This looks pretty clean! I just have a few comments.
-The way that the slurs in bars 13/14/24/26 interact with the articulations could be cleaned up a bit.
-Bar 18 beat 1 courtesy accidental on the Gb?
-Is there any way the gliss in bar 23-24 could be tidied up a bit so it isn't cutting through the key signature like that?
-I'm not 100% what's going on at the end of bar 28 but the Bn in the LH doesn't sound right to me, although it matches bar 3. I think it might just be a Bb there, but it's kind of hard for me to hear.
-Also in bar 28 I think there should be an A on beat 7 RH.
-The way that the slurs in bars 13/14/24/26 interact with the articulations could be cleaned up a bit.
-Bar 18 beat 1 courtesy accidental on the Gb?
-Is there any way the gliss in bar 23-24 could be tidied up a bit so it isn't cutting through the key signature like that?
-I'm not 100% what's going on at the end of bar 28 but the Bn in the LH doesn't sound right to me, although it matches bar 3. I think it might just be a Bb there, but it's kind of hard for me to hear.
-Also in bar 28 I think there should be an A on beat 7 RH.