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-Bar 1 beat 2.75 should be a Cn not a C#.
-The A# on beat 3 of bar 10 sounds like an An to me.
-It's not actually a collision but you might want to adjust the first triplet in 20 so that the accidentals aren't quite so close to colliding.
-I'm hearing a Dn in the final chord of bar 24 rather than the Bn.  Not 100% sure I hear the Bn in the previous chord either, it might be a Cn.  (Same for 57-58).
-The E moves to a D# on beat 2.75 of bar 49 in the right hand.
-You could do some more moving between Gn and F# if you wanted to in the rest of bar 50.
-The top En in 53 actually falls down to D# and then Dn just before it does the graces up to the Cn at the end of the bar.
-Tidy up some of the ties on chords.  Particularly 56-57 where the ties are colliding with the accidentals, but also 58 and potentially others I missed.

Cool piece, nice sheet.

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- To get nitpicky with grammar for a moment: In the tempo marking, since "eighth note" is a symbol, the plural should be made with an apostrophe before the s.

Apostrophes are only used to make plurals for lowercase letters to avoid misreading.  There is no chance of misreading in this case so no apostrophe is used.  That's my understanding of it anyway and I double checked with some style guides to be sure before posting.

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Sorry for the wait.

-Not hearing the A in the chord in bar 9 or 13.  The strings just sound like they're playing an F# and C#.
-In bars 10, 14, 34 and 38, the piano actually plays a fourth below the previous note on beat 1.75 although it's quite quiet on some of those instances.  It feels to me like it's meant to be part of the melody.
-I'm not hearing the C# G# harmony you've written in for 11-12.  The strings are just playing E and B and the E moves to a G# on beat 3 of bar 12.
-In bar 19/31 beat 2 I think the A should be a B in the right hand.  Also I then hear a G -> F# motion alongside the D -> A motion rather than just a B.  Also (x2) I don't hear the A on beat 2.75, it sounds like another F# to me.
-The xylophone stuff in bars 17-18 and 29-32 has more notes in between the ones you've written that are lower.
-You could add the xylophone in for 19-20 if you wanted to since the left hand is free.
-Why leave out the strings harmony in 21-27?  It's mostly just one extra note and would help to differentiate it from the opening section.
-The strings don't move up to a G# in bar 12 the second time around.  That's the only difference I could find between the repetitions though.
-Do you start the xylophone thing in bar 31 a quaver late to avoid the double E?  Just checking.

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@Zeila: I'm sorry to say that I haven't had the energy to do any more edits to GSS but I will at some point in the (hopefully near!) future.



I took a little break after finishing up the arrangements for the anniversary post but I'm back with more Fire Emblem Fates.

A Dark Fall: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]


I also wrote up this short sheet yesterday for a request.

Royalty (Royal's Theme): [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]


And finally I submitted this sheet earlier but hadn't yet posted it in my PA.

October Mermaid: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]


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Projects / Re: Zeila's Replacements
« on: August 31, 2020, 04:08:05 PM »
Undyne
Sure, I tried
I wanted to avoid using more accidentals and I do think measure 12 would look especially ugly compared to 4, 8, and 16. I would rather keep it the way it is

That's fine, I'll accept.

The only G I'm hearing is from another layer/voice that plays G-D-G-D. Listening to it again I hear the middle note as F but in a higher octave. I ended up adding D's to the chords in the RH of measure 45 and G's in measure 46

I admit I'm finding it pretty hard to work out exactly what's going on in bar 45, but what you've written in there just sounds out of place to me compared to in 46-47 where it's fairly consistent.  The general pattern (low high low) with not too large an interval sounds like it should still be going on in 45, if you understand what I mean.  Particularly the F-F-F octave jump in the second half of the bar sounds especially off to me.  Maybe we could get another opinion if necessary.

The edits to 21-28 look great!

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Projects / Re: Code_Name_Geek's Replacements
« on: August 31, 2020, 02:49:55 PM »
Yes sorry I got confused.  Beat 3.75 is correct.  Are you sure about it in bar 12 though?  I just hear the bass going to a C rather than an E like it does in bars 14 and 16.

Also, the third system on page 2 was weirdly spaced when I opened it up, but that's easy enough for me to fix if it's just a finale import problem.  I can just fix it when I fix the articulations.

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Request / Re: [PC] Iconoclasts - Royalty (Royal's Theme)
« on: August 30, 2020, 05:07:03 PM »
wow that was incredible thank you

You are very welcome!

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Request / Re: [PC] Iconoclasts - Royalty (Royal's Theme)
« on: August 30, 2020, 09:49:27 AM »
Here you go!

Royalty (Royal's Theme): [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]

I haven't seen any iconoclasts music on the piano. I don't think the game was very popular unfortunately.

I've done a couple of other arrangements from this game that you can find in my PA thread on my second post under 'Other', if you're interested.  I may also do more in the future.

