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So I'm hearing it as the top melody note is re-articulated for both measures (the flute for m5) while the bottom note is being held. I put them as separate layers to reflect that.
Ah, okay I hear this as well.

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I had thought I fixed m21 before uploading, but I guess not whoops. Also for 28, 30, and 32, I had the downbeat to reflect the bottom note of the guitar, but I think it wasn't very clear. I removed the staccatos and included them in the rolled chord.
Rolled chord looks like a good addition. Seems like you could do the same for m33 as well? Just based off what I hear

• m6 do you hear the flute part plays the melody in triplets, and the string is as you have written? Obviously both can't be written in a good way, but I feel like the triplets are ever so slightly more prominent. Thoughts on replacing the two 16th's and 8th note pattern with three 8th note triplets?
• The slur in m9 is a little flat in shape, maybe you could pull the middle up a little bit? Arrows in my pic are direction I moved
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• m11, m15, m19, m23 RH 2.0 hearing a Bn grace note on the C. I think it's just prominent enough to where it would be a worthy inclusion.

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Submission Archive / Re: [PC] OMORI - "By your side" by Herotheus
« on: November 29, 2023, 12:56:58 AM »
I've just learned we have this particular song on site already: https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/5280

While NinSheetMusic does do replacement sheets, the on-site sheet for this song is quite recent, and is not at all up for replacement consideration. I apologize that i did not do my full due diligence to confirm that before my reply.

I will be closing this submission, but feel free to submit something else!

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Submission Archive / Re: [PC] OMORI - "By your side" by Herotheus
« on: November 29, 2023, 12:19:05 AM »
Hi Herotheus, welcome to NinSheetMusic!

When submitting a sheet, it is customary to provide a link to the source material, like so:


Before your sheet is accepted and put onto the main site, community members will share their thoughts, which you can then implement. Every sheet requires the approval of 2 updaters. I'll be your first updater for this sheet!

I won't go into much detail just yet, because I think there's plenty of changes you can make on your own:
To make sure your arrangement is visually in line with existing ones on site, please read through the Formatting Guidelines and make any necessary changes!

I'm not 100% on if three staffs is the right way to go with this one, on one hand given the parts, I think it almost makes more sense than to just have the middle staff be a second layer of the top staff, or in the lower staff, but I could also see maybe raising the clef of the lower staff to just be a normal bass clef and connect the notes between lowest staff and current middle staff. However, the biggest case I could see in keeping three staffs though is from about 0:44 on in the song there's an added lower bassline that you could incorporate for some additional measures/variation, and that might be best shown with three staffs.

There are some missing note beams, particularly in the current middle staff, for example, beat 1.5 of m5 to beat 2.0 could be beamed. This will better show the progression of rhythms. (screenshot below)
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Also, for m9 bottom staff for example the rest grouping is a bit off. the quarter note and 8th would be swapped, as rests are typically grouped  so that the lower rest value is before the higher one.

If you're unsure of anything or want some more detailed points on what to change, let me know and I'll be happy to provide some!

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Site News / Too Hot to Handle Update
« on: November 22, 2023, 09:32:42 PM »
Just as you were wondering if it was getting too cold for this thematic update, you feel a warmth. No, it's not Grandma's Thanksgiving Dinner, but 31 sheets hot off the press. Maybe wear oven mitts for your practices till they cool off a bit.


[PC] Annalynn
"Lava Factory" by LeviR.star

[NDS] Castlevania: Portrait of Ruin
"Hail to the Past" by Atcero

[SNES] Donkey Kong Country 2: Diddy's Kong Quest
"Hot-Head Bop" by Yug_Guy

[NES] DuckTales 2
"Egypt" by NineLives

[PS1] Final Fantasy VII
"Costa del Sol" by Code_Name_Geek

[PC] Final Fantasy XIV
"The Twin Faces of Fate - The Theme of Ul'dah" by Static

[SW] Fire Emblem: Three Houses
"As Fierce as Fire" by Latios212

[GBA] Hamtaro: Ham-Ham Heartbreak
"Sandy Bay" (Replacement) by Code_Name_Geek

[NDS] Kirby: Squeak Squad
"Vocal Volcano" by LeviR.star

[3DS] Mario & Luigi: Dream Team
"Dozing Sands Secret" by ThatHiddenCharacter

[Wii] Mario Kart Wii
"Bowser's Castle" by Bloop

[GBA] Mario Kart: Super Circuit
"Bowser Castle" by Fantastic Ike
"Yoshi Desert" by Fantastic Ike

[N64] Mario Party 3
"Spiny Desert" by cacabish

[GCN] Mario Party 7
"Inferno" by cacabish

[Wii] Mario Party 9
"Magma Mine" by Jake_Luigi

[GCN] Metroid Prime
"Magmoor Caverns Entrance" by Kricketune54

[GBA] Mother 3
"Forest of Flames" by ThatHiddenCharacter
"Volcano! Inferno!" by Francesca

