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#1756
I guess I'll close up on this one now.  Good work everyone!
#1757
Quote from: Latios212 on April 22, 2019, 06:10:43 PMVery small things - the 1./2. at the repeated section would probably be a bit better off to the left, and the repeat at the end would be clearer as a D.C.

I agree with this.

Also the second to last note in the bass in bars 9 and 13 is an A rather than an E (it is an E in bar 11 though).

Other than that this looks fine to me.
#1758
I actually went through this a while ago but never got around to writing anything up.  It looks pretty great, just a couple of minor things:

-Is there any reason for not just writing the grace semiquavers in bar 101 as normal semiquavers?  I can't really hear a difference and I feel like the rhythm would be easier to read that way without graces confusing things.
-The last two notes in the right hand (bar 109) sound like they have the same dotted quaver semiquaver rhythm (like in bar 105 and the first half of bar 109) rather than quaver quaver.
-You could add in the higher part in the section 67-74 since the right hand isn't doing anything there at the moment.  My main motivation for that is to avoid the empty bar (bar 74) since the original is not empty there (or just percussive).  But I can see why you also might just want to keep the bass without introducing another part, so let me know what you think.
-The Dn at the start of bar 99 should be a Db.
#1759
Quote from: Maelstrom on April 22, 2019, 07:32:54 PMSorry to keep you waiting.

No worries!

Quote from: Maelstrom on April 22, 2019, 07:32:54 PMTell me what you think of the weird stuff I did with the last section.

Looks nice, the rhythms really bring that section alive.  I was a little sceptical at first of the two octave leap in bar 77 but actually it's not really that difficult to pull off.  The rhythm grouping in bar 76 needs to be fixed though.  Also if you wanted to make that section a little more performance friendly you could homogenise (tm) the rhythms a little more but I don't think it's a big issue on its own.

Also I think all of the quaver graces should be changed to semiquavers.  I think that's the done thing with more than one grace next to each other, and also it just seems weird to me to have quavers that are faster than adjacent semiquavers (if that makes sense.)

But still, this looks great.  Nice work!
#1760
CrossCode arrangements for the CrossCode god!

Formatting-wise, the margins need a little adjustment I think.  The top and bottom margins should be 0.5 (and then the title, copyright, subtitle, page numbers etc. should be brought inside those margins.)  Then for the measure distribution (which seems to be finale default again) I think it should be five systems on the first page and four on the second with an even six bars per system (the uniformity of the arrangement lends itself to a uniform distribution I think).  Also, I've mentioned this before I think, but remember to lock measures!  It helps enormously when sorting out the distribution of an arrangement.

Other things:

-In the right hand the section bars 19-33 adds in what I believe is a third harmony beneath the melody line that would be nice to get in I feel.  That we get a sense of progression from the previous 3-18 section and it matches the original better.
-We need double barlines at bars 34 and 42 for the key signature changes.
-The notes seem there to me, but the inversions of the chords are off in places so I'd recommend fiddling with the voicings to get the correct bass notes (as those are the most important notes).  I'm thinking things like F# in the bass in bar 8, Dn in bar 10, Bn in bar 46 etc.
-The quaver arpeggio pattern I think is the most tricky bit, in my opinion.  At the moment we have it dropping in and out which gives the arrangement a bit of a wonky sound (particularly when it cuts out).  To alleviate that wonky-ness I think the thing to do is to try and work the pattern in more consistently, though there are a lot of ways you could go about doing that.  The other option would be to cut it out entirely, but I feel like the arrangement might lose too much that way.  Still, have a go at incorporating it more (you can always shift the octaves around if that helps because the most important thing here is the contour of the pattern and the rhythm itself) and ask if you need more concrete suggestions.
-A related point, but I don't think the second right hand voice warrants small noteheads as the melody can be clearly made out as the top voice.
-The second layer quaver rests (bars 3-4, 19-20) could be brought up to their usual height, and I would recommend that.
-It might just be me but I find the swapping between mp and f a little confusing in the 36-42 section, but I'm not really clear on a better way to notate it.  Might be worth seeing if anyone else has thoughts on that section?  Even if we're sticking with that, the mp in bar 37 should begin on beat 2.5 not 1 to fit with everywhere else.
-In bar 42 you notate the bass note as the optional one in that chord, but to keep the harmony correct it should really be the top note bracketed.  Especially since the right hand is also playing a Bb at the moment anyway.
#1761
Bump for arranger.
#1762
Bump for arranger.
#1763
The tempo was slightly too slow (95bpm when it should be 100) but I've fixed that for you.  Good to go!
#1764
You were just missing a tempo marking, but I've put that in for you (106bpm).

Accepting!
#1765
I stand by saying that those bars should be simplified, but if you really want to keep it that way then fair enough.  I'll accept this now.
#1766
Since neither Latios nor Static seemed to share my concern, and I did bring it up with you earlier I'll just assume that you'd prefer it as it is.

I've edited the final bar though to remove the G in the optional part, I hope that's alright with you!

Accepting!
#1767
Looks good to me, but could we drop the glissando in bar 17?  It doesn't feel very pianistic to me and despite its difficulty to perform I'm not convinced it really adds much anyway.  But yeah otherwise good stuff.
#1769
Bump for arranger.
#1770
Nice response time haha.

Quote from: Yug_Guy on April 18, 2019, 06:29:44 PMOkay. I put that in for measure 36, and a slight variation of that in measure 40. lmk what you think.

Did you see the semiquavers in the upbeat in my picture?  They're part of the same part.  Also those two bits sound the same to me, so is there something I'm missing or another reason for writing bars 36 and 40 differently?

Quote from: Yug_Guy on April 18, 2019, 06:29:44 PMAlright, I pretty much did what you have here.

Yeah, looks good!