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#2221
Dudmeander (v.)- to wander aimlessly into a new name.


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#2222
Project Archive / Re: Super Smash Bros. Update
December 01, 2018, 05:29:07 PM
Quote from: Libera on December 01, 2018, 12:43:46 PMYug_Guy

Namco Medley 1:

Before I get too into the notes, which look reasonably good as far as I've looked so far, there are some other things worth addressing.

-After slowing it down to check, bars 22-47 aren't actually swung.  (All of those rhythms are dotted quaver semiquaver, just like in bars 1-4.)  But it's definitely got that feel and the distinction is pretty much impossible at this tempo.  I just thought I'd mention it.
-In general I think everything needs more space.  I don't think we should be putting the titles in between the staves either.  I understand it saves space, but everything is very cramped at the moment.  Even if spacing things out comes at the cost of gaining a page, I think it's definitely worth it for readability.
-Careful of your spellings in bars 85-88.  Either choose Db major or C# major and stick to it.  Db major would mean way less accidentals (5 flats [and we already have two of them] compared to 7 sharps.)  If you do want to stick with C# major, you need to change all of your Bbs to A#s and Ebs to D#s.
-Bits of this piece are quite out of tune and I think it might have been throwing you off in places.  Bars 22-47 are about 20 cents flat.  The first note in the right hand in this section should be a D# rather than an E and the Bb major chords you've written in bars 34-37 are B major chords.
-Bars 65-68 I feel like playability is an issue, especially those four semiquaver triads.
-All of the crotchet rests in bars 69 + should be notated as two quaver rests like in bar 88.
-Careful with the placement of the 8va in bar 48.  I think when you have a go at the spacing this will probably fix itself though.  In fact in general I think when you fix the spacing a lot of the issues will probably magically disappear.
-Remember https.

I'll be back when you've had a mess around with it.
#2223
Project Archive / Re: Super Smash Bros. Update
December 01, 2018, 12:43:46 PM
Yug_Guy

I've made some slight edits to your Ice Climber's Victory sheet and moved it to accepted.  I just changed it so that it shows a crotchet rest in the pick up in the right hand and changed the url to https.
#2224
Project Archive / Re: Super Smash Bros. Update
December 01, 2018, 06:36:17 AM
Feedback!  This one week update thing should be interesting,  I think.

LeviR.star:

Well this is an odd little piece. 

-Why is there a box at the end of the url?
-I'd advise against having 1 and a half quavers of pick up.  I'd have this as one whole upbeat and just put a semiquaver rest at the start, it makes it easier to count in.

Quote from: LeviR.star on November 30, 2018, 07:44:38 PMThat bass line sure is killer.

Having spent a long time looking at in detail, it sure is.  There were a couple of moments where what I heard was different from what you've written, and so here's an image of what I can hear.  The places where mine differs are bars 1, 3 and 4 if I remember correctly.  Mostly it was rhythms/missing notes but there was one pitch change in the first of the three semiquavers in bar 3.  I admit that it's pretty hard to hear so if you've got any questions be sure to ask.

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The RH:  It could just me be going insane but I'm not hearing the notes on the top of the chords.  I'm also hearing the bottom line go Bb C D Bb, Bb C D C, Cb Db Eb Db, Cb Db Eb Db.  Maybe you've got some reason for the voicings that you've written, so clue me in if that's the case.



Yug_Guy

Looking at Famicom medley at the moment.  It's quite long so I'm probably going to do the feedback in two pieces if that's alright.

-Courtesy accidentals:  Sometimes you use them, sometimes you don't.  E.g. bar 10 you use them but in bar 4 you don't.  I'd do a check through to make them consistent.
-The arrangement is general is fairly easy to play, and then there's the left hand in bars 15-22.  On it's own the difficulty of that section isn't so much of a problem, but I just think it's a shame to have the rest of the piece be so accessible and then have this one really tricky bit.  There's also another accompaniment part that you could take instead that sounds far more doable.  If you'd still like to keep this part, maybe you put one or the other in an optional stave? (see Wah's Field of Hopes and Dreams if you're not sure what I mean.)  Let me know what you think.
-I fully expect to see a perfect transcription of bar 26.  I'm very disappointed.
-Brinstar is just a metric modulation rather than a tempo change, right?  As in, you should write crotchet = dotted crotchet rather than give a new tempo marking.
-I'd write the lower part in bar 52 as a separate voice since you're almost certainly going to want to perform that with the left hand.  Maybe even put a note saying to do so.  Also I'd consider moving the G -> Ab in both bars into the left hand as I think that'd be easier to read and to play.
-Is the double dotted minim in bar 63 really necessary?  I'd just use a dotted minim or a semibreve here.
-Collisions in bar 64.
-The beams are getting very close together in bar 79.



Good stuff guys, I'll be back later!

