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Messages - Libera

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This is a pretty simple arrangement, but there are a couple of things I noticed.

-It'd be nice to have the Dm7 chords in bars 7, 15 and 17.  Particularly in 17 where you take the 7th rather than the tonic.  Obviously the chord there is inverted but I feel it'd be more consistent with 7 and 15 to have it being D F A at least.
-The rit in 17 is a rather extreme rit to say the least, so it might better to convey that by using a molto rit.

What needs to be done next for this one? Are you two still discussing some details / do you want some more input on anything in particular? Happy to weigh in on something if needed.

It's just been a busy week, although you're welcome to weigh in on anything if you want to.  Probably most useful would be about the accompaniment pattern in bars 9-24 and the voicings in the chords/melody in bars 7-8.

Other than the specific points that Static outlined, my major concerns were with the accompaniment pattern, particularly in bars 9-24.

I can see that you're trying to mimic somewhat the arpeggio high synth thing that comes in for bar 17, but I think there are some issues with this.  One is that this part isn't present at all for bars 9-16, so it's weird that it's affecting the arrangement there.  Another is that now that the arpeggios change to fit the chords (and also that it's in a much lower register than in the original) it doesn't really come across much like the original arpeggios at all.  The main point is that I think this gives this section of the arrangement a completely different feel/vibe to the original; the flowing accompaniment present just doesn't really reflect the original all that well.

- My suggestion for m9-24 would be a simple drum-mimicking pattern similar to the one used in your Eneomaos Machine Tower sheet:

This is also what I would recommend, but it probably isn't the only option to give the arrangement more of the rhythmic aspect of the original which is what is missing at the moment.

With regards to the accompaniment pattern in 25-32, I think it's better than the one in 9-24, but it still sounds a little odd in places.  I know that the upper notes are coming from the strings, but when they're moved lower some of these patterns sound quite muddy on the piano.  Especially since the strings are actually pretty minimal in the mix of the original, I think it'd be a good idea to substitute some of these upper notes for ones that sound less muddy.  Particularly changing the Cs to Es in bar 28, and the Es to Gs in bar 30.  You could also go for another percussion inspired accompaniment pattern here, which is probably what I would do, but I figured that you probably wanted to mix things up more here, and this pattern is already pretty rhythmic.

Libera and I had also disgreed on the intervals in m7-8 RH; I still hear those as they're currently written.

I guess it's still pretty unclear to me which voices go which way here and what should really be on the top, but it's probably fine.

Some other things that weren't mentioned by Static:
-The note on beat 4 of bar 34 (LH) should be an octave E a fourth up from the previous octave B.  At least if you want to be consistent with what you were doing in the rest of the two bars beforehand.
-You could add in the harmonies on these arpeggios in bars 36 and 38 (they're all a minor third below the notes you currently have) and wouldn't be that hard to play.
-Maybe you want to edit the ties in the chords in bars 7-8 so they're not colliding.
-There isn't a bass G# at the end of every four bar phrase in bars 9-24; it's only in bars 16/20.  It should be an E in bars 12/24.

If you need any clarification on anything or help, let me know.

Regarding v27 and this musx being very difficult for me to work with, I should mention that your Platinum Moonlight sheet was completely fine for me to open.  Was there something that you did to that sheet to make it work, because it would be very helpful if we could work out how to make it so we can look at your finale files properly.  I've got the new fonts now installed, but it still throws up a bunch of errors with ties and time signatures.

Well.  I think this is one of those tracks that doesn't really translate all that well to piano, but I guess it's cool that you've written it out.

