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Glad to see some Paper Mario! This track is quite a beast to arrange... Unfortunately, it doesn't look like you arranged this: https://musescore.com/user/3682901/scores/6178074

I'll second what msf said when I say you should probably try and submit some more simple pieces to start off with. The more complex a piece is, the more tempting it can be to copy others' work, but plagiarism is frowned upon here, as it should be.

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The changes look good, and that makes sense for the game title. approved

Edit: actually one last little thing, I'd recommend putting the entire piece in Db Major. The intro is just an extended V chord basically, so it still harmonically fits in with Dbmaj rather than Abmaj

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Nice, looks great! I'll accept

This is a neat piece.

• The RH chords in m1-3 sound like they have the same articulation rather than being slurred together.
• I also don't hear the Eb on beat 1 of m4; however the spelling as you have it is correct. It's an Ab7 chord, but it starts out with the b9 (Bbb) and #11 (Dn) resolving down to Ab and up to Eb, respectively. I would suggest spelling the F# in m5 as a Gb since this is already part of the chord.
• m7: Fermata should be in both staves
• m8, 16, 18: I hear this rhythm the same in all of these measures:
  
  The note on beat 1 is not restruck, as a mordent would imply, and it sounds like beat 3 is the note that the grace notes lead to (at least to my ear). I think it would make more sense to notate just beat 3 as the "main" note, and have two grace notes before it.
• m19 LH beat 3: I would put a tenuto on this chord to indicate that you want it to be played longer. At first glance it might be mistaken as a misprint and just played as staccato anyway, just because it's surrounded by several measures of the same rhythm being played staccato.
• m27, 35, 47: Ans should be Bbbs (GbmM7 chord)
• m27 LH: The chords sound like they should be legato like in m33.
• m33 LH should be Cbs instead of Bns (Bb7b9 chord).
• m41 LH beat 1 should be Fb. Beat 1 is an Fbmaj chord, but beat 2 is still a Bb7/D, so maybe put a courtesy natural on beat 2 LH.
• I was thinking about whether this should be listed under the base game or not since it's from DLC, but I think it's fine to list this under it's own game, similar to other expansions in MMORPGs. There's a bit more content here other than just a few extra stages to justify it's own separate title in my opinion.
• It would be nice if the tempo markings and alterations were all aligned vertically, except m23, that one can stay up because of the stem in the way.

- I feel like this is another steel drum situation... but I disagree with some of the octave placements in m21-28. Seems like something more like this:

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I hear the upper octaves as well, but the lower ones in m21 and 25 sound much more prominent to my ears at least.
- To more clearly indicate that you want the volume to drop between m40 and 41, put a forte on beat 2-3 of m40. Right now it's a bit ambiguous as to whether the player should crescendo into the mf or drop back down. If you decide to do this, you might also want to shorten "subito" to "sub." for some extra space.
- m51-52 LH beat 3 should be A
- You can move the dim. up a bit in m59

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My bad I totally was hearing that the way you said and Latios as well.  Talked with Lat briefly on discord and concluded I'd tie over the D from m17 to 18 in the LH.  I have resubmitted (for real)

Cool, I'll accept then

- There's no LH A in m. 18, you could tie over the previous D instead

I hear this using Audacity.  I pitched up and can hear a pitch change from D to A between 17 and 18 though it's definitely not as clear as m15-16.  I think the way the song is phrased this makes sense to repeat the same D to A as before.

I also tried messing around with this track in Audacity, and I don't hear the A. Since it's played by the guitar, the attack should be relatively prominent (i.e. have a strumming sound associated with it). Are you sure you're not just hearing the A on beat 4 of the m17 RH being held over?

Everything else looks and sounds good

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I was confused at first but then I realized the files weren't uploaded. Looking over them again, I don't see any additional issues, great sheet!

Awesome to see this one finally completed! I think this is definitely one of the trickiest tracks in the game to arrange, and this sheet sounds great. It's hard bc most of the harmonies come as a result of the different crossing voices and not just background chords - trying to fit that all in a piano solo is really something. Great stuff

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Looks good

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As WaluigiTime64 pointed out, I feel like this arrangement is already kind of stretching what's playable, so I'm a bit reluctant to add even more 16th notes, and to make the runs I've simplified with quintuplets go on for an extra octave like in the original, etc. I hope that's alright.

Sounds good to me then. The other changes look good, so I'll go ahead and approve.

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Regarding the tempo thing, I feel like I saw Ben post something about it in a sub thread from years ago (a Behind Bars screenshot I think). It is a really minor issue though, so I wouldn't worry about it for future sheets. Accepted

One nitpicky thing from me: we try to go by the original console a game was released on, and this game was actually released only on PSVita a year before being ported to PS4. Other examples on site include Resident Evil 4 being listed as GC only and Sonic Adventure 1-2 being listed as DC only, despite being ported to other consoles in following years.

You might also want to double check that copyright year

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Moved the tempo marking and removed the staccato for you, and kept the dynamics the same. I'll accept now