Showing different voices is important, but keep in mind sheets are meant to be read and played. It looks something like a mess to someone trying to read it right now. As such, from a visual standpoint (right now I can't listen to the original) I'd suggest taking out the redundant-looking layer (the one with eighth notes beamed upwards, since the notes there are already being played in other payers) and just leaving the chords + sixteenths, similar to the third system. Perhaps with accents on the sixteenth notes you want stressed where the melody lies.
But I'm not listening to the original atm so I'm not 100% sure, just some thoughts.
But I'm not listening to the original atm so I'm not 100% sure, just some thoughts.