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Notes look good to me, the only comment I have is a little suggestion:

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I think this might look a bit clearer and removes all of those semiquaver rests.  Certainly not required, but something to consider.

I was going to sub something else actually, but I don't have the time to fix it up at the moment so here's this instead.

Awesome!

Everything looks great to me apart from I think I'd write the Gb in bar 2 as an F# since the implied harmony there is a V/ii chord, but it's probably a little up to interpretation there since it's so sparse.

Finally, by popular demand!  (Not really, Latios just keeps asking me to sub this haha.)

I did change these on purpose at some point because I noticed the voices don't actually hold to the end of the bar. They start off as almost exactly 1 beat and over the course of the song gradually get longer, but they never extend past beat 4.5. I decided to add the tenuto to emphasize they are definitely at least a full beat. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

That's totally cool, no worries.

Looks good to me!

Looks pretty great in general, just a few little things from me.

-I'd combine the two dotted rests in bar 27 into a single dotted minim rest.
-Perhaps melody notes like beat bar 4, beat 3 bar 8 and in similar places would be better as dotted minim's rather than dotted crotchets?  They sound like they're longer to me, but it's probably pretty subjective.

Great!

Awesome!  Thanks for listening to my picky-ness haha.

Accepting!

When I first looked at this I thought I was going to have more to say, but on a second listen I think in general it's actually a pretty good job getting it down onto one piano.  Some things I'd like to mention though:

-Not so important, but the tempo is currently set at crotchet = 48 rather than dotted crotchet = 48 so the playback and midi will be too slow.
-I know I have a tendency to do this myself sometimes, but perhaps there's a better way to write out the third layer in bar 16 that's less cluttered.  I'm not sure we need to see the exact voice leading on that particular inner part here for any clarity in the performance.  Maybe just putting it in the right hand with a similar marking to the previous bar would be less visually 'busy'.
-The large arpeggio in bar 31 kinda comes out of nowhere and feels a bit weird to me next to the rest of the accompaniment (and I don't think it sticks out particularly in the original either) so personally I'd dial that down a bit to something more closely resembling the accompaniment pattern you've been using elsewhere.
-The lower second A in the right hand of bar 40 sounds like it should be a B to me.  It would fit the pattern better as well.

I see where you're coming from with the 6/8 3/4 thing.  Sometimes with those pieces they drift between the two and I don't think the way you've written it is really a problem, even if it's not how I would have done it myself.  (In other words, I'm fine with it being in 6/8.)

Yug gave me permission to edit these files, and I have done so.  I just hid the repeated markings after the second measure and made the dotted lines go to the third quaver rather than the ninth as Lat mentioned.  I also adjusted the bracket in bar 3 to make it a bit neater.

It's a go from me!

Really great arrangement! It's a tough song, but you've really made the sheet something really approachable, which is really cool I think.

Thanks, I spent absolutely ages on this sheet so I'm glad I got something of good quality out at the end.

From m53 to the end of Phase 2, there's a bunch of grace note stuff happening with the shakuhachi. If you intentionally didn't include that, that's fine, I'm just wondering. [

My thinking was in phase 1 where it was slower and the melody was a single line (or just a single harmony note beneath) it was important to get in all the flourishes and stuff.  But in phase 2 where often the right hand is playing big chords at a faster tempo and louder dynamic, the graces were only going to detract from the overall impact of the melodic lines.  You're definitely right though in that there is a lot of subtle stuff going on in those bars.

For m82 of Phase 2, there's a noticeable break at the end of the bar that might be worth including. It's a pretty minor thing though.

Hmm it's a good point.  I just went and tried playing it like that but the sudden loss of sound is a bit more stark on piano than it is in the original and so it sounds a little odd.  I think for consistency in that ending it's probably best kept as is but it's definitely good to think about these things.


Thanks for checking; I know it's a big piece!

I have fixed all of those things!  Thanks for checking it, I know it's quite the piece...

Yup, sounds fixed now!

Dunno whether it's just Finale Notepad 2012, but the staccatos on the left-hand B flats in Bars 23-26 are touching their respective notes in the .mus, regardless of whether the music is playing. (When the music is playing, the stems of the notes with tremolos flip upside down, to the detriment of readability.) On Page 3 of the .mus, the staccato of the left-hand G flat of Bar 30, the staccato in the right hand and the staccato and accent of the left hand of Bar 34, the last staccato of the right hand of Bar 35, the staccatos of both G's of the right hand of Bar 37, the staccato of the right hand of Bar 38, the staccato of the D and the tenuto of the right hand of Bar 39, the tenutos of the right hand of Bar 40, and all articulation markings of Bars 41-42 also suffer from the same problem.

It's finale v26.  The newest version of finale has some fancy articulation placement scheme that corrupts when opened in older finale versions.  It's not a big deal though, since people with v25 (like me) can reset them all very quickly.  I will do that with this sheet before it is accepted, but since it will corrupt again any time Zeila edits the file, there's no point me doing that until the end of the process.  You will notice this exact same problem on other submissions by people who use v26.

Just made a slight change of Dns in the bass in bar 6 to D#s.  I'm guessing it was an editing error rather than a transcription error so I just thought I'd fix it up.  Other than that this looks great!