8 RH 4.5 and all beats of m9 I hear an Ab underneath the Fn's.
  • m14 LH 2.5-3.0 sounds like Bn which is restruck on 3.5
  • for m16 the run looks fine to me.
  • m20 LH hearing some harmonies you could add above the current notes, would lead into the RH part of m1. Hearing Fn at 1.0 , beats 2, 3 and 4 hearing Ab's
  • I think you could space the bottom two measure systems out a bit more to the bottom, or widen the 4th system a little.
#2
Took a somewhat quick look through, did not focus on melody and only a little on bassline

    Feedback
    • Discussed with another updater briefly, and I think this one would work a bit better in 12/8 instead of 6/4. Would update time signature as well.
    • m2 LH hearing the 4th dotted quarter note as an 8th note followed by a quarter note length An (just the lower octave)
    • m37 LH current 6.0 is an An

      Noting these updates for future conversion edits
      • LH m12 need to flip stuff, fix rests in RH
      • page numbers and titles missing after page 1
      • some overlapping stuff in LH m33, 37-38
      • word "Piano" is small, tempo marking looks a little big
      #3
      Hi AspKing, welcome to NinSheetMusic. I don't have a whole lot to say today as I don't have a piano in front of me, but wanted to drop some comments. Reason I state that is this looks like a very complicated sheet and I feel the need to test the feasibility of some of the chords. However, I am a Ghost Updater, so my replies to you are likely going to be a bit spaced out on the calendar. This is one of my favorite songs from Sword and Shield though, so I wanted to get things going for you at least.


      Usually with submissions we look to have some sort of linked audio for reference - dropping YouTube link.

      The singular composition credit goes to Go Ichinose, sourced from here.

        Feedback
        • This is a very dense sheet on the current number of pages and not easy to look at - I think you could play around with the measure systems a bit so page 2 is maybe 5 systems instead of 6, and then the same for page 3. Making this a four page sheet would make this a lot easier to read (5-5-5-2). Page 1 the space could also be adjusted, I'd move the measure systems up a bit higher, and then widen the space between them.
        • There's some missing notebeaming as well, to me it looks like you might not be aware that an entire beat should always be beamed together: ex. an 8th note on the first part of the beat, followed by a 16th rest, followed by a 16th note should have a beam that goes over the 16th rest to connect the two notes.
        • m22 LH beat 1.0 and 1.75,  m30-32 beat 1.0 and 1.75 and for beat 2 this comment applies to, but it would be helpful if you could go through your sheet just to check again
        • This is a good guide on beaming https://www.musicnotes.com/blog/note-beaming-and-grouping-in-music-theory/?msockid=07d994907287647c12f8817a73636584

        Each submission requires an approval from one updater, before it can be accepted by a second for inclusion in an update. Hope this all helps
        #4
        Sorry for a bit of a wait on this sheet, but seeing you are still logging onto the forums I am using my ghostly powers to metastasize in your submission thread...

        Although the site is moving away from Finale, we still are trying to maintain visual consistency with sheets that were made in the program and new sheets that are done in MuseScore. Hope these guides will be of assistance.

        MuseScore to Finale Conversions
        https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=12538.0

        Formatting Guidelines
        https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=12766.0

        Reason I'm linking is that the formatting is a bit off - measure systems are a bit wide, some titles/credits need to be bolded as well - feel free to look at recent sheets that have gone on site for comparison to how your submission should appear. Game should also be written as Pokémon Snap. Though these details are a bit less important as far as this sheet's current arranged state.