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Projects / Re: Zeila's Replacements
« on: August 28, 2020, 03:09:57 PM »
Undyne

-Have you considered making the slide down to the Eb on bar 12 slower, like it is in in the original?  Obviously it's a bit difficult with only two notes but you could make them take up the whole of bar 11 rather than just right at the end.
-I'm not 100% sure what to do about the Dns.  On the one hand, they're part of Cbm chords and so should be Ebbs, but it does look a little ugly with the Ebbs next to the Ebs, especially in bar 12.  Still, having all of the Cbm chords misspelled is also not great, hence me not being sure what to do.  I don't know if you've thought about it at all, but let me know what you think.  I might ask about to find some other opinions as well. 

Dr. Mario

-I'm hearing something completely different for the quaver lines in 21-28.  If this change was to keep the same rhythms but to use them to flesh out the harmony instead, you could always just put the harmony underneath the melody notes and keep the guitar part as verbatim.  It sounds quite different the way you currently have it...
-It's kind of hard to hear but I'm hearing the second quaver triple in bar 45 as F G F, rather than F D F.
-I'd write in a diminuendo in the final bar for those repeating octave Bbs (also, I think there should probably be one on beat 4.5, it's just that it's faded out so much it's barely audible).

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Projects / Re: Code_Name_Geek's Replacements
« on: August 25, 2020, 08:51:58 AM »
- I'm pretty sure that I'm hearing a C there - just to be sure, what beat do you hear the E on?

Beat 3.5.

- I think I got this. It's a bit awkward because it crosses into the upper chords, but I didn't want to move it down for reach reasons (and also to lead better into the next bar).

Maybe bass movement wasn't the phrase I should have used.  I just meant that in 12 and 14 you wrote in the guitar going C-G semiquavers at the end in the left hand but missed it out in bar 16.  Although you're right that there should also be an E there (like in 14) but once again I hear it on beat 3.5.

The rest of the edits look good to me.

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Fulfilled requests / Re: [PC] Long Live the Queen 03 - Talking (Happy)
« on: August 23, 2020, 05:17:03 PM »
(By the way, anyone know the composer for this game?)

I do not know about individual track credits, but the in-game credit screen credits 'pierrotlunaire', 'Kannazuki' and 'Kana's Sound Factory', whatever/whoever those are.

Spoiler
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Projects / Re: Libera's Replacements
« on: August 23, 2020, 01:13:54 PM »
- m26-33 sounds like it should be an octave lower. There's room to move it down without it running into the LH part.

Maybe 26-29, but I'm hearing the melody in 30-33 as being higher.  It might be doubled lower down in places but when I put it down the octave it sounded too low.  I wasn't sure about 26-29 but I decided to put it down anyway.

Other stuff should be fixed also.  Thanks for checking!

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Projects / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: August 20, 2020, 10:04:38 PM »
Fixed over discord.  Frosty Village is now accepted!

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Projects / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: August 20, 2020, 09:15:08 PM »
I don't see/understand what you're talking about here. On the file, both sections mentioned are beamed consistently and I don't see any broken beams around the sheet in general. Do you mean since it's two eighths to a quarter in the left hand, then it should be split because of that?

It was definitely different when I loaded up the file earlier but it looks fine now, so it doesn't really matter anymore.



Two final things:

-Could you spread the tempo marking and the swing marking out a little more?  They're really close together.
-The Gns in bars 59-60 should be G#s right?


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Projects / Re: Nine Lives' Replacements
« on: August 20, 2020, 05:51:05 PM »
Frosty Village

-There's a bunch of places where the LH rhythm is different to what you've written in.  For example, bar 21 should have two quaver C#s at the end rather than a crotchet C#.  Similarly for bars 37, 40, 45 and 46, 65.  From when the new bass pattern comes in at 48 all of the rhythms in the left hand are off (it sounds to me like there should be two quavers at the end of the bars and only a crotchet on beat 1).
-Intentionally simplified rhythms in bar 61?  You wrote in the other triplet stuff elsewhere so I'm just wondering.
-http to https!
-You might want to spread out the systems on page 1 a little more evenly.  There's a lot of space between the bottom stave and the copyright at the moment.
-The beaming of the guitar line in bars 30 and 32 should be consistent (same for 74 and 76).  If you break the beam in one place you should break it in the other and vice versa.
-Another point about that section, why is the F# on beat 2.5 included the second time but not the first?  Also, the rest in 32/76 should be at the normal height.
-It's kind of shame that there are no articulations or dynamics (or directions of any kind) in the sheet.  One example of where you could use slurs in particular would be to help differentiate the different instruments in 37 and 39 (but you could also do that with beaming if you wanted to.)  Something to think about anyway, but I won't force it if you don't want to.
-The positioning of the tempo marking is quite awkward since it's too close to the swing marking.  It's probably better to have them stacked vertically rather than horizontally.  Also, the tempo marking shouldn't be in parenthesis and should also be in terms of crotchets since your time signature is 4/4.

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