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Project Archive / Re: Replacements Update
« on: February 27, 2021, 11:56:32 PM »
All of the sheets for this project have now been accepted.  A big thanks to everyone who participated, and I'll be archiving this thread now.

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Project Archive / Re: Static's Replacements
« on: February 27, 2021, 10:53:59 PM »
The Final Battle

Had a little chat about some bits and pieces with Static over discord and the edits look good.  Accepted.

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Project Archive / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: February 27, 2021, 01:04:52 AM »
Spaceport Alpha

Approved.

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Project Archive / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: February 27, 2021, 12:55:44 AM »
Ah I did try to put this in my picture but I should have mentioned it as well.  Make sure to put the rests in 11-13 back to the usual height.

Also (x5), I know I said to add the staccatos, but I realise that the last one in each set of three should probably not be staccato to reflect the original.  The first two are still useful for distinguishing the phrase mark though.

Everything else looks good.

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Project Archive / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: February 26, 2021, 11:05:34 PM »
While it would be nice to add in the harp part, I feel it might overcomplicate what I have in measures 11 to 14, since the rest of the piece doesn't have any additions similar to that in other measures. Personally, I find it out of place here, regardless of how it fits in the original source.

I didn't say add the harp part, I suggested adding in the (currently missing) harmony from the harp part.  Something like this:
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Also, the 8vas in 21-28 are a little close to the staff.

Also (x2), if you're slurring repeated notes, you should add in staccatos to help distinguish them from ties.

Also (x3), it seems like all of the articulations have been v26'd and I swear they were fine before.  In any case I'll just fix them at the end.

Also (x4), have you considered adding in more dynamics?  Maybe you don't want to, but it's a thought.

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Project Archive / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: February 25, 2021, 10:06:01 PM »
Spaceport Alpha

Sorry that this one's been waiting a while.  This a pretty cool piece.

Left hand notes:
-Every time you have the pattern on beat 4 of bar 1 (i.e. lots of places) I think that should be two semiquavers at the end.  It'd certainly be more consistent with all of the other times that rhythm comes up for different pitches.
-Bar 10 beat 4.5 should be another C.
-Bar 11/13 beat 4.5 I hear F# -> B rather than E E.
-Bar 15/17 beat 2.5 should be an F#.  Nice descending tritone there.

Right hand notes:
-Bar 7/11/others, the little interjection on beat 2.5 should be D B not B G.
-Bar 10 missing harmony:
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-Bar 18 beat 2 should be two semiquavers rather than a quaver.
-Bar 35/37 the Ebs should be D#s.

General arrangement points:
-I'd recommend trying to get some of the harmony into bars 11-14.  The harmony that is outlined there is B -> Em -> B -> Em -> G (by the harp thing).
-Generally speaking, I think the left hand should be lower.  Currently it really lacks the power and the drive of the original.  Honestly I think you could just put the whole thing down the octave, you wouldn't even really need an 8va anywhere.
-I know I suggested adding in harmony for bar 10, but I think bar 34 has too much.  Those chords are by far the most awkward thing to play in this arrangement and I don't think the difficulty spike really benefits the sheet.
-21-28 might be a good place for an 8va.
-Make sure the slurs in 35-38 end on the ends of the ties (i.e. a note later than currently).  Also, I think the slurs could made a little more consistent by slurring it like this:
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-I'm not sure about the staccatos in 21-28, they don't sound particularly needed there.
-On the other hand, the RH dyads in bars 3-6/19-20 feel like they could really do with some staccatos.
-I'd suggest slurring the first and third quaver in beats 3-4 of bar 8.
-A general comment: there's a bunch of places where the RH swaps to and fro between two different voices.  It might be helpful to break the beams in these situations to make it clear that the voice is changing, or alternatively use phrase marks to help distinguish them better (although both of these options have their downsides...  See what you think.)

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Piano Arrangements / Re: Libera's Arrangements (Final Fantasy X)
« on: February 24, 2021, 09:51:23 PM »
I've been very busy recently.  Unfortunately, there isn't anything that hasn't already been posted elsewhere here, but I figured that I should update my thread.

