-While I agree that m4 lh b5-6 should be Ebs and not Gbs, I believe that m10 lh b5-6 are Gbs and not Ebs
-I hear what static hears b6 of m12 LH, but I hear b5 as Ebs. Unsure if you changed them when you changed b6, but they should have stayed.
-I'm hearing m24 and m28 as a similar rhythm. b5-6 have the bass hitting the beats strongly and a lighter 8th percussion over top of it. You could transcribe that as octaves on beat and a single 8th on the off beats, ignore the secondary percussion altogether and focus on the bass, or perhaps something else. I would suggest making the two consistent, however.
That's all I've got, nice work on this sheet. It turned out quite well.
-I hear what static hears b6 of m12 LH, but I hear b5 as Ebs. Unsure if you changed them when you changed b6, but they should have stayed.
-I'm hearing m24 and m28 as a similar rhythm. b5-6 have the bass hitting the beats strongly and a lighter 8th percussion over top of it. You could transcribe that as octaves on beat and a single 8th on the off beats, ignore the secondary percussion altogether and focus on the bass, or perhaps something else. I would suggest making the two consistent, however.
That's all I've got, nice work on this sheet. It turned out quite well.