[GCN] Mario Party 7 - "Sail the Canals" by E. Gadd Industries & ThatHiddenCharacter

Started by Zeta, July 16, 2018, 08:59:17 PM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Super Mario
Game: Mario Party 7
Console: Nintendo GameCube
Title: Sail the Canals
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arrangers: E. Gadd Industries & ThatHiddenCharacter

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E. Gadd Industries

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InsigTurtle

Some accidental problems I noticed:
m.5 Db should be a C# (think about it melodically, not just avoiding the C# because you already have a C in F)
Similarly, m.17 Gb should be F#

Also, m.6 melody rhythm whoopsie there

I've only taken a brief look, but it seems pretty good. Will need to do a more thorough notecheck later, though

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Latios212

Looks solid, but the LH rhythm needs to be fixed... pretty much everywhere. Show beat 2 by splitting up the eighth note that currently falls on beat 1.75 - and beam together the notes that all fall within a beat (this applies to beat 1 of m. 20 as well). Measure 22 also needs to be fixed to show beat 4.
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Brassman388

Hey yo!

It's a neat song, that I've never heard before.

However, I feel like the whole arrangement can benefit from doubling all the note durations. Why you ask? Because I feel the beat actually being in double time, and is visually hard to follow at times. At the current tempo, my eyes tend to drag at some of those transitions due to all the syncopation. It's no problem when you have playback in finale, but when using just a pdf and audio, the performer needs to be able to follow the music as well.

Hope this helps.

Zeila

Cool stuff. Here's some feedback from me. And you is short for "one of you guys", or both

Formatting:
- The copyright is pretty low and I believe the default vertical position is -0.125. Also, it's https now
- I think the composer/arranger info is too high up and would better below the sub-title. It is also not right aligned
- There is a lot of white space at the bottom of page 1 so you could move the top system down and put some more space in between the other systems
- (very minor) you should center the mf in m1
- Some of the 8vb's are cutting it close to the notes, so you should move it down. It would also look better if the tail end of the 8vb in measure 26 was closer to the end of the whole note
- The double bar line before/after the 2/4 isn't necessary since it's just one measure

Notes:
- There are several notes that should be staccato'd, such as some of the leading off-beat notes in the pattern (like in m1), or a few other places like m9/10
- m1 and 27 beat 4.5 (RH) G should be an F
- m9 and 10 the dotted eighth note should be replaced with an eighth note + sixteenth rest

Libera


ThatHiddenCharacter

Oh yeah, sorry, I'll get on this soon since E. Gadd is busy with College and stuff. Hopefully it will be updated by tomorrow, if nothing causes me to not be able to work on it.
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ThatHiddenCharacter

Never mind, I've fixed it up already. I didn't know there was a utility to double note values in Finale, and the rest was pretty simple to fix, if not mildly time consuming.
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Latios212

(Hmm... I actually preferred it the way it was before with the note durations, but it's up to you.)

The unfortunate thing is that it seems to have gotten rid of all your dotted notes :P add those back in!

It also looks like there are some odd things here and there to iron out as well, like misaligned layers in m. 43+, flipped notes in m. 24, accidentals in some places like m. 35, ties in places like m. 9... please do a quick clean sweep of the thing to make sure everything's in order :3

edit: to clarify m. 9 if you must use a figure like this (which can often be avoided by using multiple layers, but it's fine if there's minimal rhythmic difference) you should point the tie away from the note that is moving - so here you'd want it to bend upwards to avoid the lower voice.
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ThatHiddenCharacter

I can't believe I missed some of that stuff. Thanks, I've updated the files.
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Libera

Feedback time!!!

-The Bb in bar 6 should be an A.
-You seem to have a fake 1/2 time signature at bar 18.  I assume this was an accident.
-You could remove the two bars at the end and have the loop just work normally since your last two bars are the same as the first two.  Something to consider anyway.
-I don't think the voicings and direction on the tremolos in bars 49-50 is quite right.  I'd probably have something like this:
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-I'd move the roll back in front of the barline in bar 35 like you have it in bar 39.  If it looks too cramped you can always mess around with the exact measure lengths to alleviate that.
-I'd either have the 8vb extend to the end of the bar in bar 50 or have it end just after the semibreve rather than in the middle of the bar.
-You're missing a rit in bar 34.  It goes back to normal tempo at bar 37.
-Maybe consider cut time instead of 2/2?  Your choice though.

Really sorry about the wait on this one, I remember seeing it go up shortly after I joined and ... I really should have got to this by now.

ThatHiddenCharacter

Quote from: Libera on November 04, 2018, 02:51:27 PM-You seem to have a fake 1/2 time signature at bar 18.  I assume this was an accident.
No? That was intentional. And what do you mean by fake?

Quote from: Libera on November 04, 2018, 02:51:27 PM-I'd either have the 8vb extend to the end of the bar in bar 50 or have it end just after the semibreve rather than in the middle of the bar.
I only moved it because someone said to move it there. I originally had it where you're saying. I'll fix that.

Quote from: Libera on November 04, 2018, 02:51:27 PM-Maybe consider cut time instead of 2/2?  Your choice though.
They're the same thing, though. And personally, I prefer to see the numbers rather than a C or a C with a line through it.

I'll take care of everything else as soon as I can.
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