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#1666
New files!

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- The first chord in m. 18 is rooted on an E at the bottom. I think the LH should be E-A

I added the E, but I don't think there's an A.  I think it's a holdover from a previous A that moves to a G# (perhaps slightly delayed).

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- I'm not really hearing the LH D on beat 2 of m. 18 although it makes sense where it is

I think you meant bar 19, but yeah you're right; I was just imagining it I think.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- m. 24 first chord sound like G# on bottom

I agree, and it already was?  Maybe you meant something else though.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- Chord in m. 28 sounds like the wrong inversion, like it should have the B on bottom

I had another listen and it's root position as far as I can tell.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- You could combine 8vas in m. 28-29
- Cross staff line between 29-30 like 25-26?

Fixed.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- m. 32 chord also sounds like it has an E on top

I think so, and I added another one at bar 28 as well.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- Tied octave in m. 36 is at the wrong octave

Whoopsie.

Quote from: Latios212 on June 08, 2019, 10:04:39 AM- The downward rolled chord arrows could be adjusted a bit so that the vertical line of the arrow doesn't stick out from the wavy part at the bottom

Hopefully that looks better now!

Unrelated to the above, I also went through and rewrote some of the left hand to make it more clear how to pedal the piece.  This required some interesting stuff in bar 29, but I think that's as good as it can get really.

Thanks for checking!
#1667
Quote from: Latios212 on May 18, 2019, 09:09:08 AMYess, love seeing more stuff from Mitsuda!

Hey, I've got a sheet in subs by him as well.  It's quite different to this though haha.



Onto feedback: it looks pretty good but I've got a few comments:

-The rhythm in the last two bars is incorrect as far as I can tell.  The first four right hand notes in those bars are all on the beat.  Like this:
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and then the left hand will probably need changing as well.
-Missing a lower Eb on beat 3 of bar 26 in the right hand?
-The section bars 27-34 could really do with having the layer two ties tidied up.  This
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is probably the worst offender, but they're all varying degrees of messy.

Everything else looks good to me.
#1668
Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on June 03, 2019, 01:03:14 PMThe one question I do have is how do you properly resize the staff in Finale (or where is the setting found)? I had trouble with it and I'm still not sure I did it the right way.

If you use the resize tool near the staff it should bring up a menu with staff size choices (in actual measurements as well as percentages.)  If you need more specific help with that just send me a PM and I can send some pictures.

Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on June 03, 2019, 01:03:14 PMThe 83% page resize seems to be a default that carries over from the XML files I use as my other files have this as well, in the future should I just get rid of this and fix the staff size from the beginning?

People do different things, but I personally always fix 0.65cm staff sizes unless that doesn't work for some strange reason.  If you'd like to also do that, then yes I think it'd be best to just fix the staff size from the beginning, but it's up to you really.

Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on June 03, 2019, 01:03:14 PMAbout the rests, I found that when they were together, the rhythm on beat 1 of the voice tended to look like eighth note/16th note instead of 8th note/16th rest/16th note. Looking at it again, perhaps it would be better to split the beams (and consolidate the rests) to avoid this confusion altogether? Or maybe it's not as confusing as I thought and I'm just overthinking it, I'm happy to go with whichever way you think is best!
Quote from: Latios212 on June 04, 2019, 04:39:34 PMregarding those rests, yes I do think it would be more confusing to read if you consolidated them in places for reasons like the one you mentioned. I tend to reserve rest consolidation for when both parts have the same rhythm or are resting for the same extended period of time - not brief overlaps like here.

All good arguments; it probably would be more confusing with them consolidated now that I think about it more.  Certainly happy to leave it as it is anyway.

Quote from: Code_Name_Geek on June 03, 2019, 01:03:14 PM(I think the articulations should be okay because when Finale asked whether I want to enable automatic placement I clicked no, hope it worked.)

Sadly, this didn't seem to work for whatever reason.  Nevertheless, I've fixed the articulations again and updated the files for you.  We should be all good to go here!
#1669
Quote from: Th3Gavst3r on June 02, 2019, 01:46:11 PMI usually use these hidden lines as rulers. They point to the notes' centers so I don't have to stress about angles :P

Ah I see that makes sense, I didn't notice that one of them was invisible when I was looking at the musx.

Everything else looks great, accepting!
#1670
That looks much better!  Thanks for taking the time to do that.

-Is there a reason for having two lines on top of each other in bar 4, or is it just an accident?
-Maybe combine the rests in bar 8?
-The slur in bar 10 looks like it's coming off of the second layer quaver rather than the first.  I'd try messing with it a bit to make it clearer.

Nice work!
#1671
Quote from: FireArrow on May 30, 2019, 01:20:59 AMA few stylistic things I'd recommend here too:

-4/4 time
-cut note lengths in half and double the tempo
-With keyboard fugues you're almost always passing the middle voice between hands, not notating it in 3 staffs for duet. Granted this wasn't intended for keyboard but see what you can do -- adding in an extra hand to play a single line feels like more of a cop-out than the right arranging decision.

Here's an example of how this style of music generally looks:
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I'd just like to say that I strongly agree with all of this, although I think you meant half the tempo rather than double the tempo.  When a piece is so clearly imitating an established style, I think it should really be written in that style.  (Someone who was experienced in playing fugues would likely be very confused reading this sheet as it is at the moment.)
#1672
The notes look ok to me, but I do think that the general layout could be improved.  I find that using a 1st and 2nd time to save writing 2 or 3 bars is usually more confusing to the reader than it's worth saving the space for.  With that in mind, I got rid of all of the repeats with an even 2 bars per system for eight systems.  Naturally this means you have to go onto two pages, but I think it's easier on the eyes this way.

