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Like maybe m17 and 18 with the chromatic stuff? I dunno. But I don't think I have anything else to add on my part

Ah, I see a few places where this makes sense; I added accidentals to m17-19 RH beat 1, as well as m27. Thanks Ike!

In addition this, I decided to go back on some of the octave choices, and made some edits to the LH so that the collision I was initially concerned about at measure 13 for example wouldn't happen (I removed the D from the LH there).

Hi, are you still around to make changes?

Just gonna give this a bump, are you still around to make changes?

Hi again, sorry for the wait!

It would be great if you could go over the dynamics you have written currently, as I think there's some room for improvement. Try using dynamics other than p and f to show the differences in intensity not otherwise reflected in your sheet.

Your intro covers some of these points already, but here are some specifics here to help you get started:

• I'm not sure a diminuendo marking makes sense in m1; while the first RH chord is a bit more powerful than the others I think dim. might give the performer a wrong idea of how this section sounds.
• The difference between p and f is very big, and I'm not sure that difference is warranted in m1. I think changing the RH to mf makes the most sense, as that leaves room for the crescendo later
• Speaking of the crescendo later, it would be useful if you could provide an indication as to how loud that crescendo should get. Maybe an f marking at the end of m16? (You can also change m17 to mp then, as I think p is also a little quiet).

If you'd prefer to have more in-depth comments like this for anywhere else in the score, or have any questions/uncertainties, let me know!

Congrats Xiao and Kricketune! To be fair, I've been viewing them as honorary updaters for a while now given how much they help out

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since we didn't need to change notes or anything, I left the MIDI file from before in the submitted files.

That's fine, thanks for checking over that :p

Systems look good too, so I'll accept...

Congrats Krickitune and Xiao!
Good luck to the both of you.
and thanks to Maestro, Braix and MSF!!!!

• For m25, 26, etc: To me it seems a bit counterintuitive to have only the bass note in the lower layer and the rest in the upper layer. Do you think this section might be clearer writing the melody in one layer and the rest (bass+accompaniment) in the other?

I did this one, but for some reason, the counts 2 and 3 in the second layer of measures 25 and 33 don't play in the MIDI playback. I don't know if it's just my program or whatever, but since we didn't need to change notes or anything, I left the MIDI file from before in the submitted files.

• The systems on page 2 can use up that extra space at the bottom, if you want.

I pushed the bottom system down a tad to match up with the bottom system of the first page, since the beams take up quite a bit of space at the top. I think having that little space down there is fine. Keeps it level with the other page.