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Author Topic: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila  (Read 202 times)

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[PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« on: September 01, 2019, 04:06:51 AM »

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Series: Undertale
Game: Undertale
Console: PC
Title: Spear of Justice (Beta)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Zeila
« Last Edit: September 11, 2019, 12:52:45 AM by Libera »
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #1 on: September 01, 2019, 04:08:39 AM »

Some of the harmonies were omitted to make it a little easier. Here's the original post
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #2 on: September 07, 2019, 08:20:52 PM »

Hey this is really great!  All the notes look good, just a few minor things really I found.

-My biggest comment is probably the left hand in bars 9-12 and 17-20.  Obviously you can't include the bass fully, but I think you could include some of the bass notes to beef up some of the left hand dyads.  Mostly I'm thinking Adding Bbs/Cbs at the start of the bars and Fs for the dyads in bar 20.  I think that'd give a more punchy sound.
-The rests in 11-12 and 17-19 could be brought up a bit.  Especially in 17-19 they're a bit far away from the notes they apply to and so it's a little tricky to read the rhythm potentially.
-Dynamics!  This sheet could definitely do with some more variety than simply mf.  Especially for when the zunpets come in for 29-36/37, it could have a much louder dynamic.
-Potentially add a slur and staccato combo for the last bar?  Just an idea.
-If this rhythm came up all over I think it'd be fine as it is, but since it's only two bars I'd show beat 2 in bars 6 and 14.

Nice stuff!

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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #3 on: September 07, 2019, 11:43:04 PM »

-If this rhythm came up all over I think it'd be fine as it is, but since it's only two bars I'd show beat 2 in bars 6 and 14.
Thanks for the feedback and whatnot! I also updated measure 20 to be more consistent, added a courtesy accidental to the C in measure 43, and flipped the dotted eighth notes in measures 24 and 28
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #4 on: September 08, 2019, 12:02:04 AM »

The edits look great!  I'll fix the articulations once another updater gives approval, but I'll leave mine here for now.

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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #5 on: September 08, 2019, 03:40:48 AM »

I think you mixed up the rhythms in RH m7 and m8 (i.e. the eighth rest should be in m8, not m7).

I would add a courtesy flat to the Gb in LH m3, m7, etc.

In m24 and m28, I would make the lower note of the RH dotted eighth dyad part of Layer 2. It looks a bit strange to me to have Layer 2 suddenly disappear after that sixteenth note.

I think there are some additional eighth notes in the LH that might be worthy of staccatos (m21-22, m25-26, m42-43), but if you kept those ones held to give them a heavier feel, then that's also good.
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #6 on: September 08, 2019, 11:10:52 AM »

In m24 and m28, I would make the lower note of the RH dotted eighth dyad part of Layer 2. It looks a bit strange to me to have Layer 2 suddenly disappear after that sixteenth note.
I just split the notes, but done.

I think there are some additional eighth notes in the LH that might be worthy of staccatos (m21-22, m25-26, m42-43), but if you kept those ones held to give them a heavier feel, then that's also good.
I'm not sure about m21-22 and m25-26 because it sounds like there's a slight distinction between those eighth notes and the ones on beat 2. I could be wrong, but regardless I think this works better. I kept the ones in m42-43 held. Anyways, thanks for the feedback! I updated the other two points as well
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #7 on: September 10, 2019, 12:24:10 AM »

Nice, very clean sheet!

In m24 and m28, I would make the lower note of the RH dotted eighth dyad part of Layer 2. It looks a bit strange to me to have Layer 2 suddenly disappear after that sixteenth note.
I just split the notes, but done.
Do we even need a second layer here? Other places like m. 21-23 just have the lower notes included as part of layer 1 and it seems arbitrary to me why we're using two layers just for this one measure.

Small comment - I think it'd be neater to condense the rests in m. 37 into a dotted eighth rest given the rhythm.

Other stuff looks good, pending articulation fixes!
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #8 on: September 10, 2019, 01:38:19 AM »

Thanks! I got rid of the second layer and updated the rests
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #9 on: September 10, 2019, 01:59:03 AM »

Sweet, looks great! Libera I'll leave it to you to get the articulations and accept.
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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #10 on: September 11, 2019, 12:52:48 AM »

Yep, all done!  Accepting.....

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Re: [PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice (Beta)" by Zeila
« Reply #11 on: September 11, 2019, 12:53:00 AM »

This submission has been accepted by Libera.

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