Auron's Theme: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]
Yuna's Theme: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]


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Project Archive / Re: Static's Replacements
« on: February 19, 2021, 10:37:03 PM »
Final Fantasy V: The Final Battle

-Bars 21-30 look incredibly cramped/uneven, especially the left hand.  I understand that you wanted to 5 bar systems somewhere to keep the sheet to 4 pages, but there are much better sections to choose for this.  For example, the final 10 bars work really well with 5 bars per system since there's less going on there.
-Have you considered just writing 21-25 an octave up so that you don't have to drop down an octave in 20?  I feel like dropping in 20 loses you some of the tension that you're building up.
-I'm not sure about the slurs in 27-28 as I think they're visually confusing.  Compared to 25-26 and 29-30, these ones go against the metre and I think it makes the groupings harder to distinguish, especially the one that goes across the barline.
-The dyad in the second layer of bar 60 beat 3 sounds to me like it should drop down to E B rather than G# E.
-The diminuendo in 63-64.  Need I say more?
-The dynamics could be a little better placed.  Some are off centre and others are too close to barlines etc.  Maybe just go through and check these.

Nice sheet.

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-m11b3 - I hear this note as a Eb

Not super sure but I changed it.

-m23 - I hear chords on b3.25, 3.5, same in m24 b3.5
Now that I listen, I also hear this in m11 and m12, but only on b3.5 in each measure.

I changed things a bit (i.e. more chords) although I tried to keep it consistent.  I don't want there to be too many chords getting in the way of the melody.

-m34/37 - I hear a grace note before b4.5

Added.

LH - just one thing. Do you view the pickup Dn in every even numbered measure more important than the bass guitar holding the E for that note instead? I think I might actually favor changing it to emphasize the guitar's lack of movement and contrast it more with the even numbered measures, but this one's up to you.

I didn't think I was substituting anything for the bass?  I listened to it again and still hear what I wrote in, so not sure what you mean exactly.

I don't believe this is a true DS, the first 2 measures' basslines only play once.

I think my omission of the segno (fixed now) confused you here into thinking it was a D.C.  The loop should be right now.



Thanks for checking and files updated.

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Great, accepting...

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This looks very nice, just a few things from me.

-Have you considered incorporating the synth at all, especially in 14-21 where it does some cool harmonies?  Might be an idea.
-For the key signature in bars 1-3 and 30-40, I don't think it's right.  I think it'd make far more sense written in A minor (no sharps/flats): the raised sixth (F#) is like dorian and also don't always appear, also the C#s feel like they're being borrowed from the parallel major or something like that, rather than part of the normal tonality.  Furthermore, nothing about this suggests Bm or D to me at all since both of these sections start on an Am chord.  The flat 2 chord (Bb) is also a very common addition to Am.
-The piano sounds like it plays an A on beat 2 of bar 12 after the top F.

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Looks great, some small things:

-Be careful with the slurs hitting the accidentals (bar 9, bar 13 is a little close also).
-Beats 2.5-3 in bar 12 and 14 sound like echoes to me; had you considered notating that in?

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Submissions / Re: [PS2] Final Fantasy X - "Yuna's Theme" by Libera
« on: February 06, 2021, 12:46:38 PM »

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The final FFX replacement.


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Submissions / Re: [ARCADE] Puyo Puyo - "Theme of Puyo Puyo" by LeviR.star
« on: February 05, 2021, 11:12:39 PM »
In general looks really good.  Some small things from me:

-That is a pretty big stretch in bar 17.  I can play it (just) but many people wouldn't be able to.  You might consider writing in the lower octave as an option in small noteheads or something (although I realise that might be confused with your previous use of small noteheads...).  Maybe there's some other solution here like brackets or a note.
-The harmonies in bars 18-27 are a bit weird: sometimes they sounds like what you've written in and other times not.  I think there might be multiple harmony lines here which may be confusing me.  At any rate, my main point would be that it might be better to include the G#s in bars 19, 23 etc instead of the Bs, just because that way it outlines the harmony of the underlying E chord better.  It also sounds like it goes up to a B on beat 2.5 of bar 21 rather than staying on a G# there, and maybe the harmony drops down to a E at the start of the bar rather than doubling G#?  Honestly it's kind of hard for me to tell with the texture, but maybe something you could double check for me.

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