[NDS] New Super Mario Bros.
"Lava Overworld" by Latios212

[Wii] New Super Mario Bros. Wii
"World 8" by XiaoMigros

[3DS] Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Gates to Infinity
"Holehills" by cashwarrior1
"Withered Savannah" by cashwarrior1

[GCN] Pokémon XD: Gale of Darkness
"Citadark Isle" by Kricketune54

[NES] Shadowgate
"Dragon's Den" by Atcero

[DC] Skies of Arcadia
"Dungeon of Searing Heat" by Static

[SNES] Star Fox
"Titania" by NineLives

[SW] Super Mario Odyssey
"Poolside Rest" by XiaoMigros

[NDS] Super Princess Peach
"Fury Volcano 2" by Olimar12345

[MUL] The Legend of Zelda: Skyward Sword
"Earth Temple" by Bloop

[WiiU] Yoshi's Woolly World
"Wonderful World of Wool 6" by Radiak488417

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Project Archive / Re: Kricketune54's "Too Hot To Handle" Project Sheets
« on: November 21, 2023, 07:02:56 PM »
Made those three updates. Thanks!

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I'm gonna archive this for another time when the season is more in vogue

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Submissions / Re: [SNES] Kirby Super Star - "Hilltop Chase" by LeviR.star
« on: November 18, 2023, 04:34:29 AM »
- I trust you're hearing the chord better than I am, so sure, I can change that

I'm hearing this as a C major chord on beat 2.5, in addition to hearing a Gn anyway.

I having nothing else to comment on though, and will approve Gourmet Race Hilltop Chase!

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Sorry for a bit of wait on this!

• I think you could add a con pedale for the intro section if you wanted, and a senza pedale at m9
• m5 the grace note sounds like it's two grace notes, a Dn and En.
• m5 RH 3.5 and 4.0 are one quarter note
• m7 RH hearing 3.5 and 4.0 for the F's as quarter length, but the Bb above are individual 8th notes.
• m19 and m23 RH hearing Dn underneath melody note's not Fn's
• m21 LH not hearing 4.5 An, but did you add this for consistency of the rhythms?
   - Same goes for m28 1.0 Dn, m30 1.0 Db, and m32 1.0 Cn.

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Project Archive / Re: Latios212's "Too Hot To Handle" Project Sheets
« on: November 18, 2023, 03:32:41 AM »
Okay! Just wanted to see thoughts there, I agree bah's are the important part, and will accept

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Project Archive / Re: XiaoMigros' "Too Hot To Handle" Project Sheets
« on: November 16, 2023, 05:17:33 AM »
For m10, I'm definitely hearing the F striking on beat 2.5 with the RH notes.

m60 is really quite subtle, but I hear as Xiao has.

I also hear the last Bb in m85

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Submissions / Re: [SNES] Kirby Super Star - "Hilltop Chase" by LeviR.star
« on: November 13, 2023, 12:34:39 AM »
Sorry for a bit of wait on this. I've been meaning to leave feedback but haven't had a chance till now to check whole arrangement/song.
• accidentals for m18 I think makes a bit more sense written in Gb major, not F#.
• Overall I think you did a great job with the LH incorporating the second half beat rhythms -  I just think for m32 LH 2.5 the top note is a little closer to actual chord as a C instead of Bb. Lmk what you think.
• Thoughts on m48 LH 4.0 being a staccato and an accent? I think it's a little shorter than full quarter length.

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Thank you for your feedback and sorry for the delay! I really appreciate you taking the time to help me. I know it requires more effort on your part than helping someone who knows more about notation and arranging.
You're welcome, and no worries on the time to respond, as is unfortunately evident my responses have been a bit delayed this month. You're making some great strides in your updates and I've appreciated your patience. I think we all look to gain a bit from reviewing each other's sheets :)


• This is a relatively high tempo song, but I'd suggest looking into the following patterns for the LH; as you've sort of shown with beat 1 of m3 LH the bassline is doubled, but this could be expanded upon in more sections. Here's a couple examples you could follow: 
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m4+5:
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The idea is to simulate those doubled notes approximately every other beat, except for those tougher parts for beats 6.5-7.5.