          Feedback
          • From 0:38 to about 0:56 (when this song loops) is not in the sheet- so the arrangement feels a incomplete at the moment.
          • Did you ever try arranging this such that the top staff (RH part) was up an octave from the original with an ottava, and keeping the current bottom staff/LH part in the song's original octave? I think that would make the arrangement sound a bit closer to the original piece.
          • Note on the tempo: when a song is in 12/8, the tempo is typically written to the dotted quarter note value as opposed to quarter note value. I counted ♩. = 102
          #5
          Quote from: NineLives on May 07, 2025, 12:45:13 PMIt is the introduction for the Marrakech stage itself, but I feel like it'd be more suited for a short themes collection because this isn't the only music to play in the level. If I had it here, I'd feel obligated to put the other music in too, and that's a bit much.
          Okay - I was asking about this with the assumption there was a low likelihood of additional sheets of this game being submitted but if you think a short themes/stage intro collection works better than that's fine.


          Quote from: NineLives on May 07, 2025, 12:45:13 PMThe non-square wave is drowned out during this section, but it plays the same line it does in the next eight measures and so forth in the bass clef, staccatos and all. I wanted to keep the rhythm of the bass consistent for the entire piece and I wondered if the square wave in the song was supposed to be staccato too and just didn't have the capability to be or it wasn't programmed correctly. This is also why the bass in measures 13-16 and similar are played shorter than the squares in the source.
          Yeah - as a matter of consistency and with your explanation, I don't mind you leaving this as is then.


          Quote from: NineLives on May 07, 2025, 12:45:13 PMIt's not so much reverb as it is the Es being played for longer than the Gs and Ds/Dbs. I wanted to keep the rhythm more in line with the other two notes because I thought holding the E sounded a bit strange and maybe another case of the square not being able to staccato.
          Also, while we're on those measures, the longer A in the left hand on count 4 of measures 13, 15, 21 & 23 was a personal touch that I thought would sound better than resting on the "and" of 1 like it does in the source. I'd like to believe that was the intention if the limitations weren't there.

          Gotcha - and thanks for explanation of personal touch. I assumed that was longer since sometimes that just makes for easier reading on piano/what you said.

          I'm approving "Marrakech Hotel and Casino". Just one minor other thought I wanted to share from recent feedback on another sheet about the tempo marking but not hinging approval on your choice of implementing it or not. See below

          Quote from: Kricketune54 on March 19, 2025, 09:01:58 AMFor the Swing text you don't have to do this (and I can't remember if we have "official guidance" to the contrary), but I like to recommend keeping it clean like the following screenshot. Can add "Swing!" to your tempo marking, just make sure Times New Roman, 14 pt font.
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          #6
          Will this sheet mean there will have to be a James Bond section? Lol


          Was gonna ding the devs on the spelling of Marrakesh (a city in Morocco) but Wikipedia seems to indicate the spelling is sometimes Marrakech.

          Do you happen to know if the music in the beginning of the linked recording is the intro music for every stage? Or is it stage specific? Just wondering if that small piece could/should be added to this arrangement

          For m1-4 LH, I think you could remove the staccatos. While there is a bit of reverb, it does sound like the notes are longer and not staccatoed.

          For a little while I went back and forth thinking there were 8th notes after the clusters in m14 and 16, but I think it's just reverb. Assuming you also went back and forth on this as well (I think how you have it is correct)
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          #7
          Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on April 18, 2025, 06:49:38 PMHi everyone! I am so sorry about the late response here, I went back to school in the fall and got a job about a month later and things were just so busy that I didn't have any time to work on arranging. But now that the term is finally over I have returned to finish these.

          No worries on response time... looks like I've exceeded yours🤦�♂️


          Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on April 18, 2025, 06:49:38 PMYeah, I've been through everyone in the credits on MobyGames and I didn't see any of them credited for composition/music/sound/anything like that in any of the other games they're credited on, so unfortunately this is one Harvest Moon mystery that remains unsolved!
          Maybe the answer will be found many moons from now... many harvest moons...


          Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on April 18, 2025, 06:49:38 PMYou know what, I actually think that sounds fine and the better playability is worth the sacrifice, thanks for the suggestion! The only measure where this got a bit confusing was m. 7 where the LH quarter note D on beat 2 went above the RH... I added a D in the RH and put the LH one in parentheses because that seemed like a more readable way to do it, if not perfect. Thoughts?
          m7 looks great to me! I played with it myself and didn't like the alternatives compared to what you came up with.


