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Submission Archive / Re: [NDS] Dragon Quest IX: Sentinels of the Starry Skies - "The Sun-Gathering Village" by Code_Name_
« on: April 04, 2023, 12:20:15 AM »I did my best here, but I have a hard time hearing harmony lines so please let me know if there are any wrong notes or if I missed anything obvious.
- m1-16: I think you can add more harmony to the R.H., it would still be pretty playable. You might want to re-check the existing harmony you've written for playability and note accuracy.
I wanted those to be a little longer than eighth notes and with more weight, but still a little short (or maybe "lifted" is a better term). But yeah staccatos could end up being too short so I changed it to a combination staccato/tenuto marking. Continued through the next section as well for consistency.
- m17-24: I feel like the bass notes might look better without staccatos but written like 8th notes: staccatos don't mean "play these notes at 50% length", but "play these notes shortly". A player might interpret those bass notes as shorter than they need to be.
- m25-28: Some of these bass notes are also shorter like the ones in m17-24, so these will also be 8th notes or staccato'd notes, depending on what you choose in m17-24
I disagree with moving it to the LH; when I play it myself I can reach it with my RH but I'm nowhere close to reaching it with my LH. But it does make it a lot harder so I put parentheses around it so the player can decide whether or not to play it.
- m26: I think removing the lower D# on beat 2 here would make this part more playable without losing too much sound. If you really want to keep it, I'd suggest moving it to the L.H.
Triads like this?
- m29-30: I hear triads in the R.H., maybe those or dyads would be better suited here than octaves?
Did my best here as well, but as per my comment for the first section I'm not entirely confident on all of the notes here.
- m33-end: Here too, there's a lot of R.H. harmony you could include to get a full sound, and you can leave it out where it makes things too difficult to play.
Done.
- You should make sure that all the 8va markings end just after the last note, rather than inside the measure.
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I think the key change makes sense here. It helps with the readability of the melody and while the song doesn't stay strictly in E, it resolves back to E enough times that I feel reasonably confident marking this section as E. I've done a bit of harmonic analysis below showing what I mean
- m33: I'm not sure if the key change here is necessary, especially since the track doesn't really stay in E.
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Oh man you're totally right, not sure what happened here. I think I got the right part now.
- m35-36: Most of what you have written here is part of the less audible lower harmony voice, I suggest writing the higher voice instead.
Took another look here and I think this is closer?
- m39-40: You might want to check over this section again to make sure it's correct
There's this repeating figure in the strings that I'm having trouble picking out, so the C/D trill is my best approximation of that... let me know if there's a better way to do that.
- m57-58: You could add a some more parts here to simulate the buildup better. for the 16th run in m58 I hear C-D-G-A
Like this? Yeah that would be easier to play. The high D in the LH was originally the resolution of the middle line so it's back to the top staff here.
- m59-60: I wonder if leaving the upper layer legato (or adding a slur) would be a nicer contrast to the lower layer? It would definitely be easier to play..
I also don't hear the high D in the LH in m60.
All of the other little fixes like notes should be done as well. This was kind of a beast to revisit, but thanks for the detailed feedback!