-Do you actually like the C time signature?  Personally I think 4/4 is clearer, but also looks a lot better when you're swapping between 4/4 and 2/4, rather than C and 2/4.
-I don't really understand the crosshands in bars 4-19.  I mean I guess it's cool but it seems massively more awkward compared to playing the chords in the right hand and the ostinato in the left hand.
-I think I agree with Static about the chords in bars 4-17.  Obviously you can't write every note in, but I think having the "D" is more important than doubling the "Eb" (just transpose those two notes accordingly from the first chord to every other chord and you see what I mean hopefully).  Personally I think the chords sound too consonant at the moment compared to the original, so this might spice it up a bit.  Also if you use the "D" instead of the top "Eb" then it actually becomes easier to play (at least for me it was).
-I don't think the note is necessary in bar 4.  What else would you do?
-From bar 24.5 onwards you use these left hand clusters to approximate the original, but in bars 23 and the first half of 24 you try to write it out explicitly?  I'm not sure I understand the distinction between these two sections.
-The interjections in the middle staff in bars 25/28 etc. I'm not sure I understand the reasoning either.  These sound like part of the low rumblings but occasionally you try to write them in explicitly?  There are other places where similar sounding things come up and you don't write those in.  I guess I don't really understand how you're deciding what to write in and what not to since it seems pretty arbitrary at the moment.
-The game name text is too large.  It should be size 12.

I hope that helps.

Submissions / Re: [MUL] Bionic Commando - "Piano Theme" by Alpacatron
« on: October 07, 2021, 06:36:46 PM »
Sorry for the wait.  Some cool reharmonisation in this.

-Use sharps or flats in bar 7, not a mixture of both.  Since you got into sharps for bars 8+ I think it'd be better to use sharps.  In other words, the Eb and Db in bar 7 should be D# and C#.
-What happens in bar 5 with the poco a poco accel?  It's completely unclear in the sheet.  To be honest, I'm not even sure I notice a deliberate accel in this section, at least not one that goes beyond just being loose with the tempo.
-You don't need an a tempo in bar 18, you have the new tempo marking for that.
-If you have two crotchets (quarters) that go across beat 3, you can just write them as a minim (half note).  It will look a lot cleaner this way.  Particularly in bar 12/23 where the overuse of ties makes the rhythm hard to discern, despite it being very simple.  I strongly recommend this.
-The last three octaves in the right hand of bar 36 should be an octave lower.
-The first two left hand notes in bar 32 are F -> A, not A -> E.  You can see how it matches the pattern in the left hand on beat 2.
-In bars 26-32, the only chords I hear rolled are the one in 31 and the first one in 32.
-The left hand chord in bar 14 should be rolled.
-The pedal marking in bar 20 feels like it comes off too early.  Normally I don't think it's really necessary to write these markings in so explicitly, but since you are writing them in they should probably be accurate.  It sounds like it comes off at the start of bar 21.  But I would say that there is loads of pedal that is used in the piece that you haven't notated in, so I don't really see the point of being so explicit for only a few bars.  I think it'd probably be better to just leave it up to the performer.
-The notes in the second half of bar 21 would probably look clearer written in two layers for the right hand rather than these mixed ties.  Something like this:

I hope that helps.  Let me know if you have any issues.

the laughably bad Haunted Castle!

Is Haunted Castle a bad game?  I never knew.

Anyway, the sheet looks pretty good.  A few things:

-I think you should show beat 3 in bars 10 and 12 (in the RH).
-The Bbbs in bars 5/7 sound like Bbs to me.
-You should probably be consistent concerning the courtesy on the Eb in bars 10 and 12.  The way it's written now is actually very confusing and could make the person think it should be an En in bar 12.

I talked to Atcero and we agreed to not rush Pitch Black Intrusion and move it into subs.

As stated above, I've now pulled this sheet into submissions for Atcero.

Project Archive / Re: Fantastic Ike's Halloween Sheet
« on: October 02, 2021, 09:51:34 PM »
You already posted this in submissions, so posting it here doesn't really do anything.  After all, it can only be put on the site once.  This project is in addition to standard submissions.  Let me know if you need any clarification.

I see you deleted your submission thread.  It's courteous if you post when you're going to delete a thread so that we know it's happened.

Personally, I think since you are new and you have a submission slot available, it would be better to have this is in submissions rather than here.  This is a short term project where we expect things to go quickly and for arrangers to know what they are doing, mostly.  For learning the ropes, it's probably better to get to grips with the standard submissions system.