• m3 RH not hearing D under the An. Same goes for m25.
• m4 RH 1.0 is a G and D just like 2.5, and there's a D above a G on 7.5
• m7 RH and throughout page 1 mostly, beat 4.0 and 4.5 (both 8th notes)'s beams should be connected
• m9 RH last two 16th notes sound like a C and C#
• m10 RH 4.5 these notes could be down an octave to their original pitch
• m12 LH 4.5 this An is up an octave actually
• m13 LH 4.0 is an An, and 4.5 is a Bb
• m13 RH the 8th rests in the first layer seem to have become a bit misaligned; 1.5 and 2.0 should be same height, and the 8th rest on 4.0 is too high compared the quarter rest on 3.0. I would also either remove the RH layer 2 lower tied note or add the upper octave as well.
   - Additionally, in the RH, there's an A 8th note on beat 1.5, as well, and for the F's from beat 4.5 on in the RH I hear An's underneath
• m28 RH hearing this:
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Project Archive / Re: Latios212's "Too Hot To Handle" Project Sheets
« on: November 12, 2023, 03:27:12 AM »
Lava Overworld

This is looking pretty good, I believe my only comment is about m20 RH. I never saw what it was previously to Xiaos's feedback, but was it the non-bah's? The same instrument from m13-19 RH. I feel like that part should go to it's conclusion for m20 as opposed to the current figure, even if it isn't entirely in the foreground.

If you'd like, I can transcribe what I'm hearing for this part, as well as an idea for incorporating the bah's on parts of the beats

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Hi there! Sorry for a bit of a delayed welcome, but welcome to this side of NinSheetMusic. Glad you are here :)

I think the file template that you are using is a tad old, the current template and formatting guide can be found here. We are attempting to keep a visual consistency across the different sheets that are submitted to the site, so copying over your work to this template will help with that.

Some actual feedback:
• I counted the tempo to be slightly slower at q=110. "Marching" is fine as a tempo text, but I would again reference the formatting guidelines for how the tempo appears.
• Time signature wise, this is definitely going to work better in 4/4. For identifying this, I would suggest looking at how writing this in 2/4 splits the melody at m9 between it and m10. As far as fixing this, you can change the time signature, and select "rebar" music and the measures will merge 2/4 + 2/4 into 4/4.
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• Generally, you do not need to assign a dynamic for each staff if they are the same; the starting forte dynamic is fine so m4 doesn't need that under the Bn.
• from the m9 on when the main melody comes in, it sounds like there are some measures where the chord notes beneath the melody are not present in the original, and some measures where they are in the original but are not currently written in. I would do a bit of a reexamination of these measures, perhaps slowing sections down in the YouTube video to verify if pitches are present or not (ex. current m9 there should be no notes under the RH melody)
• I think you could add staccatos to most of the accompaniment part (LH) notes; it might seem a little silly as a reference, but if you compare the sound of Finale's playback to the original song, you'll notice the notes in the original sound shorter than what is currently present. I'd suggest also you could look into utilizing the term "simile" (found in the expression tool), meaning similar to indicate each note in measures beyond this text also is staccatoed. You could then hide most of the staccatos for the LH.

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Sorry took me a bit to get back to this - I've been a bit busier recently and had been prioritizing finishing up the project.

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Also sorry about the mid-review editing, I'll refrain from doing that from now on.

I know it's now been like 7 months since your initial submission, so I get it given how big this arrangement and new ideas come up, but the time for new ideas was preferably before the resubmission, not during the feedback of it.

RH 16th layer note fixes

• m101 RH 2.5 lower this B's octave
• m109 RH 2.25 C, same octave as 3.0 C.
• m112-114 3.75 RH hearing F#
• m116 and 118 3.75 G
• m117 1.5 G, 2.0 G, 2.5 B (same octave as 3.0), 3.75 G
• m124 3.0 and 3.5, Bn
• m132 2.25 and 2.75 C (same octave, C5), 3.25 C
• m133-134 1.25,1.75 C, 2.25, 2.75, and 3.25 C (down an octave from prev), 3.0 and 3.5 An
• m140-142 1.5,2.0 and 2.5, 3.0 F#, 3.5 An, 3.75 F#
• m143, 145 2.25, 2.75, 3.25 C
• m147 1.25, 1.75,2.25, 2.75 C
• m149 1.25, 1.75,2.25, 2.75, 3.25 C, 3.0 and 3.5 A
• m155 1.5, 2.0, 2.5 F#, 3.5 An, 3.75 F#
• m157 1.5, 2.0, 2.5, 3.0 F#, 3.5 An, 3.75 F#
• m159 and m161 2.25,2.75 3.25 C
• m163 and m165 1.25,1.75,2.25,2.75,3.25 Cn, 3.0, 3.5 An.


 
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m98, m102, m106, m114, m118, m122, m130, m134, m138 RH if beat 4 3rd layer has a hidden rest, than the 1st layer's note can be flipped down to its default positioning
Coming back to this - I think in hindsight, the better recommendation from me would have been to have that 3rd layer rest visible, and to have the notes of the first layer flipped as they were previously. That will distinguish the two layers/parts best of all. Sorry about that.
• m151 and any other spot of this section where the first 16th rest in 3rd layer is hidden - it makes more sense to keep the rest visible

Left off at end of page 14 5:55 time

Made some edits to my original post on 11/7 for clarity and also mistake for m163 and m165 should've said 3.25 Cn, not 3.5 (formerly)

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