#2225
Site News / Re: NSM Performance Videos #7
December 01, 2018, 03:33:16 AM
Good job, me.

In all seriousness, nice work, and a big thank you to everyone who submitted performance videos for us to use!
#2226
Pretty simple piece so there's not a whole lot for me to say.

With regards to the bend, I'd probably do it like this:

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I think this is a pretty good approximation to the actual rhythm without overcomplicating things.

Quote from: D3ath3657 on November 29, 2018, 08:32:06 PM(Also, the slur in measure 11 should start from the main note, not the grace note.)

I'm curious as to why you suggested this as it doesn't make any sense to me.  This means that some of the grace notes have slurs into the phrase and some don't, even though they sound pretty much identical in the original.
#2227
Huh, I guess I was thinking about the harmony in this piece completely the wrong way before.  It makes a lot more sense now.

I changed some other things as well.  Once again, if I didn't change something, it's not because I missed it.

Thanks for looking it over.
#2228
Quote from: mastersuperfan on November 19, 2018, 07:31:06 PMNot sure about all the LH slurs in this sheet. Sometimes it does sound slurred (e.g. m5-8) but sometimes it doesn't (e.g. m1–4, or m41–m48 EDIT: in fact I'd probably put staccatos on beat 1 in m45–48, but not m41–44). I think it'd be best to go through and adjust the phrases according to the original track itself.

The Legend ends with a section that's pretty much identical to this, and I noticed the same thing.  Another thing I noticed when doing The Legend is the bar 40 LH rhythm is slightly different, although I admit yours is easier to perform.  I'll just include a picture of the end of The Legend for reference.

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Edit: Another thing I just noticed that's actually wrong with both of our arrangements is that the final slur should go the last minim rather than the first.  I'll fix mine as well.
#2229
I've been meaning to do this one for some time now, so I'm glad it's finally done.

Snow in Summer: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]

#2230
Looks good.
#2231
Quote from: Latios212 on November 26, 2018, 06:41:52 PMGood point. Here's something else to consider though - when I listened to the original I didn't even pick up on those notes until I listened closely to transcribe the song because they coincide with the accompaniment. To me it doesn't quiiiite feel like they belong as melody notes, and I think one could probably make the case that they're part of a separate line that include the E's from the other comment that I'm removing, as well as the first C# in the LH in 25 and such. Maybe it's just me though; I don't know if that made any sense, but that's why I had it as is. Also, my instinct when playing it (I did play test this one a few times) wanted to play the overlapped note with the left hand to complete the accompaniment pattern.

Thoughts? I think I could go either way. (Ugh trying to put the parentheses in the left hand right now is doing that thing where it isn't in the right vertical position. I'll come back to this later.) Another option might be to eliminate the parentheses and the right hand note entirely to simplify things a bit.

The melody there is repeated elsewhere in the Deltarune soundtrack and those notes are definitely melody notes.  Listen to Don't Forget, for example.
#2232
Hi there!

The place to share your arrangements with everyone is the piano arrangements board.  This is where most members keep a list of all their piano arrangements for people to browse.  Also it allows other users to offer feedback on other's arrangements, which is particularly helpful when starting out.

For an arrangement to make it onto the main site, it has to undergo a submission process which is all handled in the submission center board which Levi has already given you some handy pictures of.
#2233
It had to end eventually.

This was my first go at doing a guitar solo so hopefully that turned out not too bad.

Blissade / Raphael: [Musx] [Pdf] [Midi] [Mus]

#2234
Looks good, so I haven't got much to say here.

-Where you've put brackets around doubled notes, you've put the brackets in the right hand.  Since those notes are actually the ones that are part of the melody rather than the accompaniment I feel like for phrasing purposes it'd make more sense for the left hand notes to be bracketed.  And maybe consider just leaving the E underneath the A in bars 29 and 34 out entirely.
-Maybe start the forte on the upbeat to bar 34 rather than bar 34 itself?
#2235
Quote from: D3ath3657 on November 21, 2018, 01:37:13 PMYou could fit the layer one rests in measures 4 and 8 closer to the notes, but in reality the chord is sustained through the whole measure, so you could use a whole note. Alternatively, you could remove the chords in those measures, so you'd no longer require two layers. If you do decide to keep two layers, make the layer two eighth rest visible under the chord on beat one. If you decide to remove the layer one chords, you could right layer two in bass clef and avoid using 8va lines.

Quote from: Yug_Guy on November 25, 2018, 02:32:50 PMWell, I originally had them as whole notes but was told to change them so idk what to say, man.

My reasoning for removing the semibreves there was so that the sheet actually reflected the performance.  If we were writing a transcription of the original with all of the parts, then yes clearly it'd be a semibreve there but this is a piano arrangement.  Those are my thoughts, anyway.  I do agree with making the quaver rest visible though.