Heya. Really great job on the sheets. It's always incredible to see a fellow Golden Sun fan around these parts.
Here's my take on
"Apoji Islands" from back in the day. NSM asked me notate the rhythm that way (doesn't it look awful?). I'd definitely recommend replacing the trills with the tremolos. Sakuraba-san is mimicking Caribbean marimba/vibraphone playing. Feel free to copy and paste, then upload your own. Obviously mine was never accepted haha.
Really nice job with
Kandorean Temple! The only slight suggestion I would make is layering the piece with dynamics. Since there's about 4 layers of music occurring at the same time, some are very clearly in the foreground while some are subdued. I would notate this with dynamics every time a line occurs. Also when a line changes hands such as measure 14 to 15, I would draw a line between the two, showing that the line simply moved to another hand.
Had to check out just one more. Very good job with
Apollo's Ascent! Quick music theory lesson. Our system of chords are based on triads, 3 notes separated by a note in between. A C major chord would be C E G, as there is space for 2 notes (D and F) in between the three. You also only use the same accidental (sharps, flats) in each triad. 95% of the music on this site is based on triads. So from measure 17 for a bit onwards, the first chord should be F# A C# instead of Db F# A. 25-28 is just as keyless, where the motion is based not on functioning triads but common tone related triads (ignore this, or message me. but really probably ignore). Whereas the chord in measure 25 is Ab Major, m. 26 should be E G# B instead of E Ab B.
Also use a D# instead of an Eb in measure 4. Easiest way to explain this is that you don't want two notes with the same letter name with different accidentals in the same measure. There's a more complicated explanation, but this should hold for now (again, message if for some reason this interests you).
Great job! Are these your first arrangements?