[NDS] Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky - "Defend Globe" : (MID) (MUS) (PDF)
Olimar12345:
-You have an odd rhythm displacement from measures 12-15-basically you have one too many measures. Remove everything on beat one of measure 12 and everything on beat two of measure 14, then move everything to the left and you should be good.
-You need to break the tie between 39 and 40.
-Double barline is needed at 56 and 76 (key changes).
-The voicing in your rolled chords at times seems confusing. Keep the bass the lowest voice, as it sounds in the original.
-A in the lowest voice needs to be a G# in measures 62 and 63
-Chord in measure 66 is incorrect-it should be a G#7, so from lowest up it should read: G# B# F# D#
-This piece needs to be played with the pedal throughout-write in con pedale at the beginning.
Rosa:
Done *except* for the voicing. I might need a little guidance in that.
Olimar12345:
-Only dynamics go between the staves, so move dolce and the molto rit.'s above the first staff. The first molto rit can stay where it is, as the top staff is empty.
-Change the low held D in LH at 9 to a C#, then the next A to a B. Make this change again from measures 25-28.
-Change the lowest voice in LH in measures 39 and 40 from F# and B to G# and C#.
-Change the lowest voice in LH in measure 44 from an A to a G#
-From now until I specify otherwise, the following changes will apply to the lowest voice in the LH
-Add an F in the staff to the chord in measures 49 and 50.
-Change the C to a B in measures 51, 52, 53, 54.
-Add an E in measures 55 and 56, and a D# in measures 57 and 58.
-The chord in measure 63 should read (bottom up) F# A C#. remove the lowest C# and move the G# up to A.
-Move the C in measure 64 up to an E.
-Remove layer two all together in 71 and 72. That voice is being doubled in the RH, and that is plenty.
-Chords in measures 71 and 72 should be (Bottom up) F# A C#
-Chords in measures 73 and 74 should be (Bottom up) B D# F# A
Rosa:
Alright, changed. Thanks for the help.
Deku:
Bars 51-54 could have the cello line added in.
Btw, dolce etc can go either above or in between the staves. That's a publishing choice and not a strict convention. I've mostly seen them in between and that naturally makes for easier reading but they can go above too.
This would probably make more sense in 4/4 too.
Olimar12345:
Really, huh. I've only seen it above the staff. Good to know!
Rosa:
Alright, cello added. It looks less messier in 4/4 time, so that's a plus.
Deku:
I might clean up some of the rests a little later, but a couple of those intervals in the RH of measures 34-35 are a little questionable.
[NDS] Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky - "Sealed Ruin Pit" : (MID) (MUS) (PDF)
rosa: is here.
Olimar12345:
-Time signature should be 3/2, not 6/4. There are 3 beats per measure, not 6.
-The ascending octatonic scale in thirds in measure 6 need to be consistent. Change the 5th and 6th chords to make them thirds.
-Key signatures are all over the place. change it to C minor for measures 1-14, then Cb Major/Eb minor at 15 (same key sig, it just moves key centers). Add a double bar line when you change it at 15.
-I wouldn't use the Ped. and * signs it the way you have. When using those, you're telling the pianist to keep the pedal held until the * symbol, which isn't what you want there (I think). Switch to con pedale/senza pedale instead. This tells them just to use the pedal in the specified location.
-The accent spam you have from 19-24 isn't necessary, as the note attacks never change. (if anything, they are smooth and legato)
-I would add accents to all of the up beat Eb's in the LH measures 24-26. Also you left out the Eb on beat one of measure 26. (LH, ofc.)
Rosa:
Fixed.
Olimar12345:
-Remove the Eb on beat one of measure 25 (LH)
Rosa:
Done.
Olimar12345: Looks good. Accepted
Olimar12345: Uploaded.
Olimar12345:
-You have an odd rhythm displacement from measures 12-15-basically you have one too many measures. Remove everything on beat one of measure 12 and everything on beat two of measure 14, then move everything to the left and you should be good.
-You need to break the tie between 39 and 40.
-Double barline is needed at 56 and 76 (key changes).
-The voicing in your rolled chords at times seems confusing. Keep the bass the lowest voice, as it sounds in the original.
-A in the lowest voice needs to be a G# in measures 62 and 63
-Chord in measure 66 is incorrect-it should be a G#7, so from lowest up it should read: G# B# F# D#
-This piece needs to be played with the pedal throughout-write in con pedale at the beginning.
Rosa:
Done *except* for the voicing. I might need a little guidance in that.
Olimar12345:
-Only dynamics go between the staves, so move dolce and the molto rit.'s above the first staff. The first molto rit can stay where it is, as the top staff is empty.
-Change the low held D in LH at 9 to a C#, then the next A to a B. Make this change again from measures 25-28.
-Change the lowest voice in LH in measures 39 and 40 from F# and B to G# and C#.
-Change the lowest voice in LH in measure 44 from an A to a G#
-From now until I specify otherwise, the following changes will apply to the lowest voice in the LH
-Add an F in the staff to the chord in measures 49 and 50.
-Change the C to a B in measures 51, 52, 53, 54.
-Add an E in measures 55 and 56, and a D# in measures 57 and 58.
-The chord in measure 63 should read (bottom up) F# A C#. remove the lowest C# and move the G# up to A.
-Move the C in measure 64 up to an E.
-Remove layer two all together in 71 and 72. That voice is being doubled in the RH, and that is plenty.
-Chords in measures 71 and 72 should be (Bottom up) F# A C#
-Chords in measures 73 and 74 should be (Bottom up) B D# F# A
Rosa:
Alright, changed. Thanks for the help.
Deku:
Bars 51-54 could have the cello line added in.
Btw, dolce etc can go either above or in between the staves. That's a publishing choice and not a strict convention. I've mostly seen them in between and that naturally makes for easier reading but they can go above too.
This would probably make more sense in 4/4 too.
Olimar12345:
Really, huh. I've only seen it above the staff. Good to know!
Rosa:
Alright, cello added. It looks less messier in 4/4 time, so that's a plus.
Deku:
I might clean up some of the rests a little later, but a couple of those intervals in the RH of measures 34-35 are a little questionable.
rosa: is here.
Olimar12345:
-Time signature should be 3/2, not 6/4. There are 3 beats per measure, not 6.
-The ascending octatonic scale in thirds in measure 6 need to be consistent. Change the 5th and 6th chords to make them thirds.
-Key signatures are all over the place. change it to C minor for measures 1-14, then Cb Major/Eb minor at 15 (same key sig, it just moves key centers). Add a double bar line when you change it at 15.
-I wouldn't use the Ped. and * signs it the way you have. When using those, you're telling the pianist to keep the pedal held until the * symbol, which isn't what you want there (I think). Switch to con pedale/senza pedale instead. This tells them just to use the pedal in the specified location.
-The accent spam you have from 19-24 isn't necessary, as the note attacks never change. (if anything, they are smooth and legato
)-I would add accents to all of the up beat Eb's in the LH measures 24-26. Also you left out the Eb on beat one of measure 26. (LH, ofc.)
Rosa:
Fixed.
Olimar12345:
-Remove the Eb on beat one of measure 25 (LH)
Rosa:
Done.
Olimar12345: Looks good. Accepted
Olimar12345: Uploaded.