Project Archive / Re: Colours Update
« on: September 30, 2021, 11:07:00 PM »
Thank you everyone for your involvement in the colours update!  Look forward to the next special update, whenever that may be.  I'll archive this thread now.

Project Archive / Re: Deciding the Next Special Update (Summer 2021)
« on: September 30, 2021, 11:06:06 PM »
Since the colours update is over now, I'll be archiving this thread.

Site News / Colo(u)rs! (Update, Thursday 30th of September 2021)
« on: September 30, 2021, 10:51:46 PM »
Today, NinSheetMusic brings you the most colo(u)rful update to ever grace your eyes!  Prepare to be mesmerised by a myriad of frequencies of visible light, the likes of which have never before been seen in a update post.  We hope that playing these sheets will set ablaze to your senses — bewildered by the array of hues they emit.

[SW] Paper Mario: The Origami King
"Red Streamer Battle" by Rubikium

[WiiU] Paper Mario: Color Splash
"Sunset Express" by Zeila

[MUL] Bug Fables: The Everlasting Sapling
"Blessed Golden Lands" by cacabish

[Wii] Super Paper Mario
"Mr. L, Green Thunder" by Kricketune54

[PC] ZeroRanger
"Green Orange" by Libera

[MUL] Sonic Chaos
"Turquoise Hill Zone" by

[PS2] Ace Combat 5: The Unsung War
"A Blue Dove For The Princess "Nagase's Theme"" by Libera

[PSP] Monster Hunter Portable 3rd
"Violent Flash of Blue Light / Zinogre" by Th3Gavst3r

[PC] Doki Doki Literature Club Plus!
"Lavender Mist" by Latios212

[MUL] AI: The Somnium Files
"Invincible Rainbow Arrow" by mastersuperfan

[64DD] F-Zero X Expansion Kit
"Rainbow Road" by Static

[WiiU] Kirby and the Rainbow Curse
"Rainbow Across the Skies" by Rubikium

[3DS] Mario Kart 7
"Rainbow Road" by Bloop

[WiiU] Paper Mario: Color Splash
"Prisma Museum" by Radiak488417

[NDS] Pokémon Ranger: Guardian Signs
"Renbow Island" by Trasdegi

[NDS] Pokémon Ranger: Shadows of Almia
"Gems" by Th3Gavst3r

[NDS] Cory in the House
"White House" by Zeila

[NDS] Ghost Trick: Phanton Detective
"Cabanela ~A Lanky Man in Lovely White" by Static

[MUL] Halo: Combat Evolved
"On a Pale Horse" by Cashwarrior1

[NDS] Pokémon Black Version & Pokémon White Version
"White Forest (Replacement)" by Cashwarrior1

[NDS] Pokémon HeartGold Version & Pokémon SoulSilver Version
"Pewter City (Four Hands)" by Latios212

[3DS] Professor Layton and the Azran Legacy
"The Silver Peaks of Froenborg" by mastersuperfan

[NDS] Castlevania: Dawn of Sorrow
"Platinum Moonlight" by Atcero

[Wii] Super Paper Mario
"The Evil Count Bleck" by Bloop

Project Archive / Re: Atcero's Color Project Sheets
« on: September 30, 2021, 09:58:12 PM »
I talked to Atcero and we agreed to not rush Pitch Black Intrusion and move it into subs.

Project Archive / Re: Atcero's Color Project Sheets
« on: September 30, 2021, 05:55:51 PM »

Project Archive / Re: Cashwarrior1's Color Sheets
« on: September 30, 2021, 05:47:31 PM »
Awesome, accepted.

Project Archive / Re: Cashwarrior1's Color Sheets
« on: September 30, 2021, 05:10:56 PM »
Oh whoops I really messed up my last post with typos.

Sorry, I should have said what the missing notes in bar 6 16 were.  You're still missing Es on beat 4 and 5 (about above the current Bs).

Bar 6 was fine, you can change it back to what you had before.  Apologies.

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