Other things:
-Although this didn't matter (since it was previously one page) there were missing page numbers and subtitles on the document so I put in some for the second page.
-I messed around with the alignment of the url (it was too low), the composer/arranger info and the subtitle (I brought it closer).
-I fixed all of the articulations, although I may have to do it again if you want to edit the file further/don't like these edits.
-I undid the 83% page resize and simply changed the staff size to 0.65cm.  This is what I (and a few other people) use on practically every sheet and I pretty much think it's the perfect size apart from some odd cases.
-The spacing between staves wasn't very uniform so I changed that to be 1 inch everywhere.

I think that's everything I did but if you have any questions about my edits, do ask.  Here's the file if you'd like to use it!

I also thought that maybe it would look cleaner if you put the 1st and 2nd layer rests together when they coincided, but I didn't edit this onto the file as I didn't consider it just part of the general formatting sprucing up I was doing.  Also Latios didn't suggest this, which makes me think there might be a reason for not doing so.  Let me know what you think anyway.

That about covers everything, I think.  It's nice seeing some more stuff from you; keep it up!
#1673
Looks good to me!  Approved.
#1674
Quote from: Static on May 13, 2019, 06:45:16 PMThe only normal battle theme that isn't on-site yet...

Gotta fix that then, eh?

My feedback:

-Last bass note in bar 4 sounds like it should be a C rather than an A.  (Might want to drop the E for that note as well.)
-In bar 11 the bass actually jumps up an octave for the last beat so at the moment the way you've written is kind of the wrong way round.  Not sure if/how you want to resolve that, but I thought I'd mention it.
-Not hearing the extra A semiquaver in bars 17 and 18 and I think it'd be simpler anyway with it left out (and make it easier to accent the right notes).
-The Gs actually start on beat 3 rather than 3.5 in bar 20 in the left hand, but maybe you've omitted that one for emphasis.  Worth pointing out anyway in case it was just a mistake.
-Maybe try having the bar 22 left hand similar to the bar 16 left hand?
-I'm not really sure what's going on with the left hand in bars 48-53.  It feels quite specific but I can't tell what part is being followed as the bass has a lot weirder motion in that section.  Maybe take another look at it, or just let me know what your thinking is regarding that section.
-An Ab rather than a Bb on the second note in bar 15.  I get that makes a tritone, but it sounds like what the part you're following there does.
-For the general pattern that starts in bar 1 and then gets repeated a lot, it sounds like the the G at the start and end should be As.  This actually matches how you wrote the similar passage in bars 38-39 and 46-47.
-The contour of bar 46 sounds the same as 38 to me.  In other words the top G should be an E and the G placed beneath.
-Any reason the tempo marking is size 18 font rather than the standard 14?
#1675
Bump for arranger.
#1676
Not sure I have anything to add here.  Accepting...

Replacements are always appreciated, so thanks!
#1677
I don't have time at the moment to do everything, but I've gone through and done a bunch of formatting things.  Namely I think I've fixed all of the noteflags and I adjusted the margins and staff spacing to give everything a bit more room (there were some overlaps before).  I also noticed some of the semiquaver beaming was off in places; I wasn't sure whether that was intentional or not but I fixed it in bars 17 onwards but left it alone before that as I could see more clearly why that might be intentional.  Here are some things I didn't do:
-Subtitle on page 2 and page numbers.
-Not 100% sure on how some of the ties should look, but there are a few places that are awkward at the moment (particularly the last quaver of bar 19, 23, the middle of 25 but there are others).
-Just like the pickup bar I think you're missing a bass lead in at the end of the loop.
-I think this is a piece where slurring the grace notes would be helpful for clarity reasons due to how much is going on sometimes.
-Make the semiquaver rest heights consistent in bars 2, 4 6 etc.
-Some of the grace note positioning is kind of tricky and I was thinking maybe it'd be best to push this to two bars per system just to give all the bars (particularly the second page though) some more space, but I can see why you might be against that.

I might be able to do some more formatting stuff later (maybe next week) but if someone else gets to it before then, awesome.



I haven't checked the notes and stuff yet but this looks sooo much better than the on-site version so thank you!  Here's the file [Libera Edit].

Oh and also I changed the on-site name as requested.
#1678
Quote from: cashwarrior1 on May 16, 2019, 04:25:16 PMI think some phrasing should be added. A lot of this piece is a bunch of phrases layered on top of each other so it'd be helpful to distinguish these for the player.

Myself and Maelstrom came up with something.  Hope it's clearer now!
#1679
Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PMThis is a beautiful piece

Indeed it is!

Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PM- m23 it sounds like there's a higher G nat in the left hand on beat 2
- m24 maybe you could add a low D in beat 1 (RH), but if I can understand not wanting to put one there
- m29 is there a reason why you omitted the F# in the LH chord?

All great points!  After trying it out on the piano, I put the D in bar 24 into the left hand so that it resolves correctly and doesn't get in the way of the piano line too much.  I also added in a missing A in the left hand of bar 25 while I was here.

Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PM- this is just me being picky, but I think the subtitle is a little too close to the title

The spacing looks to me like the same as it is for all of my sheets and it doesn't look particularly close so I left it as is.

Quote from: Zeila on May 18, 2019, 10:40:23 PMNice work overall!

Thanks!  And thank you for taking the time to check it over.
#1680
Awesome, looks great to me!