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Just one thing I noticed

Meas 49 in the LH, how about adding a dotted 8th rest and then a quarter rest to imply the 4+3+4 feel?

Submission Archive / Re: [GCN] Super Monkey Ball - "Desert" by Static
« on: July 02, 2018, 08:04:36 AM »
Glad it works for you!

Cool! Works for me

Looks good!

Only one thing I noticed:

It's best to put quarter note  = 90, just so it's clear that you mean that rather than a eighth note etc. Just be super clear with tempo markings! I suggest notating it like this:

Swing (swing marking)
quarter note  = 90

Well arranged sheet here!

Just be sure to follow the formatting guidelines for two pianos. (Use I and II instead of P.1/P.2 in the subsequent systems)

Also, consider 8va in meas 3,7,8 for piano 2 etc. My personal golden rule of thumb is making sure G6 (4 ledger lines max) is the highest you should go before needing an 8va. (Staff/other members feel free to argue this, it's just my preference)

I don't see anything else at the moment, so good job!

Very interesting tune, brave choice to arrange this.

Some things that I noticed:

Include a dynamic marking at the beginning (I suggest mf)

Just a suggestion, maybe use a different key? Although it is in Ab, it's not Ab major (probably dorian or mixolydian, not sure from first glance). Try a key with 6 flats and see if that eliminates repetitive accidentals

The staccatos over the eighth notes are redundant (the length of the eighth suggests short articulation already)

meas 12 I'm not too convinced those notes should be on the beat (I heard upbeats in the recording still)

There's a sick bassline missing starting at measure 18! The upbeat notes 19-25 become least important imo, so move the LH line you already have t the RH and try transcribing the bassline in the recording to the LH (keep the RH with beat 4 of 25 as well as all of 26)

Also, there's a sudden change in volume at meas 19, so I'd mark the new dynamic F as well as accenting the main line there.

Lastly, some spacing issues towards the end. Highlight all the measures and press (ctrl+4 or cmd+4 for mac) to space things out nicely.

Also, drag the last measure to the left so it's un-stretched.

Best of luck with the edits!

Nice arrangement!

Couple things I noticed:

Consider hiding all of the the Pno. abbreviations as that's only useful in a big score with many different instruments.

*If your version of finale won't let you, I can do it for you and make a new file, just let me know.

Meas 7 be careful with the range written in the RH. Looks like a crazy stretch. I suggest moving the A's and G#'s (meas 8) down an octave and moved to the LH, as well as change the LH notes in those 2 measures up an octave to stay playable. If you prefer the C#'s to stay that low, maybe take out the A's and G#'s and replace them with C#'s to make the RH the span of an octave.

Meas 14, change the D# to Eb, as chromatic rules imply that generally, notes going chromatically down will use flats and notes chromatically going up will use sharps. This will also rid the measure of that extra natural in the D. Also, a slur marking over the two grace notes (drag it all the way to the C# on meas 15) will help the player connect them into the C#.

I understand your beaming choices to express the rhythmic pattern in the LH on meas 13, but make sure that's consistent (i.e. change the beaming to that on meas 19/20)*

meas 35 I'd move the F#/C# high notes in the LH to the RH, for easier playability especially in regards to beat 4 of meas 36 in the LH (it's still possible but unnecessarily difficult)

Lastly, consider a switch to treble clef instead of bass clef with an 8va in the last two systems*

Notes look correct so far, great work!

Submission Archive / Re: [GCN] Super Monkey Ball - "Desert" by Static
« on: July 01, 2018, 08:11:13 PM »
Beautiful looking sheet!

I do hear G,C,G, (the C eing C4/middle C) as the RH voice instead of D,G,C. The rest of the chords would voice lead accordingly.

Also maybe make the "LH sempre 8vb" bigger? I was almost gonna comment about the LH colliding with the RH but I see the light now, lol

Good work!

It is possible that it isn't transposing correctly because you're using the relative Major (Db) as your key, so changing it to D major (B minor's relative) would be the solution to proper transposing.

I do think it's strange that finale handles both minor and major key transpositions differently (I.E. changing the key from D maj to B min would shift the pitches)

Either way, here's the updated mus with the correct key

Awesome, and you're welcome!

Hi nacho2420,

Thanks for the suggestions. Truth is, the original freeware version of the game comes with MIDI files of the soundtrack which I transcripted from, and the MIDI file for "Mr. Explorer" is in B-Flat Minor and has the 16th rest and 16th note you suggested I replace with a single 8th note, as well as the staccatos in measures 9 and so forth, so I'm reluctant to change those.

As for the high F-Sharp in measure 59, should I move the bottom D up an octave? The pianist can then place his thumb on the lower F-Sharp and it might be easier to make the stretch.

I have put the melody in measures 3-4 in the second voice of the right hand, and should update it soon.

Interesting, if that's the case, looks like the MIDI from the game is different from the audio. You might need to creatively disperse the 3 different lines in meas. 3-4 since playing both lines in the right hand are impossible. For the middle part with the triplets, maybe keep the top notes in the RH and the bottom notes in the LH?

I think moving the D up an octave in m. 59 is good

Cool tune!

First, the audio is in B minor from your posted link, yet you notated it in Bb minor. Any particular reason for that?

Also, I don't recall what features are limiting in notepad, but if you can, move the top layer to the right hand.

Meas 3 - Check for playability as the range between the triplet and bass notes on beat 4 in meas. 3 make it unplayable. I suggest removing the upper 16ths in the RH to include the LH upper layer as that is more dominant in the piece

Meas 5 - get rid of the 16th rest on beat 4 and change the 16th on the beat to an eighth note. This will match the audio better.

Meas 9 - beat 3, get rid of the staccato. Same with meas 17 and so on. Also consider moving the melody on beat 3 to the lower layer.

Meas 59 watch the high F# on the 2nd partial of the triplet in the RH. It is uncomfortably out of range for a player at this tempo.

Hide any rests from other layers for cleanliness.

Lastly, I can make any edits you see fit if you're unable, just make a list of what you want and I can do that.

Definitely a more difficult tune to arrange I see.

Timpani notes should be C#, A, consecutively, from what I hear

Meas. 3, check you have the right notes on beat 2; there aren't to A's but A, D

I recommend using a software to slow down the recording to really check that you have all the correct notes in your arrangement. I'm not totally sold that this is the best transcription, but it's still very fixable.

Best of luck!

Blown away with this one! Very cool tune

measure 15 - I personally prefer the crescendos to end where the last note of the measure rather than through it as there are no notes to cresc. with.

meas. 18 - maybe add a dynamic marking at the end of the cresc?

meas. 19 - consider raising the RH up an octave for the phrase as well as the following ones?

meas. 23 - drag the slur from beat 4 to the second B that's tied to beat 2 on meas. 24

Good work!

Cool sheet!

Some things from me:

I think 3/4 will best represent the feel of the piece rather than 6/8. Looks like you also beam it like it's in 3/4 as well. With that being said, I'd change the tempo marking to quarter note = 148

Measure 2, 9 etc should have a D rather than C on the 2nd eighth note.

Meas. 17 - maybe start the LH pattern with the part you have from Meas 25-32 in place of what you have in meas 17, vice versa. At least, thats the way I hear it in the recording

Lastly, give me a timestamp from the youtube recording for what you have at 49 and onward. There might be some additional editing to do in the LH

Good work so far!

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