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I think we've been over this. I've submitted sheets before with 8vb (which I prefer the look of) so trying to keep it consistent. Usually the updater after you clears for the 8vb

sorry to have mentioned this a couple times then, I tend to forget stuff like this but I'll try to commit to memory...

Yeah, I switched to trill. I think mordent technically works better, but for the life of me I can't figure out how to add that flat.

If another updater knows how to do this, by all means let us know haha I agree mordent would be better, but I think this also clearly shows what note to do

Did you mean 4.75...?

Yes 4.75... sorry lol apparently I'm not reading 16ths as 16ths

You mean a C? That's in your mockup, and was in my score before

Oh I did mean E but put C in my mockup. Also with this mockup, thinking it doesn't look so great having the 8vb going through the 16th there in m27. Played around on my end, maybe you could switch the system spacing so page 1 has 4 systems, pg2 has 5, and pg3 has 3? Now that things have moved along a bit more with this sheet, I think this might solve all the spacing woes, as pg. 1 still looks a bit too tight, but I think the above would work well

I know it's been quite a bit of time since there has last been input on this sheet, frankly I've been a little unsure on where to start given how much was posted about this sheet.

There's still a lot of work that will need to be done to move this along, the same feedback that Latios mentioned on the "All Clear" sheet regarding a lack of bass at parts (first measure, as well as m18-21) applies. In m1's case, I think you could move that current LH part up as a second lower layer of the RH, but overall, the goal is to maintain a bit of depth and texture throughout. Maybe from m18-21 you could add some pedal marks or con pedale with the goal of sustaining the higher notes RH, move the current LH up as a lower RH layer, and then add a consistent lower bassline part like the original.

Please also see the newer formatting guidelines posted within the last month or so, happy to help with stuff that can't quite be fixed between MuseScore going to NotePad.

But again, sorry there was a bit of a wait here. Let me know if you have any questions on the above

And also accepting Dozing Sands Secret! Thanks again for the conversions.

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Shifted over the 8va as a result. (Also made all the 8vas 8vb)

Unless I am mistaken, 8va is preferred symbology even when applying to lower staff/bass clef. So I believe this was good to keep as is

Did you mean Bb?

Oh I actually meant to say beat 2.5 not 3.5, but you corrected it anyway so all good.

Also playback is fine, but not sure how to signify the flat for the trill/mordent on m6. Since it's not in the natural key it does need to be added right?

Will want to us the Tr symbol with the flat symbol above it, as normally the trill would be implied to be between Gn and An (neighboring notes within the key signature)

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• m4 RH 4.0 thinking this looks a little better as Cb and Ab, fits with the overall accidental direction of the measure.
• m13 RH beat 1.5 maybe you could remove or parentheses the C, as it is pretty hard to make the jump from the first beat to the 16th's. Same for m14 beat 3.5, the Dn.
• m14 RH 2.0 the Cb works slightly better as a Bn (no need for Cn accidental on beat 3.0)
• m14 RH 3.5-end of measure, G on top should be F, and A's are actually G's
• m27 LH 4.5 hearing Ab not C
• m27 RH 4.5 and 4.75 hearing F and then Ab
• m28 RH chord is G on top, E in middle, G on bottom (top G is half step down from the Ab in m27 4.5)

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• m29 LH sounds like the Db is held out to beat 4, so you could write the half note as a dotted half note
• m31 LH 3.25 and 3.5 hearing Bb and then Fn

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Costa del Sol looks good now! Approved

I'm not sure, you're right that it's only really noticeable from there but arrangement wise I think a fade-in of sorts works more nicely. I a niente dynamic to clarify that the first few beats are basically silent, does that work for you?

Sure that works! Nothing else to add, so I will be accepting this sheet

Limited comments on this one, nice job

• m18 RH i do hear a Bb above the Eb
• m32 LH the 8va note, I don't hear this, what is it supposed to be the chimes?
• m53 should this be a two beat measure? I only hear four instances of the RH rhythm before LH beat 3 plays
• m108 RH couldn't you just use one half rest

Atcero was able to address the repeat issue and now the song repeats correctly on playback. Kricketune used Accept

• You have full finale right? The note spacing is a bit off in places, most apparent @ m12 RH with the 16th notes. Learned this from Xiao, but if you press ctrl+a then ctrl+4 it fixes all the spacing automatically.
• The starting mp dynamic could be a little lower so it is centered between staffs
• fwiw exact tempo at m5 is q=139
• Tempo marks do appear a little odd, though I know this sheet predates formatting guidelines. If possible, you could use the new Finale template to fix the font type and size.
• m14 LH 4.5 is D's still
• m19 RH last note hearing D, not B. You could also put parentheses on the En in the LH given it is shared by both parts.
• m21 RH lower layer while it sounds cool, the C on beat 1 is technically a Bn.
• m29 LH the E's sound lower than the E's in m28, you could move them down an octave, as well as the G#'s. Or alternatively, same feedback for m19 about the parentheses applies
• For the record at m33 RH I do not hear the two ending notes in your lower layer. I know this was already covered, but I don't hear the C# and G, I hear E and G making same rhythms as left hand. You could pull them up an octave from what they are shown as in my screenshot:

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• m37 LH beat 3.5 hearing this E as a D, followed by an E instead of G
• m37 RH Overall (ignore LH in this picture) I'm hearing things a little differently - I did pull the ending two pitches up an octave, but I think it goes nicely back to the beginning from here.