          Since it looks like we are good on the above and the other comments, I will accept Mainland Port/Aquarium/Theater :)
          #8
          Aesthetics
          m10-m11 could center the Segno above the double bar, or above m11 first note.


          Notes

          RH
          m40 there's a weird thing. A# Bn C# is the harmony originally, but it's A#^, F#, C#. Last note is only in original octave. Hearing an ascending rhythm though instead of descending, though inner part almost sounds like it's descending.
          m69 not hearing the C#'s
          m81 Dn 1.0 you could add a tenuto given the original holds out through the measure, also showing this note isn't a part of the same line as 1.5-3.5.
          m85 RH A little conflicted here, but since this measure is a G major chord, I think the following middle notes work a little better per beat: Bn, An, Gn
          m91 2.0 hearing F# instead of An

          LH
          m16 2.0 it sounds like the accordion plays a C# above the G# here.
          m36 3.0 hearing a C# above current notes
          m39 3.0 G# instead of En
          m52 1.0 you could add a tenuto given the original holds out through the measure
          #9
          One thing I did want to add with the Swing text, you do need to have the Swing value that is currently on the sheet present for the music to still swing, but you can just hide it on the sheet
          #10
           Mainland Port/Aquarium/Theater

          Before my posting I watched the credits for this game to see if a composer was credited... I guess if someone wants to go through them and cross refence series composers or music, be our guest lol but the current credit will do. Harvest Moon 3 GBC Credits

          m6 RH 1.0 not hearing Gn, sounds like this is rested. I would think m1-2 and m5-6 would be written the same, with m2/6 beat 1.0 an 8th rest and no tie from m1/5. Thoughts?

          For the Swing text you don't have to do this (and I can't remember if we have "official guidance" to the contrary), but I like to recommend keeping it clean like the following screenshot. Can add "Swing!" to your tempo marking, just make sure Times New Roman, 14 pt font.
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          Might I suggest a little bit of an alternative left hand for m1-7? It's a little awkward currently even if it is a bit more accurate than what I'm proposing, which is to eliminate the notes currently in the 2nd voice on beats 2.0 and 4.0 and to make the LH one voice for the measures in question. Screenshot is an example of this for m1.
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          #11
          Great, archiving this Splattery project thread
          #12
          Seasource

          m33 RH 4.5 hearing En

          The only other comment I have is m21-28, the notes that are meant to be drum beats. It seems quite abrasive... but I went back and forth and concluded that captures the original piece well, so I have nothing to offer in replacement.
          #13
          Quote from: cashwarrior1 on December 27, 2024, 02:09:45 PMI'm hearing something a little different for the bassline.
          • m2/4/6/8 The Bb up an octave on beat 2.25. Fb instead of F on beat 4.5 (I'm hearing this note and the F on beat 4.25 in the following measure as distinct)
          I have updated the Bb for m2/4/6/8 2.25, but I think I'm going to agree with Bloop's original post for beat 4.5:

          Quote from: Bloop on July 10, 2024, 01:24:45 PM-m2/4/6/8: The L.H. Ab-Bb at the start should be an octave lower. Also, there's a Gb on beat 4.25, though admittedly that makes the jump down to the lower F and Fb a bit harder. The F-Fb seems to be a slide though, so maybe you could just leave out the Fb in that case?


          Quote from: cashwarrior1 on December 27, 2024, 02:09:45 PM
          • m3/5/7/9 The Eb up an octave on beat 1 jumping down an octave instead of to Bb on beat 1.75
          Listened to this repeatedly, and yeah have to agree as well. Raised the Eb

          Thanks for checking! I've updated my files.
          #14
          Archiving this one for inactivity
          #15
          Thank you all for the well wishes! I'm sure Radiak and JasCas are well up to the task of checking sheets and updating the site going forward. Looking forward to contributing in my own ghostly ways when I can 👻