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Author Topic: [GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf  (Read 212 times)

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[GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf
« on: February 10, 2019, 06:50:21 AM »

Submission Information:

Series: Golden Sun
Game: Golden Sun
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: McCoy's Palace
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Onionleaf


Replacement Information:

Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Edit (existing arranger remains)
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Re: [GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf
« Reply #1 on: February 10, 2019, 06:51:00 AM »

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Re: [GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf
« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2019, 12:09:29 AM »

Sorry for the really long wait on this one, I'm going through it now...  The notes look pretty good to me, it's just a slightly tricky piece to fit onto the piano because of the wide orchestration (which is what my feedback mostly concerns.)

-Compared with the rest of the arrangement, I'm not so sure about the textures of bars 24-27.  I think it'd be better if the left hand continued to the take the bass part there, rather than omitting it, and the right hand played the semiquaver part (as that bits sticks out the most to me) perhaps with adding in the other melodic line as harmonies?  For example bar 25 might look like this:
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Also this way you avoid having any collisions between the two hands which is an added bonus.  Similarly I think it'd be best to remove the passing of the melody from RH to LH in bar 24 (by keeping the semiquavers in the right hand and instead playing the bass in the left hand.)  Also perhaps for consistency then it would be best to bring the left hand of bars 28-29 down by an octave.
-I think I'd go ahead and restrike everything on beat 2.5 in bar 16, like you do later on.  Particularly as I think the bass does in fact restrike, and there's no harm in restriking the string parts since it helps them to sustain more like they do in the original.
-I'm thinking that maybe it'd all look neater with more systems and less bars per system than you have at the moment (maybe 4 per system is a good aim, with perhaps less for the semiquaver heavy sections?)  You certainly have quite of bit of spare white space on the second page that you can use to spread things out more, which I think will help out to make things look more uniform (and also fixes some of the slightly odd-looking ties.)
-In the first section (bars 1-12) perhaps it would be better to move the extra harmony to the right hand rather than the left.  That way it should end up being more balanced compared with the rest of the arrangement.  (It's fine in the final section (bars 30-39) since the left hand is a lot higher there so it doesn't sound quite as muddy.)

Hope that helps!

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Re: [GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf
« Reply #3 on: April 22, 2019, 12:14:06 PM »

Bump for arranger.

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Re: [GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf
« Reply #4 on: July 01, 2019, 02:56:24 AM »

slight nudge ^^
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Re: [GBA] Golden Sun - "McCoy's Palace" (Replacement) by Onionleaf
« Reply #5 on: July 01, 2019, 09:52:09 AM »

Sorry, yes this has been waiting around for me for too long. :-[ I had a read through the review points, and will make the changes sometime this week.
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