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EDIT 9/19 Hearing this at m1 in the LH, similar to Xiao's earlier point about beat 3.25 (flute part starting on this beat):

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Alright! The triads look good, accepting

Hey no worries, I think we're at that point now of just tightening things up. Thank you for your patience

• m4 beat 3 RH hearing this as an E, and staccato 8th note length
• m10 I understand from m9-16 there's a bit of mixing in of the harp part, to mostly the LH, but it seems like at m10 the harp is portrayed twice on beat 3 in left and right? Y could remove G on beat 3 in the RH. I would say the same at m14 beat 3, the Bb under the D in the RH. At m14 LH, you could add a G to the top of the rolled half note on beat 3
• m13 RH I think it a little confusing to put the C at the bottom of the chord on beat 1.5 in the RH. It's entirely playable by the LH the way this expression is for all other measures
• Also m13 RH, the beat 4 D sounds like it is full quarter note length.
• Relistened to m19 RH beat 3, for this note C is actually underneath, not Ab. But keep 23 as is.
• m20 RH beat 1 I think F is better than Eb between the Bb's on relisten. For beat 2.5, I have a bit of a correction to my previous feedback, I think you could put both C and D under the F, as the harp plays D, and the string plays the C. If you'd prefer to do one or the other (it is a bit dissonant on piano), I'd do the C as opposed to the D.

m21 LH: I took out the roll, but as opposed to m17, I don't hear a note in beat 1.5.

Still hearing this note on beat 1.5, if you still think it isn't there tho we can leave it up to a future second opinion.

m24: Hmm, I hear two string lines clearly. One is this second layer in the RH, and one is the descending one in the LH. Am I mistaken about that?

Okay, I can hear this now... it's quite quiet and subtle.

I'm not sure I hear some of these suggestions here, listening again I think it generally makes sense to keep the dyads consistent since they don't seem to be super obviously single notes. (In case you were wondering I omitted the G in m. 14 beat 1.33 because of the overlap with the melody, otherwise the goal was to have a consistent texture.) I do hear F instead of G in the latter half of m. 17 and it didn't sound like triads, so I swapped them out.
Yep, updated!

Good point on consistency, and I now see that G is not there in m15 to avoid the melody! Makes sense

I just have one outstanding comment that applies in a couple places: m22, m26 RH beat 1, I hear these chords slightly differently: hearing E and A in m22 instead of F and A, in m26 same notes instead of D and F. Pretty minor, but was wondering if the notes below the melody you placed here was more implied than notes you heard.

Oh, no, I didn't notice those at all, I guess my ear just interpreted as one big sound in the original... I'm having a lot of trouble hearing the pitches, are they all perhaps thirds like you showed in the first measure?

Yep from what I can tell, all thirds.


I tried doing the below image to see if there was a way to use some of the deeper notes in the original track, and maybe you tried as well but there's a few places like m12 or m21 where the parts for the LH and RH where you'd have to put a quarter rest for the current LH to work as a bottom RH layer to work even with the pedal. I think adding some depth to the low notes could help capture the original a lot more; but if you don't find it to be feasible (also involves swapping the current top LH layer between RH and LH at times) I'm fine with the arrangement as is

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• Checked the time signature, it's actually 125 bpm
• Did you mean to keep the Ab's I had pointed out? I hear them down an octave (and they could work with my new LH/bottom staff suggestion) but your reply makes it a little unclear on if they should still be in the sheet.
• m10 RH beat 5.5 is a Db, m11 is also a Db instead of C
• m11 and 23 LH beat 4 the low Ab changes to a Db
• m20 RH hearing beat 1.5 as a separate C 8th note up an octave from the C on beat 1
• m22 RH beat 1 sounds like a quarter note value Ab, and I don't hear a grace note
• m23 RH dotted quarter note, this sounds like a Db

https://i.imgur.com/FIzLxsT.png

I went to your file and in this second Tempo Marks category that pops up, you can change the note font to MaestroTimes (and Times New Roman for the number and = sign)

[Ham-Ham Heartbreak - Sandy Bay]

Ham-Ham Heartbreak - Sandy Bay looks good now, so I will approve it!

Final Fantasy VII - Costa del Sol

Didn't actually take as long as expected to get to this, so here goes.

Thankfully a lot of the parts I pointed out are pretty easy to copy and paste between, and it is a fairly straightforward track at that.

Not too much more from me on this as well:
• in the RH lower layer, there's a few places like m8 that the new F# accidental is inside the notehead of the E. You could move the # symbol a little to the left like this, applies for m9,10,12,17,18,20 as well (image is fixed m8)

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• I'm a little torn on this, but 25-28 the string part that's the RH lower layer is technically playing A-C-E on each beat to fill out the F that the bass plays. You could have En under the current An as opposed to Fn except for beat 4.5 (the strings lead into next chord, where they play A-D-F technically), but I'll leave it up to you since it is just replacing one octaved note (F) for another (E) between the hands. This feedback has similar recommendation to one I left about middle layers for m29-32, essentially